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bcomerUID: 182621

53"College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government."

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In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to a fierce competition in the educational field, more and more people focus their attentions on the fact that a lot of adolescents although study very well can still not go to the colleges or universities for the further education since they can not pay for the marvelous tuition. Therefore, some socialists suggest that the education in colleges and universities should be free for all students fully financed by the government. The statement looks very reasonable for the first thought, but I could not agree with it after more considerations.

Admittedly, the colleges and universities are the places where people can get knowledge, and the more knowledge people have, the more developed the country will be in future. This method surely have many benefits, but this is not to say that I support the plan, because I think the execution of this plan would be very hard, and at that time many problems which have not been noticed by us would surely be exposed to the society.

As is known to all, the government's finance mostly comes from the tax. In our country, there were hundreds of thousands people who go to the college or university each year, and the average cost of one person per year is about 5600 RMB without the fee of apartment taken into account. If the plan had been executed, the number of the people attended the college or university would increase, and the revenue had to increase obviously. However, can this reality be accepted by lots of people who do not want to go to the colleges? The complaining free press will be never disappeared for a long time, and a cost which is self-decided will be forcibly distributed to all the people all over the country. Some of people, who are poverty without students, will have more difficulties to live. Does the fact just we want to see?

In addition, the colleges and universities are only providing a good environment for the students to study. That is not to say people can not get knowledge without them. Take Bill Gates for example. He had the chance to study in one of the best universities in the US. Although giving up the chance, he still gets much knowledge by himself from the books, friends, society, and so forth. I want to tell the people both who are in the colleges or universities and who are in the society now, that what we need more is not the environment where it is easy for us to study, but the desire to get the knowledge. If you have this right and healthy attitude, you can study anytime at anywhere regardless the environment. Just as the Confucius said thousand years ago, there must be a person in three who can be my teacher. The field of knowledge is very broad, and any new things we had known, may help us a lot in the future, regardless the knowledge where you study.

Hence, I do not agree with the speaker’s statement for the reason that although the chance to study in the college or university is very helpful, we can still get much knowledge in other circumstance if you have the right attitude about studying, and it is too hard for the execution with the consideration of the cost.

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圣光UID: 193720

53"College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government."

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In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to a fierce competition in the educational field, [人家ETS的范文句子,用了未必保险啊!]more and more people focus their attentions on the fact that a lot of adolescents although study very well can still not go to the colleges or universities for the further education since they can not pay for  [afford]the marvelous tuition. Therefore, some socialists suggest that the education in colleges and universities should be free for all students fully financed by the government. The statement looks very reasonable for the first thought, but I could not agree with it after more considerations.

Admittedly, the colleges and universities are the places where people can get knowledge, and the more knowledge people have, the more developed the country will be in future. This method surely have many benefits, but this is not to say that I support the plan, because I think the execution of this plan would be very hard, and at that time many problems which have not been noticed by us would surely be exposed to the society.

As is known to all, the government's finance mostly comes from the tax. In  our [人家可不是和你一个国家的哦!^_^]country, there  were [为什么用were?] hundreds of thousands people who go to the college or university each year, and the average cost of one person per year is about 5600 RMB without  the fee of apartment taken into account. [without taking their rents into account] If the plan had been executed, the number of the people attended the college or university would increase, and the revenue had to increase obviously. However, can this reality be accepted by lots of people who do not want to go to the colleges?  The complaining free press will be never disappeared for a long time, and a cost which is self-decided will be forcibly distributed to all the people all over the country. [怎么觉得这么绕啊?看了好半天才明白过来]Some of people, who are poverty without students,  [是想说没有孩子要上学的穷人么?可以这么说?]will have more difficulties to live. Does the fact just we want to see? [是不是有了政府的资助学校的学生就多了?这个不一定吧,呵呵用了阿狗的思路了.只能说政府的支出多了,所以税收要增加,而不是说学生多了导致的支出多了]

In addition, the colleges and universities are  [mediums that]only  providing [provide]a good environment for the students to study.  That is not to say [第二次出现了] people can not get knowledge without them. Take Bill Gates for example. He had the chance to study in one of the best universities in the US. Although giving up the chance, he still gets much knowledge by himself from the books, friends, society, and so forth. I want to tell the people both who are in the colleges or universities and who are in the society now, that what we need more is not the environment where it is easy for us to study, but the desire to get the knowledge. If you have this right and healthy attitude, you can study anytime at anywhere regardless the environment. Just as the Confucius said thousand years ago,  there must be a person in three who can be my teacher. [这个是谁翻译的?老外懂么?][/color ]The field of knowledge is very broad, and any new things we had known, may help us a lot in the future, regardless the knowledge where you study. [这段好象是要说我们不需要一定在大学中学习,所以政府并不需要对学生进行财政支持,因为他们在社会中同样可以进行学习.但是觉得你没有focus on the issue,说到最后给人感觉是你在说另外的一个问题,象是环境对我们学习的影响之类的.觉得最后在加一点扣下题目会好一些.]

