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That is the topic:
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


That is what I write:

Nowadays, when we watch TV, read newspapers, or read  magazines, we will find all kinds of advertisement. Sometimes, they deter our normal reading. So many people contain that the advertisements waste our precious time. As the president Banjmin Flanclin put it ,“Time is money”.That is to say: advertisement are convicts. But is it really? why don’t they find out advertisements’ advantages.
First, most of advertisements are very vivid and beautiful. In the media From the newspapers to magazines, from To to radios, form internet to instructions, the advertisement program are most beautiful. We can assume that when we wait the bus at the station which is adornated by beautiful posters, if your feeling will be better than when you look through the standmark everyday? So advertisement is helpful to beautified our circonstance.

Second, the advertisements give  us  abundant information. Every poster has its own goal. You feel convenient when they meet your need.In some cases, rescently,One of my colleages wanted to buy a television set. But he had no time to shop around.So,he collected all the posters he could get. After comparation,he found out a blank he satisfied.That is to say, advertisements give our morden life convinience.

Third,advertisement fees help to reduce our cost we spend when we read newspapers,watch TV. For example,the price of a newspaper  China Daily is 1 yune,which is cheaper than its cost.That is advertisements’ contribution.



Of course,advertising will lure us to consume.What’s more, sometimes,advertisement will waste our time to deal with it. However,after comparing its advartages to disadvantages,I believe that advertisements is one of the factors to improve our lives.

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内容挺好啊.不过打错几个词吧.
还有记的新东方老师曾说尽量不要用这种pop格式啊.我们考作文是为以后写论文的.所以最好采用classic的格式.不知说的对否,只是建议啊.

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Thank you!
能说更加具体点的么?

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