Issue144 同主题 请指教！

huijuan1210UID: 200139

Who really gives us something of lasting value, the artist or the critic? The speaker prefers the former. However, while I agree with the speaker as there are innumberable great works of artists, one can never ingore contribution of the critic. And on the other hand, the artist and the critic is inextriable to each other.

I wholeheartly agree with the speaker that the artist provides us plenty of lasting value works. Today, as hundreds years after the death of Beethoven, the symphonies of Beethoven are familiar not only by musician but also ordinary people; da Vinci’s Mona lisa’s smile impressed millions of viewers; Shakespear’s “Romeo and Juliet” is never out-dated; ballet of Swanlake is the most favorable dance; poems of Tagore are translated into hundreds of languages and spread in the whole world; novels of Mark Twain are famous of its faith, strength, courage and critism. In the history of arts, there are thousands pieces of works which human beings feel proud of. All of these great works have long-lasting effect and international clout.

However, the critic also has undeniable contibution to the society. Some may argu that one can list hundreds of lasting value works of artisits, and can hardly remember one name of the critic. I concede that few ordinary people can name a critic if they are not in the professional field, but this does not mean the critic doesn’t have any clout in arts. One can look no further than different styles of music. Any one can simply list out several distinct types of music: classic music, R&B, blue, jazz, hip hop, etc. How are these types defined? By work of the critic. To some extent, the critic acts as a taxmonist, whose personal opinion, if accepted widely, may have long term impact of evaluation of the arts. On the other hand, the critic contributes valuable suggestions to the artist, and so that improve the works of the artist and prople the progress of the arts. In short, the long lasting valuse of contribution of the critic is not apparent but latent. In this sense, we shall appreciate even more the work of the critic as people may no longer remember them in short time.   

Moreover, sometimes it is difficult to treat one as an entire artist or a critic. Most of the artists have done some discussion or criticism about other artists, which means they did the job of the critic. And also, it is common that famous artists are invited as judges in a competition. During the competition, the artists give the participations advises, praise, and even criticisms. At that moment, the artists also play the role of critic. On the other hand, some critics themselves are eminent artists and did great jobs in their own realm.

In sum, it is improper to assert that only the artist, not the critic contributes to society something of lasting value. Both of the character provides us imponderous works, either apparent or latent. Moreover, sometimes the roles of the artist and the critic are exchangeable. Thus, both of the artists and the critic gives us something of lasting value.

boyjimUID: 125249

Who really gives us something of lasting value, the artist or the critic? [巨多人用的开头~] The speaker prefers the former. However, while I agree with the speaker as there are innumberable great works of artists, one can never ingore contribution of the critic. And on the other hand, the artist and the critic is inextriable [inextricable单词拼写要注意~这个词容易错就用回inevitable] to each other.

I wholeheartly agree with the speaker that the artist provides us plenty of lasting value works. Today, as hundreds years after the death of Beethoven, the symphonies of Beethoven are familiar not only by musician but also ordinary people; da Vinci’s Mona lisa’s smile impressed millions of viewers; Shakespear’s “Romeo and Juliet” is never out-dated; ballet of Swanlake is the most favorable dance; poems of Tagore are translated into hundreds of languages and spread in the whole world; novels of Mark Twain are famous of its faith, strength, courage and critism. In the history of arts, there are thousands pieces of works which human beings feel proud of. All of these great works have long-lasting effect and international clout. [列举要精而不需要多~一个好的例子阐述得明白就好了，而且艺术家只是创造了这些一种魅力，长久的价值并不等于此时此刻的一种非凡的魅力，这里没有论证好]

However, the critic also has undeniable contibution to the society. Some may argu [e] that one can list hundreds of lasting value works of artisits, and can hardly remember one name of the critic. [这一句有什么意义？] I concede that few ordinary people can name a critic if they are not in the professional field, [这个不一定，季羡林等人写文学评论同时也是作家~你不知道不等于别人不知道] but this does not mean the critic doesn’t have any clout [？] in arts. One can look no further than different styles of music. Any one can simply list out several distinct types of music: classic music, R&B, blue, jazz, hip hop, etc. How are these types defined? By work of the critic. [谁说的？你也没有证明阿] To some extent, the critic acts as a taxmonist [这个词真够深奥的阿~] , whose personal opinion, if accepted widely, may have long term impact of evaluation of the arts. On the other hand, the critic contributes valuable suggestions to the artist, and so that improve the works of the artist and prople [？] the progress of the arts. In short, the long lasting valuse of contribution of the critic is not apparent but latent. [这一句不错] In this sense, we shall appreciate even more the work of the critic as people may no longer remember them in short time.

Moreover, sometimes it is difficult to treat one as an entire artist or a critic. [你想说什么？] Most of the artists have done some discussion or criticism about other artists, which means they did the job of the critic. [这个观点有新意] And also, it is common that famous artists are invited as judges in a competition. During the competition, the artists give the participations advises, praise, and even criticisms. At that moment, the artists also play the role of critic. On the other hand, some critics themselves are eminent artists and did great jobs in their own realm. [有点跑了~说什么竞赛干什么？角色交换本来可以写得更好！]

In sum, it is improper to assert that only the artist, not the critic contributes to society something of lasting value. Both of the character provides us imponderous [没这个词~ponderous就有~用在这里也不合适] works, either apparent or latent. Moreover, sometimes the roles of the artist and the critic are exchangeable. Thus, both of the artists and the critic gives us something of lasting value.

AutoseaUID: 192045

最好先用word检查一下语法错误再发上来，要不看着不舒服。
总体感觉还可以，关于critic要能举出个具体事例就更好了。

huijuan1210UID: 200139

谢谢两位的指点！
那个~~~拼写错误我明明在学校已经改过了啊！！怎么没有存下来？！

taxmist==taxonomist.  
imponderous = imponderable.
pai sai ah~~~

anyway,还是我的过错。
我觉得这篇很难写，好不容易挤出这么多来！
下去在想想~~~~

再次感谢！