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第一次任务:Issue 183
"As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."


Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t outside of it. Then the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter.

This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the orbits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.

After human being’s appearance, they solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.
In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.

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这也是我的第一篇isuue ,有点乱,请大家见量,多多提些意见。

Issue 163 As we acquire more knowledge ,things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.
提纲:第一段:摆明作者的态度
      第二段: 事情时便简单了
              1. 在第一次世界大战上,发明了很好的治疗手段避免了很多因为感染而死亡。
              2. 电话的发明--联系变得简单了。
                 电脑的发明--解放人类不再需要重复的工作。
                 照相机的发明--可以留住瞬间的回忆。
                 自行车,汽车,火车,飞机的发明--旅行变得简单方便快速。
      第三段:事情变难了
              1. 有了好的治疗方法,要更好的。
              2. 电话--手机--视频电话。
                 电脑--手提电脑--无线上网。
                 照相机--DV
                 飞机--火箭--探索宇宙--星际旅游--移居别的星球。
      第四段:总结,事情是变得简单了,但同时也变难了。因为人们无止境的探索。

As we acquire more knowledge ,do things become more comprehensible or become more complex and mysterious? According to my understanding, every coin has two sides, we get more knowledge about one thing then we want to know more about it .That is, firstly things become clearly then become complex ,it is a strange cycle.

Admittedly, things become more comprehensible when we know more about them. The famous Chemical-physician Alexander Fleming is a good example. During World War 1  , Fleming and his fellows went to the field to set up a battlefield hospital lab ,there they encountered infections so drastically and many soldiers quickly died from them .Yet ,they were still simple infections. Fleming felt there must be something could help fight microbe infection, then he collected more information and do some experiments, in the end he made many innovation in the treatment of the wounded . In the technology field, decades ago ,before the telephone came into use ,if we want to chat with someone ,we should go to his/her house ,if someone was serious ill , we should go and ask for a doctor ,but on some certain condition time equals life. When we get some knowledge about electric signals, we have invented the telephone and now if we want to talk with someone we only dial the number and if someone is serious ill , we can get help through the telephone. In our every day life, at first we collected our memory by writing diaries, then the camera could be used to memorize an excellent moment -happy or sad. We invented the computer ,which relieved us from dull repeated work.Bicycle, automobile ,train and plane ,all these travel vehicles make traveling more comfortable and more fast.

However, things become more complex and mysterious when we want to know more about one thing. Alexander Fleming, although made many new treatment to cure soldiers , he went on searching for an effective antiseptic which would have effect on infections after World War 1.Fortunately ,he discovered penicillin at random which had saved a lot of lives during the World War 2.In recognition for his contribution, he was knighted in 1944.But this research has not suspended, many scientist are still working in this area and they have discovered various kinds of penicillin.  What is more ,now we have the fixed telephone ,then we ask for a mobile one ; we have the camera ,then we want the digital video; we have the computer to help us working then we want them working more efficiently and we can carry them easily; we want to travel to other places, firstly the nearby village then another city and now many of us want to travel to the space. So we need know more knowledge to make planes, rockets and even space ships. Maybe one day we want to stay on another beautiful planet and this acquire even more knowledge and the thing may become more complex and mysterious. As we want more, our current knowledge seems limited ,we seek for more ,and the future seems more complex.

In conclusion, the process of pursuing ultimate thing inevitably involves interlaced and endless curiosity. When we know something, and then we want to know more about it; it seems that we have been caught by the cycle web woven by ourselves.

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Issue 163  As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious.
提纲:第一段:摆明作者的态度
      第二段: 事情时便简单了
              1. 在第一次世界大战上,发明了很好的治疗手段避免了很多因为感染而死亡。
              2. 电话的发明--联系变得简单了。
                 电脑的发明--解放人类不再需要重复的工作。
                 照相机的发明--可以留住瞬间的回忆。
                 自行车,汽车,火车,飞机的发明--旅行变得简单方便快速。
      第三段:事情变难了
              1. 有了好的治疗方法,要更好的。
              2. 电话--手机--视频电话。
                 电脑--手提电脑--无线上网。
                 照相机--DV
                 飞机--火箭--探索宇宙--星际旅游--移居别的星球。
      第四段:总结,事情是变得简单了,但同时也变难了。因为人们无止境的探索。

As we acquire more knowledge, do things become more comprehensible or become more complex and mysterious? According to my understanding, every coin has two sides, we get more knowledge about one thing then we want to know more about it .That is, firstly things become clearly then become complex, it is a strange cycle.

