Argument216 今日机警题，大家都来砸砸砸啦！

imjasonUID: 176604

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The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
'Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average.'
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Clearview as mentioned in this article seems at first glance to be a good recommended place for retirement. After all, a place with natural beauty and consistent climate is one of the attractions to people to live in. However, with close scrutiny with the recommendation, it masks some illogical flaws which render the conclusion unconvincing as it stands.

The threshold in this article involves that it lacks the reactions from the elders who having been in Clearview. Because the reactions to Clearview from these retire men can greatly and authoritatively contribute to the question whether the city is suitable to live in or not. If Clearview is really an appealing place to live in, it will attract much more elders to there, especially those after they are retired. The suggestions of these people would be much persuasive and credible as an advertisement. As the author in this article overlooks to provide such evidence, it will be short of sorts of credibility.

Additionally, this article is also weakened in the aspect that the housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly last year. Even though the costs have fallen, there is also the probability that they are still higher than those in other nearby towns. And no further evidence could assure that the costs would keep on declining, or it is likely increase a little to some extent. What's more, even if the costs and the real estate taxes in Clearview are lower than others nearby, they might be the indications that the economic level in this area is accordingly lower than that of the others, resulting in the insufficient public services it would supply.

Meanwhile, the author also claims that the mayor in Clearview promises to improve schools, streets and public services, which might prove what the possibility assumed above. On the other hand, these new programs include the improvement in schools and streets. If so, it might be out of the reach of these elders since they seldom consider that the schools and the streets are little related to the comfort of living there. Further, as these programes are only the mayor's promise, it means that they are still in the plans or even in dreams and thus the accomplishment is likely several years later. In this case, this recommendation will be not so persuasive as it should be.

Finally, this recommendation unjustifiably assumes that the more of the physicians in the area would undoubtedly give the excellent health care. Common sense tells us that the great quantity unnecessarily assures the good quality. In other words, even though the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, it unnecessarily results in the excellent health care these retire men would accept. In this aspect, this recommendation of Clearview city would also be untenable as it stands.

In sum, this planning for retirement in Clearview is not the same as it is claimed to be the top choice. The author in this article should provide suggestions from the elders who have lived there as well as the concrete levels of the economy and the physicians in the area. After all, a kind climate is only one of the numerous attractions.

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

没时间拍，UP一下！

imjasonUID: 176604

呵呵，JJ你还是安心准备了，等你考完了在砸也不迟的了。
加油哦……
等你的好消息了。
武大的樱花过了冒啊？

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

一定！
偶不是武大的。可能开过了吧？

lxwinforeverUID: 203247

共勉!!!

ltltiouUID: 203791

赞一个
mm写的真不错
感觉很流畅
而且逻辑错误都批驳的很到点子上
不过就是第一段的批驳感觉有些restate
不像其它三段那样有理有据并且层次分明
个人感觉是不是可以合并到其它段或者想办法展开的更加有力一些

一点拙见，如果mm觉得哪里说的不对，也请指出来
我对argu不是很有把握
希望能共同提高

另外有个问题mm能否帮我解疑？
我感觉阿狗里面的调查特别多
但哪些是真正的不明调查呢？
我看的时候觉得只要有调查都可以往这上面扯
不过在看232的时候，几乎每个人都批驳了这一点，而其它一些我觉得也可以这样批的却没有人写，为什么？是不是我对不明调查的概念有错误？还是只是巧合？

希望mm教教偶，谢了！

imjasonUID: 176604

首先声明了，我不……不……不是MM啦！

我个人感觉的是ARGU里面遇到STUDY & SURVEY都可以是批驳的
我回头去查下了，

枫丹UID: 166492

汗~~~~~mm? 我以为我的直觉是错的呢?哈哈:)

ltltiouUID: 203791

汗。。。
不好意思啦
偶比较迟钝的说^_^

ioiwinUID: 183956

------题目------
The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
'Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average.'
------正文------
Clearview as mentioned in this article seems at first glance to be a good recommended place for retirement. After all, a place with natural beauty and consistent climate is one of the attractions to people to live in. However, with close scrutiny with the recommendation, it masks some illogical flaws which render the conclusion unconvincing as it stands.

The threshold in this article involves that it lacks the reactions from the elders who havinghave been in Clearview. Because the reactions to Clearview from these retire men can greatly and authoritatively contribute to the question whether the city is suitable to live in or not. If Clearview is really an appealing place to live in, it will attract much more elders to there, especially those after they are retired. The suggestions of these people would be much persuasive and credible as an advertisement. As the author in this article overlooks to provide such evidence, it will be short of sorts of 这是敲错了还是固定表达 请提示一下 credibility.这段是象是提出建议增加 title statement的说服力吧, 还请提示一下这是否是一个逻辑错误

Additionally, this article is also weakened in the aspect that the housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly last year. Even though the costs have fallen, there is also the probability that they are still higher than those in other nearby towns. And no further evidence could assure that the costs would keep on declining一直下降太过火了吧, or it is likely increase a little to some extent. What's more, even if the costs and the real estate taxes in Clearview are lower than others nearby, they might be the indications that the economic level in this area is accordingly lower than that of the others, resulting in the insufficient public services it would supply.

