issue185 同主题写作，修改版

龙非UID: 193190

185. "Scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. Therefor, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. Without these scandals, We might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

龙非UID: 193190

sigh,沉得可真快～～～

鬼谷子UID: 159645

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. 【看了你的后文知道你说的不只是这两个领域，应该加上一个and other areas/domains】 Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 【不知道你是不是限时的，我觉得你整个的文章美中不足的就是开头结尾，这里可以简述一下你的观点的原因】

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again【reemergence好一点】 of this kind of problem. 【我觉得这个观点的提出是值得大家学习的，很多人的观点不完整，似乎是想到哪写到哪，还有些本来已经考虑到了问题但是没有在TS里面体现出来。龙非的这个TS就很全面，不过可以试着简练一点，TS不要太长】In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. 【这里清楚的提到了 speaker and reformer 的问题，而且作出了对比，这是很多人都忽略了的关键词】Therefor, 【Therefore】scandals can be useful sometimes in political area. 【不忘总结，很完整】
【首先观点很全面，论述比较到位，例子是合适的，但是一个问题就是根据你的论点，似乎后面论证的部分应该再提一些大众的反应】

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. 【分领域来论述，结构清晰，这个TS也应该像上段的一样交代一下对于解决问题的作用，因为你后面有这样的论述】 Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. 【很新颖的例子】 When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. 【事情的后果和解决】 Without these scandals, 【正面说了反面说，如果不的话怎么怎么样，我喜欢这样的论述方法】 We might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance. 【这段同样条理清晰，尤其是例子以及对于例子的分析很好】

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas. 【经济体育教育列举，与前面两段相比有轻有重】

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news【headlines就可以了】. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. 【反面的论述可以再仔细一点，说一说为什么】

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

【我觉得这篇是我看过的185里面最好的一篇了，基本上没有什么大的问题，思路展开论述都很好。值得大家来参考。龙非加油！相信你AW能考的不错！】

hazechenUID: 197677

修改完后才发现前面已经有大师帮你修改了
而且我当时下的好像是你的第一版
不管怎么样，还是贴出来看看吧：P

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless这个词好像不是很贴切，用innumerable如何 scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies andor even 后者的程度甚于前者 reform, henceforth这个词是从今以后的意思吧，好像用在这不合适，用从而consequently如何 keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again用在of前面不合适，修饰happening的定语紧跟其后比较好 of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with the President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased increase the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held holding? to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of from? which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconducts unless the two scandals had surfaced. So, therefore之类的词，so一般用在非正式场合比较多;或者用in this sense, 去掉后面sometimesscandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealinghaving been revealed, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The the American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless enormous drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides 上面用过，可以考虑aside from those 句型, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandalscandals,因为你后面是become; 加which, such as 后面不能加句子吧become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and but distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, and safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.


很佩服你的逻辑
整篇文章中心很明确
分论点也都是紧紧围绕一个中心的
真的很赞啊
你的语言也很好
整篇看下来感觉很好

PS：我很头疼我的逻辑问题
能不能有空的时候帮我分析一下？
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=252061
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251694

龙非UID: 193190

to 鬼鬼：
谢谢详细地批改
Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. 【看了你的后文知道你说的不只是这两个领域，应该加上一个and other areas/domains】 说得有理Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 【不知道你是不是限时的，我觉得你整个的文章美中不足的就是开头结尾，这里可以简述一下你的观点的原因】 还是有理:D，还可以增加字数的说

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again【reemergence好一点】 照单全收 of this kind of problem. 【我觉得这个观点的提出是值得大家学习的，很多人的观点不完整，似乎是想到哪写到哪，还有些本来已经考虑到了问题但是没有在TS里面体现出来。龙非的这个TS就很全面，不过可以试着简练一点，TS不要太长】 语言是关键In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. 【这里清楚的提到了 speaker and reformer 的问题，而且作出了对比，这是很多人都忽略了的关键词】 嘿嘿，这是我加分的地方哦Therefor, 【Therefore】scandals can be useful sometimes in political area. 【不忘总结，很完整】
【首先观点很全面，论述比较到位，例子是合适的，但是一个问题就是根据你的论点，似乎后面论证的部分应该再提一些大众的反应】 嗯，当局者迷

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. 【分领域来论述，结构清晰，这个TS也应该像上段的一样交代一下对于解决问题的作用，因为你后面有这样的论述】 继续低头接受Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. 【很新颖的例子】 When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. 【事情的后果和解决】 Without these scandals, 【正面说了反面说，如果不的话怎么怎么样，我喜欢这样的论述方法】 We might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance. 【这段同样条理清晰，尤其是例子以及对于例子的分析很好】

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas. 【经济体育教育列举，与前面两段相比有轻有重】

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news【headlines就可以了】. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. 【反面的论述可以再仔细一点，说一说为什么】 这个下面着重探讨一下

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.


