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指向大海UID: 158737

241"An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time." 241． 个人的伟大不能由与他同时代的人来客观地评价，而让将来的人评价更有意义

When we were young, we often told that we should learn form the people who have made greatness. But as we get older, it can be easily found that an individual greatness was always be judged objectively by the offspring, not by the contemporaries. We have no right to say it was right or wrong, but it is true for several reasons.

First of all, a giant might be so powerful that his contemporaries have a sense of fear thus hampering the equitable judgments. For example, Hitler was thought to be a hero at his time by those who also opposed of Judah, and the Judah. You may say that I was wrong, but the truth is that there are many countries was under the rule of Hitler, the children of the other nations had to study Germany and learn to be a loyalist even they didn't want to. Only after the war can the people pointed out the crime. The famous movie "Schindler‘s List" can only be showed after Hitler's death. Our history was full of such examples because people are all afraid of great politicians. As to the favored politic leaders, they were often killed by their opponents. As a consequence, the judgments of contemporaries was confined and not objective.

Another point is that an individual's contemporaries may be emotionally connected with him or her. Let us take Aristotle as an example, his wrong thought that heavy object drop fast than light one influenced people at his time because they all know Aristotle was a contributive giant and you just trust whatever he said. Therefore, the wrong thought was passed down until one day some physicians who are not emotionally connected with the former giant. Then they discovered that the heavy and light objects drop at the some speed if we do not consider the friction. Today we also have some wrong thought toward today's giants. For their contribution to physics, YangZhengning and LiZhengdao were awarded the Nobel Prize. But who discover the laws first? Whose contribution is greater? Because YangZHengning was a patriot people in China regarded him as the great while the others thought LiZhengdao was. Who are right? We don't know. Maybe the answer will clear when we have no emotionally connection with both of them.

Last but not least, it takes time for the significance of an individual's deeds or words to be fully demonstrated. The instances of Aristotle and Yang-Li have already illustrated this point. The offspring may have more clues and more reasons to judge an individual's deeds and words, as a consequence, they can have a objective attitude rather than subjective point. As the old adage says: "Time is the touchstone of the truth."(这句不肯定，望高手指点) Although it seems impossible for contemporaries people to have objective opinion, it doesn't mean that we have no need to contribute. The value of an individual will clear someday and what we did today will surely influence the next generation. Therefore we have no excuse not do things which beneficial others.

In conclusion, the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to  a later generation because the contemporaries have a sense of fear or emotionally connection with them and it takes time for the truth.

快考了感觉越来越不会写了，不知道一个段落该如何展开，结尾也总是用托福的思路，请高手帮帮忙看看

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

晚上给你粘上

有时间我帮我改一下吧，我必回拍的。

https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251025 issue122

wildUID: 189262

很感谢你帮我改的文章，无以为报，也帮你改了：）很可惜，我不是高手，不当的地方请指正
241"An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time." 241． 个人的伟大不能由与他同时代的人来客观地评价，而让将来的人评价更有意义

When we were young, we (were) often told that we should learn form the people who have made greatness. But as we get older, it can be easily found that an individual greatness was always be judged objectively by the offspring, not by the contemporaries. We have no right to say (觉得这样写有些别扭，可能改成It is difficult to say好一些) it was right or wrong, but it is true for several reasons.（开头的观点还是挺明确的。）

First of all, a giant might be so powerful that his contemporaries have a sense of fear thus hampering the equitable judgments. For example, Hitler was thought to be a hero at his time by （加个both好像意思更明确一些）those who also opposed of Judah, and the Judah. You may say that I was wrong（我觉得这种写法口语化，最好少用）, but the truth is that there are many countries was（删掉） under the rule of Hitler, the children of the other nations had to study Germany and learn to be a loyalist even they didn't want to. Only after the war can the people pointed out the crime. The famous movie "Schindler‘s List" can only be showed after Hitler's death. Our history was full of such examples because people are all afraid of great politicians. As to the favored politic leaders, they were often killed by their opponents. As a consequence, the judgments of contemporaries was confined and not objective.（我觉得这一段的观点不错，我没有想到的）