Meanwhile, the author also claims that the mayor in Clearview promises to improve schools, streets and public services, which might prove what the possibility assumed above. On the other hand, these new programs include the improvement in schools and streets.这句话有点别扭,并且上面提到了public services If so, it might be out of the reach of these elders since they seldom consider that the schools and the streets are little related to the comfort of living there. Further, as these programes are only the mayor's promise, it means that they are still in the plans or even in dreams and thus the accomplishment is likely several years later. In this case, this recommendation will be not so persuasive as it should be.

Finally, this recommendation unjustifiably assumes that the more不太确定这种表达 of the physicians in the area would undoubtedly give the excellent health care. Common sense tells us that the great quantity unnecessarily assures the good quality. In other words, even though the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, it unnecessarily results in the excellent health care these retire men would accept. In this aspect, this recommendation of Clearview city would also be untenable as it stands.

In sum, this planning for retirement in Clearview is not the same as it is claimed to be the top choice. The author in this article should provide suggestions from the elders who have lived there as well as the concrete levels of the economy and the physicians in the area. After all, a kind climate is only one of the numerous attractions.

ltltiouUID: 203791

楼主能否帮我看看我的argu 4？
谢谢了

bluebirdcstonyUID: 197396

Clearview as mentioned in this article seems at first glance to be a good recommended place for retirement. After all, a place with natural beauty and consistent climate is one of the attractions to people to live in. However, with close scrutiny with [of]the recommendation, it masks some illogical flaws which render the conclusion unconvincing as it stands.

The [用a可以吗？我见的都是这个]threshold [problem] in this article involves that it lacks the reactions from the elders who having been in Clearview[have lived可以吗？WHO不是引一个句子吗？HAVING？]. Because the reactions to Clearview from these retire men can greatly and authoritatively contribute to the question whether the city is suitable to live in or not. If Clearview is really an appealing place to live in, it 已经吸引过去了吧，还用WILL？will attract much more elders to there, especially those after they are retired. The suggestions of these people would be much persuasive and credible as an advertisement. As the author in this article overlooks to provide such evidence, it will be short of sorts of credibility.

Additionally, this article is also weakened in the aspect that the housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly last year. Even though the costs have fallen, there is also [there also has] the probability that they are still higher than those in other nearby towns[since the author neglect to indicate what is the situation of housing cost in Clearview before]再加补一下可以吗？. And{FURTHERMORE你也开始用AND了？再想一个吧，FURTHERMORE好像也不太好，后边已经有一个FURTHER了} no further evidence could [HAVE ASSURED行吗？]assure that the costs would keep on declining, or [it is likely]改成[perhaps it may even]行吗？increase a little to some extent. What's more, even if the costs and the real estate taxes in Clearview are lower than others nearby, they might be the indications that the economic level in this area is accordingly lower than that of the others, resulting in the insufficient public services it would supply.

Meanwhile, the author also claims that the mayor in Clearview promises to improve schools, streets and public services, which might prove what the possibility assumed above. On the other hand, these new programs include the improvement in schools and streets. If so, it might be out of the reach of these elders since they seldom consider that the schools and the streets [are little related]感觉不太对 to the comfort of living there. Further, as these programs are only the mayor's promise, it means that they are still in the plans or even in dreams and thus the accomplishment is likely several years later. In this case, this recommendation will be not so persuasive as it should be.

Finally, this recommendation unjustifiably assumes that the more of the physicians in the area [the much excellent health care retirees would be given行吗？或者你改一下，the more …the more好顺一点]would undoubtedly give the excellent health care. Common sense tells us that the great quantity unnecessarily assures [LEAD TO行吗？]the去掉吧 good quality. In other words, even though the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, it unnecessarily results in the excellent health care these retire men would accept. In this aspect, this recommendation of [retiring in]Clearview city would also be untenable as it stands.

In sum, this planning[ advocacy感觉用planning不太好] for retirement in Clearview is not [the same as]怪怪的 it is claimed to be the top choice. The author in this article should provide suggestions from the elders who have lived there as well as the concrete levels of the economy and the physicians in the area. After all, a kind climate is only one of the numerous attractions.

哪不对,见谅:)

naiba369UID: 131655

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