[必读]Issue 185 老题目了,求砖,有砖必应

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

Issue185: 497 words 45 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

As we all know, scandals today have become a kind of new culture due their specificities. Whether it is about political affairs or about academic research or even other areas of the human society, they draw people's attentions every minute. So, as I say, they have become a kind of culture. And you can not say a culture is useful or not, because it needs fully evaluated to get a conclusion.

Scandals, admittedly, always focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. And our humans are born with too much curiosity about everything they have never known. Just because what the scandals supply are always something rarely known by populace, we are every time eager to know about the all scandals we could.

What we must say is that, through the process of the exposal of scandals, our society do pay much more attention on problems in this respect and things would be well resolved in future. Almost it is in every country that bribery is a common affair in the political area, and no speaker or reformer dare or is able to deal with it because the people involved in it usually have a complex relationship with each other. Once such things are exposed to the society as a ugly scandals the great influence can never be ignored. The government must carry out its reform to prevent these scandals again.

Such situations are also common in the academic field. What we value most in the science world is originality and what we consider to be the worst and most ugly thing is to copy others' results. Original creation in the academic research is not an easy task which needs continuous work and sometimes a little luck. So, not every one in this field would finally has his or her own creation and what is the worse is such people may be frustrated by such unsuccessful experiences and even become to think about to copy others' work. The most frequent situation is the faculties possess their graduate students' original work. Such scandals could be always known by our populace, although we could do nothing, the public voice would finally devote to purify the academic world.

However, scandals are not always accurate reflection of the reality. And somebody makes out such scandals to disturb the society. Excitant in the sports field is a sensitive topic. In this high-tech world, it is true that many excitants are made out to lend sports men a chance to treat in the competition for the championship. But many excellent sports men who have never use these excitants were involved in such scandals and they could never recover from this shadow again.

So, in sum, when we try to assess whether it is useful or useless or even harmful, we still needs to do a lot of work. The evaluation of a culture is not easy. Sometimes, you'd better t it as a phenomena.

neverflyUID: 166610

Issue 185 老题目了,求砖,有砖必应
Issue185: 497 words 45 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

As we all know, scandals today have become a kind of new culture due their specificities. Whether it is about political affairs or about academic research or even other areas of the human society, they draw people's attentions every minute. So, as I say, they have become a kind of culture这句话重复，而且加上了不简洁，建议去掉. And you can not say a culture is useful or not, because it needs fully evaluated to get a conclusion.

Scandals, admittedly, always focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. And our humans are born with too much curiosity about everything they have never known. Just because what the scandals supply are always something rarely known by populace, we are every time eager to know about the all scandals we could.展开不够啊，就三句话

What we must say is that, through the process of the exposal of scandals, our society do pay much more attention on problems in this respect and things would be well resolved in futurethings would be well resolved in future这句话意思不清，和上下文没什么关联. Almost it is in every country that bribery怎么从scandal突然到了bribe了？缺乏交待 is a common affair in the political area, and no speaker or reformer dare or is able to 两个or,意思太烦而且没有必要，因为speaker 和reformer好像不是并列的概念deal with it because the people involved in it usually have a complex relationship with each other. Once such things are exposed to the society as a ugly scandals a 去掉the great influence can never be ignored. The government must carry out its reform to prevent these scandals again.

Such situations are also common in the academic field. What we value most in the science world is originality and what we consider to be the worst and most ugly thing is to copy others' results. Original creation in the academic research is not an easy task which needs continuous work and sometimes a little luck. So这个so表示的意思是，科研比较难所以总有人不照….好像逻辑不太让人信服, not every one in this field would finally has his or her own creation and what is the worse is such people may be frustrated by such unsuccessful experiences and even become beginto think about to copy others' work. The most frequent situation is the faculties possess their graduate students' original work. Such scandals could be always known by our populace, although we could do nothingalthough没有必要, the public voice would finally devote to purify the academic world.

However, scandals are not always accurate reflection of the reality. And and不好，应该唤其他的词somebody makes out such scandals to disturb the society. Excitant in the sports field is a sensitive topic. In this high-tech world, it is true that many excitants are made out to lend sports men a chance to treat in the competition for the championship. But many excellent sports men who have never use these excitants were involved in such scandals 这个，没证据把and they could never recover from this shadow again.

So, so去掉in sum, when we try to assess whether it is useful or useless or even harmful, we still needs to do a lot of work. The evaluation of a culture is not easy. Sometimes, you'd better t it as a phenomena.
感觉论证以及使用关联词有些随意，论证的有些部分展开不充分。加油！

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

感觉这篇文章就是很难写,主要是论据方面的,想通过自己熟悉的东西来穿插又不是很让人信服,郁闷啊

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

Issue 185 老题目了,求砖,有砖必应
Issue185: 497 words 45 minutes
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

As we all know, scandals today have become a kind of new culture due their specificities. Whether it is about political affairs or about academic research or even other areas of the human society, they draw people's attentions every minute. When a culature is evaluated, such words as 'useful' or 'useless' is unsituable and even hasty. It needs to be fully evaluated to get a final conclusion.

