argument73 同主题。

果小冻UID: 208370

这个孩子。。呵呵，我很感动你给我改的那么用心。恩马上学习。不过你的可能要明天才能改了。我头好晕啊

果小冻UID: 208370

呵呵。看了jingjing 给我认真改的文章。我有几个地方想讨论一下。恩
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1. people's inclination towards leasing cars

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这个的确这么写清楚多了。恩，呵呵好金子（西西。给你个中文名哈）
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1. 觉得把过去推将来作为首要的驳斥点放在第一段不大适宜，其实，你是以过去不能推将来的角度驳斥the number of people leasing new cars has surpassed ......个人认为这个角度选取的不好，你完全可以换成错误因果的

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这个段落的中心句的确不好。呵呵。要说的清楚一点。恩。今天实在太晕了。明天来改
3，第三个段落，我想说的层次是，应该分成两个部分，首先不一定能够掌握市场。其次，即使顺利打入市场也不一定会比以前赢利，因为卖车比租车利润高。
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1. 第一个攻击点放在过去推将来有些胜之不武，第二个分析的还可以，但是就那个list我实在不敢恭维，第三个基于那个似是而非的假设把整段论证带入了一个帮助消费者分析买车好，还是租车好，买什么样的车好，租什么样的好，确实让我见识不少，甚至想写一篇论述如何买车的issue

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金子，恩，你说的一针见血，我还要你下次拍我，呵呵。我是好多都是废话，恩展开细节的时候的确要注意口紧中心
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1. 小小，其实我说这么多也是想让你的文章写的更好，我不想只是纠正一下语法错误或是简单的改几个单词，可能某些话说的太过分了，不过我绝对没有讽刺你的意思，其实我的水平不高，只是喜欢开玩笑，如果有什么冒犯的地方恳请见凉

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傻，金子，我感动还来不及呢，呵呵，你给我看的这么仔细，恩，我不会辜负你的期望的，一定好好努力。呵呵，明天拍你哦，只是我水平不好，一直说不出啥来，尽力哈。

小室黄瓜UID: 2155213

提纲：
1，        租车市场不一定好。
2，        买新车的人不一定减少。
3，        租车市场即使好，投资也不一定会更加赚钱。

Assuming the rising popularity of leasing cars and people's attitudes towards driving leased and individually owned, the author suggests that the company should pay more investment to the business of leasing cars. However, lacking sufficient evidence, those assumptions render the suggestion invalid.

To begin with, the author assumes a striking future for the business of leasing cars without credible evidence. Even if the number of people leasing new cars really has surpassed that of people buying new cars in each of the past years, it does not follow that the same situation will last later on. Since it is entirely possible that so many cars have been leased out just because some people have frequently changed different cars. The author should provide information about the list of those people who have leased cars from this company in order to know whether the majority of people are willing to lease cars or not. Or perhaps, the conditions of tourism have been especially pleasure in these five years. And many cars leased by those tourists for convenience were the reason for the rising popularity of leasing cars. Then, if the tourism unfortunately become worse in the following years, the popularity of leasing cars will also dropping（drop） down. In short, any of the scenarios, if true, would cast serious doubts on the conclusion that the leasing cars will also be popular later on.(这段分析得不错，有新意，还有条理)
Furthermore, no evidence reveals that the number of people who buy new cars will be reduced. Since there is no rule to forbid the same person buying more than one cars, it is possible that those who already owning cars will still choose to buy new cars. With the development of technology, great changes have taken place in the car industry, and the cars have become better and better. People maybe pursue different cars of colors, forms, sizes, and so forth. Also, maybe those who have leased cars in the past five years will choose to buy new cars on their own. Since they have requirement for cars, they will probably buy cars for more convenience. The author should provide representative and detailed opinions of people whether they own cars or not. Before this, the author should not make any unwarranted assumptions.

Moreover, even if the market of leasing cars is better than that of buying new ones, the author should not conclude that the company should change the focus of business form selling cars to leasing them, since the profits cannot be insured. The author fails to consider the prices of buying or leasing cars, which are completely different. As we all know, buying cars needs quite a lot of money, while leasing them costs far less money. Also different kinds of cars ask for different amount of money, since the quality and the trademark are all dissimilar. It is entirely possible that those cars for leasing are not as good as those for selling in the matter of quality or trademarks. Additionally, before investing, the author should provide the information of market of leasing cars. Since perhaps there have already numerous companies, which offering such service, then, we will not certainly success in the competition, lacking experience. （这段跟我的观点一样）
In sum, before making suggestion for investing, the author should provide more information of markets of leasing and selling cars. To better bolster the argument, the author needs to conduct a scientific and detailed survey, which reveals people’s attitudes towards leasing and buying cars, as well as their latest plans for cars.
一点不夸张地说，小小写的真地很好！！我想问30分钟写完，你用多少时间分析出来这些论点并把他们按顺序组织起来的呢？结尾感觉是基本可以通用的，而且，文章的确缺乏其他阿狗中有的表面调查，怎么在这么短的时间里，把让我那么头痛的反驳点找到的呢？？请小小帮我看看我的好么？我知道你马上就上战场了，有时间就看看吧。我写了3个多小时~~~汗！！！！！！

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果小冻UID: 208370

恩。我尽力哈。这个文章其实在细节展开上面挺乱的说，恩有时间我一定要改好它