issue 51同主题6, 大家拍吧,我还是会狠很回拍的!!

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Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
提纲：
我对题目的理解：问题解决型， 满足学生的个人需要和兴趣-》使教育更加有效
观点：尽管兴趣的满足可以给学生更大的动力，但是有效的教育应该是对个人和社会的有效，因此仅仅满足学生的兴趣不能使教育更加有效
1，        兴趣尽管使学生学习有动力，但是基础性的教育，对于他们更为关键。原因是开阔视野，激发兴趣，为将来的打下基础
2，        兴趣的满足尽管可以使学生投入到自己的兴趣中去，但是无法满足社会对公民的要求， 因此要进行价值教育
3，        有人说基础知识和价值教育会舒服学生对自己兴趣的积极性，但是他们利大于弊，因为他们将更好的帮助学生pursue their interests.
The debate over the effectiveness of education is always a hot topic for many educators. Some of them assert that designing school to meet the individual needs is the only way to make education effective. However, in my point of view, the effective education should not be only responsible for individuals but also the whole society, therefore only by filling students’ needs people can not develop a kind of effective education.

Firstly, it is true that the interest will generate more motivation driving students to learn and investigate, but fundamental education is equally significant. Through meeting students’ interest, schools can help students explore their full potentials and provide increased chances for them to gain greater successes. However, before education tries its best to meet students' interest, they should make sure whether the interests hold by students are only whims of a moment or a real interests that can last a long time. Because in most cases, some students, especially some children without too much learning experience, can not sense which they really have interests in. Therefore, the first function of education is not to cater to students' needs, but to find and inspire their real interests. So education should give students more chances to learn different subjects- sample mathematics, physical science, music, art, photography- all aimed at broadening students’ horizons and consequently inspire their fervent interests of them. Moreover, these fundamental disciplines will furnish students with other abilities which facilitate their future lives. For example, mathematic can teach them reason and logic; music may give their hands to express feelings, and law help them to learn about fairness. Although these kinds of knowledge are not surely their interests, yet they are infinitely necessary for them to prepare them for lives  
  
Secondly, the important purpose of education is not only to develop student's interests, but also to cultivate a group of people who will contribute to the society. Education is not merely commodity supposed to individuals by schools and society. It should be responsible for the development of the society and even the advancement of human beings. So if education just concern about needs of students, it may be true that these students will become the happy one living entirely in their interests, but may not become the citizens needed by our society, who should hold values of honesty, fairness, and fidelity to task, family and even the world and ultimately contribute to the stability and progress of the society. Of course, it is not suggested that all the people living in their interests can not become the ones needed by our society. But it is sure that if too much attention is paid to the development of interests, the needs of the society may not be fulfilled best.

While, some who oppose this perspective may assert that these fundamental subject and value system may shackle students' spirit to seek to their interests. Admittedly, these education involving value system and fundamental subjects may be not interest enough for these students and seems to waste valuable time. But in our experience, these knowledge and values will turn out to be more beneficial than harmful to students' development of their need and interest. For example, students who hold curiosities in writing computer program should furnish themselves with solid fundamental knowledge of mathematics and logic. Similarly, a student preferring to music should possess basic reading skills to understand the musical theory in books. As to the value, it will be more crucial because the stable society resulting from the education of the value system will ultimately offer increasing opportunities and better environments for students’ chase of interests.

In sum, interest serves as a power driving students to learn more knowledge quickly and initiatively, but undue emphasis on it will dilute the quality of education. After all our society do not just need a group of people who only hold their own interests, but also a great amount persons who will contribute to development of the world.

imjasonUID: 176604

偶抢一楼了

smartyrUID: 169453

我也来了！

imjasonUID: 176604

唉，我都哭了……
什么时候我的作文也能这样呢？
说真的了，今晚我看了几遍都没觉得你的作文有什么不对劲的地方，要是我写到这样就满足了啊！
不过就是优点小的语法错误了，比如单复数之类的，无伤大雅了。
向你学习……

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最初由 imjason 发布
[B]唉，我都哭了……
什么时候我的作文也能这样呢？
说真的了，今晚我看了几遍都没觉得你的作文有什么不对劲的地方，要是我写到这样就满足了啊！
不过就是优点小的语法错误..

以下省略...... [/B]

哎!!不要让俺找不到北了.
什么缺点都有,就是不怕疼.木关系,使劲拍!

