issue87 第二次写

boyjimUID: 125249

87"In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
1定义beginner/expert
2说明现象的由来
3expert要比beginner强,尽管有些expert很年轻,但他们是young expert
正文-------
In the ceaseless history of human being, innumerable scientists make pivotal and vital discoveries when they were young. As a consequence, there are multitudes of people who under the hallucination that in every field of inquiry, chances that beginners can find paramount discoveries are superior to experts'. Notwithstanding, in my opinion, this is not the whole story, and no one can match experts in terms of adjacent truth.

To dispute this seemingly easy problem, we have to define the beginner and the expert. If the beginner is equated with younger scientist and expert is identical with the older one, there may arouse another weird question: how old shall we define young and old. As a result, apart from all the complicated consideration, I would rather believe that beginners are someone who just embarks upon their research devoid of experiences, with which experts boasted.

Nonetheless, there lies a profound assumption in most of us that experts are old and beginners are young and whenever an “old expert” made anything extraordinary, we assume it is perfectly justified as good as their destiny, even something groundbreaking. But, what invariably happened is that when we heard someone, who is only a teenager, or twenty more or less, breaks through in research, no matter tremendous or trivial, we manifest immeasurable appreciation about him or her for the sake of young age, neglecting his or her experiences and time plunged in this realm. What is more, the mass media envelop them with supreme air attributing their achievement to their uncontrollable ardent, magic ideas and energetic vigor. Existed in unconsciousness, these ridiculous conclusions enjoy a widespread acceptance in our society, only because “talent” news seems more appealing. Ironically, when we are overwhelmed by these exaggerated news, our common sense about experts are snuffed out and substituted with these occasional, accidental and coincidental stories, which lead to the statement above as well as states quo that merely due to some superficial reasons, they can attain success with ease.

Looking back on the history of Nobel Prize, notably as the age of victors varied, none of them can be regarded as beginners, but experts. It is their persistence, deep insight, experienced skills and never ending curiosity about nature that empowers them with magic wand to made unparalleled discoveries. Although a myriad of scientists made names for themselves when they were young, they are far more than beginners thanks to their abundant knowledge and experiences. When DNA structure, double helix, is found, Watson and Crick, one of them was only 25 and another was 35, but both of them had pursued their doctor degrees and been worked in prominent national lab for several years. They are justifiably considered to be young experts, instead of young beginner. It is hard to imagine that when one start to learn mathematics, he can figure out the Goldbach conjecture. Thus, devoid of any accumulation of knowledge and enough experiences, beginner does not equip with enough opportunity to unfold the mystery and explore the enigma.

If the tower of ivory are more likely attained by beginners, why shall we continuously take this long journey of science research, why are we still in need of so many experts from various fields, why do we still cherish our accumulated knowledge and spend years studying it? Retrospectively, as far as I am concerned, experts are invariably beyond the beginner and all discoveries are the accumulations of previous knowledge with creative and aspiring sparks.

boyjimUID: 125249

自己up一下~~~

boyjimUID: 125249

怎么我也87~龙哥也87
我就没人给看啊~:(

huijuan1210UID: 200139

87"In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
1定义beginner/expert
2说明现象的由来
3expert要比beginner强,尽管有些expert很年轻,但他们是young expert
正文-------
In the ceaseless history of human being, innumerable scientists make pivotal and vital discoveries when they were young. As a consequence, there are multitudes of people who under the hallucination that in every field of inquiry, chances that beginners can find paramount discoveries are superior to experts'(those of experts?). Notwithstanding(这个词好像不对， 是虽然的意思吧？), in my opinion, this is not the whole story, and no one can match experts in terms of adjacent truth.

To dispute this seemingly easy problem, we have to define the beginner and the expert. If the beginner is equated with younger scientist and expert is identical with the older one, there may arouse another weird question: how old shall we define young and old. As a result, apart from all the complicated consideration, I would rather believe that beginners are someone who just embarks upon their research （and）devoid of experiences, with which(that) experts boasted.

