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发表于 2005-6-28 17:27:50 |显示全部楼层
第一次写,希望大家给点建议.先谢谢了!

"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."


Television is leading the development of the way of education. People are involving the discussion as to how to learn the knowledge. Some prefer to follow the conventional way like reading books while others find it better to assimilate the information by watching television.

There is no doubt that television is a good way to get current information. People can know the latest news from TV, while a book always need at least several months to accomplish the proceed to deliver. Hence, we usually find a book containing "history", but not "news".

Furthermore, television is easy for people to accept knowledge. Not only visual agogment, people can also enjoy acoustic feeling, which help them to learn things by heaart according to psychologists. As we know, the pictures in TV are vivid, let alone adding up the background music, which stimulates the cells in brain deeply and force their activities. Then things becomes easier to memorize.

We can not deny the advantages that TV brings to us. Unfortunately, more and more parents admonish their children not to watch TV for it harms children's health. First, in my country, the rate of ill-eyes is very high. The majority of the causion is over -watching TV. Children and even some adults have poor self-discipline. They can not control themselves to move away from television. Always, they would watch TV continuously over five hours or more, and seldom realise the bad condition of their eyes. In my class, nearly three-fourths of students wearglasses. Second, too much radiation from TV sets affect children's growth. Cells in children's body are sensitive to the radiation from television, computers and so on. It may cause incorrect development of bones.

Besides, watching TV would cause a bad learing habit. People will become lazy to grab knowledge and wait mechanically to accept them. Reading books is a way to practise people's reading skill and logical skill, eliminate the uselessness and absorb the useful ones. Up to now, at least no school has canceled the exams of reading.

Books made of paper are convenient for us to make notes. We can underline key words and write personal views directly on paper. How can you do these while you are watching TV?

In sum, during thousands of years, that people still inherit the way of reading books confirm the importance of books. Though TV can help people study in some aspects, it is adverse to us.What is more, it can not enable us to practise logical skill and form a good habbit.
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发表于 2005-6-28 19:10:52 |显示全部楼层

来看看:)

Television is leading the development of the way of education. People are involving the discussion as to how to learn the knowledge. Some prefer to follow the conventional way like reading books while others find it better to assimilate the information by watching television.

There is no doubt that television is a good way to get current information. People can know the latest news from TV, while a book always need at least several months to accomplish the proceed to deliver. Hence, we usually find a book containing "history", but not "news".

Furthermore, television is easy for people to accept knowledge. Not only visual agogment, people can also enjoy acoustic feeling, which help them to learn things by heaart according to psychologists. As we know, the pictures in TV are vivid, let alone adding up the background music, which stimulates the cells in brain deeply and force their activities. Then things becomes easier to memorize. 这句不错

We can not deny the advantages that TV brings to us. Unfortunately, more and more parents admonish their children not to watch TV for it harms children's health. First, in my country, the rate of ill-eyes 近视眼貌似不是这么讲的吧 is very high. The majority of the causion is over -watching TV. Children and even some adults have poor self-discipline. They can not control themselves to move away from television. Always, they would watch TV continuously over five hours or more, and seldom realise the bad condition of their eyes. In my class, nearly three-fourths of students wearglasses. Second, too much radiation from TV sets affect children's growth. Cells in children's body are sensitive to the radiation from television, computers and so on. It may cause incorrect development of bones.

Besides, watching TV would cause a bad learing habit. People will become lazy to grab knowledge and wait mechanically to accept them. Reading books is a way to practise people's reading skill and logical skill, eliminate the uselessness and absorb the useful ones. Up to now, at least no school has canceled the exams of reading.

Books made of paper are convenient for us to make notes. We can underline key words and write personal views directly on paper. How can you do these while you are watching TV?

In sum, during thousands of years, that people still inherit the way of reading books confirm the importance of books. Though TV can help people study in some aspects, it is adverse to us.What is more, it can not enable us to practise logical skill and form a good habbit.

不好意思哈,没怎么仔细看。
拼写错误就自己改了哈。

嘿嘿,楼主说自己刚考完托福,文章读起来有点像TWE。感觉楼主在写television的利弊,没怎么把重点放在“电视怎么帮助人们学习”和“电视与书本在帮助人们学习方面的比较”?而偶认为这个这两点恰恰是题目的关键词。

有空来探讨一下哦
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发表于 2005-6-28 19:36:25 |显示全部楼层
恩,谢谢小玩。
我写完后也有点感觉跑题。晚上改下试试

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发表于 2005-6-28 21:47:31 |显示全部楼层
回去好好改了下,不知道现在这样有没有跑题,麻烦再看下:


Television is leading the development of the way of education. People are involving the discussion as to how to learn the knowledge. Some prefer to follow the conventional way like reading books while others find it better to assimilate the information by watching television.