Another point is that an individual's contemporaries may be emotionally connected with（也许换成trust and embrace好一些） him or her.（我觉得这个主题句的意思很不明确，应该仔细改一下。） Let us take Aristotle as an example, his wrong thought that heavy object drop fast than light one influenced people at his time because they all know Aristotle was a contributive giant and you just trust whatever he said. Therefore, the wrong thought was passed down until one day some physicians who are not emotionally connected with the former giant. Then they discovered that the heavy and light objects drop at the some（same） speed if we do not consider the friction(起主要作用的是the resistance of the air吧？). Today（Nowadays不要和后面重复了） we also have some wrong thought toward today's giants. For their contribution to physics, YangZhengning and LiZhengdao were awarded the Nobel Prize. But who discover the laws first? Whose contribution is greater? Because YangZHengning was a patriot people in China regarded him as the great while the others thought LiZhengdao was. Who are right? We don't know. Maybe the answer will clear when we have no emotionally connection with both of them.（觉得这里例子举得不是很恰当，两个人谁的功绩大与本段的论点“大人物的观点会由于别人对他的崇拜而被盲目信奉”没有什么直接的支持关系。）

Last but not least, it takes time for the significance of an individual's deeds or words to be fully demonstrated. The instances of Aristotle and Yang-Li have already illustrated this point.(这个例子应展开一下，不然并不能形成对主题的支持，我就没有明白是怎么支持的) The offspring may have more clues and more reasons to judge an individual's deeds and words, as a consequence, they can have a（an） objective attitude rather than subjective point. As the old adage says: "Time is the touchstone of the truth."(这句不肯定，望高手指点) Although it seems impossible for contemporaries people to have objective opinion, it doesn't mean that we have no need to contribute(contribute什么呢？应该明确一下). The value of an individual will clear someday and what we did today will surely influence the next generation. Therefore we have no excuse not do（for not doing） things which beneficial (to)others.

In conclusion, the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later generation because the contemporaries have a sense of fear or emotionally connection with them and it takes time for the truth.

觉得第二段和第三段写一个就可以了，不然让我觉得有些偏题。"An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time."斜体的部分指一个人的伟大难以被同时代的人客观的评价。但你的二、三段都说的是“一个伟大的人难以被同时代的人客观的评价”我觉得这是有差异的。比如，一个人的伟大可能并不能被同时代的人所发现和承认。

parameciumUID: 154073

面熟的ID
我的日期和你接近
晚上发上来

指向大海UID: 158737

感动！有这么多人拍

wild 谢谢！ 关于你的建议我要说的是如果2，3段合了我到哪去找另一个理由。 个人的伟大和伟人是不一样我的文章中应该有连接词把两者联系起来

parameciumUID: 154073

241"An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time." 241． 个人的伟大不能由与他同时代的人来客观地评价，而让将来的人评价更有意义

When we were young, we often told[被动？] that we should learn form  from the people who have made greatness. But as we get older, it can be easily found that an individual greatness was always be[谓语重复] judged objectively by the offspring, not by the contemporaries. We have no right to say it was right or wrong[没有权利？这样说不大好吧？], but it is true for several reasons.
[开头摆明态度，个别句子欠斟酌，谓语动词要注意一下，可能是限时的原因吧？]

First of all, a giant might be so powerful that his contemporaries have a sense of fear thus hampering the equitable judgments. For example, Hitler was thought to be a hero at his time by those who also opposed of Judah, and the Judah. You may say that I was wrong, but the truth is that there are many countries which/that?was under the rule of Hitler, the children of the other nations had to study Germany and learn[时态一致？] to be a loyalist even they didn't want to. Only after the war can the people pointed out the crime. The famous movie "Schindler‘s List" can only be showed after Hitler's death. Our history was[陈述，还是用一般时会好一些吧？] full of such examples because people are all afraid of great politicians[不一定吧？]. As to the favored politic leaders, they were often killed by their opponents. As a consequence, the judgments of contemporaries was[复数？一般时？] confined and not objective.
举的例子不错啊，不过我感觉个别句子未免说得有些绝对了。

Another point is that an individual's contemporaries[与an对应？] may be emotionally connected with him or her. Let us take Aristotle as an example, his wrong thought that heavy object drop fast[比较级？] than light one influenced people at his time because they all know Aristotle was a contributive giant and you[和前面的they之间搞不清具体指代的是谁] just trust whatever he said. Therefore, the wrong thought was passed down until one day some physicians who are not emotionally connected with the former giant. Then they discovered that the heavy and light objects drop at the some speed if we do not consider the friction. Today we also have some wrong thought toward today's giants. For their contribution to physics, YangZhengning and LiZhengdao were awarded the Nobel Prize. But who discover the laws first? Whose contribution is greater? Because YangZHengning was a patriot people in China regarded him[去掉him[]/color] as the great while the others thought LiZhengdao was. Who are right? We don't know. Maybe the answer will clear[谓语呢？] when we have no emotionally[用形容词性的就可以了] connection with both of them.
[这段中的第二个例子我觉得不是很合适]
Last but not least, it takes time for the significance of an individual's deeds or words to be fully demonstrated. The instances of Aristotle and Yang-Li have already illustrated this point. The offspring may have more clues and more reasons to judge an individual's deeds and words, as a consequence, they can have a objective attitude rather than subjective point. As the old adage says: "Time is the touchstone of the truth."(这句不肯定，望高手指点) Although it seems impossible for contemporaries people to have objective opinion, it doesn't mean that we have no need to contribute. The value of an individual will clear someday and what we did today will surely influence the next generation. Therefore we have no excuse not do things which beneficial[结构错了] others.