Admittedly, things become more comprehensible when we know more about them. The famous Chemical-physician Alexander Fleming is a good example. During World War 1I (貌似要用希腊数字吧), Fleming and his fellows went to the field to set up a battlefield hospital lab, there they encountered infections so drastically and many soldiers quickly died from them. (感觉前面这句可以换一下表述)Yet, they were stillmerely simple infections. Fleming felt there must be something could help fight microbe infection, then he collected more information and do some experiments, in the end he made many innovation in the treatment of the wounded. In the technology field, decades ago, before the telephone came into usethe advent of the telephone, if we want to chat with someone, we should go to his/her house, if someone was serious ill, we should go and ask for a doctor, but on some certain condition time equals life. When we get some knowledge about electric signals, we have invented the telephone and now if we want to talk with someone we only dial the number and if someone is serious ill, we can get help through the telephone. In our every day life, at first we collected our memory by writing diaries, and then the camera could be used to memorize an excellent moment -happy or sad. We invented the computer, which relieved us from dull repeated repeating work. Bicycle, automobile, train and plane, all these travel vehicles make traveling more comfortable and more fastfaster(低级错误了吧).

However, things become more complex and mysterious when we want to know more about one thing. Alexander Fleming, although made many new treatments to cure soldiers, he went on searching for an much more effective antiseptic which would have greater effect on infections after World War 1I.Fortunately, he discovered penicillin at random occasionally which had saved a lot of lives during the World War 2II.In recognition for to his contribution, he was knighted in 1944. But this research has not suspended, many scientists are still working in this area and they have discovered various kinds of penicillin.  What is more, now we have the fixed telephone, then we ask for a mobile one; we have the camera, then we want the digital video; we have the computer to help us working then we want them working more efficiently and we can carry them easily; we want to travel to other places, firstly the nearby village then another city and now many of us want to travel to the space. So we need know more knowledge to make planes, rockets and even space ships. Maybe one day we want to stay on another beautiful planet and this acquire even more knowledge and the thing may become more complex and mysterious. As we want more, our current knowledge seems limited, we seek for more, and the future seems more complex.

In conclusion, the process of pursuing ultimate thing inevitably involves interlaced and endless curiosity. When we know something, and then we want to know more about it; it seems that we have been caught by the cycle web woven by ourselves.
有好多句子可以再斟酌一些,而且感觉例子描述太长了,我也第一次写,只是改了一些表面的东西,在描述例子时用了很多貌似很简单的句子,感觉这样undermine了你的issue了
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谢谢天才帮我改作文,我也试着看看你的喽~~

issue183 (BaXia队作业)-----第一次写,估计写的不怎么样,但尽力了

第一次任务:Issue 183
"As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."

Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t outside of it. Then the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter.(应该在首段表明一下你的观点吧:)
This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in(of?) an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the orbits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.

After human being’s appearance, they solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At (In?)that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.
In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.
感觉不错啊
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Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t outside of it. Then the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter.[这句名言很有说服力,我也有想到,不过讲不来]

This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the obits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.[这段感觉像人类对于一些问题通过新的认识得到解决,但其复杂性末句阐述得不太清楚]

After human being’s appearance, they solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.[切题了,感觉你在用自己的语言概括科学发展史……]

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.

In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.[将日常生活中通过知识使问题简化,是比较容易想到的,但将其与学术知识分开讨论,我倒是没想到。]

[谈一下总体感觉:我觉得在演绎方面,你的例子不够具体,还是有点像高中写议论文,讲道理的成分多写,基本就这样吧,希望我的理解没有太大偏差。]
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附上中文或英文提纲

Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t outside of it. Then the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter.(开头最好大概说明一下自己的思路和立场)

This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the obits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.

After human being’s appearance, they solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.
In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge(知识没单复数) and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.

(你的思路可以理解,大概是科学知识使事情变复杂,而别的知识或者说经验使事情变简单,但一定变简单吗?我觉得该举例说明
感觉例子好像没怎么说清楚,或许是太少,在纯粹说理)

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提纲:第一段:摆明作者的态度
      第二段: 事情时便简单了
              1. 在第一次世界大战上,发明了很好的治疗手段避免了很多因为感染而死亡。
              2. 电话的发明--联系变得简单了。
                 电脑的发明--解放人类不再需要重复的工作。
                 照相机的发明--可以留住瞬间的回忆。
                 自行车,汽车,火车,飞机的发明--旅行变得简单方便快速。
      第三段:事情变难了
              1. 有了好的治疗方法,要更好的。
              2. 电话--手机--视频电话。
                 电脑--手提电脑--无线上网。
                 照相机--DV
                 飞机--火箭--探索宇宙--星际旅游--移居别的星球。
      第四段:总结,事情是变得简单了,但同时也变难了。因为人们无止境的探索。

