issue30 这回还不算太迟，老规矩，互拍砖头吧！

Mars3000UID: 198477

[B]The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time. [/B]  

提纲：毫无疑问，追求人的高效率应该是技术进步的根本目的，但高效的结果却未必带来更多的闲暇时间。
B1，因为由技术进步所引起的高效率是令人们受益的前提，其它大部分的便利都是由此衍生而出的，因此它应当是技术进步的主要目的。
B2，但即便获得了高效率，这并不代表人们一定能享受更多的闲暇时光。
b1,人们要花更多的时间学习
b2,闲暇时间的多少也不是主要由人们的工作效率决定的。
结论：高效率应该是技术进步的主要目的，但不必然带来更充裕的时间。

As the tide of technology goes forward by leaps and bounds, never in any era of history was our society improved so much as it is today. When satisfying with the accomplishment achieved, people at the same time, begin to pay their attention to questions, what is the most significant aim of the advancement of technology and whether it will bring us more time freely dominated. As far as I am concerned, increasing people's efficiency, without doubt, should be the primary goal of technological advancement, however, it may not lead to more leisure time necessarily.

On the one hand, the prior aim of progress in technology should lie in making people efficient, because many other further benefits, brought by the appearance of new technology or the improvement of the old, are based on high efficiency. In other words, just under the prerequisite of this efficiency, a result of technological innovation, we step in a more convenient world than before. For example, by airplanes, people can arrive at another continent in just hours, which helps them get rid of a boring time-wasting journey for ever; for the use of computers, so greatly have scientists enhanced their speed in calculation that they can spend the time saved on other researches in order to obtain more significant achievement; with washing machines dominating each family, even ourselves, as the beneficiaries of high efficiency, are greatly liberated for being away from doing laundries by our own. All of the above illustrate a fact nearly every positive change coming along with the breakthrough of technology comes from high efficiency. Thus it should be the improvement of people's efficiency, rather than others, that become the prior aim of technological advancement.

On the other hand, nevertheless, far from inevitability do people enjoy more leisure time for their higher efficiency. For one thing, in spite of saving more time because of more efficient, people carry it out at the cost of spending longer time in learning and practising to improve themselves. For example, for using a new skill, a worker can produce a car in half of the time as that used before , while it takes them hours more than hundreds of times to master it, as well as to update his or her knowledge and improve the skill, making the leisure time less in fact. For the other thing, as professor Liu, an authority of sociology in my university, once said( and I paraphrased ), "Seldom is the amount of leisure time determined by his or her speed of finishing a task, but based on his or her nature and pursuit. "That is to say, if one wants to burden a lot, he or she, though efficient, will still be busy, since there are always a plenty of work to do; while being a lazy fellow, however slowly he or she works, there remains quite a little leisure, for only a few tasks appear in the plan. Therefore, high efficiency may not bring much leisure time.

In sum, from what has been stated above, we can draw a conclusion that as the basis what benefits our society, high efficiency of people should certainly be the fundamental goal of technological development. Besides, what also must be pointed out here is that this high efficiency does not result in more leisure time of people inevitably, by contrast, making them busier very likely.

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

ZHAN

Mars3000UID: 198477

[B]TO  深谷幽兰 ：[/B]

每次都是你出手最快
这回拍你哪个呢？  :confused:

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

最新发的那篇吧！四月ＪＪ的那篇
3Q！一起加油啊！:p

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：毫无疑问，追求人的高效率应该是技术进步的根本目的，但高效的结果却未必带来更多的闲暇时间。
B1，因为由技术进步所引起的高效率是令人们受益的前提，其它大部分的便利都是由此衍生而出的，因此它应当是技术进步的主要目的。
B2，但即便获得了高效率，这并不代表人们一定能享受更多的闲暇时光。
b1,人们要花更多的时间学习
b2,闲暇时间的多少也不是主要由人们的工作效率决定的。
结论：高效率应该是技术进步的主要目的，但不必然带来更充裕的时间。

As the tide of technology goes forward by leaps and bounds 是“in”还是“by”？才在哪篇看过也是这么写的, never in any era of history was our society improved so much as it is today. When satisfying with the accomplishment achieved, people at the same time, pay their attention to questions, what is the most significant aim of the advancement of technology and whether it will bring us a free life. free life如果指“自由”的话，与more leisure time没有必然的联系吧？ As far as I am concerned, increasing people's efficiency, without doubt, should be the primary goal of technology advancement, however, it may not lead to more leisure time necessarily.

