Issue214 作业又交晚了~哎~麻烦大家拍拍~

天才之梦UID: 2159126

TOPIC: ISSUE 214 - "Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."
       TIME: 上午 01:00:00          DATE: 2006-2-9
提纲:
1.父母和老师应该善于发觉孩子的能力,而不应该盲目地让他们上培训班.
2,对于有某方面能力的孩子应该鼓励他们上培训班
3,父母和老师不应该滥用孩子的能力.
限时写的很仓促.希望大家帮我改改~
I have a sister whose father is a music teacher, and when she was at three, her father began to teach her music, and she was so smart that it was not long before she mastered what she had been taught. As a result, she had a good command of playing the piano and singing at an early age, which were more excellent than those who were at the same age with her. In my view, the talented should be identified and trained at an early age so that they may contribute to the society.

As an old saying goes: interest is the best teacher, it seems necessay[necessary] for parents and teachers to identify children's special talents and abilities rather than force them to learn some skills blindly, not[用without吧] considering whether the children are interested or not. A trend prevails that parents demand their children to attend some training center blindly embracing[抱有希望不是这么说的吧，还不如用keeping ] the hope that these children can have some abilities when they grow up, however, they fail to consider the children's own interests, therefore, some efforts though having taked[写完了没检查 taken] into action, have no pay. My own experence [experience ]is a case in the point. When I was four years old, my mother sent me to a training center in the hope that I could learn some skills in dancing, yet I had no interest in it, and no matter how the teacher instructed me, it was difficult for me to satisfy the teacher. Later, while I entered the primaru [ primary] school, the dance teachers in the school wanted to select some talented children to attend the dance club. Unfortunately, I failed for I couldn't accomplished the teachers' direction but others did. Until now, it seems that my efforts have not paid off.这段有点走题了,自己也觉得~但是不知道应该怎么举例了

On the contrary, some talented children were motivated in a proper way by the training and then excel in their areas of ability. Take Zhou Bichang for example. Zhou, who have been rewarded as the second prize at the competition of singing called "Chaoji nvsheng" in China, have been trained in music when she was very young. Through training, her potantial[ potential ] ability to music has been fully developed, and now not  only is she good at Opera, but also she do well in many instruments, which are adored by numerous people.

On the other hand, albeits[albeit] society has identified the talented, it is suitable for these children to study rather than abuse such talents and abilities. In ancient China, an intelligent child called Zhong yong, was famous for his verses. While his family encouraged him to stop learning but to earn money by making verses, due to it that he created the verses everyday with no learning at all, and what he had learned was limited, several years later, he could not make verses any more, and even after a few years, he died [这句话结构没看明白，是不是有问题？]. We can suppose that if this child had been going on his study other than stop it, he may have become a person with much reputation today in China's history.

To sum up, parents should develop the children's talents and abilities in a proper way. To the common children, parents should find their interests, and then help develop them, to the children who have special talents and abilities, parents should have them trained in case of their abilities disappearing.
[审题有问题。多练习一下审题吧，想好了把提纲写出来问问别人是不是跑题了，然后再写正文。mm别着急]

Anny.Y.WangUID: 2178596

TOPIC: ISSUE 214 - "Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."
       TIME: 上午 01:00:00          DATE: 2006-2-9
提纲:
1.父母和老师应该善于发觉孩子的能力,而不应该盲目地让他们上培训班.
2,对于有某方面能力的孩子应该鼓励他们上培训班
3,父母和老师不应该滥用孩子的能力.
限时写的很仓促.希望大家帮我改改~
I have a sister whose father is a music teacher, and when she was at three, her father began to teach her music, and she was so smart that it was not long before she mastered what she had been taught 这句话好象不对劲哦，动词的主谓不对哦. As a result, she had a good command of playing the piano and singing at an early age, which were more excellent than those who were at the same age with her. In my view, the talented should be identified and trained at an early age so that they may contribute to the society.

