issue11 我的第一篇，欢迎狠狠地拍

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Issue11
——题目——
All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.
——正文——
Nowadays, as the development of the society and technology, the growing problems, such as energy crisis, environmental problems, healthy problems of people ,and so on have become problems all over the world. I agree with the speaker that all the nations should help support to design a global university which engages the students to solve the world's most persistent social problems, in so far as these problems are not concerned with codes of ethic and customs. I will show my evidence as follows.

To begin with, it is necessary for establishment of global university as the complicity of these social problems have already outweighed the ability of a single country or that of a few countries. As we know, environmental problems have badly influenced on every corner of the earth, see greenhouse effect, environmental contaminations and so forth. Although scientists from different countries have done every effort to study these subjects, they have not yet found out any economical methods to solve them effectively. Admittedly, there are some global organizations assemble efforts from a few counties of the world, and they have got some optimistic effect, but if the cooperation augment to a larger scale, say, a global university which gather the youths and experts all around the world, the result will be outstanding.

Moreover, it is through international communication in global university that students and experts can understand different situation of their countries deeply, and more valid methods could be figure out. As is known to all, same problem may appear to have different effects on every part of the world. Taking environment problem for example, Indians may suffer from oppressive hot weather, whereas Chinese were besieged by the floods. By contrast with these situations, students may realize the essence of abominable climate, and then work out the solution under the guidance of experts. In this process, students can not only learn much knowledge according to their studies, but also analyzing and discussing skills which provide them with capability to solve practical problems.

However, some people may argue that social problem is such a large category, and there are some social problems, such as codes for ethics and customs, may probably not be solved by the global university. Admittedly, these problems are so related to the history and culture of one's country that we rarely make hope to foreign people to understand them. Nevertheless, maybe there are similar situation among different countries, so suggestion from different country may be worthwhile. And in this process, students could learn cultural difference among most of the countries.

To sum up, as the speaker suggest it is advantage to set up a global university with the help of all the nations, for it not only provide students with a large sale of knowledge, which may not be learnt in their own country, but also equip them with deep insight to social problems as well as analysis ability. Furthermore, these persistent social problems have more chance to be settled.
感觉很不好呵，有话说不出来，急死人了，也不知道有没有偏题

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Nowadays, as the development of the society and technology, the growing problems, such as energy crisis, environmental problems, healthy problems of people ,and so on have become problems all over the world. I agree with the speaker that all the nations should help support to design a global university which engages the students to solve the world's most persistent social problems, in so far as these problems are not concerned with codes of ethic and customs. I will show my evidence as follows.
（感觉开头罗索了一点）^_^

To begin with, it is necessary for establishment of global university as the complicity complexity？是这个吗？）of these social problems have already outweighed the ability of a single country or that of a few countries. As we know, environmental problems have badly influenced on every corner of the earth, see greenhouse effect, environmental contaminations and so forth. Although scientists from different countries have done every effort to study these subjects, they have not yet found out any economical methods to solve them effectively(建议thoroughly,不要这么绝对). Admittedly, there are some global organizations assemble efforts from a few counties of the world, and they have got some optimistic effect, but if the cooperation augment to a larger scale, say, a global university which gather the youths and experts （from）all around the world, the result will be outstanding.（better 有比较的吧）好处说明的少了

Moreover, it is through international communication in global university that students and experts can understand different situation of their countries deeply, and more valid methods could be figure out. As is known to all, same problem（s） may appear to have different effects on every part of the world. Taking environment problem for example, Indians may suffer from oppressive hot weather, whereas Chinese were besieged by the floods. By contrast with these situations, students may realize the essence of abominable climate, and then work out the solution under the guidance of experts. In this process, students can not only learn much knowledge according to their studies, but also analyzing and discussing skills which provide them with capability to solve practical problems.

However, some people may argue that social problem is such a large category, and there are some social problems, such as codes for ethics and customs, may probably not be solved by the global university. Admittedly, these problems are so related to the history and culture of one's country that we rarely make hope to foreign people to understand them. Nevertheless, maybe there are similar situation among different countries, so suggestion from different country may be worthwhile. And in this process, students could learn cultural difference among most of the countries.

