这两天修改文章的一点感想

if_lotusUID: 175616

这两天修改了几篇文章（issue），感觉最重要的还是审题。如果写作时间是45分钟的话，我个人认为复习阶段可以花20分钟来理解/分析题目，否则，写偏了还不如不写。

提纲定下来以后，要训练的就是论证的深入，大家还是要多看范文，多总结。在头脑中要清楚有几种论述方法：
——搭桥法（抓住本质特征）
——欲擒故纵法（参考“The media(books,film,music,television,for example) tend to creat rather than reflect the values of a society”6分范文第2段论证）
——釜底抽薪法（反对原因）
——另起炉灶法（他因法）
——假设法

开始动笔：
不要去管语法！
有的人花2个多钟头磨出一篇来，why？就是老想着“这句话用英语怎么说”，“这个词用得对不对”这样的语法问题。
建议从开头到结尾，写起来不要停，有不会表达的地方，就用中文代替，这样你的思路才不会打乱。
写完之后再去按中文意思查字典。我用的是《牛津高阶英汉双解词典》，里面有很多例句，用得非常地道。比如前两天我写的issue203中，用到了“in character with sth. 与……风格相同”这个词组，一般人会用reflect，represent，symbolize就算替换，也感觉比较单调，文章里添几个词组，就活跃灵巧多了。

之后就是升华/加分了，文章中有一两句比喻，特别显眼。这就靠平时边复习边积累了，多看文章吧~

最后强调一下，和native language的老外比起来，我们的优势不是语言，要胜在逻辑推理。
审题的重要性在怎么强调也不过分！

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-10-5 01:45 编辑 ]

yogurt4UID: 198389

suppot~
有空的时候回来把它具体的展开谈一下
造福大家:)

leo_chenUID: 206840

要是几种论证方法都能给个example就好了
听修锐讲了半天，也没搞搞清楚这写方法该用在哪里，怎么用，好处在哪里

86390216UID: 2102486

是啊 练了几篇以后发觉有个瓶颈 上不去了

if_lotusUID: 175616

题目：
"The media (books, film, music, television, for example) tend to create rather than reflect the values of a society."


对这篇文章的B1我举例说明一下啥叫“欲擒故纵”。
做过GRE阅读的朋友也可以理解为“新老观点”对比。一般GRE文章通常会这样论述：
提出老观点——>批判老观点——>提出新观点
作者意图在于支持新观点，却先欲擒故纵的提出老观点。



For our grandparents it occurred through films and books.  For the baby boomers it was a result of television and revolutionary music.  No matter how the impact took place, it is clear that since its very advent, the media have played a crucial role in not simply being representative of the values of our society but creating them as well.

During the roaring twenties Americans found themselves in a struggle between the old ways of their ancestors and the new ways of the future.  The once steadfast beliefs that men and women should not touch while dancing, and that ladies should not drink or smoke were suddenly being challenged[GRE阅读中，B1可以视为“现象解释型”文章，第2句话摆明了现象，后面要对此现象作解释/挖原因。].  From where was all this rebellion stemming?  Partly it was due to the returning doughboys from the shores of Europe bringing home revolutionary ideas they had encountered while at war[提出观点1].  Nonetheless[强转折], returning soldiers could not be held responsible for the social upheaval that America experienced批判观点1.  There had to be another cause, and there was, the media[提出真正支持的观点2].  Although the films of the era were silent they spoke volumes to the society for which they were created.  Women in these movies  wore their hemlines a few inches shorter than the decade before them and they wore cosmetics to accentuate their new bobbed haircuts.  The movies, as well as the books of that era, demonstrated a new materialistic attitude that America had never before experienced.  Films portrayed every character as having the money to buy a new car, drink, smoke and partake in the  leisures of life, a philosophy that was soon adopted by the youth of the decade.  The use of the media in the twenties was to serve as a catalyst for the revolutionary ideas that were circulating.  The films and books of that era sped America along its path of change that eventually led to the greatest social unrest that the United States had ever known.

Unlike the twenties, the sixties and seventies utalized the media in a way that appealed to those searching for truth in a lost and confused world.  Martin Luther King Jr.  realized the impact of the media on society during his campaign for civil rights.  King urged his followers to withstand any abuse that they might encounter because the media will take their peacefulness into the homes of their society.  By doing so, King sucessfully began to change the traditional view of race.  Americans began to sympathize with the protesters because of the undeserved turmoil they faced at the hands of the government.  As a result, America relinquished the Jim Crow laws and saw many other groups press for their individual rights as well.  Television cameras rolled as Cesar Chavez organized the migrant workers in California and as Bella Abzug and Gloria Steinham linked arms to protest the lack of women's rights.

While the media helped to shape some attitudes about racism and gender it also helped to uncover the truth behind government lies.  During the Nixon


不知道我说清楚没有，大家能体会到“欲擒故纵”了吗？呵呵

如果有边阅读，边作文的同学，可以在做阅读的时候体会一下作者的深入分析/论证如何在我们的作文中得以运用。
GRE考试的各个部分其实是相通的。
共勉！

kenwuUID: 154956

我个人感觉自己论证好像总是不自觉地在用假设法，其他方法用的很少。期待从上面文章中得到体会以便提高。

if_lotusUID: 175616

还有一种论证方式，是比较常见的，就是正反论证，这个方法也比较容易掌握。

D组fhxywei的issue63我做的修改批注中，注意B1和B2，他都是采用正反论证的方法:
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2
（文章改的花花绿绿，主要看B1、B2中间部分）

另外提一句，正文论述部分的论证方法最好采用“多钟论证方法结合”的做法，这样能体现一个人的功力，也不会显得单调。

if_lotusUID: 175616

还有一种论证方式，是比较常见的，就是正反论证，这个方法也比较容易掌握。

D组fhxywei的issue63我做的修改批注中，注意B1和B2，他都是采用正反论证的方法:
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2
（文章改的花花绿绿，主要看B1、B2中间部分）

另外提一句，正文论述部分的论证方法最好采用“多钟论证方法结合”的做法，这样能体现一个人的功力，文章也不会显得单调。

leo_chenUID: 206840

嗯，看懂了。就是先找个靶子，然后批驳，在立论。很好的增加文章长度的办法。不过这样写就不好把ts放在首句了。

if_lotusUID: 175616

leo_chen：对的，5楼B1就没有TS，第一句话是介绍背景。

                整个B1可以视为“现象解释型”，第二句话摆现象

if_lotusUID: 175616

谁能举个釜底抽薪的例子阿？

这招我一直不会用

leo_chenUID: 206840

搭桥法我也没找到sample

if_lotusUID: 175616

搭桥法我记得修锐举过一个例子,不过是提纲,怎么写还不清楚~

回头我给你找找提纲,体会一下.