issue150 V6站队 8。14

zehuaUID: 199246

题目:
150  "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

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Will tourism become obsolete because of television and worldwide computer connections?
In my view, although television and internet provide information for the places that we have never visited, such information is preliminary, which could not entirely replace tourism. Instead, tourism would only be more prosperous with the aid of such propaganda.

Admittedly, with the improvement of communication technology, one could easily access information about any places of interest through television and internet. Television and internet could provide us pictures and even videos showing live. In addition, this technology enables us to view sights of different seasons once at a time, without the troublesome to physically get to that place during different seasons. Moreover, we could also enjoy electronic trips that tourism cannot offer, such as the surface of moon, the bottom of the sea and the erupting crater. Apparently, we no longer need tourism for journeys.

However, television and internet can never completely replace tourism, because of the divine joys we gain from traveling: Taking vehicle, resting at the hotel, outdoor expedition and camping. During expedition, we cross rivers, climb hills and run through open fields.
We catch fish in streams, swim in sea, lie on the sand of a beach and enjoy the mild sunlight casting on our skin. We feel sweats flowing from our face and dropping onto ground, we feel wind blowing through our body and bring the tiredness of a whole day's expedition away. We see sun rise from the East and set into the West, we see the clouds on the sky change their shapes like a magician, we feel the rain dropping on us. These experiences along, which bring us the true joy of life, could ensure the prosperity of tourism, and could never be replaced by television and internet. While television and internet can only bring us basic information of the places, the real journeys can provide us the genuine and vivid interaction with nature. While we only see the inert pictures or view the pre-recorded videos on the screen, we could stay with a place for as long as we want, and enjoy the in depth exploration of that scene. In addition, during trips we can make friends with a lot of people, who have the same hobby of traveling and the same love of nature. We can chat and play together, instead of sitting at home in front of the screen lonely. As a result, tourism would never become extinct.

Furthermore, while television and internet cannot threat the prosperity of tourism, in contrast, this technology would only stimulate tourism to thrive as the best tool of propaganda. With the elementary introduction of a place, our curiosity is aroused, urging us to pay a visit immediately. Just like live advertisements of regular products and services, tourism could be boosted similarly. At the same time, people would be more interested in using television and internet, because of their desire to see a place of interest. A recent study shows that worldwide tourism has increased by 75% during the last 20 years, with the spread of internet and improvement of television. Thus tourism and internet are not mutually exclusive but mutually beneficial.

In sum, the speaker's statement is fundamentally incorrect. Television and internet would not threat the survival of tourism. On the contrary, they are mutually beneficial.

11yvetteUID: 2102418

Will tourism become obsolete because of television and worldwide computer connections? In my view, although television and internet provide information for the places that we have never visited, such information is preliminary, which could not entirely replace tourism. Instead, tourism would only be more prosperous with the aid of such propaganda. 观点还是一如既往的简洁明确,赞

Admittedly, with the improvement of communication technology, one could easily access information about any places of interest through television and internet. Television and internet could provide us pictures and even videos showing live. In addition, this technology enables us to view sights of different seasons once at a time, without the troublesome to physically get to that place during different seasons. Moreover, we could also enjoy electronic trips that tourism cannot offer, such as the surface of moon, the bottom of the sea and the erupting crater.这里的列举比较有道理,后面的几点我写得时候就没有想到啊~~ Apparently, we no longer need tourism for journeys.

However, television and internet can never completely replace tourism, because of the divine joys we gain from traveling: Taking vehicle, resting at the hotel, outdoor expedition and camping. During expedition, we cross rivers, climb hills and run through open fields.
We catch fish in streams, swim in sea, lie on the sand of a beach and enjoy the mild sunlight casting on our skin. We feel sweats flowing from our face and dropping onto ground, we feel wind blowing through our body and bring the tiredness of a whole day's expedition away. We see sun rise from the East and set into the West, we see the clouds on the sky change their shapes like a magician, we feel the rain dropping on us.这里的一长串大列举起到了很好的作用,有身临其境的感觉 These experiences along, which bring us the true joy of life, could ensure the prosperity of tourism, and could never be replaced by television and internet. While television and internet can only bring us basic information of the places, the real journeys can provide us the genuine and vivid interaction with nature. While we only see the inert pictures or view the pre-recorded videos on the screen, we could stay with a place for as long as we want, and enjoy the in depth exploration of that scene. In addition, during trips we can make friends with a lot of people, who have the same hobby of traveling and the same love of nature. We can chat and play together, instead of sitting at home in front of the screen lonely. As a result, tourism would never become extinct.这段否认电视网络可以取代旅游,写得很生动

Furthermore, while television and internet cannot threat the prosperity of tourism, in contrast, this technology would only stimulate tourism to thrive as the best tool of propaganda. With the elementary introduction of a place, our curiosity is aroused, urging us to pay a visit immediately. Just like live advertisements of regular products and services, tourism could be boosted similarly. At the same time, people would be more interested in using television and internet, because of their desire to see a place of interest. A recent study shows that worldwide tourism has increased by 75% during the last 20 years, with the spread of internet and improvement of television. Thus tourism and internet are not mutually exclusive but mutually beneficial.尾句很好地回应了本段的TS

In sum, the speaker's statement is fundamentally incorrect. Television and internet would not threat the survival of tourism. On the contrary, they are mutually beneficial.

全文的逻辑线路很清晰,zehua的文笔就不说了~~呵呵,赞啊

mkb57288UID: 2105771

B1虽然只是让步段但还是写得很精彩，比我的强多了
B2也没有任何问题，不过建议还是把it is impossible for television and Internet再多写一两句
B3的数据是最有说服力的

整体没有问题，在剩下的就是雕琢语言了，个人打分  5

zehuaUID: 199246

这篇超时了4分钟咧！郁闷！
B3数据当然是编的。。。。。。