小作文

小雅UID: 2139709

The graph illustrates the percentage of different titles of family types in Australia in 1999.

  There were some sorts of family types.For instance,including single aged person ,aged couple,single and no children,couple and no children,sole parent and couple with children.
  All households of people up to 11% is that 1,837,000.The percentage of single aged  person was similar with aged couple and divided into 6%and 4%.Furthermore,single and couple with no children was different in percentage .The former was about threefold increased in the number than the latter.Moreover,sole parent rised more double than couple with children in proportion.The number of people,however,lower four times than couple with children.
  According the table,the front of four sorts are regular in percentage and number.With increasing percentage,the number also follow.Only the final group contrast in both asperts.
  这是剑桥4的第一套题的作文题目！谢谢啦！帮我看一下咯！

蜻蜓切UID: 201589

看得出来是经过训练的
开头大概介绍，中间陈述，结尾重复总结。
不过我觉得有很多问题，这篇文章应该有范文的。我建议楼主找来看一下。
btw,我记得原题只有百分数吧，好像没有确切数字，小作文比较忌讳计算。
不要去算东西，要描述。有的时候有些细节都可以不要。趋势和显著特别（最高，最低，相同）这些东西不要漏掉。

小雅UID: 2139709

哦！好的！版主那句看得出来是经过训练的是什么意思？

蜻蜓切UID: 201589

就是你的结构比较中规中矩。
我回头有空去找点task one怎么写的文章放到版上来。考完有一阵了，突然感觉有点生疏了。
因为我发现这里写东西的要求，和ielts还是有很大不同的。