On the one hand, the prior aim of technological advancement 第三次用了，换换development/progress吧 ;) should lie in making people efficient, because many other further benifits brought by the development of technology are based on high efficiency of people.In other words, just under the prerequisit of this efficiency,a result of technological advancement, we step in a more convenient world than before. For example,by computers people's higher speed in calculation 不通吧？higher calculation speed/rate today makes it possible to predict the climate weather更好 in a local place, which gives us extreme freedom when designing our plans; the more efficient postmen can bring our letters in just hours compared with a wait for several weeks half a century ago; even ouselves,as the beneficiaries of high efficiency, are greatly liberated by using washing machines instead of doing laudaries by our own. All of the above illustrate a fact that not do people binefit from the development of technology directly怎么会不是呢 :confused: , but from the increased efficiency along with this current.Thus it should be the improvement of people's efficiency,rather than others, that become the prior aim of technological advance.

On the other hand, nevertheless, far from inevitablity do people enjoy more leisure time for their higher efficiency. For one thing, in spite of saving more time for higher efficiency, people carry it out at the cost of spending longer time in learning and practising to improve themselves. 这个观点8错！ For example, for using? a new skill, a worker can produce a car in half of the time as that used before , while hours more than two times must be spent to master it, making his or her leisure time less in fact.但学好了以后，并不要天天再学好呀？这样说不大好。 For the other thing,as professor Liu看来你很喜欢这个教授呢，又听到TA高见了——joking ;) , an authority of sociology in my univercity, once said( and I paraphrased ), "Seldom is the amount of leisure time determined by his or her speed of finishing a task, but based on his or her nature and pursuit."That is to say,if one wants to burden a lot, he or she, though efficient, will still be busy, since there are always a plenty of work to do; while being a lazy fellow, however slowly he or she works, there remains quite a little leisure, for only a few tasks appear in the plan. Therefore, high efficiency may not bring much leisure time.

In sum, from what has been stated above, we can draw a conlusion that as the basis what benefits our socity, high efficiency of people should certainly be the fudamental goal of technological development. Besides,what also must be pointed out here is that this high efficiency does not result in more leisure time of people inevitably, by contrast, making them busier possibly.

个人感觉观点和例子都不十分令人信服呢。——乱拍，偶的思维已被ISSUE弄得乱七八糟的了。 :mad:  郁闷呀！ :mad: 可以看看猫猫624JJ的。

Mars3000UID: 198477

谢谢楼上了
你这么批下去我才能有进步吗 :cool:
参考了你的意见，在上面改过了
一起加油了！

枫丹UID: 166492

No.1 issue30 这回还不算太迟，老规矩，互拍砖头吧！
The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：毫无疑问，追求人的高效率应该是技术进步的根本目的，但高效的结果却未必带来更多的闲暇时间。
B1，因为由技术进步所引起的高效率是令人们受益的前提，其它大部分的便利都是由此衍生而出的，因此它应当是技术进步的主要目的。
B2，但即便获得了高效率，这并不代表人们一定能享受更多的闲暇时光。
b1,人们要花更多的时间学习
b2,闲暇时间的多少也不是主要由人们的工作效率决定的。
结论：高效率应该是技术进步的主要目的，但不必然带来更充裕的时间。

As the tide of technology goes forward by leaps and bounds, never in any era of history was our society improved so much as it is today. When satisfying with the accomplishment achieved, people at the same time, begin to pay their attention to questions, what is the most significant aim of the advancement of technology and whether it will bring us more time freely dominated. As far as I am concerned, increasing people's efficiency, without doubt, should be the primary goal of technological advancement, however, it may not lead to more leisure time necessarily.最后这一句组织的不错，把意思说清楚了