Hence, I do not agree with the speaker’s statement for the reason that although the chance to study in the college or university is very helpful, we can still get much knowledge in other circumstance if you have the right attitude about studying, and it is too hard for the execution with the consideration of the cost.

我也是菜鸟,不过要考试了.
以上意见仅供参考,不要过于相信我的感觉.
欢迎交流,呵呵.^_^

comingsoonUID: 175137

53"College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government."

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In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to a fierce competition in the educational field, more and more people focus their attentions on the fact that a lot of adolescents although study very well can still not go to the colleges or universities for the further education since they can not pay for afford感觉地道些^^ the marvelous tuition. Therefore, some socialists sociologist:社会学家 suggest that the education in colleges and universities should be free for all students fully financed by the government. The statement looks very reasonable for the first thought for the fist thought，有这种说法? , but I could not agree with it after more considerations.

Admittedly, the colleges and universities are the places where people can get knowledge further education,而且觉得后面用句号要好一些 , and the more knowledge people have, the more developed the country will be in future. This method surely have many benefits, but this is not to say that I support the plan, because I think 直接用since，间接明了^^ the execution of this plan would be very hard it is hardly possible to fully carry out such plan , and at that time many problems which have not been noticed by us many potential problems would surely be exposed to the society.

As is known to all, the government's finance mostly comes from the tax or revenue?. In our country, there were hundreds of thousands people who go to the colleges or university复数 each year, and the average cost of one person per year is about 5600 RMB这么具体的金额？ without the fee of apartment apartment fee taken into account. If the plan had为什么用过去时？ been executed, the number of the不要the people attended attending the college or university would increase, and the revenue had to increase obviously. However, can this reality be accepted by lots of people who do not want to go to the colleges? The complaining free press will be never disappeared for a long time, and a cost which is self-decided will be forcibly distributed to all the people all over the country. Some of people, who are poverty poverty是名词，impoverished? without students 感觉多余 , will have more difficulties to live. Does the fact just we want to see?

tax感觉不当，上大学的费用不是tax吧？

In addition, the colleges and universities are only providing a good environment for the students to study. That is not to say people can not get knowledge without them. Take Bill Gates for example. He had the chance to study in one of the best universities in the US. Although giving up the chance, he still gets much knowledge by himself from the books, friends, society, and so forth 这个例子感觉不恰当，怎么看怎么像是自己编的，而且没有说清楚 . I want to tell the people both who are in the colleges or universities and who are in the society now, that what we need more is not the environment where it is easy for us to study, but the desire to get the knowledge 这句话太累赘了，in other words, what people need, no matter in colleges or …, is …  rather than … . If you have this right and healthy attitude, you can study anytime at anywhere 要么去掉at,要么改成anyplace regardless of the environment. Just as the Confucius said 1000? 2000? 3000? thousand years ago, there must be a person in three who can be my teacher 是这样翻译得么？而且对你的论证好像没有什么帮助 . The field of knowledge is very broad, and any new things we had have known, may help us a lot in the future, regardless the knowledge where you study.

Hence, I do not agree with the speaker’s statement for the reason that although the chance to study in the college or university is very helpful, we can still get much knowledge in other circumstance if you have the right attitude about studying, and it is too hard for the execution with the consideration of the cost. 结尾好像已经走题了

感觉b3论述太多的和主题无关的内容，颇有走题之嫌

xuding_godUID: 179213

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to a fierce competition in the educational field, more and more people focus their attentions on the fact that模板痕迹太重，不提倡 a lot of adolescents although whosestudy very well can still not go to the colleges or universities for the further education sincebecause会不会好些 they can not pay for the marvelous tuition. Therefore, some socialists suggest that the education in colleges and universities should be free for all students andfully financed by the government. The statement looks very reasonable for thea first thought, but I could not agree with it after more considerations.觉得后面阐述观点显得单薄了

Admittedly？？一来就让步显得很突兀, the colleges and universities are the places where people can get knowledge, and the more knowledge people have, the more developed the country will be in future.这句话太中文了：） This method surely have many benefits, but this is not to？？it is not to好一些吧 say that I support the planmentioned in the statement, because I think the execution of this plan would be very hard, and at that time many problems which have not been noticed by us would surely be exposed to the society.这段不是很好，显得句子太简单，逻辑上给我的感觉有点乱

