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[i习作temp] issue10,封笔之作,明天上京,不要改了,大家给个分吧,考完了我一定回改 [复制链接]

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从2005年2月25日9时43分到2005年2月25日10时45分
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Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
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In the modern society, represented by the rapid development of science and technology, the preservation of culture has become more and more complex and controversial. Does the government must ensure that their major cities receive financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated? Different people hold different due to their perspective angles. Insofar as I can think, I tend to agree the speaker that it is really the responsibility of government to preserve the culture in big cities, although the culture in small cities and countryside cannot be overlooked.
To begin with, the major cities are always the original of the human beings, which have the longest culture history, and these great cultures usually can works as the representation of a country. We need look no further to see the examples. The summer palace in China, Beijing, attracts millions of tourists every year for its majesty; people admire the glory of the Effier Tower in France, Paris, which is the greatest architecture in the world; the wonderful paintings and sculptures are also the reason why Italy is so popular a country which arrest a myriad of persons' eyes.
We cannot image if all these great relics are destroys because of careless conversation, then what a treasure we human beings would lose. Thus, the government must take the responsibility to protect these culture treasure, not only for these ones themselves, but also for the reputation of the country.
However, with the development of the globalization, the culture in big countries ais negatively influenced more or less. These metropolis are usually severs as the windows open to the whole world. International economic cooperation, political negotiations, culture communications firstly take place in these big cities. So the people there have more opportunities to contact the popular culture, and many foreign minds. For example, we now are familiar with the Rock-and-Roll, which is the American musical pattern, otherwise, less and less people are interested folk songs; The oiling painting is also a art form of western countries, which now is more popular in China than the Chinese traditional painting--Wash. What a pity if so many traditional culture disappears because of the import of other foreign civilizations. Therefore, not only the government, but also the whole society must put enough emphasis on this severe affair.
Admittedly, some small countries and countryside are also the places where many traditional culture are conserved. Take China for example, the cutting art, which may even lost in big cities, only come down from one generation to another in countryside, or maybe even in some certain families.  These places are not influenced by foreign culture so much as big cities; thus, this traditional culture has more opportunity to keep alive. Whereas, this culture cannot be used as a tool to earn enough money to support the people who are experts in these areas, therefore, the fund to these places is also a important responsibility of government.
To sum up, the government must ensure that the culture in big cities is well preserved. They are not only the treasure, which our forebears left to us, but also the symbol of the country. Meanwhile, the culture in small countries and countryside should also draws the attention of the government, although they may not so splendid as those in major counties.
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发表于 2005-3-25 12:50:05 |只看该作者
不错,思路很好,虽然语言上还是不太好,但至少可以的4分了
另外,第二段颐和园的例子不好,怎么是雄伟呢?是故宫吧?还有意大利的例子最好往大城市里靠一下。
你已经很不错了,28号一定回成功的!!说不定出来时还可以见到我呢?呵呵!!

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发表于 2005-3-25 13:10:34 |只看该作者
给楼主提醒一下,每段中间最好要空行的.给个分数4
argument 要是写到6总分5,写到5,总分4.5
呵呵,加油

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差不多可以4分吧,论证上面还是需要加强的
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发表于 2005-3-25 21:10:25 |只看该作者
牛x, 写得倍儿好。 我打5.5分.
睡个好觉,估计你明天得六分!
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发表于 2005-3-25 22:57:28 |只看该作者
谢谢大家了,我有信心了。明天早上去北京,再看看。
TO:zhoulin00001,我下午坐3点45的班车回来,没准真能碰到你。

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考完回来一定及时汇报机井
还会狠狠的拍拍谁
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加油啊,我也要考了,杀鸡成功

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我31号祝好运

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发表于 2005-3-27 08:38:25 |只看该作者
到时什么都别多想, 写完了就是胜利.
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RE: issue10,封笔之作,明天上京,不要改了,大家给个分吧,考完了我一定回改 [修改]

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issue10,封笔之作,明天上京,不要改了,大家给个分吧,考完了我一定回改
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