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最初由 smartyr 发布
[B]我也来了！ [/B]

呵呵,老战友,终于显形了:)

mondiaUID: 193825

好多人,
站个座

mondiaUID: 193825

No.1 issue 51同主题6, 大家拍吧,我还是会狠很回拍的!!
51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
提纲：
我对题目的理解：问题解决型， 满足学生的个人需要和兴趣-》使教育更加有效
观点：尽管兴趣的满足可以给学生更大的动力，但是有效的教育应该是对个人和社会的有效，因此仅仅满足学生的兴趣不能使教育更加有效
1， 兴趣尽管使学生学习有动力，但是基础性的教育，对于他们更为关键。原因是开阔视野，激发兴趣，为将来的打下基础
2， 兴趣的满足尽管可以使学生投入到自己的兴趣中去，但是无法满足社会对公民的要求， 因此要进行价值教育
3， 有人说基础知识和价值教育会束缚学生对自己兴趣的积极性，但是他们利大于弊，因为他们将更好的帮助学生pursue their interests.
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The debate over the effectiveness of education is always a hot topic for many educators. Some of them assert that designing school to meet the individual needs is the only way to make education effective. However, in my point of view, the effective education should not be only responsible for individuals but also the whole society, therefore only三个only了，是不是可以换词 by filling students’ needs people can not develop a kind of effective education.

Firstly, it is true that the interest will generate more motivation driving students to learn and investigate, but fundamental education is equally significant. Through meeting students’ interest, schools can help students explore their full potentials and provide increased chances for them to gain greater successes. However, before education tries its best to meet students' interest, they should make sure whether the interests hold by students are only whims of a moment or a real interests that can last a long time. Because in most cases, some students, especially some children without too much learning experience, can not sense which they really have interests in. Therefore, the first function of education is not to cater to students' needs, but to find and inspire their real interests. So education should give students more chances to learn different subjects- sample mathematics, physical science, music, art, photography- all aimed at broadening students’ horizons and consequently inspire their fervent interests of them.基础教育帮助寻找真正的兴趣；那最终不还是为了他们的兴趣么？ Moreover, these fundamental disciplines will furnish students with other abilities which facilitate their future lives. For example, mathematic can teach them reason and logic; music may give their hands to express feelings, and law help them to learn about fairness. Plato的“the republic”里似乎有这样的观点 Although these kinds of knowledge are not surely their interests, yet they are infinitely necessary for them to prepare them for lives

Secondly, the important purpose of education is not only to develop student's interests是对上段总结么？, but also to cultivate a group of people who will contribute to the society. Education is not merely commodity supposed to individuals by schools and society. It should be responsible for the development of the society and even the advancement of human beings. So if education just concern about needs of students, it may be true that these students will become the happy one living entirely in their interests, but may not become the citizens needed by our society, who should hold values of honesty, fairness, and fidelity to task, family and even the world and ultimately contribute to the stability and progress of the society. Of course, it is not suggested that all the people living in their interests can not become the ones needed by our society. But it is sure that if too much attention is paid to the development of interests, the needs of the society may not be fulfilled best.社会需要的角度

While, some who oppose this perspective may assert that these fundamental subject and value system may shackle students' spirit to seek to their interests. 转得不错Admittedly, these education involving value system and fundamental subjects may be not interest enough for these students and seems to waste valuable time. But in our experience, these knowledge and values will turn out to be more beneficial than harmful to students' development of their need and interest. For example, students who hold curiosities in writing computer program should furnish themselves with solid fundamental knowledge of mathematics and logic. Similarly, a student preferring to music should possess basic reading skills to understand the musical theory in books. As to the value, it will be more crucial because the stable society resulting from the education of the value system will ultimately offer increasing opportunities and better environments for students’ chase of interests.

In sum, interest serves as a power driving students to learn more knowledge quickly and initiatively, but undue emphasis on it will dilute the quality of education. After all our society do not just need a group of people who only hold their own interests, but also a great amount persons who will contribute to development of the world.不错

枫丹UID: 166492

to mondia
So education should give students more chances to learn different subjects- sample mathematics, physical science, music, art, photography- all aimed at broadening students’ horizons and consequently inspire their fervent interests of them.基础教育帮助寻找真正的兴趣；那最终不还是为了他们的兴趣么？

我理解题目是:教育不仅仅满足兴趣和需要,而是启发兴趣和需要,我认为两者不同,不知这样想对不对?

Secondly, the important purpose of education is not only to develop student's interests是对上段总结么？,
不是对上文的总结,而是对题目的小让步,这会我到是感觉:如果改成对上文的总结会更好一些
Secondely, the purpose of education is not only to inspirite and develop interets of students, but also ~~~
说说你不服的理由,我在想ets那帮人每天都看一样的题目,是不是早已经先入为主了呢?

谢谢你的批改,我现在去找你的作文pai 了,还有下次记得把你文章的链接留下啊!!

