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题目：Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools.Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators.
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Should parents and community take part in the local school education? In my view, education is largely composed of professional training, socialization and construction of value systems for a student. Moreover, even pure science and arts are based on the resource of daily life. Therefore, it is very important that parents and community involve in local schools.

It might seem tempting to agree with the speaker, on the basis that socialization is the key to survival in a society. Our daily life and work require intensive communication and cooperation with others, which would be gained at school if parents and community involves in its education.  In our daily life, we live in the network of associations with the society to benefit from the conveniences of products and services offered by other people, and obtain the utmost joy through communications. In our work experiences, a white-collar must communicate with his clients; a worker on the assembly line has to cooperate with his co-workers; a scientist has to lead his research team. Had they failed to have any social ties with others, the society would not exist at all. After all, human beings are social animals, living on the interaction with other individuals. A famous professor in my university said: " Only God could live all by himself." Therefore, socialization should be learned as early as one is in school, and the best way is to invite parents and community.

Moreover, by inviting parents and community into the educational system, the students can get better professional training, which is one of the most important academic aim and responsibility a school has. While the societal demand from the job market is to train most of the citizens of a nation into proficient workers and technicians, most of the courses and training a school offer nowadays place on the emphasis of practical skills in professions. During such a process, parents could contribute a lot to a school, in that they are already workers or technicians who own work experiences. Through the interaction with parents, students could quickly build up a general ideas and concepts of working, and also get help from their parents regarding their difficulties in work. Community also contributes in professional training because it can offer part-time jobs for students to practice and get real experience. In addition, the money they get in their part-time jobs could further assist their studies. Furthermore, they would be much easier to find a full time job after graduation because employers would be more willing to hire graduates who already have certain work experiences. Thus, parents and community could help a school in professional training.

Admittedly, some might argue that another aim a school has is to train scientist and artists, having little to do with parents and community because their field of study is either too sophisticated or too irrelevant with our daily life. Yet, science is the process to continually challenge the limitations of human understanding of the nature principles, and art is the pursuit for perfection to unremittingly transcend human minds and humanity in the social aspects, and both of which are based on the interaction with our world. Either the objects scientists study or the ones artists record and shape come from nature, and without which their works are meaningless. While educators could teach students theories, reasoning and cogitative skills, parents and community could offer experiences to practically recognize and understand the world. Therefore, parents and community could still have merit in science and art educations.

In the final analysis, I strongly agree with the speaker. Parents and community could help education in every aspect.

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Should parents and community take part in the local school education? In my view, education is largely composed of professional training, socialization and construction of value systems for a student. Moreover, even pure science and arts are based on the resource of daily life. （这个”因此“感觉有一点思维跳跃，但分类讨论的框架已经明晰了，写法新颖，赞一下） Therefore, it is very important that parents and community involve in local schools.

It might seem（既然Position是agree，这样的词不好，造成了似是而非的效果，我有一篇Issue 38的B1试着写这种词造成有铺垫的让步，不过不知道效果怎么样https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... p;page=1#pid1656076） tempting to agree with the speaker, on the basis that socialization is the key to survival in a society. Our daily life and work require intensive communication and cooperation with others, which would be gained at school （加个only）if parents and community involves in its education.  In our daily life, we live in the network of associations with the society to benefit from the conveniences of products and services offered by other people, and obtain the utmost joy through communications. In our work experiences, a white-collar must communicate with his clients; a worker on the assembly line has to cooperate with his co-workers; a scientist has to lead his research team. Had they failed to have any social ties with others, the society would not exist at all. After all, human beings are social animals, living on the interaction with other individuals. A famous professor in my university said: " Only God could live all by himself." Therefore, socialization should be learned as early as one is in school, and the best way is to invite parents and community.（看来好像不是按照professional training, socialization and construction of value systems, even pure science and arts这样的分类顺序写的，如果是的话可能缺少平衡，另外这一段的主要问题是 后面的打断篇幅在讲socilization的重要性，对only involvement of parents and communities can bring about a better education which place enough emphasis on socializing强调不够）

Moreover, by inviting parents and community into the educational system,（呵呵，看样子结构还是没理解错的，但最好和第一段的顺序对应）the students can get better professional training, which is one of the most important academic aim and responsibility a school has. While the societal demand from the job market is to train most of the citizens of a nation into proficient workers and technicians, most of the courses and training a school offer nowadays place on the emphasis of practical skills in professions. During such a process, parents could contribute a lot to a school, in that they are already workers or technicians who own work experiences. Through the interaction with parents, students could quickly build up a general ideas and concepts of working, and also get help from their parents regarding their difficulties in work. Community also contributes in professional training because it can offer part-time jobs for students to practice and get real experience. In addition, the money they get in their part-time jobs could further assist their studies. Furthermore, they would be much easier to find a full time job after graduation because employers would be more willing to hire graduates who already have certain work experiences. Thus, parents and community could help a school in professional training.（按第一段的思路， 这一段到没什么大问题，只是觉得要写那么多点的话，语言还需要求精练，不然难以平衡各段的分量）

Admittedly, some might argue that another aim a school has is to train scientist and artists,（看样子没有value system） having little to do with parents and community because their field of study is either too sophisticated or too irrelevant with our daily life. Yet, science is the process to continually challenge the limitations of human understanding of the nature principles, and art is the pursuit for perfection to unremittingly transcend human minds and humanity in the social aspects, and both of which are based on the interaction with our world. Either the objects scientists study or the ones artists record and shape come from nature, and without which their works are meaningless. While educators could teach students theories, reasoning and cogitative skills, parents and community could offer experiences to practically recognize and understand the world. Therefore, parents and community could still have merit in science and art educations.（全文看完了之后谈一下我对这个题目的看法 ，题目实际上是两部分，一者the importance of parents and communities in education, 另外还有the defects of education which is only provided by professional educators---too...to..暗示, 这篇文章对前一项回应得很充分，对后一项没有什么提及，一家之言仅供参考）

In the final analysis, I strongly agree with the speaker. Parents and community could help education in every aspect.