As an old saying goes:interest is the best teacher, it seems necessay for parents and teachers to identify children's special talents and abilities rather than force them to learn some skills blindly, not considering whether the children are interested or not. A trend prevails that parents demand their children to attend some training center blindly embracing the hope that these children can have some abilities when they grow up, however, they fail to consider the children's own interests, therefore, some efforts though having taked  taken into action, have no pay. My own experence is a case in the point. When I was four years old, my mother sent me to a training center in the hope that I could learn some skills in dancing, yet I had no interest in it, and no matter how the teacher instructed me, it was difficult for me to satisfy the teacher. Later, while I entered the primaru primaryschool, the dance teachers in the school wanted to select some talented children to attend the dance club. Unfortunately, I failed for I could't accomplished the teachers' direction but others did. Until now, it seems that my efforts have not paid off.这段有点走题了,自己也觉得~但是不知道应该怎么举例了

On the contrary, some talented children were motivated in a proper way by the training and then excel in their areas of ability. Take Zhou Bichang   好像人名的顺序是 名姓吧for example. Zhou, who have been rewarded as the second prize at the competition of singing called "Chaoji nvsheng 我认为大致可以翻译为 Super Vioce or excellent Voice 反正他们又不知道是什么， 美国有一档相似的节目叫 American Idio " in China, have been trained in music when she was very young. Through training, her potantial ability to music has been fully developed, and now not  only is she good at Opera, but also she do well in many instruments, which 指的人还是指物？指代不清哦 are adored by numerous people.

On the other hand, albeits society has identified the talented, it is suitable for these children to study rather than abuse such talents and abilities. In ancient China, an intelligent child called Zhongyong,  was famous for his verses. While his family encouraged him to stop learning but to earn money by making  verses, due to it that he created the verses everyday with no learning at all, and what he had learned was limited, several years later, he could not make verses any more, and even after a few years, he died. We can suppose that if this child had been going on his study other than stop it, he may have become a person with much reputation today in China's history.

To sum up, parents should develop the children's talents and abilities in a proper way. To the common children, parents should find their interests, and then help develop them, to the children who have special talents and abilities, parents should have them trained in case of their abilities disappearing.

小璇，不知道你还有多长时间考试，如果还有一个月或者更多，那先不要限制是件，而是查查资料，现丰富自己的大脑，要不举出来的例子，中国人知道外国人不知道，不是我们崇洋媚外，而是披卷子的不是中国人呀！

还有，这里的tanlent和ability 不是你文章中的interesting吧！！
在改改哦！！
加油！！:victory:

[ 本帖最后由 Anny.Y.Wang 于 2006-2-10 18:39 编辑 ]

michelle1021UID: 195011

提纲:
1.父母和老师应该善于发觉孩子的能力,而不应该盲目地让他们上培训班.
2,对于有某方面能力的孩子应该鼓励他们上培训班
3,父母和老师不应该滥用孩子的能力.
限时写的很仓促.希望大家帮我改改~
I have a sister whose father is a music teacher, and when she was at three, her father began to teach her music, and she was so smart that it was not long before she mastered what she had been taught.我个人觉得这种开头不太好，虽然很不一样 As a result, she had a good command of playing the piano and singing at an early age, which were more excellent than those who were at the same age with her. In my view, the talented should be identified and trained at an early age so that they may contribute to the society.

As an old saying goes:interest is the best teacher, it seems necessay for parents and teachers to identify children's special talents and abilities rather than force them to learn some skills blindly, not considering whether the children are interested or not. A trend prevails that parents demand their children to attend some training center blindly embracing the hope that these children can have some abilities when they grow up, however, they fail to consider the children's own interests, therefore, some efforts though having taked into action, have no pay. My own experence is a case in the point. When I was four years old, my mother sent me to a training center in the hope that I could learn some skills in dancing, yet I had no interest in it, and no matter how the teacher instructed me, it was difficult for me to satisfy the teacher. Later, while I entered the primaru school, the dance teachers in the school wanted to select some talented children to attend the dance club. Unfortunately, I failed for I could't accomplished the teachers' direction but others did. Until now, it seems that my efforts have not paid off.这段有点走题了,自己也觉得~但是不知道应该怎么举例了这段的例子似乎是不怎么好

On the contrary, some talented children were motivated in a proper way by the training and then excel in their areas of ability. Take Zhou Bichang for example. 举这个例子老美可能不太清楚她Zhou, who have been rewarded as the second prize at the competition of singing called "Chaoji nvsheng" in China, have been trained in music when she was very young. Through training, her potantial ability to music has been fully developed, and now not  only is she good at Opera, but also she do well in many instruments, which are adored by numerous people.