枫丹UID: 166492

自己顶一下

猫猫624UID: 171232

占一个,太晚了.明天来.
logic是关键..强烈同意!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ioiwinUID: 183956

Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
提纲：
我对题目的理解：问题解决型， 满足学生的个人需要和兴趣-》使教育更加有效
观点：尽管兴趣的满足可以给学生更大的动力，但是有效的教育应该是对个人和社会的有效，因此仅仅满足学生的兴趣不能使教育更加有效
1， 兴趣尽管使学生学习有动力，但是基础性的教育，对于他们更为关键。原因是开阔视野，激发兴趣，为将来的打下基础
2， 兴趣的满足尽管可以使学生投入到自己的兴趣中去，但是无法满足社会对公民的要求， 因此要进行价值教育
3， 有人说基础知识和价值教育会舒服学生对自己兴趣的积极性，但是他们利大于弊，因为他们将更好的帮助学生pursue their interests.
The debate over the effectiveness of education is always a hot topic for many educators. Some of them assert that designing school to meet the individual needs is the only way to make education effective. However, in my point of view, the effective education should not be only responsible for individuals but also the whole society, therefore only by filling students’ needs people can not develop a kind of effective education.

Firstly, it is true that the interest will generate more motivation driving students to learn and investigate, but fundamental education is equally significant. Through meeting students’ interest, schools can help students explore their full potentials and provide increased chances for them to gain greater successes. [U]However, before education［这里应该是educators吧，和后面的they不一致］ tries its best to meet students' interest［忘了复数了］, [/U]  they should make sure whether the interests hold［held］ by students are only whims of a moment or a real interests that can last a long time. Because in most cases, some students, especially some children without too much learning experience, can not sense [U]which they really have interests［个人觉得用be　interested　in　比较好］[/U]  in. Therefore, the first function of education is not to cater to students' needs, but to find and inspire their real interests. So education should give students more chances to learn different subjects- sample mathematics, physical science, music, art, photography- [U]all ［all　of　which　aim］aimed at broadening students’ horizons and consequently inspire their fervent interests of them. [/U]  Moreover, these fundamental disciplines will furnish students with other abilities which facilitate their future lives. For example, mathematic can teach them [U]reason and logic[/U] ［reason是形容词吗？可以引用培根的一句名言histories makes men wise;poetry witty;mathematics subtle'natural phliosopher deep;morals grave; rhetoric and logic able to contend］; music may give their hands to express feelings, and law help them to learn about fairness. Although these kinds of knowledge are not surely their interests, [U]yet they are infinitely necessary for them to prepare them for lives ［可以具体一点，这样就合你的ＴＣ照应，ＴＣ前面一部分的说的比较详细，不过个人认为你的ＴＣ中有个ＢＵＴ那么你应该强调的就是后面的那仪部分］[/U]

Secondly, the [U]important[could be substituted with inherent function] [/U]  purpose of education is not only to develop student's interests, but also to cultivate a group of people who will contribute to the society. [U]Education is not merely commodity [U]supposed [/U]  ［？？］to individuals by schools and society. It should be responsible for the development of the society and even the advancement of human beings.[/U] ［ 可以连成一句］So if education just concern［单数形式］ about needs of students, it may be true that these students will become the happy one living entirely in their interests, but may not become the citizens needed by our society, who should hold values of honesty, fairness, and fidelity to task, family and even the world and ultimately contribute to the stability and progress of the society. Of course, it is not suggested that all the people living in their interests can not become the ones needed by our society. But it is sure that if too much attention is paid to the development of interests, the needs of the society may not be fulfilled best.

While, some who oppose this perspective may assert that these fundamental [U]subject and value system [/U]  ［和前面的these不一致］may shackle students' spirit to seek to their interests. Admittedly, these education involving value system and fundamental subjects may be not i[U]nterest[/U]  ［形容词］enough for these students and seems to waste valuable time. But in our experience, these knowledge and values will turn out to be more beneficial than harmful to students' development of their [U]need and interest[/U] ［复数］. [U]For example,[/U]  ［可以使用consider　an　example　比for　example　好］students who hold curiosities in writing computer program should furnish themselves with solid fundamental knowledge of mathematics and l[U]ogic[/U] ［学科后有s］. Similarly, a student preferring to music should possess basic reading skills to understand the musical [U]theory[/U]  in books. As to the value, it will be more crucial because the stable society resulting from the education of the value system will ultimately offer increasing opportunities and better environments for students’ chase of interests.

In sum, interest serves as a power driving students to learn more knowledge quickly and initiatively, but undue emphasis on it will dilute the quality of education. After all our society do not just need a group of people who only hold their own interests, but also a great amount persons who will contribute to development of the world.
［你的思路很清楚，就是要注意一些小问题．其中改的不一定全是对的．本人水平有限就只能说出这些东西来］
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同主题写作issue５１
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?threadid=258364

smartyrUID: 169453

楼上的兄弟，请求互拍！

猫猫624UID: 171232

粗看了一下,很不错.有些小错,别人大都指出.下篇给你细改.:D
语言朴实,用词也不错思维很紧凑,论证也很到位.这点我觉的比花拳秀腿的文章要很多,也正是gre考察的精髓..向你学习!!!!
:p:p:p

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最初由 ioiwin 发布
[B]Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
提纲：
我对题目的理解：问?.

以下省略...... [/B]

谢谢拍砖!!我该了你的作文,可能拍的有点狠了,毕竟那是你的第一篇,比我的第一篇强多了!!继续加油