argument147 高频，写得来交流一下

ayrieUID: 128476

147 The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.

"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."

The argument is well-presented, but not systematically well-reasoned. The arguer concluded that the sales of Whirlwind video games would likely to increase dramatically in the followed free months. As it stands, this conclusion suffered from several critical flaws.

Most obviously, the arguer fails to prove that the survey used in the argument's reasoning line is statistically credible to give any further conclusion. There is not any additional information to illustrate its credibility. Does the sample in that survey large enough? Does the sample selected reasonably and randomly? Lake of such information, I cannot simply believe the result of the survey.

In addition, even assume the survey is statistically credible; the arguer's further conclusion from this survey is still open to doubt. The arguer notes that Whirlwind has just lunched the extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, and explained that these 10 to 25 people are of the age-group who most likely to play video games. But he gives not evidence to support that. Commonsense tell me that most of the people from 10 to 25 are students or newly offered stuff. It is quite possible that just because the games need the most up-to-date computers, these 10 to 25 people are unable afford such expensive hardware. Therefore, the Whirlwind's advertising campaign may be useless to boost any sales.

Finally, even assume that the advertising campaign do influence the major buyer of the game players, the arguer's further conclusion that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months is also soundless. Perhaps just because the declined sales of games over the past two years, game players are dislike this company. So Whirlwind still may have many times to take advertisement and some other marketing methods to make the sales increase, let alone the arguer’s conduction that will increase “dramatically”

In sum, to make this argument more convincing and warranted, the arguer must provide more credible evidence and statistically sound survey, but he fails to do so.

neuzergUID: 156156

""Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."

The argument is well-presented, but not systematically well-reasoned. The arguer concluded that the sales of Whirlwind video games wouldare likely to increase dramatically in the followedfollowing freethree months. As it stands, this conclusion suffered from several critical flaws.

Most obviously, the arguer fails to prove that the survey usedcited会不会更好? in the argument's reasoning line“推理”是这样表达的吗？ is statistically credible to give any further conclusion. There is not any additional information to illustrate its credibility. Does the sample in that survey large enough? DoesAre the sample selected reasonably and randomly? Lakelacking of such information, I cannot simply believe the result of the survey.

In addition, even assume the survey is statistically credible; the arguer's further conclusion from this survey is still open to doubt. The arguer notes that Whirlwind has just lunched the extensive advertising campaign directedaimed at people 10 to 25 years old, and explained that these 10 to 25 people are of the age-group who加are most likely to play video games. But he gives notno evidence to support that. Commonsense tell me that most of the people from 10 to 25 are students or newly offered stuff. It is quite possible that just because the games need the most up-to-date computers, these 10 to 25 people are unable afford such expensive hardware. Therefore, the Whirlwind's advertising campaign may be useless改为inefficient会不会更好）） to boost any sales.

Finally, even assume that the advertising campaign do influence the major buyer of the game players, the arguer's further conclusion that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months is also soundless. Perhaps just because the declined sales of games over the past two years, game players are dislike this company.这里的推论是不是有点牵强呢？ So Whirlwind still may havetake many times to take advertisement and some other marketing methods to make the sales increase, let alone let alone 可以这样用吗？我想用no mentionthe arguer’s conduction that will increase “dramatically”

In sum, to make this argument more convincing and warranted, the arguer must provide more credible evidence and statistically sound survey, but he fails to do so.
结构上感觉不错，只是第三个推理有点看不懂：为什么从前销量的下降会导致顾客不愿意购买呢？感觉如果说广告起作用的时间需要较长会不会好点？语法上有些小问题，个人意见，仅供楼主参考

pringleUID: 195431

这是我的提纲：
1，调查表述不清。此外，就算人们喜欢games with lifelike graphics，人们也不见得要买。
2，发行新游戏的技术性问题没有考虑，并且此游戏需要的高端电脑会限制玩游戏的人群。
3，调查的人群和广告所针对的用户可能有差异，而且10－25岁的人有没有能力购买高端电脑还值得怀疑。

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ayrieUID: 128476

最初由 neuzerg 发布
[B]""Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is abo..

以下省略...... [/B]

第三段是说以前销量不好的原因是游戏质量不好，所以消费者对其信心不足