高三忙碌者，请师哥师姐看作文提点意见。

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高三忙碌者，请师哥师姐看作文提点意见。

自己用历次考试题目联系，新开一贴督促一下自己[/。也希望有人能够帮忙看看。

来得有些晚，同期作文我也争取写两篇。

本人高三，1月考托。准备很不充分。听说gter这里人多、人好、还能够批改文章，所以发到这里。
本文使用了提纲，录入到电脑的过程中经过了word的拼写检查。但是还是有很多的地方觉得不通顺，可能句式和语法出了问题。希望各位师兄师姐能抽出您的宝贵时间，提一点意见。给各评价分数

:kiss:2005-12-26
00-05题目（17）
Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

提纲：
理由1：教师经受过训练，他们了解学生的问题，所以辅导时会有系统、有重点
理由2：教师和学生进行交流，使学生能够迅速掌握知识。
理由3：教师提供了学习方法，这对学生未来学习，以及学习其他知识都有很大帮助。

正文：
开头段：
Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. No doubt, I choose the latter one. Because there are too many benefits that outnumber its advantages. But the former one, on the other hand, has advantages no more than its disadvantages.
主体段：
The most important benefit of studying with a teacher is that teachers are well trained how to teach students in their normal college. Every teacher has known the problems of the students which is usually faced by students and they will teach students systemically. If a student study by himself/herself, it is hard to achieve the same effect which is easy for the student with a teacher.

Another benefit of studying with a teacher is that teachers can communicate with students easily. After students telling teacher the problems in their studying process, teachers could answer the students directly about the key of problems. So students could learn faster than the ones studying by themselves.

The last benefit but no the last important is that teacher can not only teach students the knowledge, but also teach students the ways of learning which may not only by useful in their school years, but also in their future. If students dose not study with teachers, they will use a lot of time to know the way of studying which is very easy for the one studying with teacher.
结尾段：
After understanding the reasoning above, it is quit safe now to say: studying with a teacher is a wise chosen.
时间：30分钟
字数：270

（12-29）自己简单改了一下语法错误，字数变少了：
Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. No doubt, I choose the latter one. Because there are too many benefits that outnumber its advantages. But the former one, on the other hand, has advantages no more than its disadvantages.
主体段：
The most important benefit of studying with a teacher is that teachers are professional. Every teacher has known the problems of the students which are usually faced by students. And they will teach students systemically easpcailly emphasize on the problems of students. If a student study by himself/herself, it is hard to achieve the same effect which is easy for the student with a teacher.

Another benefit of studying with a teacher is that teachers can communicate with students easily. After students telling teacher the problems in their studying process, teachers could answer the students directly about the sticking point of problems. So students could learn faster than the ones studying by themselves.

The last benefit but no the last important is that teachers can not only teach students the knowledge, but also teach students the ways of learning which may not only be useful in their school years, but also in their future live. If students do not study with teachers, they will use a lot of time to know the way of studying which is very easy for the one studying with teacher.
结尾段：
After understanding the reasoning above, it is quit safe now to say: studying with a teacher is a wise chosen

[ Last edited by flyingc on 2005-12-29 at 12:33 ]

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:kiss:2005-12-28
00-10考题（25）
It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be build in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan. Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

提纲：
赞成
理由1：能够提供就业
理由2：提供休闲便利的购物场所（节约时间、缩短路程）
理由3：增加税收，可以服务社区。
反对：
理由1：会导致来买东西的人多，很吵，影响交通。

正文：
开头段：
It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be build in my community. There is no need for me to put any emphasis on what the advantage of building a shopping center are that it will increase the employment of our community. Many people believe that the new large shopping center will employ tens of people. And the best employees of these jobs are the people who live near by their working place. If unemployment people get their new jobs, they will do their best at work. So the company and the community will both win.

主体段：
Furthermore, I agree the title statement because I consider that the new large shopping center will be a good place shopping easily. After the large shopping center is set up, the people lived neighborhood will no longer go shopping to the one long distance away. That will save some time, and people can use the time in the new shopping center. At meantime, the shopping center will be convenience, because you could get home in a short distance instead of taking the bus or walking 30 minutes.

The last but not the least important, the title statement was agree by me for the tax, the tax of the shopping. The large shopping center will have a big income, and it will pay the tax a lot for buying. The big amount of tax will be used in my community in order to approval the e of my community.

On the other hand, one of the notorious disadvantages of the title statement is that the new shopping center will bring a lot of people shopping, the noise and the traffic problems will worse.

结尾段：
At last, if all these factors are complicated .the advantage of building a shopping center more weight than the disadvantages, we may finally draw the conclusion that I agree about the title statement.
时间：34分钟
字数：310