issue185 同主题写作 拿到题目现想加限时只有400多字

ivyshoulUID: 195537

------题目------
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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Though scandal itself is a negative thing, it can be positive to draw people's attention most quickly, also it can arouse people to the largest proportion that no speaker or reformer ever could. Additionally, by exposing problems to the public, scandals will serve to urge related people to solve the problems.

We people are curious and inquisitive naturally. Whether we admit it or not, we common people likes to look into big person's affairs, especially the negative ones. Someone not interested in politics at all will be pleased to listen to popular disgraced stories, say scandal, about politicians who seem live high in the sky. Moreover, as for some independent, exclusive area like academic area, common people don't have many chance to get to know the inside stories. What's more, they aren't interested in these things at all, for these things have nothing to do with their daily life. Compared to more urgent problems claimed by academic reformers, common people will be more interested in the sanitary condition of a local hospital. However, once there is a scandal about a talented professor cheating in an academic paper, people's attention will be attracted in a short time. It will soon become a popular talking stuff and the public will even concern about the dishonest y in academic world, for they are curious about how a once respected, talented people with good reputation will react to the scandal. People will attain psychological satisfaction to find out that those big persons are still fallible, imperfect human being. Thus according to common people's psychology, scandals are the most effective way to draw a lot of people's attention in a short time.

The public will not let the celebrities go until they perform satisfactory reactions to the scandals. People will go on concerning the successive affairs of the scandal. Under the public eyes, related persons will be obliged to make some actions, to solve the problems. Though they may cautiously find ways to cheat the public and cover the truth, still it will be a caution to them to act more suitable according to their social status. It is always not a happy thing to be criticized by thousands of people. Thus I believe scandals will urge the celebrities to solve the problem and act more properly.

In short, scandals are useful means to focus people's attention on problems. Even though mostly the public just treats them as intriguing stories, they do have some positive affect on regulating the big persons' behaviors.

ivyshoulUID: 195537

issue 只指望得4分
优美的句子华丽的语言经典的例子研究了考试的时候一紧张多半就出不来了

我觉得还是个人水平踏实点好啊

鬼谷子UID: 159645

记得imong说过，华丽不是我们追求的，用自己的语言把所有的问题都表达清楚本身就很华丽了:D看看你的文章

yogurt4UID: 198389

真不好意思,我挺想帮你改作文的,但不知如何操作,请指点一下.3 q

ivyshoulUID: 195537

偶也是菜鸟一只...同不知道...
我曾试图改别人的也没弄明白...

鬼谷子UID: 159645

我觉得你提出的人们对于丑闻的兴趣是天性的观点是好的
但是你的论述一直停留在人们的兴趣上面
没有进一步的说明作用何在，似乎思路还不是很清晰的。

ivyshoulUID: 195537

Scandals can draw considerable people’s attention to problems very quickly. The number of people intrigued by scandals and the intensity of their attention is inimitable, no speaker or reformer could ever do a better job. Also, by exposing the dark side of the society and weaknesses in human nature to the public, scandals is useful to warn related people and urge them to solve the problems.

Mostly people are deaf to the things they don’t care, thus the voice of reformers and speakers is only audible to a small proportion of the population that really cares about the affairs in that area. However, scandals are capable to intrigued indifferent people in a marvelous way. We people are curious and inquisitive naturally. Whether we admit it or not, we common people likes to look into big persons’ affairs and mostly the negative ones please us much. For by finding out spots in celebrities’ halos we can get psychological satisfaction to know that they are not superior saints, but fallible, imperfect human being. For example, as for some exclusive, independent areas like academia, common people have no interest to know what’s happening inside, for it has nothing to do with their daily life. They would rather pay attention to the sanitary condition of a small local hospital than urgent problems claimed by academic speakers and reformers. Nonetheless, once a scandal concerning a well-known professor cheating in scientific papers pops up, it will soon become a hot topic in ordinary people’s daily life. People know nothing about science will be intrigued to know how a respected, talented somebody do such disgraced things and how he/she will react to the public.

Even though most people intrigued by scandals just treat them as interesting, popular stories exchanged between friends in idle times and they will not bother to find ways to solve the problems revealed by the scandals, scandals can still be useful to catalyze solutions. The public just simply won’t let the celebrities go until they perform satisfactorily as reaction to the scandals. People will go on concerning the successive affairs until the related persons made proper amends. Perhaps related persons may find ways to blind public’s eyes and cover the truth, but still it will be a caution to them to act properly in their status, After all the voice of the public cannot be fully overlooked and it is always not a joyous thing to be criticized by thousands of people.

