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发表于 2005-7-12 23:44:56 |只看该作者
第1篇哦..帮我看看吧..折磨了我1整天呢.....累死了..睡觉了  晚安~

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发表于 2005-7-12 23:53:33 |只看该作者
没人给看,虽然我很需要建议:(,麻烦你帮我看看吧,真得很感谢!!
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所以只相信拥抱的温暖
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你华丽的童话还是落幕

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发表于 2005-7-12 23:55:30 |只看该作者
10G, 11T

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发表于 2005-7-13 00:42:19 |只看该作者
感谢哀同学!上次你已经看过我的文章了,但写的很短......这次是我的修改稿希望指点:)
College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government.【53】
大学教育应该对所有学生免费,由政府来全额资助。

教育问题之奖学金
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Syllabus:
For: 1.Some students who can't get enrolled into the college because of high tuition would have the chance to further their study.
2.Promot the country’s reputation.
Against: 1.Apt to cause extravagance.
       2.To some developing countries, it is impractical to the government.
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The speaker asserts that the government should fully finance college and university education. I agree that this claim would help some students have the chance to enjoy higher education. However, this act may cause extravagance in campus and still has inherent impracatility.

    Admittedly, the most important meaning of the exemption of college tuition lies in that some students who can't enter the college because of high tuition would have the chance to further their study. It will help to promote the general strength of the country, in turn, to enhance the competetive force and influence in the world.

    In addition, free tuition for college and university indicates that the government is powerful and the country is highly developed in the case of modern education. Good reputation thereby attracts more international students to study and live in this country. The graduates will spread the information they've seen and heard inside, and unconsciously advertise for the country. Germany is a good example that is well known for its public education system.

    Nevertheless, the claim overlooks some negative problems caused by entirely free education in college and university. Without financial pressure existing, some students may not take care of the resources in the campus and get into the habit of extravagance. It is not only a detrimental influence to young people who are in their golden period of time in life, but also a great waste in this energy-strained world.

    On the other hand, given the unbalance of the world's development, this claim seems impractical in some developing countries. As a matter of fact, millions of people are living in extreme impoverishment and searching for food every day. Local governments’ urgent business is to eliminate hunger, rather than abolish charging the tuition for higher education. Take China for example, every year nearly five million freshmen get enrolled into colleges and universities around the country. In average, each one expend six hundred dollars a year and the government would defray three billion dollars if the tuition is fully financed by it while China’s GDP is only 15.6 thousand billion dollars (2004). That's why developing countries are still charging high tuition for college and university education in comparison of the average personal income--it's not that the governments don't want eliminate the tuition, but that they have to at this stage.

    In sum, free college and university education is one good way to promote the strength of individuals and countries. Whereas, we should prevent students from wasting public resources and try to provide various fellowship in the campus, which is much more feasible to the developing countries.
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发表于 2005-7-13 00:50:22 |只看该作者
不好意思,上面忘了给连接.....见谅见谅:)
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发表于 2005-7-13 00:57:34 |只看该作者
我觉得版主们应该给这贴表个精啦。。。。。

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发表于 2005-7-13 08:01:44 |只看该作者
to 豆包,你的文章我已经改到你发的作文贴里面了,你自己去看吧.

对楼上的个位,我的精力有限,你们要耐心等待,还有每个人在短时间内,我只改第一篇,所以贴很多连接,没有用的,还有就是自己没有改过的,不改,别人给你改过,你又没有重新修改的也不改,所以要是你的按照我的顺序没有改到,请参照以上原因,表来骂我了.
人生有些决定是大胆的,但是那并不代表这些决定是错误的。

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发表于 2005-7-13 08:45:51 |只看该作者
我现在进行到70楼,你们可以自己算算还有多少天轮到吧,真的别打我别骂我,看多了也会烦,我也是人的说.
人生有些决定是大胆的,但是那并不代表这些决定是错误的。

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发表于 2005-7-13 09:12:38 |只看该作者
Originally posted by lingli_xiaoai at 2005-7-13 08:45
我现在进行到70楼,你们可以自己算算还有多少天轮到吧,真的别打我别骂我,看多了也会烦,我也是人的说.


哀哥,我的是68楼啊!怎么没改啊?ARGU45
谢谢啦!

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发表于 2005-7-13 12:06:46 |只看该作者
小哀:按您的建议,修改完毕。能否看一眼?

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发表于 2005-7-13 12:21:53 |只看该作者
请大牛帮忙看看,谢谢
ISSUE 5 统一课程 VS 地方课程

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作文失败,只好申请MIT了,谁让它不要GRE呢?

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发表于 2005-7-13 13:03:06 |只看该作者

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发表于 2005-7-13 14:41:31 |只看该作者
我见青山多妩媚,
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见我应如是

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