On the one hand, the prior aim of progress in technology should lie in making people efficient, because many other further benifits, brought by the appearance of new technology or the improvement of the old, are based on high efficiency. In other words, just under the prerequisit of this efficiency,a result of technological innovation, we step in a more convenient world than before. For example,by airplanes, people can arrive at another continent in just hours, which helps them get rid of a boring time-wasting journy for ever; for the use of computers, so greatly have scientists enhanced their speed in calculation that they can spend the time saved on other researches in order to abtain more significant achievement; with washing machines dominating each family, even ouselves,as the beneficiaries of high efficiency, are greatly liberated for being away from doing laudaries by our own. All of the above illustrate a fact nearly every positive change coming along with the breakthrough of technology comes from high efficiency. Thus it should be the improvement of people's efficiency,rather than others, that become the prior aim of technological advancement.
呵呵，不是报复呕！！1， fact, such as computer, washing machines,->change =>it should be our aims ?? aim 是一个目标，我理解成一个源动力，不是因为他们的结果而就是这个目标，不能说因为你学习后得到了好成绩，因此成绩好就是你的一个目标。 而是说，成绩好对你重要，因此你的目标应该是成绩好，这里我的思路也开阔了。不是说是不是，而是说为什么是
On the other hand, nevertheless, far from inevitability do people enjoy more leisure time for their higher efficiency. For one thing, in spite of saving more time for being more efficient节省时间为效率，似乎不通？？？, people carry it out at the cost of spending longer time in learning and practising to improve themselves. For example, for using a new skill, a worker can produce a car in half of the time as that used before , while it takes them hours more than hundreds of times to master it, as well as to update his or her knowledge and improve the skill, making the leisure time less in fact. For the other thing,as professor Liu, an authority of sociology in my univercity, once said( and I paraphrased ), 这样说到是很聪明，呵呵"Seldom is the amount of leisure time determined by his or her speed of finishing a task, but based on his or her nature and pursuit."That is to say,if one wants to burden a lot, he or she, though efficient, will still be busy, since there are always a plenty of work to do; while being a lazy fellow, however slowly he or she works, there remains quite a little leisure, for only a few tasks appear in the plan. Therefore, high efficiency may not bring much leisure time.
建议你发上来之前把错字都改一下，这个例子似乎用的不太妥当。你说学习，但是学习和效率之间是什么关系呢？而且你开头的第一句叙述的并不清楚，for higer efficiency 还是因为，为了，表示因为时一般放在前面

In sum, from what has been stated above, we can draw a conlusion that as the basis what benefits our socity, high efficiency of people should certainly be the fudamental goal of technological development. Besides,what also must be pointed out here is that this high efficiency does not result in more leisure time of people inevitably, by contrast, making them busier very likely.
还是那句，不同意把题目分成两部分，即使两部分也要有主有次，这毕竟不是比较的题目，中心只能有一个，要么efficiency, or leisure time.

Mars3000UID: 198477

[B]呵呵，不是报复呕！！1， fact, such as computer, washing machines,->change =>it should be our aims ?? aim 是一个目标，我理解成一个源动力，不是因为他们的结果而就是这个目标，不能说因为你学习后得到了好成绩，因此成绩好就是你的一个目标。 而是说，成绩好对你重要，因此你的目标应该是成绩好，这里我的思路也开阔了。不是说是不是，而是说为什么是 [/B]  

我是这么理解的：技术进步给人们带来诸多好处，而人们由于技术进步享受到的诸多收益又无一例外的是以效率为前提的，因此提到效率自然应该是技术进步的核心目的，因为只要它得以实现，其他的都成为必然了。而我在举例中也注意暗示人们享受的诸多好处是由高效带来的。

[B]for being more efficient节省时间为效率，似乎不通？？[/B]
确实错了，因该是because of

B2 其实是论证效率随节省了单位工作时间，但并未给人们带来更多空闲，因为为了达到这一高效，人们不得不不断学习，更新自己的知识，这反而会占用比原来更多的时间。

感觉我们对题目的理解不太一样，我采取的是赞同前半段反对后半段的方式。我还是认为作者的阐述其实是分层次的。

谢谢拍砖,欢迎提不同意见啊，互相学习。 :)

boyjimUID: 125249

战神兄~你和幽兰的签名档都好长阿~~嘻嘻~~~~

山涧风笛UID: 196557

最初由 boyjim 发布
[B]战神兄~你和幽兰的签名档都好长阿~~嘻嘻~~~~ [/B]

你的签名也不短呢 :)
学习一下!提纲写得不错,讨论也热烈!
赞!