As people are so easily attracted by scandals, powerful persons may intentionally make out scandals to distract the public’s attention from core matters most urgently needed concern. Politicians are used to do such things. Once the national economy faces a decline, scandals respecting a corrupted official will distract the public’s eyes, at least temporarily. Scandals may fool the public in that way.

As I deem, scandals can do a better job to attract people’s attention than reformers and speakers. Also, it serves to bring about proper solutions. Nevertheless, scandals can be guided to blind the public the essential problems.

限时的时候提纲都没写,胡乱就动工了,这是改正版.  这样有四分了么?

azaileaUID: 187859

我也写了奶酪那篇，你的argu写得很好的。我不太赞同意你所说的
开头不要太长。 因为是套用模版，打字时间不会费去很多。要是
后面实在写不出什么，整篇文章也不会因为字数太少太寒掺了。

借你的帖子问个问题，pp3上实战界面是从哪里进？
Practice Test 下的1，2有什么区别呢?

ivyshoulUID: 195537

可是我觉得套模版写那么长一段开头其实并没有什么实际的内容,我最开始也那样写,但是自己都觉得自己罗嗦得讨厌,再想想ETS不晓得看了多少这种模版,该多恶心啊...

我还没用过PP3那,你得找高人问才是阳光大道嘛:)

dvdwormUID: 168213

Scandals can draw considerable people’s attention to problems very quickly. The number of people intrigued by scandals and the intensity of their attention is inimitable, no speaker or reformer could ever do a better job. Also, by exposing the dark side of the society and weaknesses in human nature to the public, scandals is (are)useful to warn related people and urge them to solve the problems.

Mostly people are deaf to the things they don’t care, thus the voice of reformers and speakers is only audible to a small proportion of the population that really cares about the affairs in that area. However, scandals are capable to intrigued (intrigue) different people in a marvelous way. We people are curious and inquisitive naturally. Whether we admit it or not, we common people likes (like) to look into big persons’ affairs and mostly the negative ones please us much. For by finding out spots in celebrities’ halos we can get psychological satisfaction to know that they are not superior saints, but fallible, imperfect human being. For example, as for some exclusive, independent areas like academia, common people have no interest to know what’s happening inside, for it has nothing to do with their daily life. They would rather pay attention to the sanitary condition of a small local hospital than urgent problems claimed by academic speakers and reformers. Nonetheless, once a scandal concerning a well-known professor cheating in scientific papers pops up, it will soon become a hot topic in ordinary people’s daily life. People know nothing about science will be intrigued to know how a respected, talented somebody(person) do such disgraced things and how he/she will react to the public.

Even though most people intrigued by scandals just treat them as interesting, popular stories exchanged between friends in idle times and they will not bother to find ways to solve the problems revealed by the scandals, scandals can still be useful to catalyze solutions. The public just simply won’t let the celebrities go until they perform satisfactorily as reaction to the scandals. People will go on concerning the successive affairs until the related persons made proper amends. Perhaps related persons may find ways to blind public’s eyes and cover the truth, but still it will be a caution to them to act properly in their status, After (after) all the voice of the public cannot be fully overlooked and it is always not a joyous thing to be criticized by thousands of people.

As people are so easily attracted by scandals, powerful persons may intentionally make out scandals to distract the public’s attention from core matters most urgently needed concern. Politicians are used to do such things. Once the national economy faces a decline, scandals respecting a corrupted official will distract the public’s eyes, at least temporarily. Scandals may fool the public in that way.

As I deem, scandals can do a better job to attract people’s attention than reformers and speakers. Also, it serves to bring about proper solutions. Nevertheless, scandals can be guided to blind the public the essential problems.
感觉第四段展开的不够，如果时间允许的话应该再写的深入一点。其他没什么大问题，总体感觉写的挺好的

ivyshoulUID: 195537

展开是我的大问题啊
要往细的说就觉得没话了...

smartyrUID: 169453

No.1 issue185 同主题写作 拿到题目现想加限时只有400多字
------题目------
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
------正文------
Though scandal itself is a negative thing, it can be positive to draw people's attention most quickly, also it cancan it arouse people to the largest proportion that no speaker or reformer ever could. Additionally, by exposing problems to the public, scandals will serve to urge related people to solve the problems.赞成作者的观点

