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发表于 2005-11-29 12:37:58 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

以前写过AW，话总也控制不住，随便挑了一篇，写了35分钟，484字:(
是太多了吧。

希望大家多多批评。不太清楚TWE要求什么样的语气和结构，可能还要再看一下例文。

New factory is welcomed!

Recently, a company announced to build a branch factory near our community. The news spread fast, and aroused a broad discussion on the proposal. As a member of the community, I have made a deliberate consideration on the issue. After analyzing the advantages and disadvantages, I come to the conclusion that we should welcome the building of factory instead of excluding it out of our district.

To begin with, it is necessary to see both benefits and detriments the new factory would bring to us, if built. On the one hand, to build a new factory near our community will bring us several merits. First of all, it will absorb superfluous labors in our community, further to solve the employment and poverty. Second, it will stimulate the economy in our community. Because of its effects, new investigators would find our area a good place to commerce, and then new stores, new restaurants would probably follow. Thus, it is more convenient for denizens in shopping or others activities. Third, a new factory, if having profits, will contribute a lot to tax in municipality. And the money could be used for improvement of people’s life, like maintain of roads and building of community facilities.

However, on the other hand, it is not comfortable when taking the disadvantages into account. If the new factory is not managed well, it will be a burden of our community. It takes the space and runs the energy. Also, if not properly regulated, the factory might bring us pollution—the hazard smog, deleterious sewage and masses of waste. Our nice environment will be destroyed and finally our health level will become descend. When all these phenomena happen, it is too late to repeal the contract and remove the factory. So we should concern about it before the consequences.

It is true that it has disadvantages, while it is also attractive and beneficial. In my opinion, we should support the building of new factory to enjoy its merits. Of course, it is vital to solve the detriments when building. The most important thing is how to manage the new factory well. If we have a skilled and improved management on business, and environmental protection, all the disadvantages will be eliminated. And finally, our community will be more developed and prosperous.

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