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issue170，"The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of i
ts rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general welfare of all its people."
Is the surest indictor of a great nation brought by its rulers,artists and scientists or the general welfare of all its people? Before answer this question, we have to define the word ”great nation”. Which nation can be called great nation? In my opinion, only the nation with developed economy, rich people and strong ability to protect the country can be called a great nation.  I agree with the author’s claim that a great nation is decided by the general welfare of all its people and we have to know that ruler ,artists and scientists also make significant effect in the development of a nation.
  
  A nation is composed of great number of people ,in some nations , the population of which arrive at millions or even billions, not only of rulers, artists and scientists. So they can not represent the credible and exact situation of a nation. In the long history river, there are so many examples that when the nation is facing the dangerous of aggression or some people are starved, or killed by cold or flood ,the rulers are still having the luxurious live without considering the nation and the people at all. Even in neoteric society, some African countries still have the similar situation .Are these African nations strong or rich ? Every people in the world will have the same answer ,”no”. however the king or rulers in these nations usually millionaires or even billionaires. Using rulers, artists and scientists who are only occupying the little proportion of population in a nation can not represent and decide whether this nation is great ,rich and strong or not.

  The relationship between the strength of a nation and rich of the people are mutually causal relationship. The first problem has to be solved with the development of a nation is to protect all the people from hungry and cold. Any country can not be called strong country ,if there are still some people do not have enough food to eat, even if maybe they have high technology, military armies or rich sources. For example, India .we have to admit that it is fast development of India during the past century and even it has owning nuclear weapon . However, focusing on high technology and weapon does not ameliorate the situation that much Indians are still living in the lowest level of society. And The peace is still a dream in this country because of divergence between people in religion and nation. India can not be called a great nation. The welfare of people have to be brought by the nation.

  Admittedly , the welfare of people is the most representative signature of a great nation ,the significant effect the rulers ,artists and scientists made can not be neglected wholly. To some extent, they propel the development of a nation. A great ruler leads the nation go forward the correct direction and operating the policy to make people get the better life than before. And the scientists invent the new technologies , such as Edison who brought light to people and improve the living quality of people. And Their inventions accelerate the development of whole nation.

  To sum up, I agree with the author’s claim that the general welfare is the most important signature of a great nation. At the same time , the rulers , artists and scientists also make great effect on the development of nations.

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"The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general welfare of all its people."

Is the surest indictor of a great nation brought by its rulers, artists and scientists or the general welfare of all its people? Before answer this question, we have to define the word “great nation”. Which nation can be called great nation? In my opinion, only the nation with developed economy, rich people and strong ability to protect the country can be called a great nation.  I agree with the author’s claim that a great nation is decided by the general welfare of all its people and we have to know that ruler, artists and scientists also make significant effect in the development of a nation. [开头提出观点很明确，不过是不是把关于“伟大国家”的定义拿出来单独起一段？]

A nation is composed of [a] great number of people, in some nations, the population of which arrives at millions or even billions, not only of rulers, artists and scientists. So they cannot represent the credible and exact situation of a nation. In the long history river, there are so many examples that when the nation is facing the dangerous of aggression or some people are starved, or killed by cold or flood, the rulers are still having the luxurious live without considering the nation and the people at all. Even in neoteric society, some African countries still have the similar situation .Are these African nations strong or rich? Every people in the world will have the same answer, “no”. However the kings or rulers in these nations usually millionaires or even billionaires. Using rulers, artists and scientists who are only occupying the little proportion of population in a nation cannot represent and decide whether this nation is great, rich and strong or not. [与定义中的“rich people”联系起来。]

The relationship between the strength of a nation and rich of the people are mutually causal relationship. The first problem has to be solved with the development of a nation is to protect all the people from hungry and cold. Any country cannot be called a strong country, if there are still some people do not have enough food to eat, even if maybe they have high technology, military armies or rich sources. For example, India. We have to admit that it is fast development of India during the past century and even it has owning nuclear weapon. However, focusing on high technology and weapon does not ameliorate the situation that much Indians are still living in the lowest level of society. And the [多余，去掉。] peace is still a dream in this country because of divergence between people in religion and nation. India cannot be called a great nation. The welfare of people have [has] to be brought by the nation.

Admittedly, the welfare of people is the most representative signature of a great nation, the significant effect the rulers, artists and scientists made cannot be neglected wholly. To some extent, they propel the development of a nation. A great ruler leads the nation go forward the correct direction and operating the policy to make people get the better life than before. And the scientists invent the new technologies, such as Edison who brought light to people and improve the living quality of people. And their inventions accelerate the development of whole nation.

To sum up, I agree with the author’s claim that the general welfare is the most important signature of a great nation. At the same time, the rulers, artists and scientists also make great effect on the development of nations. [结尾这样写所起的作用不大。]

感觉文章的内容与一开始给出的“强大国家”的定义联系地不够紧密；觉得要时不时地回到定义上去，把一些国家的情况和定义作比较，这样文章会更紧凑一些。

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多谢指点。