In conclusion, the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later generation because the contemporaries have a sense of fear or emotionally connection with them and it takes time for the truth.

快考了感觉越来越不会写了，不知道一个段落该如何展开，结尾也总是用托福的思路，请高手帮帮忙看看
我觉得B2写得不错啊，就是和B3之间的逻辑性不强啊，B3的例子也不具有说服力，没有很好地为说理服务。
稍微改变下思路，相信是篇不错的文章
还有哦，有些语法错误最好避免哦：）
请多指教：）

rw02UID: 187904

除了以上观点，我想到另外的角度是： live to be valued by others-----either contemporaries or offsprings, or live to enjoy your life. 我们拿到这样的题都是考虑一些关于great people得事迹。
不过我觉得在老外眼中他们不太关心前者的问题，而是如何使自己的生活更有意义而已。

指向大海UID: 158737

楼上的意见很不错，的确我们就是要enjoy life.
paramecium，谢谢，我是限时的可是没成功：（，自己检查了一遍的还是没检查出你说的错误，不知道考试时怎么解决？  还有你把你的文章的链接发悄悄话给我把

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

When we were young, we often weretold that we should learn form the people who have made greatness. But

as we get older, it can be easily found that an individual greatness was always be judged objectively by the offspring, not

by the contemporaries. We have no right to say it wasis right or wrong, but it is true for several

reasons.

First of all, a giant might be so powerful that his contemporaries have a sense of fear ,thus hampering

the equitable judgments. For example, Hitler was thought to be a hero at his time by those who also opposed of Judah, and the

Judah. You may say that I was wrong, but the truth is that there are many countries waswere under the

rule of Hitler, the children of the other nations had to study GermanyGerman and learn to be a

去掉a loyalists even they didn't want to. Only after the war can the people pointed

out thehis crimes. The famous movie "Schindler‘s List" cancould

only be showed after Hitler's death. Our history was full of such examples because people are all afraid of great

politicians. As to the favored politic leaders, they were often killed by their opponents. As a consequence, the judgments of

contemporaries waswere confined and not objective.

Another point is that an individual's contemporaries may be emotionally connected with him or her. Let us take Aristotle as

an example, his wrong thought that heavy object drop fastfaster than light one influenced people at his

time because they all know Aristotle was a contributive giant and you just trusttrusted whatever he said.

Therefore, the wrong thought was passed down until one day some physicians who are not emotionally connected with the former

giantgaints. Then they discovered that the heavy and light objectsobject drop at the

somesame speed if we do not consider the friction. Today we also have some wrong thought toward today's

giants. For their contribution to physics, YangZhengning and LiZhengdao were awarded the Nobel Prize. But who discover the

laws first? Whose contribution is greater? Because YangZHengning was a patriot people inand China

regarded him as thea great while the others thought LiZhengdao was. Who are right? We don't know. Maybe

the answer will clear when we have no emotionally connection with both of them.

Last but not least, it takes time for the significance of an individual's deeds or words to be fully demonstrated. The

instances of Aristotle and Yang-Li have already illustrated this point. The offspring may have more clues and more reasons to

judge an individual's deeds and words, as a consequence, they can have a objective attitude rather than subjective point. As

the old adage says: "Time is the touchstone of the truth."(这句不肯定，望高手指点) Although it seems impossible for

contemporariescontemporary people to have objective opinion, it doesn't mean that we have no need to

contribute. The value of an individual will clear someday and what we did today will surely influence the next generation.

Therefore we have no excuse not do things which beneficialbenefit others.

In conclusion, the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to athe later

generation because the contemporaries have a sense of fear or emotionally connection with them and it should

taketakes time for the truth.
还可以丫挺好的吗，要自信，你一定能考好的，加油吧！我也快考了


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当阳光照遍每个角落
心情像风般漂泊不停留
抛开界限 快乐行走
我有属于自己的方式做梦

西安外国语学院 3月25日

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

When we were young, we often weretold that we should learn form the people who have made greatness. But as we get older, it can be easily found that an individual greatness was always be judged objectively by the offspring, not by the contemporaries. We have no right to say it wasis right or wrong, but it is true for several reasons.

