Issue36 同主题第二期作业，一起互拍!

goldenrockUID: 122870

超时。。。

Issue36:
The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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In the long course of human history, the greatness of a galaxy of giants is decided by their offspring. So some people assert that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. In my point of view, this assertion is too extreme because there are a number of examples from every field that contradict this hasty generalization. Thus, in deciding the greatness of individuals, we should take an attitude of case-by-case.

In the science realm, some individuals' greatness is decided by people who live after them. For example, Copernicus, a scientist who strongly believed that the sun is the center of the universe while in Europe of his time people all believed that the earth is the center. And also, religion force was very strong at that time. So Copernicus was regarded as heresy. But he insisted on his assertion and was finally sentenced to death. By the same token, Bruno, also a scientist who agreed with Copernicus Theory, was fired on the stake. After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved. On the contrary, however, there are also a number of giants, the greatness of who is decided by their contemporaries. Take Andrew Wales from Princeton as an example. He solved Fermat’s Last Theorem in 1995 which used be an unsolved problem for more than 300 years before his solution. His greatness has already been established before his 50s. Just like him, the examples of John Nash, Einstein, and Newton are also convincing. In short, the greatness of individuals in science realm would be decided from case to case.

Also, in Arts field, Mozart's music was regarded to be great during his life time. Likewise, Van Gogh's paints, Mark Twain's stories are widely accepted by their contemporaries as masterpieces too. On the contrary, Shakespeare's works was accepted more than two hundred years after his death.

What’s more, in the economy area, the greatness of Bill Gates is obvious now. Because his software company has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development. But also in contrast, in Japan, there are some merchants who use their lifetime to manage a company or even a store, this kind of greatness wouldn't be known until their company grows big; but the growing time may take a few generations, like Panasonic.

In conclusion, there are a number of factors that can influence to the decision of the greatness of individuals in the field of science, Arts, economy and others. So, in deciding the greatness of an individual, it's necessary to be addressed on a case-by-case basis.

G猫UID: 192988

Issue36:
The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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In the long course of human history, the greatness of a galaxy of giants is decided by their offspring. So some people assert that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. In my point of view, this assertion is too extreme because there are a number of examples from every field that contradict this hasty generalization. Thus, in deciding the greatness of individuals, we should take an attitude of case-by-case. [明确提出观点,case-by-case,不错]

In the science realm, some individuals' greatness is decided by people who live after them. For example, Copernicus, a scientist who strongly believed that the sun is the center of the universe while in Europe of his time people all believed that the earth is the center. And also, religion force was very strong at that time. So Copernicus was regarded as heresy. But he insisted on his assertion and was finally sentenced to death. By the same token, Bruno, also a scientist who agreed with Copernicus [‘s] Theory, was fired on the stake. After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved [最好突出一下人们认为他们是伟大的, 被证明correct和得到respect都不能反映出伟大来]. On the contrary, however, there are also a number of giants, the greatness of who [m] is decided by their contemporaries. Take Andrew Wales from Princeton as an example. He solved Fermat’s Last Theorem in 1995 which used be an unsolved problem for more than 300 years before his solution. His greatness has already been established before his 50s. Just like him, the examples of John Nash, Einstein, and Newton are also convincing. In short, the greatness of individuals in science realm would be decided from case to case.

Also, in Arts field, Mozart's music was regarded to be great during his life time. Likewise, Van Gogh's paints, Mark Twain's stories are widely accepted by their contemporaries as masterpieces too [凡高是死后才被认可的吧]. On the contrary, Shakespeare's works was accepted more than two hundred years after his death.

What’s more, in the economy area, the greatness of Bill Gates is obvious now. Because his software company has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development. But also in contrast, in Japan, there are some merchants who use their lifetime to manage a company or even a store, this kind of greatness wouldn't be known until their company grows big; but the growing time may take a few generations, like Panasonic.