On the other hand, albeits society has identified the talented, it is suitable for these children to study rather than abuse such talents and abilities. In ancient China, an intelligent child called Zhongyong,  was famous for his verses. While his family encouraged him to stop learning but to earn money by making  verses, due to it that就用because吧 he created the verses everyday with no learning at all, and what he had learned was limited, several years later, he could not make verses any more, and even after a few years, he died. We can suppose that if this child had been going on his study other than stopstopping it, he may have become a person with much reputation today in China's history.

To sum up, parents should develop the children's talents and abilities in a proper way. To the common children, parents should find their interests, and then help develop them, to the children who have special talents and abilities, parents should have them trained in case of their abilities disappearing.
我觉得举例子方面还需加强，举老美也知道的例子比较好

forevercocoUID: 149574

I have a sister whose father is a music teacher, and when she was at three, her father began to teach her music, and she was so smart that it was not long before she mastered what she had been taught. As a result, she had a good command of playing the去掉the,play piano是固定搭配 piano and singing at an early age, which were more excellent than those who were at the same age withas her. In my view, the talentedtalent should be identified and trained at an early age so that they may contribute to the society.

As an old saying goes:interest is the best teacher, it seems necessay for parents and teachers to identify children's special talents and abilities rather than force them to learn some skills blindly, not considering whether the children are interested or not. A trend prevails that parents demand their children to attend some training centerattend后面应该接classes或courses blindly embracing the hope that these children can have some abilities when they grow up, however, they fail to consider the children's own interests, therefore, some efforts though having been? taked into action, have no pay. My own experence is a case in the point. When I was four years old, my mother sent me to a training center in the hope that I could learn some skills in dancing, yet I had no interest in it, and no matter how the teacher instructed me, it was difficult for me to satisfy the teacher. Later, while I entered the primaru primary school, the dance teachers in the school wanted to select some talented children to attend the dance club. Unfortunately, I failed for I could't accomplished the teachers' direction but others did. Until now, it seems that my efforts have not paid off.这段有点走题了,自己也觉得~但是不知道应该怎么举例了
如果觉得跑题，可以加一个结束句往回扯一下，比如：家长对儿童兴趣的尊重是至关重要的，即使他们进入学校，儿时的经历还是会影响他们。

On the contrary, some talented children were motivated in a proper way by the training and then excel in their areas of ability. Take Zhou Bichang for example. Zhou, who have been rewarded as the second prize at the competition of singing called "Chaoji nvsheng" in China, have been trained in music when she was very young. Through training, her potantialpotential ability to music has been fully developed, and now not  only is she good at Opera, but also she do well in many instruments, which are adored by numerous people.
来握个手，我是凉粉~~~嘿嘿

On the other hand, albeits society has identified the talented, it is suitable for these children to study rather than abuse such talents and abilities. In ancient China, an intelligent child called Zhongyong,  was famous for his verses. While his family encouraged him to stop learning but to earn money by making  verses, due to it that he created the verses everyday with no learning at all, and what he had learned was limited, several years later, he could not make verses any more, and even after a few years, he died. We can suppose that if this child had been going on his study other than stop it, he may have become a person with much reputation today in China's history.

To sum up, parents should develop the children's talents and abilities in a proper way. To the common children, parents should find their interests, and then help develop them, to the children who have special talents and abilities, parents should have them trained in case of their abilities disappearing.

感觉完全偏向父母方面了，对了社会和学校顾及的不多，其实这两点可写得也不少。只写了父母方面，觉得有些跑题了。可以多看一些关于天才儿童教育的材料，找找灵感，主要是看看老米在这方面的思路。

The education of gifted students
Gifted performance in adults has been recognized throughout recorded history. For example, biographies of the 18th-century Austrian composer Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart generally emphasize that he was a highly accomplished musician and composer as early as age six. However, there were only scattered attempts to identify and study gifted children prior to the 20th century. In the early 20th century, American psychologist Lewis Terman conducted studies of gifted individuals that coincided with his efforts to develop intelligence tests. Terman originated the term intelligence quotient (IQ) and developed the Stanford-Binet intelligence test, which measured the intelligence of children and adults. His studies of children with high IQs formed a scientific basis for understanding giftedness and have helped to establish the dominant conception that giftedness is measured by a high IQ.