Nonetheless, there lies a profound assumption in most of us that experts are old and beginners are young and whenever an “old expert” made anything extraordinary, we assume it is perfectly justified as good as their destiny, even something groundbreaking. But, (but 可以这样用在句首吗)what invariably happened is that when we heard someone, who is only a teenager, or twenty more or less, breaks through in research, no matter tremendous or trivial, we manifest immeasurable appreciation about him or her for the sake of young age, neglecting his or her experiences and time plunged in this realm. What is more, the mass media envelop them with supreme air attributing their achievement to their uncontrollable ardent, magic ideas and energetic vigor. Existed in unconsciousness, these ridiculous conclusions enjoy a widespread acceptance in our society, only because “talent” news seems more appealing. Ironically, when we are overwhelmed by these exaggerated news, our common sense about experts are snuffed out and substituted with these occasional, accidental and coincidental stories, which lead to the statement above as well as states quo that merely due to some superficial reasons, they can attain success with ease. (那个~~这个句子好长啊        ~~最后这个分句让我找不到北了！)


Looking back on the history of Nobel Prize, notably as the age of victors varied, none of them can be regarded as beginners, but experts. It is their persistence, deep insight, experienced skills and never ending curiosity about nature that empowers them with magic wand to made unparalleled discoveries. Although a myriad of scientists made names for themselves when they were young, they are far more than beginners thanks to their abundant knowledge and experiences. When DNA structure, double helix, is found, Watson and Crick, one of them was only 25 and another was 35, but both of them had pursued their doctor degrees and been worked in prominent national lab for several years. They are justifiably considered to be young experts, instead of young beginner. It is hard to imagine that when one start to learn mathematics, he can figure out the Goldbach conjecture. Thus, devoid of any accumulation of knowledge and enough experiences, beginner does not equip with enough opportunity to unfold the mystery and explore the enigma. （这段很有说服力）

If the tower of ivory are (is) more likely attained(attainable) by beginners, why shall we continuously take this long journey of science research, why are we still in need of so many experts from various fields, why do we still cherish our accumulated knowledge and spend years studying it? Retrospectively, as far as I am concerned, experts are invariably beyond the beginner and all discoveries are the accumulations of previous knowledge (from previous generations)with creative and aspiring sparks.
写得比我强多了~~呵呵~~
我觉得你的切入点很好，把beginner, youth experts and experts 分得很清楚。
继续努力！

yiyi2005UID: 192894

87"In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
1定义beginner/expert
2说明现象的由来
3expert要比beginner强,尽管有些expert很年轻,但他们是young expert
正文-------
In the ceaseless history of human being, innumerable scientists make pivotal and vital尾韵 discoveries when they were young. As a consequence, there are multitudes of people who under the hallucination that in every field of inquiry, chances that beginners can find paramount discoveries are superior to experts'. Notwithstanding, in my opinion, this is not the whole story, and no one can match experts in terms of adjacent truth.

To dispute this seemingly easy problem, we have to define the beginner and the expert. If the beginner is equated with younger scientist and expert is identical withbe equated and be identical用词变化,好 the older one, there may arouse another weird question: how old shall we define young and old. As a result, apart from all the complicated considerationconsiderations, I would rather believe that beginners are someone who just embarks upon their research devoid of experiences, with which experts boasted.

Nonetheless, there lies a profound assumption in most of us that experts are old and beginners are young and whenever an “old expert” made anything extraordinary, we assume it is perfectly justified as good as their destiny, even something groundbreaking. But, what invariably happened is that when we heard someone, who is only a teenager, or twenty more or less, breaks through in research, no matter tremendous or trivial, we manifest immeasurable appreciation about him or her for the sake of young age, neglecting his or her experiences and time plunged in this realm. What is more, the mass media envelop them with supreme air attributing their achievement to their uncontrollable ardent, magic ideas and energetic vigor. Existed in unconsciousness, these ridiculous conclusions enjoy a widespread acceptance in our society, only because “talent” news seems more appealing. Ironically, when we are overwhelmed by these exaggerated news, our common sense about experts are snuffed out and substituted with these occasional, accidental and coincidental尾韵真好 stories, which lead to the statement above as well as states quo that merely due to some superficial reasons, they can attain success with ease.超长句,实力

Looking back on the history of Nobel Prize, notably as the age of victors varied, none of them can be regarded as beginners, but experts. It is their persistence, deep insight, experienced skills and never ending curiosity about nature that empowers them with magic wand to made unparalleled discoveries.这句跟论点似乎关系不大 Although a myriad of scientists made names for themselves when they were young, they are far more than beginners thanks to their abundant knowledge and experiences. When DNA structure, double helix, is found, Watson and Crick, one of them was only 25 and another was 35, but both of them had pursued their doctor degrees and been worked in prominent national lab for several years. They are justifiably considered to be young experts, instead of young beginner. It is hard to imagine that when one start to learn mathematics, he can figure out the Goldbach conjecture. Thus, devoid of any accumulation of knowledge and enough experiences, beginner does not equip with enough opportunity to unfold the mystery and explore the enigma.

If the tower of ivory are more likely attained by beginners, why shall we continuously take this long journey of science research, why are we still in need of so many experts from various fields, why do we still cherish our accumulated knowledge and spend years studying it?排比好,要是能有个递进就更好了 Retrospectively, as far as I am concerned, experts are invariably beyond the beginner and all discoveries are the accumulations of previous knowledge with creative and aspiring sparks.