In conclusion, there are a number of factors that can influence to the decision of the greatness of individuals in the field of science, Arts, economy and others [你的文章中没有提到这些factors呀, 所以作为总结,这个并不太合适]. So, in deciding the greatness of an individual, it's necessary to be addressed on a case-by-case basis.
[整体来看, 文章很流畅, 但是整篇文章都是例子的罗列, 感觉没有你自己的观点. 对例子也都没有分析. Bill Gates那段对他的伟大具体化比较好, 其他例子都能这样突出一下他们伟大在哪里就好了.]

goldenrockUID: 122870

虚心接受，谢谢G猫！

再问一下，怎么突出他们伟大在哪里啊？？不明白。
像Bill有这样一句has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development.
还不够伟大吗？

还有，我一直不明白，什么才叫有自己的观点，自己的分析啊？？
我这篇一点都没有吗？

caudilloUID: 172911

Issue36:
The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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In the long course of human history, the greatness of a galaxy of giants is decided by their offspring. So some people assert that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. In my point of view, this assertion is too extreme because there are a number of examples from every field that contradict this hasty generalization. Thus, in deciding the greatness of individuals, we should take an attitude of case-by-case.

In the science realm, some individuals' greatness is decided by people who live after them. For example, Copernicus, a scientist who strongly believed that the sun is the center of the universe while in Europe of his time people all believed that the earth is the center. And also, religion force was very strong at that time. 在加上教会的支持可能更有逻辑  So Copernicus was regarded as heresy. But he insisted on his assertion and was finally sentenced to death. By the same token, Bruno, also a scientist who agreed with Copernicus TheoryCopernicus's follower就行了，简短点, was fired on the stake. After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved关键是观点被接受而且动摇了教会. On the contrary, however, there are also a number of giants, the greatness of who is decided by their contemporaries. Take Andrew Wales from Princeton as an example. He solved Fermat’s Last Theorem in 1995 which used be an unsolved problem for more than 300 years before his solution. His greatness has already been established before his 50s. Just like him, the examples of John Nash, Einstein, and Newton are also convincing.Nash，可以，另两个不合适 In short, the greatness of individuals in science realm would be decided from case to case.
顺便问一下，博弈论英文怎么说？

Also, in Arts field, Mozart's music was regarded to be great during his life time. Likewise, Van Gogh's paints, Mark Twain's stories are widely accepted by their contemporaries as masterpieces toovan Gogh 好像不是,用Picasso吧. On the contrary, Shakespeare's works was accepted more than two hundred years after his death.

What’s more, in the economy area, the greatness of Bill Gates is obvious now. Because his software company has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development. But also in contrast, in Japan, there are some merchants who use their lifetime to manage a company or even a store, this kind of greatness wouldn't be known until their company grows big; but the growing time may take a few generations, like Panasonic.

In conclusion, there are a number of factors that can influence to the怪怪的 decision of the greatness of individuals in the field of science, Arts, economy and others. So, in deciding the greatness of an individual, it's necessary to be addressed on a case-by-case basis.case-by-case有了，topic不明显







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giraUID: 188010

to goldenrock的Issue36 同主题第二期作业，一起互拍!

In the long course of human history, the greatness of a galaxy of giants用词很好呀 is decided by their offspring. So some people assert that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. In my point of view, this assertion is too extreme because there are a number of examples from every field that contradict this hasty generalization. Thus, in deciding the greatness of individuals, we should take an attitude of case-by-case.不错的想法

In the science realm, some individuals' greatness is decided by people who live after them. For example, Copernicus, a scientist who strongly believed that the sun is the center of the universe while in Europe of his time people all believed that the earth is the center. And also, religion force was very strong at that time. So Copernicus was regarded as heresy. But he insisted on his assertion and was finally sentenced to death. By the same token, Bruno, 此处：Bruno是Opernicus的学生also a scientist who agreed with Copernicus Theory, was fired on the stake. After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved. On the contrary, however, there are also a number of giants, the greatness of who is decided by their contemporaries. Take Andrew Wales from Princeton as an example. He solved Fermat’s Last Theoremsolve-->theorem? in 1995 which used be an unsolved problem for more than 300 years before his solution. His greatness has already been established before his 50s. Just like him, the examples of John Nash, Einstein, and Newton are also convincing这可否用分别一个phrase说明各个scientists的情况？. In short, the greatness of individuals in science realm would be decided from case to case.语言上感觉有点重复

Also, in Arts field, Mozart's music was regarded to be great during his life time. Likewise, Van Gogh's paintsVan Gogh's paints生前好像就卖出去一幅？, Mark Twain's stories are widely accepted by their contemporaries as masterpieces too. On the contrary, Shakespeare's works was accepted more than two hundred years after his death.