As is known to all, the government's finance mostly comes from the tax. In our country, there were hundreds of thousands people who go时态语法注意 to the college or university each year, and the average cost of one person per year is about 5600 RMB without the fee of apartment taken into account. If the plan had been executed, the number of the people attended the college or university would increase, and the revenue had to increase obviously. However, can thisit reality be accepted by lots of people who do not want to go to the colleges? The complaining free press will be never disappeared for a long time, and a cost which is self-decided will be forcibly distributed to all the people all over the country. Some of people, who are poverty without students, will have more difficulties to live. Does the fact just we want to see?国家的收入不仅只有税收吧，觉得例子不能很好的说服我

In addition, the colleges and universities are only providing a good environment for the students to study. That is not to say people can not get knowledge without them. Take Bill Gates for example. He had the chance to study in one of the best universities in the US. Although giving up the chance, he still gets much knowledge by himself from the books, friends, society, and so forth. I want to tell the people both who are in the colleges or universities and who are in the society now, that what we need more is not the environment where it is easy for us to study, but the desire to get the knowledge. If you have this right and healthy attitude, you can study anytime at anywhere regardless the environment. Just as the Confucius said thousand years ago, there must be a person in three who can be my teacher. The fields of knowledge is very broad, andwith any new things we had known, may help us a lot in the future, regardless the knowledge where you study.这段还不错，不过我觉得和题目离得稍微远了点，联系不是很多，换个思路比如：国家有更重要的地方需要投资，比如解决一些贫困，军备投资等。。。

Hence, I do not agree with the speaker’s statement for the reason that although the chance to study in the college or university is very helpful, we can still get much knowledge in other circumstance if you have the right attitude about studying, and it is too hard for the execution with the consideration of the cost.

谈谈我的个人看法哈，既然你想论证这个方针很难被实行，那么就该完全攻击这一点，但觉得你又想说明不只大学能让人学到东西，这样滩开了反而觉得两方面都没说清楚。不如抓住一点攻击。尽是个人愚见，不当处谅解。
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第七篇issue 01  学习类
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寻梦UID: 171591

53"College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government."

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In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to a fierce competition in the educational field, more and more people focus their attentions on the fact that a lot of adolescents although study very well can still not go to the colleges or universities for the further education since they can not pay for the marvelous tuition.[巨长！！！我切！！] Therefore, some socialists suggest that the education in colleges and universities should be free for all students fully financed by the government. The statement looks very reasonable for the first thought, but I could not agree with it after more considerations.

Admittedly, the colleges and universities are the places where people can get knowledge, and the more knowledge people have, the more developed the country will be in future. This method surely have[has] many benefits, but this[it] is not to say[我倾向于用it is not representative of] that I support the plan, because I think the execution of this plan would be very hard, and at that time[加逗号或把这个at that time置后] many problems which have not been noticed by us would surely be exposed to the society.[这段作者还要好好构思，如果你想在这个论题的正面做一点文章的话，若像现在这样的，感觉一句话就能说完了]

As is known to all, the government's finance mostly comes from the tax. In our country, there were hundreds of thousands people who go to the college or university each year, and the average cost of one person per year is about 5600 RMB without the fee of apartment taken into account. If the plan had been executed, the number of the people attended the college or university would increase, and the revenue had to increase obviously. However, can this reality be accepted by lots of people who do not want to go to the colleges? The complaining free press will be never disappeared for a long time, and a cost which is self-decided will be forcibly distributed to all the people all over the country. Some of people, who are poverty without students, will have more difficulties to live. Does the fact just we want to see?[作者的例证完全建立在了自己的假设的基础上，尤其是最后两句，感觉不太好，没有分量]

In addition, the colleges and universities are only providing a good environment for the students to study. That is not to say people can not get knowledge without them. Take Bill Gates for example. He had the chance to study in one of the best universities in the US. Although giving up the chance, he still gets much knowledge by himself from the books, friends, society, and so forth. I want to tell the people both who are in the colleges or universities and who are in the society now, that what we need more is not the environment where it is easy for us to study, but the desire to get the knowledge. If you have this right and healthy attitude, you can study anytime at anywhere regardless the environment. Just as the Confucius said thousand years ago, there must be a person in three who can be my teacher. The field of knowledge is very broad, and any new things we had known, may help us a lot in the future, regardless the knowledge where you study.[这段的感觉不太切题，说不上来，除了这个论点。依作者的第一个论据，还可以从政府的角度来论证不可实施性]

Hence, I do not agree with the speaker’s statement for the reason that although the chance to study in the college or university is very helpful, we can still get much knowledge in other circumstance if you have the right attitude about studying, and it is too hard for the execution with the consideration of the cost.