对于让步的看法，请指正：
1)让步应该在末段，相信鬼鬼是同意的
2)让步篇幅应该较短，稍微带过即可，因为它的每一句话都有可能减弱你主题的影响力，鬼鬼怎么看捏？

龙非UID: 193190

to hazechen ：
同样谢谢你的详细批改，一版、二版都是欢迎大家的砖的。
现在有点事，一会再慢慢研习你的意见并拍一拍你：P

鬼谷子UID: 159645

呵呵，可能我说的不清楚，我的意思不是说要让你写的很长，我是觉得你让步的部分说的不够很清楚，再清楚仔细一点，比如说你说从重要的事情上转移视线，然后只是给出了现象，那么，为什么呢，重要的事情是那些呢？怎么转移视线了呢？不用说太多，但是，我觉得要更合理一点。

当然，现在已经很好了，issue不用写得面面俱到滴水不漏的，可能我说的太严厉了:D

龙非UID: 193190

当然，现在已经很好了，issue不用写得面面俱到滴水不漏的，可能我说的太严厉了

嘿嘿，不要这样说，越严厉越好，俺不是怕砖的人:D，提出这个问题是学术性的探讨:P，你说的是对的
更正一下：让步段要短而精，更加显示出自己的critical thinking

龙非UID: 193190

hazechen ,我来了～～
Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless这个词好像不是很贴切，用innumerable如何 我要表示的是层出不穷，无穷无尽的意思，自觉endless这个词其实不好，不知你的意见？
scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies andor even 后者的程度甚于前者 说得好，受中文影响了我
reform, henceforth这个词是从今以后的意思吧，好像用在这不合适，用从而consequently如何 我要表达的就是此后，也就是说在采取措施甚至改革之后，还要警惕类似事件再发生。用consequently应该是不合适的，前后并没有因果的关系
keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again用在of前面不合适，修饰happening的定语紧跟其后比较好 说的对，我改
of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with the President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased increase the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held holding? to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of from? which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconducts unless the two scandals had surfaced. So, therefore之类的词，so一般用在非正式场合比较多;或者用in this sense, 去掉后面 嘿嘿，这个问题新版已经改了:D
sometimesscandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealinghaving been revealed, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The the American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless enormous drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides 上面用过，可以考虑aside from those 句型 接受，语言是我的弱项
, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandalscandals,因为你后面是become; 加which, such as 后面不能加句子吧 这里可能你没有看仔细，这句话的主语是a lot of scandals 而不是star-sex scandals  :p
become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and but distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, and safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

再次感谢你细心的批改，我会回敬你的 :D

mada7982UID: 196720

谢谢龙非的精彩表演！更是感谢特邀评委鬼鬼和hazechen的细致点评，让我等观众受益非浅呀，鄙人自以为英语不错，现在才明白，鄙人的中国式英语不错！
呵呵，学习兼惭愧！！！

龙非UID: 193190

谢谢mada的鼓励:)，集合各位同学的意见，最新出炉修正版

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia and other domains every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealed problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems that harm the public interest and lead to their solution. Because of the curiosity nature of mankind, scandals can focus public attention on the problems only after which are exposed to the sun can the public have possibility to take some remedies and reform to them, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the reemergence of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increase the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. Therefor, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise and help to purify the academia. Before, we all consider academia as immaculate realm, but along with the ever-happening academic scandals these recent years, we wake up to the problems so-called “academic crimes” and try to solve them. For instance, in the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. Without these scandals, we might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Aside from those, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandals become headline. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

so猫UID: 148633

偶来学习一下~

shirleymaluUID: 197811

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia and other domains every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealed problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems that harm the public interest and lead to their solution. Because of the curiosity nature of mankind, scandals can focus public attention on the problems only after which are exposed to the sun can the public have possibility to take some remedies and reform to them, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the reemergence of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increase the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. Therefor, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.[呵呵,这两个例子参照例文的吧]

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise and help to purify the academia. Before, we all consider academia as immaculate realm, but along with the ever-happening academic scandals these recent years, we wake up to the problems so-called “academic crimes” and try to solve them. For instance, in the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. Without these scandals, we might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.[这个例子蛮好的]

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Aside from those, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandals become headline. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper.[如果能说一点原因就更好了]

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.
[一直觉得你的文章写得很不错,比我的词汇好多了.大师在前,不敢多说,只是向你发表一点我的意见.有空也帮我的作文拍拍砖.多谢啦!]

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大师在前，全当学习吧。：）
185. "Scandals whether in politics, academia, or other areas can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to[to 后面跟什么呢？], thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. [为什么不说为什么公开发言者做不到呢？感觉突兀]Therefor, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct[汗，不明白，请指教]. When this finding was starting to [用进行时的start在这合适吗？用was filting 如何？] filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. Without these scandals, We might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.[例子真多，思路开，佩服！]

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.
[逻辑没有说的，用词很严谨，佩服！也有大师和那么多兄弟姐妹意见，真的没可说的了。
另外想探讨一下关于方方面面的问题：我一直不习惯用分领域谈的方式，因为觉得这样虽分了领域分了几段实际只有一点，缺乏层次性和深入性。所以我一般实在没有提纲了才分领域谈，不知这样的想法如何？
但大家好像觉得这样分领域可以首选，是吧？280篇也最喜欢分领域了，晕！]