To sum up, as the speaker suggest it is advantage（advantageous） to set up a global university with the help of all the nations, for it not only provide students with a large sale of knowledge, which may not be learnt in their own country, but also equip them with deep insight to social problems as well as analysis ability. Furthermore, these persistent social problems have more chance to be settled

总的来说，写的不错。尤其语言方面多向你请教
我觉得建这样的大学就是它有其它大学所不具备的优点，把这个写出来就算好处拉


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多谢你的修改和鼓励，呵呵，我觉得自己写的作文就像一个白痴写的一样，开始还以为很简单呢，两个半小时才写出来的，掏心窝的话都说完了，尤其是用词方面，觉得自己很没水准，呵呵

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今天改了3篇issue了，明天再帮你看了哈，累死了

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Issue11
——题目——
All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world’s most persistent social problems.
——正文——
Nowadays, as the development of the society and technology, the growing problems, such as energy crisis, environmental problems, healthy problems of people ,and so on have become problems all over the world. I agree with the speaker that all the nations should help support to design a global university which engages the students to solve the world's most persistent social problems, in so far as these problems are not concerned with codes of ethic and customs. I will show my evidence as follows.insofar as 应该是做让步用的，难道下文会有让步？

To begin with, it is necessary for establishment of global university as the complicity of these social problems have already outweighed the ability of a single country or that of a few countries. As we know, environmental problems have badly influenced on every corner of the earth, see greenhouse effect, environmental contaminations and so forth. Although scientists from different countries have done every effort to study these subjects, they have not yet found out any economical methods to solve them effectively. Admittedly, there are some global organizations assemble efforts from a few counties of the world, and they have got some optimistic effect, but if the cooperation augment to a larger scale, say, a global university which gather the youths and experts all around the world, the result will be outstanding.观点提出的很好，不过展开的不理想，应该就为什么有些问题靠单个国家很难解决加强论述，环境问题是很好的例子，劳动法也是一样，这样才能为全球大学的建立提供有力的支持

Moreover, it is through international communication in global university that students and experts can understand different situation of their countries deeply, and more valid methods could be figure out. As is known to all, same problem may appear to have different effects on every part of the world. Taking environment problem for example, Indians may suffer from oppressive hot weather, whereas Chinese were besieged by the floods. By contrast with these situations, students may realize the essence of abominable climate, and then work out the solution under the guidance of experts. In this process, students can not only learn much knowledge according to their studies, but also analyzing and discussing skills which provide them with capability to solve practical problems.我觉得这段跟上一段存在同样的问题，论点提出的不错，但展开不好，例子没能证明分论点，应该从不同文化背景的学生在一起交流，可以看到自身的局限性啊，他人的长处啊，还有学会更多的去包容理解其他民族的文化从而有利于建立和谐社会啊之类的角度进行论述

However, some people may argue that social problem is such a large category, and there are some social problems, such as codes for ethics and customs, may probably not be solved by the global university. Admittedly, these problems are so related to the history and culture of one's country that we rarely make hope to foreign people to understand them. Nevertheless, maybe there are similar situation among different countries, so suggestion from different country may be worthwhile. And in this process, students could learn cultural difference among most of the countries.如果是让步最好不用HOWEVER这样的强转折词，会让读者误解你的观点，完全可以用finally过度

To sum up, as the speaker suggest it is advantage to set up a global university with the help of all the nations, for it not only provide students with a large sale of knowledge, which may not be learnt in their own country, but also equip them with deep insight to social problems as well as analysis ability. Furthermore, these persistent social problems have more chance to be settled.语言上的问题没仔细看，这两天状态不很好，刚刚看到你的回帖，就来改了。整体思路还是不错的，就是具体展开论证上再下功夫，加油

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多谢你们的批改和鼓励，呵呵，大家一起努力，共同进步哈