First of all, a giant might be so powerful that his contemporaries have a sense of fear ,thus hampering the equitable judgments. For example, Hitler was thought to be a hero at his time by those who also opposed of Judah, and the Judah. You may say that I was wrong, but the truth is that there are many countries waswere under the rule of Hitler, the children of the other nations had to study GermanyGerman and learn to be a去掉a loyalists even they didn't want to. Only after the war can the people pointed out thehis crimes. The famous movie "Schindler‘s List" cancould only be showed after Hitler's death. Our history was full of such examples because people are all afraid of great politicians. As to the favored politic leaders, they were often killed by their opponents. As a consequence, the judgments of contemporaries waswere confined and not objective.

Another point is that an individual's contemporaries may be emotionally connected with him or her. Let us take Aristotle as an example, his wrong thought that heavy object drop fastfaster than light one influenced people at his time because they all know Aristotle was a contributive giant and you just trusttrusted whatever he said. Therefore, the wrong thought was passed down until one day some physicians who are not emotionally connected with the former giantgaints. Then they discovered that the heavy and light objectsobject drop at the somesame speed if we do not consider the friction. Today we also have some wrong thought toward today's giants. For their contribution to physics, YangZhengning and LiZhengdao were awarded the Nobel Prize. But who discover the laws first? Whose contribution is greater? Because YangZHengning was a patriot people inand China regarded him as thea great while the others thought LiZhengdao was. Who are right? We don't know. Maybe the answer will clear when we have no emotionally connection with both of them.

Last but not least, it takes time for the significance of an individual's deeds or words to be fully demonstrated. The instances of Aristotle and Yang-Li have already illustrated this point. The offspring may have more clues and more reasons to judge an individual's deeds and words, as a consequence, they can have a objective attitude rather than subjective point. As the old adage says: "Time is the touchstone of the truth."(这句不肯定，望高手指点) Although it seems impossible for contemporariescontemporary people to have objective opinion, it doesn't mean that we have no need to contribute. The value of an individual will clear someday and what we did today will surely influence the next generation. Therefore we have no excuse not do things which beneficialbenefit others.

In conclusion, the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to athe later generation because the contemporaries have a sense of fear or emotionally connection with them and it should taketakes time for the truth.
还可以丫挺好的吗，要自信，你一定能考好的，加油吧！我也快考了


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当阳光照遍每个角落
心情像风般漂泊不停留
抛开界限 快乐行走
我有属于自己的方式做梦

西安外国语学院 3月25日

parameciumUID: 154073

指向大海，你的悄悄话满了呀：）

我占用一下你的位置，不介意吧？我今天刚写的，本想限时，结果超了十多分钟：（

7."The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

In the high-tech modern society, the advancements of technology have brought considerable changes and contribution to our daily life, especially in the area of documentation recording. I agree with the statement that with the coming of video camera, it has provided such a direct, accurate and convincing record of contemporary life. However, in my view, the application of video camera is merely a complement to the for of documentation of written records, as discussed below.

First of all ,we have to admit that with the use of video camera, a great number of complex things have been solved easily. The video camera is able to provide a series of  wonderful elements to describe the live conditions of an important affaires, such as the vivid pictures, the live talking, the feeling on people's face and the like.  Here are several proper examples to better illustrate my point. So far as we know, the birth of baby is such a significant things that almost everyone would like to store the course of it in memory for long time. Nevertheless, in past time before the invention of video camera, it is unrealistic for people to write it down. Fortunately, nowadays, people do not need to worry about that. It is no longer difficult for the parents to catch almost every vivid images of the infants, the first time he or she smiles, plays, walks and so forth. In addition, particularly, video camera plays an crucial role in the court. With the help of video camera, the process of trial has become more reliable and straightforward. For instance, the video camera can provide the accurate and convincing proof, even the bloody images of a murdering that entirely impossible for the written records to write down. These mean that the application of video camera has indeed do great benefits for our life.