As we acquire more knowledge ,do things become more comprehensible or become more complex and mysterious? According to my understanding, every coin has two sides, we get more knowledge about one thing then we want to know more about it .That is, firstly things become clearly then become complex ,it is a strange cycle.(我知道你的意思,不过老外就不一定了)
Admittedly, things become more comprehensible when we know more about them.(why?说理) The famous Chemical-physician Alexander Fleming is a good example. During World War 1  , Fleming and his fellows went to the field to set up a battlefield hospital lab ,there they encountered infections so drastically and many soldiers quickly died from them .Yet ,they were still simple infections. Fleming felt there must be something could help fight microbe infection, then he collected more information and do some experiments, in the end he made many innovation in the treatment of the wounded .(一大段例子) In the technology field, decades ago ,before the telephone came into use ,if we want to chat with someone ,we should go to his/her house ,if someone was serious ill , we should go and ask for a doctor ,but on some certain condition time equals life. When we get some knowledge about electric signals, we have invented the telephone and now if we want to talk with someone we only dial the number and if someone is serious ill , we can get help through the telephone. In our every day life, at first we collected our memory by writing diaries, then the camera could be used to memorize an excellent moment -happy or sad. We invented the computer ,which relieved us from dull repeated work.Bicycle, automobile ,train and plane ,all these travel vehicles make traveling more comfortable and more fast.(Anny注意了,不是事情变得简单了,而是变得更容易理解,离题了哦)
However, things become more complex and mysterious when we want to know more about one thing. Alexander Fleming, although made many new treatment to cure soldiers , he went on searching for an effective antiseptic which would have effect on infections after World War 1.Fortunately ,he discovered penicillin at random which had saved a lot of lives during the World War 2.In recognition for his contribution, he was knighted in 1944.But this research has not suspended, many scientist are still working in this area and they have discovered various kinds of penicillin.  What is more ,now we have the fixed telephone ,then we ask for a mobile one ; we have the camera ,then we want the digital video; we have the computer to help us working then we want them working more efficiently and we can carry them easily; we want to travel to other places, firstly the nearby village then another city and now many of us want to travel to the space. So we need know more knowledge to make planes, rockets and even space ships. Maybe one day we want to stay on another beautiful planet and this acquire even more knowledge and the thing may become more complex and mysterious. As we want more, our current knowledge seems limited ,we seek for more ,and the future seems more complex.

In conclusion, the process of pursuing ultimate thing inevitably involves interlaced and endless curiosity. When we know something, and then we want to know more about it; it seems that we have been caught by the cycle web woven by ourselves.

有些离题了,下次要注意。不过语言流畅,值得大家学习

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some questions to ask....

第一次任务:Issue 183
"As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."

  
Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t is outside of it. Then(建议删除)  the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter. (I do like the beginning very much...though i have no idea who Zeno of Elea is...:))  

This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the obits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.

After human being’s appearance, they (who is they?) solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.
In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.  (what is the difference between ademic idea and general knowledge?)

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Zeno of Elea once said(and I paraphrase),’ knowledge is like a circle. What we have known is inside the circle while what we haven’t outside of it. Then the more we know, the larger the circle is; and the larger the circle is, the more knowledge we don’t know.’ Thousands of years ago, this philosopher had foreseen this issue in a vivid way. That is to say, the more knowledge we acquire, the more problems we will encounter.
感觉第一段没有表明自己的观点,但是这个quotation很好啦

This issue has to be admitted true in many areas of our lives. Take natural science(scientific) research for example. When we got the knowledge that the earth is in an orange shape, we ran into the fallacy that how things could stand on the ground when they were on the other side of the earth, which was later solved by Newton’s theory of universal gravitation, and after we knew that the(the应该去掉?这个我不是很确定) earth is not the center of the universe but the sun is, we began trying to figure out the orbits of all the planets in the solar system and the mechanism of all planets’ running and even we had to give a big suspicion to the religion belief which was at that time sacred and inviolable.
这一段应该是要表明knowledge使宇宙对于人们来说变得更comprehensive,万有引力的例子很好的,其实可以更深入一些。
After human being’s appearance, they solved problems only by intuitions and experiences. They didn’t have to resort to accurate theories which were concluded by some persons who were free from basic survival labors. At that era, no theory-needing issues would be encountered in practical life. But now, some intuitional problems are all supposed to be disposed by resorting to rigorous academic models derived from serious theories. Things seem to become more difficult to solve, more complex to analyze, and more mysterious to understand.