During the 1950s American educators called for broader definitions of giftedness that would also include such considerations as specific academic abilities, creativity, and talents in the visual and performing arts. In 1971 U.S. Commissioner of Education Sydney P. Marland incorporated these considerations into a report to the U.S. Congress on the state of education programs for gifted and talented children.

The Marland Report provided the first federally sanctioned definition of giftedness. It also led to the establishment of the Office of Gifted and Talented, a division of the federal Department of Education that provided grants to elementary and secondary schools that serve the special needs of gifted youth. The Jacob K. Javits Gifted and Talented Students Education Act of 1988 authorized funds to support innovative programs for specific groups of gifted students, such as minorities, economically disadvantaged students, and students with limited proficiency in English. The Javits Act also established the National Research Center on the Gifted and Talented to carry out research on students with exceptional abilities. Despite these efforts, gifted education receives relatively little federal funding, and there have been no federal legislative efforts to mandate services for gifted students.

Many educators advocate placing gifted students in regular classrooms with students of diverse ability levels, an educational method known as inclusion. However, considerable evidence suggests that regular classroom teachers do not receive the training and support to appropriately modify the curriculum to meet the needs of gifted students. Many educators also claim that minorities and economically disadvantaged children are underrepresented in educational programs for gifted students. At the same time, limited funding for education in general restricts efforts to nurture the talents of all gifted children.

[ 本帖最后由 forevercoco 于 2006-2-11 21:39 编辑 ]

freud5027UID: 2165870

I have a sister whose father is a music teacher, and when she was at three, her father began to teach her music, and she was so smart that it was not long before(after?) she mastered what she had been taught. As a result, she had a good command of playing the piano and singing at an early age, which were more excellent than those who were at the same age with her. In my view, the talented should be identified and trained at an early age so that they may contribute to the society.<你应该明白这种开头是不行的>

As an old saying goes: interest is the best teacher, it seems necessay for parents and teachers to identify children's special talents and abilities rather than force them to learn some skills blindly, not considering whether the children are interested or not. A trend prevails that parents demand their children to attend some training center blindly embracing the hope that these children can have some abilities when they grow up, however, they fail to consider the children's own interests, therefore, some efforts though having taked into action, have no pay. My own experence is a case in the point. When I was four years old, my mother sent me to a training center in the hope that I could learn some skills in dancing, yet I had no interest in it, and no matter how the teacher instructed me, it was difficult for me to satisfy the teacher. Later, while I entered the primaru school, the dance teachers in the school wanted to select some talented children to attend the dance club. Unfortunately, I failed for I could't accomplished the teachers' direction but others did. Until now, it seems that my efforts have not paid off.<题中的identify those children's special talents and abilities与发现孩子的兴趣有点共同的地方，可能你说着说着忘了就跑题了，其实抓住关键词就好了>

On the contrary, some talented children were motivated in a proper way by the training and then excel in their areas of ability. Take Zhou Bichang for example. Zhou, who have been rewarded as the second prize at the competition of singing called "Chaoji nvsheng" in China, have been trained in music when she was very young. Through training, her potantial ability to music has been fully developed, and now not  only is she good at Opera, but also she do well in many instruments, which are adored by numerous people.<超女好像是被《时代周刊》拿来嘲笑中国人对于明星的包装的>

On the other hand, albeits society has identified the talented, it is suitable for these children to study rather than abuse such talents and abilities. In ancient China, an intelligent child called Zhongyong,  was famous for his verses. While his family encouraged him to stop learning but to earn money by making  verses, due to it that he created the verses everyday with no learning at all, and what he had learned was limited, several years later, he could not make verses any more, and even after a few years, he died. We can suppose that if this child had been going on his study other than stop it<用对应于题目中的begin training them at an early age的句子会更好点>, he may have become a person with much reputation today in China's history.

To sum up, parents should develop the children's talents and abilities in a proper way. To the common children, parents should find their interests<总结时扣住key words就好，不用再谈interests了>, and then help develop them, to the children who have special talents and abilities, parents should have them trained in case of their abilities disappearing.

该说的大家已经说得很详细了，我就不啰嗦了……