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题目issue154
Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators.

outline
1.parents and communities play positive roles in education
2.parents and communities play necessary roles in education
3.however, parents and communities sometimes bring negative effect to education

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Nowadays, there is a controversial issue about whether both parents and communities should be involved in the local schools. Depending on personal experience, believes and emotional concern, we may find that some people hold the opinion that education is so important that it can not be left to a group of professional educator, while others have the opposite attitude. To agree or disagree, it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons, I agree the statement with the author that parents, communities, and professional educators should participate in education which is essential for our next generation.

To begin with, I admit that parents and communities play positive roles in education. Firstly, as we all know, parents are the first teachers of their children. For a little child it is his or her parents who teach them speaking, walking, sings and running. Parents are examples for their children. The process of learning of a baby is the imitation of their parents. Parents tell their children the knowledge, the value of the society, the experience, the moral rule of their culture, and give the love to their children. For example, the famous scientists Edison, his teacher gave up him for the reason that the teacher think Edison is too foolish to study in school. But Edison’s mother did not lose her heart, she taught him in their home. Without the education from his mother, Edison could not obtain the basic knowledge of society and science, in addition to Edison could not become an outstanding inventor in his later life. It is obvious that parents can affect their children in the positive way. Secondly, communities also can prompt education for the local school. Sometimes donation form the members of the communities is an important resource for the local schools. In addition to communities can provide several service works for local students which offer the chance of touching the society for students. Therefore, we can clearly see that parents and communities play positive roles in education.

Next, parents and communities play necessary roles in education. Only education from the professional educators is scant for the pullulating of people. It is possible that students can obtain a myriad of knowledge from the their teacher or professor, but they may obtain the cherish love , good characteristics, custom of their race  from their parents, which is so much essential for them and is a footstone for them to become a good citizens. Communities can provide the chancing for their members' children to touch the society and make them more close to their community culture. As some experts said "education is not the affair of parents and teacher, it need the care from every social member". Hence, without the participation of parents and communities education can not achieve its success.

However, I emphasis the involvement of parents and communities in education, I admit that parents and communities sometimes play negative roles. For example, some parents are not proper to teach their children, because of their crime and other bad character. They tell their children some believes which betray the moral value and laws of the society. Even some parents mistreat their children which bring the physically injury and mental pressure to their children. Moreover in communities students may touch some danger and crime which is not salubrious for their pullulating. Therefore, not every times parents and communities can not bring the ideal effect to education.

To sum up, even parents and communities may play some negative roles in education; we should realize that their positive and necessary effects for people overweight the laith effects. As the speaker asserts, education is too important, which is not the solely affair of professional educators, but the responsibility of every member of the society.

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Nowadays, there is a controversial issue about whether both parents and communities should be involved in the local schools［加上or not. Depending on personal experience, believes and emotional concern, we may find that some people hold the opinion that education is so important that it can not be left to a group of professional educator, while others have the opposite attitude. To agree or disagree, it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons, I agree the statement with the author that parents, communities, and professional educators should participate in education which is essential for our next generation.［感觉第一段有点罗嗦］

To begin with, I admit that parents and communities play positive roles in education. Firstly, as we all know, parents are the first teachers of their children. For a little child it is his or her parents who teach them speaking, walking, sings and running. Parents are examples for their children. The process of learning of a baby is the imitation of their parents. Parents tell their children the knowledge, the value of the society, the experience, the moral rule of their culture, and give the love to their children. For example, the famous scientists Edison, his teacher gave up him for the reason that the teacher think［－＞thought Edison is too foolish to study in school. But Edison’s mother did not lose her heart, she taught him in their home. Without the education from his mother, Edison could not obtain the basic knowledge of society and science, in addition to Edison could not become an outstanding inventor in his later life.［例子不太好，只对学校不要的小孩来说父母才重要吗？］ It is obvious that parents can affect their children in the positive way. Secondly, communities also can prompt education for the local school. Sometimes donation form the members of the communities is an important resource for the local schools. In addition to communities can provide several service works for local students which offer the chance of touching the society for students. Therefore, we can clearly see that parents and communities play positive roles in education.

Next, parents and communities play necessary roles in education. Only education from the professional educators is scant for the pullulating of people. It is possible that students can obtain a myriad of knowledge from the their teacher or professor, but they may obtain the cherish love［ ,］ good characteristics, custom of their race from their parents, which is so much essential for them and is a footstone for them to become a good citizens. Communities can provide the chancing［－＞chances for their members' children to touch the society and make them more close to their community culture. As some experts said "education is not the affair of parents and teacher, it need the care from every social member". Hence, without the participation of parents and communities education can not achieve its success.

However, I emphasis the involvement of parents and communities in education, I admit that parents and communities sometimes play negative roles. For example, some parents are not proper to teach their children, because of their crime and other bad character. They tell their children some believes which betray the moral value and laws of the society. Even some parents mistreat their children which bring the physically injury and mental pressure to their children. Moreover in communities students may touch some danger and crime which is not salubrious for their pullulating. Therefore, not every times parents and communities can not［去掉］ bring the ideal effect to education.

To sum up, even parents and communities may play some negative roles in education; we should realize that their positive and necessary effects for people overweight the laith effects. As the speaker asserts, education is too important, which is not the solely affair of professional educators, but the responsibility of every member of the society.
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