错误没挑出来,挑出一堆好来,anyway,值得大家学习啊

龙非UID: 193190

sorry,sorry,俺来了。。。。

boyjimUID: 125249

to yiyi2005
我那里是想表达 专家的这方面的素质才是导致重要发现的因素

龙非UID: 193190

87"In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
1定义beginner/expert
2说明现象的由来
3expert要比beginner强,尽管有些expert很年轻,但他们是young expert
正文-------
In the ceaseless history of human being, innumerable scientists make pivotal and vital discoveries when they were young. As a consequence, there are multitudes of people who under the hallucination that in every field of inquiry, chances that beginners can find paramount discoveries are superior to experts'. Notwithstanding, in my opinion, this is not the whole story, and no one can match experts in terms of adjacent truth.这次明确多了，如果能够指出是在make important discoveries方面就更爽了

To dispute this seemingly easy problem, we have to define the beginner and the expert. If the beginner is equated with younger scientist and expert is identical with the older one, there may arouse another weird question: how old shall we define young and old. As a result, apart from all the complicated consideration, I would rather believe that beginners are someone who just embarks upon their research devoid of experiences, with which experts boasted.

Nonetheless, there lies a profound assumption in most of us that experts are old and beginners are young and whenever an “old expert” made anything extraordinary, we assume it is perfectly justified as good as their destiny, even something groundbreaking. But, what invariably happened is that when we heard someone, who is only a teenager 夸张了吧, or twenty more or less, breaks through in research, no matter tremendous or trivial, we manifest immeasurable appreciation about him or her for the sake of young age, neglecting his or her experiences and time plunged in this realm. What is more, the mass media envelop them with supreme air attributing their achievement to their uncontrollable ardent, magic ideas and energetic vigor. 这前面一大串描述了现象，篇幅有点长Existed in unconsciousness, these ridiculous conclusions enjoy a widespread acceptance in our society, only because “talent” news seems more appealing.这一句提到了原因 Ironically, when we are overwhelmed by these exaggerated news, our common sense about experts are snuffed out and substituted with these occasional, accidental and coincidental stories, which lead to the statement above as well as states quo that merely due to some superficial reasons, they can attain success with ease. 对于现象的分析过少，重点应该放在为什么人们会这样认为

Looking back on the history of Nobel Prize, notably as the age of victors varied, none of them can be regarded as beginners, but experts. It is their persistence, deep insight, experienced skills and never ending curiosity about nature that empowers them with magic wand to made unparalleled discoveries. Although a myriad of scientists made names for themselves when they were young, they are far more than beginners thanks to their abundant knowledge and experiences. When DNA structure, double helix, is found, Watson and Crick, one of them was only 25 and another was 35, but both of them had pursued their doctor degrees and been worked in prominent national lab for several years. They are justifiably considered to be young experts, instead of young beginner. It is hard to imagine that when one start to learn mathematics, he can figure out the Goldbach conjecture. Thus, devoid of any accumulation of knowledge and enough experiences, beginner does not equip with enough opportunity to unfold the mystery and explore the enigma.

If the tower of ivory are more likely attained by beginners, why shall we continuously take this long journey of science research, why are we still in need of so many experts from various fields, why do we still cherish our accumulated knowledge and spend years studying it? Retrospectively, as far as I am concerned, experts are invariably beyond the beginner and all discoveries are the accumulations of previous knowledge with creative and aspiring sparks.
在一个又一个的华丽词藻后面，你在恣意地抛洒你的才华，我在嫉妒地咬着我的门牙，这家伙，咋就这么能写捏:D。但是我不得不严肃地指出来，
1）从整篇文章的结构来说，你的段落分布有问题，你的B2关于人们为什么会认为新手比老手牛的现象，应该是换到B3会更好，同时篇幅也应该短一点，原来的B3才应该长一点，那才是你要论证的重点
2）从论证的角度来看，先证明专家牛，再来讲人们为什么会以为是新手牛，这样子的论证就显得层层深入啦
3）其实你的B2论证并不是很深入，并没有很好的指出这个现象的真正原因


总的说来，在局部的论证上比上一篇87好，但是总体把握还是不够，而语言则是一如既往的炫目。

boyjimUID: 125249

我是这么想的
B2为什么人们认为新手牛呢 其实新手不牛 牛人在后面(就好像通常鬼哥总是最后一个出场D)
B3所以阿 老手才是真正的牛啊 但是老手也可能是年轻人 (顺便回应题目)
不过按照你的说法 我觉得确实不管放在那里 我的段落的长短分布有点问题!