However, even it is tough to get a good academic idea, there is still something easy to settle down merely with general knowledge. And in this case, the more general knowledge we master, the easier the problems will be disposed. This kind of problems is mostly encountered in normal life, and the solutions have been concluded by someone who has bothered by the same problems before.
这两段的意思不是很理解,有提纲就好啦。说基本知识可以使事情变得comprehensive?这个如果有恰当的例子,可能好理解一些

In conclusion, to complete this argument, knowledge should be divided into two aspects, one academic knowledge and the other general knowledge. What makes things more complex is the academic one, while general knowledge merely makes our lives easy to manage. So we are supposed to master as much general knowledge as possible. Even though the academic knowledge makes things tough to treat with, we should also concentrate our energy to give it a good improvement for the promotion of human in the future.

总的来说,牛顿和日心说的例子都可以很好的支持knowledge make things more comprehensive,但是对于complex和mysterous的论证不足,如果把那两个例子深入下去的话,效果会比较好。后面分成academic和general两个部分进行论证,没有例子支持,论证也显得有些单薄,而且和开头的quotation感觉不是很呼应了。语言很不错的说,嘿嘿,加油加油~~~:victory:
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revisement for Anny.Y.Wang

As we acquire more knowledge ,do things become more comprehensible or become more complex and mysterious? According to my understanding, every coin has two sides, we get more knowledge about one thing then we want to know more about it .That is, firstly things become clearly then become complex (这一句读起来有些别扭),it is a strange(strange改称endless可能会好些) cycle.

Admittedly, things become more comprehensible when we know more about them. The famous Chemical-physician Alexander Fleming is a good example. During World War 1 (用World War I,应该比较标准,有点吹毛求疵了,55) , Fleming and his fellows went to the field to set up a battlefield hospital lab ,there they encountered infections so drastically(drastical?因为infection是名词) and many soldiers quickly died from them .Yet ,they were still simple infections. Fleming felt there must be something could help fight microbe infection(bacterial infection), then he collected more information and do(did) some experiments, in the end he made many innovation(s) in the treatment of the wounded . In the technology(technological) field, decades ago ,before the telephone came into use ,if we want(ed) to chat with someone ,we should go to his/her house ,if someone was serious ill , we should go and ask for a doctor ,but on some certain condition time equals life. When we get some knowledge about electric signals, we have invented the(去掉the) telephone and now if we want to talk with someone we only dial the number and if someone is serious ill , we can get help through the telephone. In our every day life, at first we collected our memory by writing diaries, then the camera could be used to memorize an excellent moment -happy or sad. We invented the computer ,which relieved us from dull repeated work.Bicycle, automobile ,train and plane ,all these travel vehicles make traveling more comfortable and more fast.

However, things become more complex and mysterious when we want to know more about one thing. Alexander Fleming, although made many new treatment to cure soldiers , he went on searching for an effective antiseptic(antibiotics) which would have effect on infections after World War 1.Fortunately ,he discovered penicillin at random which had saved a lot of lives during the World War 2.In recognition for his contribution, he was knighted in 1944.But this research has not suspended, many scientist are still working in this area and they have discovered various kinds of penicillin(这个有点不明确,应该是科学家发明了各种各样的抗生素,青霉素是其中的一种?).  What is more ,now we have the fixed telephone ,then we ask for a mobile one ; (把now改称after,去掉then)we have the camera ,then we want the digital video; we have the computer to help us working then we want them working more efficiently and we can carry them easily; we want to travel to other places, firstly the nearby village then another city and now many of us want to travel to the space. So we need know more knowledge to make planes, rockets and even space ships. Maybe one day we want to stay on another beautiful planet and this acquire even more knowledge and the thing may become more complex and mysterious. As we want more, our current knowledge seems limited ,we seek for more ,and the future seems more complex.
最后一句应该是主题句,但是例子ms只突出科技发展了,没有写出complex。

In conclusion, the process of pursuing ultimate thing inevitably involves interlaced and endless curiosity. When we know something, and then we want to know more about it; it seems that we have been caught by the cycle web woven by ourselves.

整篇文章叙事太多,说理太少,所以感觉很平,应该浓缩一下。表述略显平淡,简单具太多,句式可以多一些变化。加油咯:hug:
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