Mars3000UID: 198477

战神兄~你和幽兰的签名档都好长阿~~嘻嘻~~~~

什么战神啊，感觉自己效率极低 :(
真不知JIM老弟你一天八篇是怎么写出来的
难道都是一勺成，不用改的？
得和你取经了

再就是练习时的记时是想好思路再写好呢，还是拿过来就写，构思写作都算在45分钟内呢？又不懂了 :confused:

最后就是没事帮着看看文章，多提批评意见，帮兄弟一把了，呵呵。

boyjimUID: 125249

嘿嘿嘿~Mars不是战神么？我一般写完也就那个德行~主要自己思路清楚就好了~点不要写重复了就好了~
到后面我就是拿过来就写咯~还能咋样啊~连速度么
不过你现在相当不错了~归纳总结一下就好了

Mars3000UID: 198477

呵呵,又受教了,抓紧练习
谢
拟把舒狂图一醉,我是战神偶怕谁 :cool:

davidjackyUID: 135962

The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time.

提纲：毫无疑问，追求人的高效率应该是技术进步的根本目的，但高效的结果却未必带来更多的闲暇时间。
B1，因为由技术进步所引起的高效率是令人们受益的前提，其它大部分的便利都是由此衍生而出的，因此它应当是技术进步的主要目的。
B2，但即便获得了高效率，这并不代表人们一定能享受更多的闲暇时光。
b1,人们要花更多的时间学习
b2,闲暇时间的多少也不是主要由人们的工作效率决定的。
结论：高效率应该是技术进步的主要目的，但不必然带来更充裕的时间。

As the tide of technology goes forward by leaps and bounds, never in any era of history was our society improved so much as it is是不是用does today. When satisfying with the accomplishment achieved, people at the same time, begin to pay their attention to questions, what is the most significant aim of the advancement of technology and whether it will bring us more time freely dominated. As far as I am concerned, increasing people's efficiency, without doubt, should be the primary goal of technological advancement, however, it may not lead to more leisure time necessarily.观点明确，很好，这里也预示着本文将作两方面分析

On the one hand, the prior aim of progress in technology should lie in making people efficient, because many other further benifits, brought by the appearance of new technology or the improvement of the old, are based on high efficiency. In other words, just under the prerequisit of this efficiency,a result of technological innovation, we step in a more convenient world than before. For example,by airplanes, people can arrive at another continent in just hours, which helps them get rid of a boring time-wasting journy for ever; for the use of computers, so greatly have scientists enhanced their speed in calculation that they can spend the time saved on other researches in order to abtain more significant achievement; with washing machines dominating each family, even ouselves,as the beneficiaries of high efficiency, are greatly liberated for being away from doing laudaries by our own. All of the above illustrate a fact nearly every positive change coming along with the breakthrough of technology comes from high efficiency. Thus it should be the improvement of people's efficiency,rather than others, that become the prior aim of technological advancement.第一，单词拼写错误较多而没有纠正；第二，标号之后有个空格，考试要注意；分析的还可以吧

On the other hand, nevertheless, far from inevitablity do people enjoy more leisure time for their higher efficiency. For one thing, in spite of saving more time for being more efficient, people carry it out at the cost of spending longer time in learning and practising to improve themselves. For example, for using a new skill, a worker can produce a car in half of the time as that used before , while it takes them hours more than hundreds of times to master it, as well as to update his or her knowledge and improve the skill, making the leisure time less in fact. For the other thing,as professor Liu, an authority of sociology in my univercity, once said( and I paraphrased ), "Seldom is the amount of leisure time determined by his or her speed of finishing a task, but based on his or her nature and pursuit."That is to say,if one wants to burden a lot, he or she, though efficient, will still be busy, since there are always a plenty of work to do; while being a lazy fellow, however slowly he or she works, there remains quite a little leisure, for only a few tasks appear in the plan. Therefore, high efficiency may not bring much leisure time.

In sum, from what has been stated above, we can draw a conlusion that as the basis what benefits our socity, high efficiency of people should certainly be the fudamental goal of technological development. Besides,what also must be pointed out here is that this high efficiency does not result in more leisure time of people inevitably, by contrast, making them busier very likely.
【下次最好不要再出现这么多的拼写错误和格式的错误，文章论述没有认真的研究，但是个人认为题目分层问题倒不是很大。】

Mars3000UID: 198477

谢谢斑竹了。
拼写和空格的问题是老毛病了
不过这回下决心了，晚上刚刚把自己帖子上的在WORD中好好教核了一便。
再次感谢，还请继续关注啊。 :)