However, let us turn to the defects of the video camera compared with the written records in several ways. To begin with, it is almost frustrated through using video camera if we want to record the inner thoughts of people. The video camera can
only record the outer characteristics of people or the entire process of events, the limitation involved by the camera. Nevertheless, if in these conditions, the advantages of written records stands out. Not only can it record the thoughts of people, but also it is able to be stored for long time. In addition, in the realm of business, the contract must be written down in paper, otherwise it is not official. Furthermore, considering the storing space of video camera is limited, it is hard for people to have enough confidence and entire credibility to use video camera as well. While, the economic costs should be taken into consideration. As we know, the costs of video camera is much higher than that of written records, such as the expensive films compared with the Therefore, from these respects the importance of written records weigh more than that of video camera.


Finally, we must realize that nothing is perfect. What we should do is to improve things and make them complementary with each other. Just like the relationship between the video camera and the written records. Each has its advantages and disadvantages. We cannot neglect each of them just because a few shortcomings. In fact, they can function individually and connectedly. The written records can record the subjective factors, in the meanwhile, the video camera makes the objective contribution. It is well reflected in the library. That is, in the sea of books which are convenient for people to read, the records created by the video camera can supply people with the originally, vividly whole process of significant events.

To sum up, faced with the development of technology and society, we should make better use of both forms of documentation, the written records and video camera.  And the camera video is just a excellent complement to written records.

thanks!!

指向大海UID: 158737

7."The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

In the high-tech modern society, the advancements of technology have brought considerable changes and contribution to our daily life, especially in the area of documentation recording. I agree with the statement that with the coming of video camera, it has provided such a direct, accurate and convincing record of contemporary life. However, in my view, the application of video camera is merely a complement to the for of[这里你是想说不可以替代纸质记录吧？是不是错了，还有你的I agree 和however用的不合适，改成while会好一些] documentation of written records, as discussed below.

First of all ,we have to admit that with the use of video camera, a great number of complex things have been solved easily. The video camera is able to provide a series of wonderful elements to describe the live conditions of an[呵呵单复数的问题] important affaires, such as the vivid pictures, the live talking, the feeling on people's face and the like. Here are several proper examples to better illustrate my point. So far as we know, the birth of baby is such a significant things that almost everyone would like to store the course of it in memory for long time. Nevertheless, in past time before the invention of video camera, it is unrealistic for people to write it down.[是the growing of a baby不是birth我一开始还以为你要讲婴儿出生的过程传统的拍摄不下来] Fortunately, nowadays, people do not need to worry about that. It is no longer difficult for the parents to catch almost every vivid images of the infants, the first time he or she smiles, plays, walks and so forth. In addition, particularly, video camera plays an crucial role in the court. With the help of video camera, the process of trial has become more reliable and straightforward. For instance, the video camera can provide the accurate and convincing proof, even the bloody images of a murdering that entirely impossible for the written records to write down.[这种血腥的事看的很不舒服：（] These mean that the application of video camera has indeed do great benefits for our life.

However, let us turn to the defects of the video camera compared with the written records in several ways. To begin with, it is almost frustrated through using video camera if we want to record the inner thoughts of people. The video camera can
only record the outer characteristics of people or the entire process of events, the limitation involved by the camera. Nevertheless, if in these conditions, the advantages of written records stands out. Not only can it record the thoughts of people, but also it is able to be stored for long time.[这个影像资料的存储时间是不是更长？] In addition, in the realm of business, the contract must be written down in paper, otherwise it is not official. Furthermore, considering the storing space of video camera is limited, it is hard for people to have enough confidence and entire credibility to use video camera as well. While[这里不是转折，应该用what is more一类的词], the economic costs should be taken into consideration. As we know, the costs of video camera is much higher than that of written records, such as the expensive films compared with the Therefore, from these respects the importance of written records weigh more than that of video camera.


Finally, we must realize that nothing is perfect. What we should do is to improve things and make them complementary with each other. Just like the relationship between the video camera and the written records. Each has its advantages and disadvantages. We cannot neglect each of them just because a few shortcomings. In fact, they can function individually and connectedly. The written records can record the subjective factors, in the meanwhile, the video camera makes the objective contribution. It is well reflected in the library. That is, in the sea[在书的海洋中，有这种用法么？] of books which are convenient for people to read, the records created by the video camera can supply people with the originally, vividly whole process of significant events.

To sum up, faced with the development of technology and society, we should make better use of both forms of documentation, the written records and video camera. And the camera video is just a excellent complement to written records.
[偶说一点建议，按照我们通常看的范文来看，结构上都是TS讲实际内容的，一个优点或一个缺点占一段，而不是像你的B2中罗列，如果我来写就吧优点写两段而你的B3正好写简单一些做结尾很合适。我这是传统的观点没准你的这种写法斑竹赞赏呢！
我的悄悄话清空了，谢谢提醒。 我帮你开了个新贴]