What's more, in the economy area, the greatness of Bill Gates is obvious now. Because his software company has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development. But also in contrast, in Japan, there are some merchants who use their lifetime to manage a company or even a store, this kind of greatness wouldn't be known until their company grows big; but the growing time may take a few generations, like Panasonic.

In conclusion, there are a number of factors that can influence to the decision of the greatness of individuals in the field of science, Arts, economy and others. So, in deciding the greatness of an individual, it's necessary to be addressed on a case-by-case basis.
不错的说，继续努力：）

mariaUID: 197971

Issue36:
The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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In the long course of human history, the greatness of a galaxy of giants is decided by their offspring. So some people assert that the greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them. In my point of view, this assertion is too extreme because there are a number of examples from every field that contradict this hasty generalization. Thus, in deciding the greatness of individuals, we should take an attitude of case-by-case.你的观点不错嘛 case – by – case

In the science realm, some individuals' greatness is decided by people who live after them. For example, Copernicus, a scientist who strongly believed that the sun is the center of the universe while in Europe of his time people all believed that the earth is现在已经不是事实了要用was吧？ the center. And also, religion force was very strong at that time. So Copernicus was regarded as heresy. But he insisted on his assertion and was finally sentenced to death. By the same token, Bruno, also a scientist who agreed with Copernicus Theory, was fired on the stake. After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved. On the contrary, however, there are also a number of giants, the greatness of whom is decided by their contemporaries. Take Andrew Wales from Princeton as an example. He solved Fermat’s Last Theorem in 1995 which used tobe an unsolved problem for more than 300 years before his solution. His greatness has already been established before his 50s. Just like him, the examples of John Nash, Einstein, and Newton are also convincing. In short, the greatness of individuals in science realm would be decided from case to case.

Also, in Arts field, Mozart's music was regarded to be great during his life time. Likewise, Van Gogh's paints, Mark Twain's stories are widely accepted by their contemporaries as masterpieces too. On the contrary, Shakespeare's works was accepted more than two hundred years after his death.

What’s more, in the economy area, the greatness of Bill Gates is obvious now. Because his software company has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also given a great force to establish America's top state in science research and computer technology development. But also in contrast, in Japan, there are some merchants who use their lifetime to manage a company or even a store, this kind of greatness wouldn't be known until their company grows big; but the growing time may take a few generations, like Panasonic.

In conclusion, there are a number of factors that can influence to the decision of the greatness of individuals in the field of science, Arts, economy and others. So, in deciding the greatness of an individual, it's necessary to be addressed on a case-by-case basis.
整体上来说，你和老外的280篇有异曲同工之处，但是觉得例子用的太多分析太少，你的思想不能充分体现。你可以分析一下为什么出现不同的待遇吧？相信那样就很好了

G猫UID: 192988

最初由 goldenrock 发布
[B]虚心接受，谢谢G猫！

再问一下，怎么突出他们伟大在哪里啊？？不明白。
像Bill有这样一句has not only greatly promoted the development of America economy but also..

以下省略...... [/B]

我是针对这句说的After a long period of time, their assertions were proved to be correct, and then they were given the respect they deserved . 光从这个叙述, 我不能看出后人认为他们是伟大的. 所以这个例子没有扣到主题上.

Bill Gates 那个是我说你写的好的地方, 其他的都像这个就好了.

关于例子, 你看看鬼谷子那篇新贴吧

davidjackyUID: 135962

最初由 G猫 发布
[B][整体来看, 文章很流畅, 但是整篇文章都是例子的罗列, 感觉没有你自己的观点. 对例子也都没有分析. Bill Gates那段对他的伟大具体化比较好, 其他例子都能这样突出一下他们伟大在哪里就好了.][/B]

同意，他之所以说你没有自己的东西就是因为例子是堆砌的，具体的说，你认为艺术是怎样的，那么你说清楚一下因为什么原因导致后人的评价，而不是为了评价而评价的人

goldenrockUID: 122870

有学东西了，谢谢！！