There is no doubt that television is a good way to get current information. People can know the latest news from TV, while a book always need at least several months to accomplish the proceed to deliver. Hence, we usually find a book containing "history", but not "news".

Furthermore, television is easy for people to accept knowledge. Not only visual agogment, people can also enjoy acoustic feeling, which help them to learn things by heaart according to psychologists. As we know, the pictures in TV are vivid, let alone adding up the background music, which stimulates the cells in brain deeply and force their activities. Then things becomes easier to memorize.

We can not deny the advantages that TV brings to us. Unfortunately, people  can not ignor the importance of books.

First, reading books is a good way to practise people's reading and logical skill. Because people have to eliminate the useless content, absorb the useful ones or make notes while reading. Up to now, at least no school has canceled the tests of reading in entrance exams for candidates. Some subjects like psychology ask students have strong logical analysis.

Second, reading books help us to form a good habbit. It stimulates the activity of brain and train us the way to thought, analyze abstruse ideas,  imagine the scenes mentioned in books. Contrarily, people who like the way of watching TV  will become lazy to grab knowledge and wait mechanically to accept them.

Third, books made of paper are convenient for us to make notes. We can underline key words and write personal views directly on paper. How can you do these while you are watching TV?

Besides, over-watching TV cause short-sightedness. In my country, the rate of short-sightedness is very high. The majority of the causion is over -watching. What is more, too much radiation from TV sets affect children's growth. Cells in children's body are sensitive to the radiation from television, computers and so on. It may cause incorrect development of bones.

In sum, during thousands of years, that people still inherit the way of reading books confirms the importance of books. Though TV can help people study in some aspects, it is adverse to us and may not so helpful as books.

另外,结尾总是觉得不舒服。不知道大家有什么好建议。

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发表于 2005-6-29 15:51:10 |显示全部楼层
Television is leading the development of the way of education. People are involving the discussion as to how to learn the knowledge. Some prefer to follow the conventional way like reading books while others find it---加上is better to assimilate the information by watching television.

There is no doubt that television is a good way to get current information. People can know the latest news from TV, while a book always need at least several months to accomplish the proceed to deliver. 大楷知道你要讲什么,是讲从完成著作到出版印刷需要很长时间吧,可是表达得好像不清楚。简单一些用accomplish即可。可是好像也有歧义,这个完成是指完成阅读好像也可以的。楼主的意思呢?Hence, we usually find a book containing "history", but not "news".

Furthermore, television is easy for people to accept knowledge. Not only visual agogment, people can also enjoy acoustic feeling, which help them to learn things by heaart according to psychologists. As we know, the pictures in TV are vivid, let alone adding up the background music, which stimulates the cells in brain deeply and force their activities. Then things becomes easier to memorize.

We can not deny the advantages that TV brings to us. Unfortunately, people  can not ignor the importance of books.思路很清晰

First, reading books is a good way to practise people's reading and logical skill. Because people have to eliminate the useless content, absorb the useful ones or make notes while reading. Up to now, at least no school has canceled the tests of reading in entrance exams for candidates. Some subjects like psychology ask students have strong logical analysis.

Second, reading books help us to form a good habbit. It stimulates the activity of brain and train us the way to thought, analyze abstruse ideas,  imagine the scenes mentioned in books. Contrarily, people who like the way of watching TV  will become lazy to grab knowledge and wait mechanically to accept them.

Third, books made of paper are convenient for us to make notes. We can underline key words and write personal views directly on paper. How can you do these while you are watching TV?

Besides, over-watching TV cause short-sightedness. In my country, the rate of short-sightedness is very high. The majority of the causion is over -watching. What is more, too much radiation from TV sets affect children's growth. Cells in children's body are sensitive to the radiation from television, computers and so on. It may cause incorrect development of bones.这个关系好像不是很大啊

In sum, during thousands of years, that people still inherit the way of reading books confirms the importance of books. Though TV can help people study in some aspects, it is adverse to us and may not so helpful as books.
你的题号好像和孙远猴哥的不一样 这篇是183吗
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发表于 2005-6-29 19:50:15 |显示全部楼层
哦,不好意思我也没注意题号。其实本来想写I38(ISSUE38), 不小心写了138。现在改过来了。

倒数第二段我本来一来是想说明看电视的坏处,二来严谨点,三来凑点字数。不知道这样的行不行。

关于第一点楼上提出的我再想下,有合适的我们再一起交流下。

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