我写的作文被老师评为了“中国英语素质教育怪胎的典型”怎么办？？

samitaUID: 187693

写的issue请老师改，每句都有2，3个小语法错误。老师说我不懂语法不懂发音（我口语也很烂），就知道会猜会做阅读，只能适合中国的四六级和考研考试题！！？？看似英语不错，其实是。。！！哎。呜。。怎么办？我本考6G的，又得拖了？拖到10G，6月作文？我昨文还来的急吗？？PS：昨文其实我挺能扯的，有话写。就是写的小错误太多！！呜啊啊啊~~~~~~~~

castanospermineUID: 198051

贴一段上来看看？

naiba369UID: 131655

我开始时也学比你还烂呢

关键是多练呢

samitaUID: 187693

Issue81  第3篇 共用时间：42分42秒 584 words    2005年3月3日
Patriotic reverence for the history of a nation often does more to impede than to encourage progress.
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As a member of a country, it is undoubted that everyone should be honored of his or her homeland's history. However, the crazy reverence for the nation's history often cause the unreasoning behaviors and even bring the nation into havoc.
A great nation would be full of creative and vigor, the people of a great country would be apt to explore the unknown place, to create new life, new achievements and new history to be honored by the offspring. So the people of a great nation would never satisfactory with the achievements what they have done, let alone, the history that their ancestor created.  Looking around the world today, the most advanced, domestic and freedom nation is not one of the four oldest civilized country, although which have the great history and have attributed a lots for the civilization of the world. but the relative more younger country -- U.S.A. Her people are clever, industrious, creative and ambitious. She relative has not the most conspicuity history but has the most great achievements in the democratic, economic, science. and so on. How amazing!
On the other hand, Any great nation must reform his policy ,economic and manager system meet the need of the development of the country. If people enchant the splendid history and reject to changing the outmode political and economic system, the nation can no remain the strong and advanced even the surviving. So we should be pride of the history but not the extreme reverence of the history. We should learn the advanced and reasonable element and abandon the outmode element of the old political economic and diplomacy system, even which have created the great history of the nation. Only in this way can we make our nation be one of the greatest nation of the world for ever.
The worst result of the blind reverence for the history is the fanatic nationalism which would leading to the conflict and even wars between nations. In the first half-century of 1900s, almost all of the Germany became the extreme nationalist, who believe that Teuton were the best race in the world, believe that almost all of most great history was made by their ancestor, and believe that only in the way of deracinate the Jew and dominate all the other nations could the world become more great. What are the consequence according to the extreme nationalists? No, impossible! What they image would not be fulfilled for ever. What the extreme patriotic reverence for the history caused is the World War II, which is the most afraid catastrophe in the history of human. and which had taken off almost 5,00 millions lives, according the official report, including thousands and hundreds Germany themselves. Why all these had happened? The blind reverence for the history is the dominant reason. If a nation had the great history but now her people live in the ordinary or even worse environment, the nations who once be dominated by she became more advanced and civilized than her. the nationalist will refer to launch a war so as to revive their nation, revive the great history of the nation.
In sum, the blind reverence for the history may result in rejecting the social reforms so as to impeding the advance of the nation, even cause the conflicts even wars between nations by nationalist who will lead the nation into the chaos, Then the most wit and resonable behavior is to be pride fo the history but not blind reverence for it.

so猫UID: 148633

呵呵 还够等时间呢~~~10G 遥远着呢

samitaUID: 187693

TO:naiba369
你花多少时间练好作文的?我现在着急啊。不知道还有没有戏啊？？？

G猫UID: 192988

有的写就好了, 比起native speaker. 谁不是满篇错呀. 我经常都被改的满篇红红绿绿的.
10G还早着呢, 时间足够了.

thinking in GTUID: 195028

To 楼主：
深有同感，贴一些native speaker给我的评语，共勉：
……you've got a confused structure and individual proposition in whole. ……poor grammar……misunderstanding about the usage of words……
……Last but not least, serious Chinglish problems and iterative using some same words which make chief doubt your glossary storage .(but I gotta say that is not your problem, for you are not majored in English even you were, you might not be able to get rid of it.)……
呵呵，我都被说成这样了，还不是一样要备考，my last advice, take it or not is your business, trust no one offering GRE help to you but yourself

samitaUID: 187693

to:G猫
嗯，谢谢勉励。
to:thinking in GT
哈，俺们这旮瘩的加籍法人给我的平时的口语的评价就那样的。哎，不过昨晚上了新东方的作文专项，觉的有点戏了。不就是考试嘛？？！！哎，找技巧吧。提高综合素质等到以后吧