We people没有这种说法？ are curious and inquisitive naturally. Whether we admit it or not, we 建议删common people likeslike to look into big person's affairs,大人物?? especially the negative ones. Someone not interested in politics at all will be pleased to listen to popular disgraced stories, say scandal, about politicians who seem live high in the sky. Moreover, as for some independent, exclusive area like academic area, common people don't have many chance to get to know the inside stories. What's more, they aren't interested in these things at all, for these things have nothing to do with their daily life. Compared to more urgent problems claimed by academic reformers, common people will be more interested in the sanitary condition of a local hospital. However, once there is a scandal about a talented professor cheating in an academic paper, people's attention will be attracted in a short time. It will soon become a popular talking stuff and the public will even concern about the dishonest y in academic world, for they are curious about how a onceonce a respected, talented people with good reputation will react to the scandal. People will attain psychological satisfaction to find out that those big persons are still fallible, imperfect human being. Thus according to common people's psychology, scandals are the most effective way to draw a lot of people's attention in a short time.三方面论述，scandal易于引起人们兴趣。总觉得结构有点混乱

The public will not let the celebrities go until they perform satisfactory reactions to the scandals. People will go on concerning the successive affairs of the scandal. Under the public eyes, related persons will be obliged to make some actions, to solve the problems. Though they may cautiously find ways to cheat the public and cover the truth, still it will be a caution to them to act more suitable according to their social status. It is always not a happy thing to be criticized by thousands of people. Thus I believe scandals will urge the celebrities to solve the problem and act more properly.有助于问题的解决，但是没有例子支撑？？

In short, scandals are useful means to focus people's attention on problems. Even though mostly the public just treats them as intriguing stories, they do have some positive affect on regulating the big persons' behaviors.
1.觉得缺乏充足的例子
2.第三段说来说去，就是一个意思。
你限时间写的吧？在改一下

ivyshoulUID: 195537

那个是第一次限时的issue,紧张死了下笔都没仔细想,7楼有修改版的呀没看么

caudilloUID: 172911

Scandals can draw considerable people’s attention to problems very quickly. The number of people intrigued by scandals and the intensity of their attention is inimitable, no speaker or reformer could ever do a better job. Also, by exposing the dark side of the society and weaknesses in human nature to the public, scandals is useful to warn related people and urge them to solve the problems.

Mostly people are deaf to the things they don’t care, thus the voice of reformers and speakers is only audible to a small proportion of the population that really cares about the affairs in that area. However, scandals are capable to intrigued indifferent people in a marvelous way. We people are curious and inquisitive naturally. Whether we admit it or not, we common people likes to look into big persons’ affairs and mostly especially可能更好the negative ones please us much. For by finding out spots in celebrities’ halos we can get psychological satisfaction to know that they are not superior saints, but fallible, imperfect human being. For example, as for some exclusive, independent areas like academia, common people have no interest to know what’s happening inside, for it has nothing to do with their daily life. They would rather pay attention to the sanitary condition of a small local hospital than urgent problems claimed by academic speakers and reformers. Nonetheless, once a scandal concerning a well-known professor cheating in scientific papers pops up, it will soon become a hot topic in ordinary people’s daily life. People know nothing about science will be intrigued to know how a respected, talented somebody do such disgraced things and how he/she will react to the public.

Even though most people intrigued by scandals just treat them as interesting, popular stories exchanged between friends in idle times and they will not bother to find ways to solve the problems revealed by the scandals, scandals can still be useful to catalyze solutions. The public just simply won’t let the celebrities go until they perform satisfactorily as reaction to the scandals. People will go on concerning the successive affairs until the related persons made proper amends. Perhaps related persons may find ways to blind public’s eyes and coverhide/embed the truth, but still it will be a caution to them to act properly in their status, After all the voice of the public cannot be fully overlooked and it is always not a joyous thing to be criticized by thousands of people.

As people are so easily attracted by scandals, powerful persons may intentionally make out scandals to distract the public’s attention from core matters most urgently needed concern. Politicians are used to do such things. Once the national economy faces a decline, scandals respecting a corrupted official will distract the public’s eyes, at least temporarily. Scandals may fool the public in that way.

As I deem, scandals can do a better job to attract people’s attention than reformers and speakers. Also, it serves to bring about proper solutions. Nevertheless, scandals can be guided to blind the public the essential problems.
行文挺不错，不过好像缺少sound的论据，好像在begging the question可以具体点出来，如北大的王明明， ,


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ivyshoulUID: 195537

汗...我不认识王明明...浅薄咯...