Scandals, admittedly, always focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Our humans are born with too much curiosity about everything around them especially that they have never known. Just because what the scandals supply are always something rarely known by populace, we are every time eager to know about the all scandals we could. Take the football star Beckham for example, his life could always draw hundreds of thousands of eyeballs. When the scandal that he has been involved into a special sexy relationship with a so-called woman was exposed, it seems that the whole world is in a lively talk on  this topic. However, such things are very common in our society, and the only difference is the main role is a famous football star other than a populace.

What we must admit is that, through the process of the exposal of scandals, our society do pay much more attention on problems in this respect and things would be well resolved in future. In the political world, it is almost in every country that bribery is a common affair, and no speaker or reformer dare or is able to deal with it because the people involved in it usually have a complex relationship with each other. Once such things are exposed to the society as ugly scandals the great influence can never be ignored. The government must carry out its reform to prevent these scandals again.

Such situations are also common in the academic field. What we value most in the science world is originality and what we consider to be the worst and most ugly thing is to copy others' results. Original creation in the academic research is not an easy task which needs continuous work and sometimes a little luck. Not every one in this field would finally has his or her own creation and what is the worse is such people may be frustrated by such unsuccessful experiences and even become beginto think about to copy others' work. The most frequent situation is the faculties possess their graduate students' original work. Such scandals could be always known by our populace, and the public voice would finally devote to purify the academic world.

However, scandals are not always accurate reflection of the reality. There are situations that somebody makes out such scandals on purpose to disturb the society. Excitant in the sports field is a sensitive topic. In this high-tech world, it is true that many excitants are made out to lend sports men a chance to treat in the competition for the championship. But many excellent sports men who have never use these excitants were involved in such scandals and they could never recover from this shadow again.

In sum, when we try to assess whether it is useful or useless or even harmful, we still needs to do a lot of work. The evaluation of a culture is not easy. Sometimes, you'd better t it as a phenomena.

GlaglacierUID: 204412

As we all know, scandals today have become a kind of new culture due their specificities. Whether it is about political affairs or about academic research or even other areas of the human society, they draw people's attentions every minute. When a culature is evaluated, such words as 'useful' or 'useless' is unsituable and even hasty. It needs to be fully evaluated to get a final conclusion.
------------说它是culture，感觉不是很恰当。
Scandals, admittedly, always focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Our humans are born with too much curiosity about everything around them especially that they have never known. Just because what the scandals supply are always something rarely known by populace, we are every time ------every time在这里什么意思？always？  eager to know about the all scandals we could. Take the football star Beckham for example, his life could always draw hundreds of thousands of eyeballs. When the scandal that he has been involved into a special sexy relationship with a so-called woman was exposed, it seems that -----这里可以不要it seems that。    the whole world is in a lively-----hot更好吧 talk on this topic. ----可以补充说那个scandal让部分人对***观点改变。However,----这里用递进关系的词应该更恰当。 such things are very common in our society-------without any support, though it may be apparent, you'd better give some examples(可以用个排比句，列出社会上的其它类似现象。。)..., and the only difference is the main role is a famous football star other than a populace.

What we must admit is that,-------admit上面用过了。。 through the process of the exposal of scandals, our society do pay much more attention on problems in this respect and things would be well resolved in future. In the political world, it is almost in every country that bribery is a common affair, and no speaker or reformer dare or is able to deal with it because the people involved in it usually have a complex relationship with each other. Once such things are exposed to the society as ugly scandals the great influence can never be ignored. The government must carry out its reform to prevent these scandals again. -----可以加强这里的对比程度，突出scandle的确起到了作用。

Such situations are also common in the academic field. What we value most in the science world is originality and what we consider to be the worst and most ugly thing------thing这个词在gre作文里应该少用，另外can，make也是。。 is to copy others' results-----用plagiarism，和上面originality对应，名词对名词。。. Original creation in the academic research is not an easy task which needs continuous work and sometimes a little luck. ------和主题没什么关系，有下面那句说明情况感觉就够了。。Not every one in this field would finally has his or her own creation and what is the worse is such people may be frustrated by such unsuccessful experiences and even become beginto think about to copy others' work. The most frequent situation is the faculties possess their graduate students' original work. Such scandals could be always known by our populace, and the public voice would finally devote to purify the academic world.

However, scandals are not always accurate reflection of the reality. There are situations that somebody makes out such scandals on purpose to disturb the society. Excitant in the sports field is a sensitive topic. In this high-tech world, it is true that many excitants are made out to lend sports men a chance to treat in the competition for the championship. But many excellent sports men who have never use these excitants were involved in such scandals and they could never recover from this shadow again.

In sum, when we try to assess whether it is useful or useless or even harmful, we still needs to do a lot of work. The evaluation of a culture is not easy. Sometimes, you'd better t it as a phenomena.
-------有点草草结尾的感觉

GlaglacierUID: 204412

另外，你的观点是中性的，那么倒数第二段就显得太少了。或者可以改观点成“倾向赞同”。

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

你的意见很中肯，而且我帮人家改文章也是这样很裸的批驳的，
感觉很爽的
同时我发现
issue的观点还是最好有一个侧重
这样才比较容易把握
完全的中性观点很难驾驭