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一休：186"Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world."

There is no denying that practicality plays a significant part in the contemporary era. However, I can not agree with the statement that anything with not obviously practical value make little sense in today's world.

To begin with, it is obvious that practicality has important value in the world. In other words, numerous inventions have been vindicated by the improvement in living standards. Here is a good illustration that could appropriately and fittingly prop up
this explanation. Industrial Revolution brought tremendous changes in people's daily life by more and more technologies. The invention of the electric light led people into a bright world, even in the night, bringing more various lives. The invention
of the steam engine made human beings replace burdensome hard works by using the machines, bringing more leisure time. In short, practicality does accelerate the development of science and technology.

Secondly, although I admit that practicality plays a vital role in the development of society, we can not ignore the function of other things of the society, such as art, music, movies and so on. To demonstrate this point plainly and undoubtedly, here
is an example that is very persuasive and believable. It is known that education has little practical value. However, with the development of society, it becomes more and more important, as a key word of our time. A man without an education, many us
believe, is an unfortunate victim of adverse circumstances, and loses amount of opportunities.

Finally, during the practice, we should not only pay considerable attention on the practicality, but also take nonpracticality seriously. By doing so, we can make much progress. I will present a pertinent paradigm which could shed some lights on this
standpoint. Mr. Yang, a senior scholar of Computer Science at my university, has lots of practical experience and extensive knowledge. Nowadays, he and his assistants are doing the research on Computer Graphics, and they also run a company to do
commerce softwares, such as auto-office system, management information system, imitating system and so on. To do this, he gains the practical experience and the practical practice could direct him to further research. In brief, practicality and
nonpracticality are the two sides of the coin.

In conclusion, we should pay significant attentions on the practicality, but it does not mean we can neglect other things with little practical value in today's world.


1.讲实用性启着非常重要的作用。（我这里举的是工业革命的例子，是不是有点跑题，题目中有个in today's world）
2.非实用性也不可以忽视。（讲的是但进时代教育的例子，里边用了NC4中的原句，是不是有雷同的嫌疑呀？）
3。实用性和非实用性同样重要。（身边的例子。Mr. Yang嘿嘿，有点杜撰的嫌疑。)

45min 394words

询问：1.题目中有这么一个限定：which all powers and talents must serve.
而在我的文中一点都没有提及，可以吗？
2.（394words是不是太少了,今天他们差不多都600＋，郁闷ing）

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一休：186"Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world."

There is no denying that practicality plays a significant part in the contemporary era. However, I can not agree with the statement that anything with not noobviously practical value make makes little sense in today's world.

To begin with, it is obvious that practicality has important value in the world. In other words, numerous inventions have been vindicated by the improvement in living standards. Here is a good illustration that could appropriately and fittingly prop up this explanation. Industrial Revolution brought tremendous changes in people's daily life by more and more technologies. The invention of the electric light led people into a bright world, even in the night, bringing more various lives. The invention of the steam engine made human beings replace burdensome hard works by using the machines, bringing more leisure time. In short, practicality does accelerate the development of science and technology。
在时间上这些例子是有点脱题的感觉，不过我认为你的例子的结论是科技改善了人们的生活，而不是实用加速了科技的发展。

Secondly, although I admit that practicality plays a vital role in the development of society, we can not ignore the function fuction用的不好，干脆就说是importance拉 of other things of the society, such as art, music, movies and so on. To demonstrate this point plainly and undoubtedly, here is an example后面的都不要，首先，你的example 是不是persuasive and believable是由读者来决定的；其次，你这样说就显的你自己的文风不够冷静客观 that is very persuasive and believable. It is known that education has little practical value. However, with the development of society, it becomes more and more important, as a key word of our time. A man without an education, many us believe, is an unfortunate victim of adverse circumstances, and loses amount of opportunities.
education 没有实用性吗，我不这样认为，实用不实用的标准是什么？建立你自己的标准之后再谈那些东西实用，那些不实用，应该更有说服力。

Finally, during the practice, we should not only pay considerable attention on the practicality, but also take nonpracticality seriously. By doing so, we can make much progress. I will present a pertinent paradigm which could shed some lights on this
standpoint. Mr. Yang, a senior scholar of Computer Science at my university, has lots of practical experience and extensive knowledge. Nowadays, he and his assistants are doing the research on Computer Graphics, and they also run a company to do
commerce softwares, such as auto-office system, management information system, imitating system and so on. To do this, he gains the practical experience and the practical practice could direct him to further research. In brief, practicality and
nonpracticality are the two sides of the coin.
你给的例子编的痕迹太明显，而且一直在强调practicality,到不是很支持TS

In conclusion, we should pay significant attentions on the practicality, but it does not mean we can neglect other things with little practical value in today's world.
条理清晰，句子的表达也非常明白，例子用的不好。看问题的角度可以再拓展一下。我觉得象practicality这种抽象的东西应该在文章很开头的地方就加以限制和具体化，缺乏这一步骤，不仅你自己写起来很困难，而且泛泛而谈就显的对问题的理解没有深度。By the way, “which all powers and talents must serve” 你好象一点也没涉及到

1.讲实用性启着非常重要的作用。（我这里举的是工业革命的例子，是不是有点跑题，题目中有个in today's world）
2.非实用性也不可以忽视。（讲的是但进时代教育的例子，里边用了NC4中的原句，是不是有雷同的嫌疑呀？）
3。实用性和非实用性同样重要。（身边的例子。Mr. Yang嘿嘿，有点杜撰的嫌疑。)

45min 394words
把作文写完当然是最重要的拉，字数是第二位的