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为什么那个漂亮的圆括号不能变色呀.汗.我原来想和你的字分开来的.重弄了
180"Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because moral behavior cannot be legislated."
[写得挺痛苦的,必回拍!]
简要提纲:
观点:不完全同意。承认有些道德行为超过了法律、立法能力。法律有漏洞,立法不健全;解决问题惩罚的威慑是一方面,(但从预防、阻止发生的角度看应该加强道德教育[反对because,它因]。[这个转折怎么感觉和上面的连不起来呀。恩,单从这个观点上来看,不太同意,因为不清楚你的不承认部分体现在哪里])
1、 法律有漏洞,需要弥补[中国把高考等大规模考试的作弊列为违法,过去不是]。立法不健全造成社会不公平[一些法律给势力大的人权利大]。
2、 解决问题不单单靠惩罚,从根源入手解决更重要,而需要加强道德教育[谋杀罪列入法很久了单一反犯。(反),过去,很多地方没有锁的概念,因无偷盗]。
3、 承认,很多道德问题无法立法,最主要的原因是不同人的道德水准是不同的[安乐死]。
正文:
Ever since individuals began to associate with other people – live in society – laws and moral standards serve to control the society and behaviors of people. It is true([加个,吧] )myriads of problems in society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system, yet, ([the reason is not only that moral behavior cannot be legislated.这里你到底想表达的意思是什么捏?我有点模糊,你是还赞成立法还可以左右人的道德吗?我觉得这个题目主要是要说法律和道德在约束人的各种行为的时候的各自的作用吧。但是我不太明白你的侧重点]) Laws and legal system have their own shortcomings, which should also be paid attention by us. [(或者是你要再把观点再清晰点。呵呵。看到下面了。俺又回来补充一下)]
First of all, the leak of laws and the insufficient legislation, to some degrees, result in the fact that there exist a lot of issues[(加个小逗号,西西)] which cannot be handled by laws. Historically, moral standards are often the basis of law legislation. And in the process of perfecting laws people frequently remedy numerous leaks of laws, which ignored many immoral conducts in the past. For instance, in China cheating in the national college entrance examination is not an illegal conduct, but recently such activity has been listed in laws, denoted as crime. Turning to the legal system, the goal of law is fairness. This means that laws should recognize and protect some basic rights such as liberty and equality. If certain laws ensure that the strong groups can use their power to take unfair advantage on weak individuals, it would inevitably emerge certain matters disturb the order and stability of society.[(例子后面的分析最好和例子联系的紧密些,至少要提到几下下吧。嘿嘿) ]Amending ceaselessly laws is a necessary process for the legal system of a nation.[(这个段落分析很好的耶。。赞,虽然你老是不让我赞,我怯生生的说总可以了吧)]
Next,[ (only by punishing behaviors can hardly people handle problems effectively. 这个句子觉得有点别扭,是不是应该only by punishing behaviors, people can hardly handle problems effectively捏?我也知道倒装,不过这里好象不顺呀。恩。快讨论讨论。呼唤你)]Laws are extrinsic restrictions of social behaviors by punishing those who commit crimes, but moral standards are the intrinsic restrictions. Moralities help people benefit society automatically and prevent them[ (form嘿嘿一个小错误都逃不过我雪亮的眼睛滴。From撒)] committing crimes. After opening any document of laws of a nation, [(murdering and stealing should always the illegal activities. 虾么意思呀)]However, these crimes have not despaired in any civilized society. For murdering, unless every person believes that each one has the equal rights to live in any case, such crimes would not despair. Meanwhile, in many areas, once there was no notion of lock there --people can[( left哇呀呀,leave撒,你个小粗心哈。打PP)] the door unlocked when living – because there was no stealing. [(你的关于谋杀的论述我觉得挺好的,但是这个锁的,好象就不是很顺)]From this point of view, it is certain aspects of moralities of people having been impaired that play a relatively vital role in social problems, rather than that moral behavior cannot be legislated.[ (是不是把顺序调整一下捏?我感觉先把你的那个谋杀和锁这两个小东西放在道德好处的前面,先说法律的不足,引出道德)]
Admittedly, there exist a myriad of conducts related to morality cannot be legislated in that,[ (我觉得题目是在讨论立法能否规范人的道德行为,而不是讨论道德是否能立法吧)]first or foremost, various people hold diverse standards about certain moral activities. Take the attitudes of different people on whether the mercy killing can be admitted in laws as an example. For mercy killing, some may assist that it is moral, whereas, others may posit it is immoral even though the patients would suffer from severe pains. Also, in some culture the pre – marriage pregnancy has no business with morality in some people’s mind, while it is immoral in others’. Just like mentioned above that sometimes moral standard is the foundation of laws. Then, whether the behaviors, like mercy killing and pre – marriage pregnancy is immoral or not is a contradiction, how do such conduct can be legislated?
To sum up, while conceding that there exist numerous problems unsolved by laws, such situation should not be only blamed to the reason that some moral behaviors are beyond the reach of legislation. Laws are not rigid and gradual mending combining legislation with morality are necessary.[(呀,关于破题可以再讨论。恩,然后段落之间的层次我不是很明白。嘿嘿,语言和句子都很好的说,一直很佩服你的努力的。恩加油,继续互拍。)]
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