issue7,恳请拍砖！！！

rebecaUID: 204703

7.The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records.
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It would be natural to take the view that the video camera provides an nicety record of our life, because it can record the picture and the activity of people' live or something else, at least it can be seen by human's eyes. However, it would be absurd to claim that it is a more important role in documentation in comparing with the written records.

It is all known that eyes is a window of one's heart, and if one is not a blindman, the most information, which is nearly 90 percent, comes from eyes. In other word, eyes are an major channel to get information. When compare video camera with eyes, we can find they are so similary. Video can act like eyes to record the things happened in our daily life. Moreover, it also like our memory, when we need it, just take it out. It can record the picture and the activity effectively, which many people deem it truthful and reliable. Take the news broadcasted by TV for example. A recent survey conducted by a authoritative organization shows that, more and more people prefer to watching TV news rather than newspaper, and the two of the most crucial reason to induce their shift of choice are that the former will save time, as well as the former can provide more information because the picture is more vivid that words in general. In short, the video record can provide more vivid information, which looks more real and closer to our daily life.

However, written records have special merits. First, the cost of written records is very low. As we know, making written records just need a pen and some paper, while making  video record requires a video camera and some video tapes. However, the sets of machine are so expensive that few people can afford , and to control them needs special technic. Second, the written records can reflect the people inert through using words to depict their thought, but video records can never achieve it. What they can do is to record the activities of people. However, as we know, the activities sometimes cannot reflect the thought, since more and more people are good at conceal their truly thought. Third, the video records easily induce people to become lazy. When watching the video records, the picture change so quickly that people would have no time to think about them in order to make a fair judge. While reading the written records, they can think about those over and over again. In short, written records will help people make a more sensible judge.

As both have their own merits, we should use both of them to help us recording our world and our life. When we use video to draw on the information, we should also take a pen to write it down and to express our feeling on it. Or when we use the record in research or study, the better way I recommend is to use both of them, then you will win a more deep understanding.

All in all, both of video and written record have their respective merits. Therefore, we cannot tell which are better just now. Maybe, in future, the video camera can reach everyone, and to control is as easy as to handle a pen. At that time, I believe the video record will be more appealing to us.

夏天UID: 167116

It would be natural to take the view that the video camera provides an [B]（a) [/B]  nicety([B]没见过这种用法，用形容词呢）[/B]  record of our life, because it can record the picture and the activity of people' live or something else, at least it can be seen by human's eyes. However, it would be absurd to claim that it is a more important role in documentation in comparing with the written records.

It is all known that eyes is a window of one's heart, and if one is not a blindman, the most information, which is nearly 90 percent, comes from eyes. In other word[B]（words) [/B]  , eyes are an [B](a) [/B]  major channel to get information. When compare video camera with eyes, we can find they are so similary[B]( similar) [/B]  . Video can act like eyes to record the things happened in our daily life. Moreover, it also like our memory, when we need it, just take it out. It can record the picture and the activity effectively, which many people deem it truthful and reliable. Take the news broadcasted by TV for example. A recent survey conducted by a authoritative organization shows that, more and more people prefer to watching TV news rather than newspaper, and the two of the most crucial reason to induce their shift of choice are that the former will save time, as well as the former can provide more information because the picture is more vivid that words in general. In short, the video record can provide more vivid information, which looks more real and closer to our daily life.

However, written records have special merits. First, the cost of written records is very low. As we know, making written records just need a pen and some paper, while making video record requires a video camera and some video tapes. However, the sets of machine are so expensive that few people can afford , and to control them needs special technic[B](technics) . [/B]  Second, the written records can reflect the people inert through using words to depict their thought, but video records can never achieve it. What they can do is to record the activities of people. However, as we know, the activities sometimes cannot reflect the thought, since more and more people are good at conceal their truly thought. Third, the video records easily induce people to become lazy. When watching the video records, the picture change so quickly that people would have no time to think about them in order to make a fair judge. While reading the written records, they can think about those over and over again. In short, written records will help people make a more sensible judge.

As both have their own merits, we should use both of them to help us recording our world and our life. When we use video to draw on the information, we should also take a pen to write it down and to express our feeling on it. Or when we use the record in research or study, the better way I recommend is to use both of them, then you will win a more deep understanding.

All in all, both of video and written record have their respective merits. Therefore, we cannot tell which are better just now. Maybe, in future, the video camera can reach everyone, and to control is as easy as to handle a pen. At that time, I believe the video record will be more appealing to us.

文章的思路清晰， 但是
1。语法错误较多， 还望楼主再斟酌一下用词和句子的选择；
2。最后两段有点重复， 试试看能不能合并；

rebecaUID: 204703

谢谢夏天：）

lsfrancisUID: 193777

楼主真幸福啊，有人拍砖啊。为什么偶写的issue7没人理呢？555…………
言归正传，语言方面偶就不说了（因为偶很菜），偶觉得最后一段和前文联系不是很紧密，似乎没有很好的深化文章的观点，如果直接的把观点表达出来可能会更好些。

lsfrancisUID: 193777

偶把自己写的issue7也重贴一遍吧。偶的观点和楼主的差不多，有不少例子都很类似的，呵呵。
声明：偶只会用低级的词汇，偶很菜的。

                                                                 Issue 7
The speaker asserts that video recording is a more important means of documenting contemporary life than a written record because the former is more accurate and convincing. I concede that video cameras play more and more important role in recording contemporary life, which was usually recorded by written records before. However, I strongly hold that video documentation cannot take place of written records, and that video records serve to supplement written records.

Admittedly, video documentation is more accurate and objective than written records, which may be influenced by the records' authors. Since the advent of video technology, we are used to obtaining information from television, a machine used to spread video records. More and more people, for example, get into the habit of gaining information from TV rather than newspaper. They think video records are more convincing than written records. Besides, no one can be expected to completely and accurately recount such events as a football game, an election, a wedding ceremony and so on.

But do we not need written records? Unfortunately, it seems not be the case. In many fields, written records cannot be taken place by video records. For example, law cannot be described by video documentation, and the historical events before invention of video camera can only recount by written documentation as well. In addition, only by written records, people can express their mood, feelings, and other inner activities.

Besides, compared with written records, video records have some disadvantages, which are hardly to be conquered. First, video records cannot be used to quantitatively describe information. When we do a scientific experiment, we can only use camera to recount the phenomenon, but we cannot use it to documenting the figures concerned with the experiment. Secondly, obtaining a written record is much more convenient than getting a video one. People, with a pen and a piece of paper, can write down what they have seen at anywhere and at anytime. Nevertheless, Not everybody has a video camera, and even they have one, they may not take it wherever they go. Thus, Getting a video record is impossible sometime.

Finally, using video records as a supplement of written records, we can recount contemporary life better than only using either of them. Written records record people's feelings, ideas, thoughts and other subjective things or what video cannot express, while video camera document the environment, process and other objective things, which are adequate to be recorded by video means. In this way, we can record the contemporary life not only accurately and convincingly, but also
thoroughly and deeply.

In sum, the speaker overstates the importance of video records and overlooks the necessity of written records. Even though I concede that video camera plays an important role, written records are still cannot be substituted. To better recording contemporary life, we need both video records and written records.