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发表于 2006-2-10 19:24:38 |显示全部楼层
1 现今社会的繁荣和诸多名人说明了人们懂得如何达到成功
2 现今社会的巨大成就说明很多人懂得如何利用成功
In the statement, the speaker advocates that though many people know how to attain success few of them can make the best use of it. Though te assertion seems appealing, further reflection shows that I cannot completely agree to what he claims. There is no doubt that nowadays, many people have find the way leading to personal success and achievement, but in the same time, regarding the highly developed society and the great progress made by human beings, we can also reach the conclusion that people really know how to make the best use of their success.

Admittedly, today's security and prosperity of our society as well as many other aspects shows that people have found the way leading to both individual's and all human beings' success. Since the definition of success appeared, people have been consistently seeking for the rules by obeying which individuals can become successful. In the process of seeking, only some of them finally reach their goal and then have a profound understanding of how to become a successful person. Through their personal experience and comprehension of the way to attain success, people find some basic rules by following which individuals can get success more easily and directly. For example, by research many individuals with great success, people find that in determining personal achievement, emotion quotient plays a much more important role than intelligence quotient. And nowadays most of the parents send their children to schools and even university for formal education and special training because today it is the common sense that compared with poorly educated persons, well skilled ones are more likely to succeed. Moreover, after hundreds of years' practice, at the cost of numerous people's lives, now people realize that only harmony and peace can maintain the survival of human being and the prosperity of society, which is considered to be the greatest success of human being.

However, making good use of success is also an important part, the skill of which has already been well mastered by most people. As is known to us all, between successes, causal relationship does exist, that is, the utilization of one success can result in another. Also, a big success consists of a serial of smaller ones, among which there are both coordinate and causal relationship. Therefore, to achieve great accomplishment, taking advantage of success is an indispensable skill. After scanning the marvelous achievements people has already reached, it is not difficult for one to see that human beings really learn such a skill well. With intelligence, creation and insight, the eminent figures reveal the latent relationship between achieved success and future goal, use previous accomplishment as a tool to reach the next one and turn small successes into much bigger ones. For instance, the invention of electric light of Edison is only a personal achievement if the benefit of it cannot be shared by the whole society. It is his foundation of electric light company that makes good use of his talent invention, brings brightness to all people at night and significantly contributes to the development of society. From this respective, it can be concluded that the generalization of electric light considered as a big success originates from the use of Edison's small success, the previous invention. What’s more, in fact, when enjoying the progress of modern civilization regarded as success of society, every day people are using such progress to create more wealth by studying and working. Therefore, everyone is the user of attained success.

To sum up, aware of how to reach success, people are also well skilled at how to make good use of it. It is true that contemporary civilization is a reflection of accomplishment attained by human being, but it also witnesses the process of people's use of previous achievement. Without either of them, the construction of modern society was doomed to be a failure.

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发表于 2006-2-10 19:56:03 |显示全部楼层
In the statement, the speaker advocates that though many people know how to attain success few of them can make the best use of it. Though te assertion seems appealing, further reflection shows that I cannot completely agree to what he claims. There is no doubt that nowadays, many people have find the way leading to personal success and achievement, but in the same time, regarding the highly developed society and the great progress made by human beings, we can also reach the conclusion that people really know how to make the best use of their success.

Admittedly, today's security and prosperity of our society as well as the reputation of eminent figures shows that people have found the way leading to both individual's and all human beings' success. Since the definition of success appeared, people have been consistently seeking for the rules by obeying which individuals can become successful. In the process of seeking, only some of them finally reach their goal and then have a profound understanding of how to become a successful person. Those successful figures, whose achievement make a great contribution to the development of society and civilization, are well known to all people and will be remembered by human being's history forever.(最好加个例子增加说服力) Besides, through their personal experience and comprehension of the way to attain success, people also find some basic rules by following which individuals can get success more easily and directly. For example, by research many individuals with great success, people find that in determining personal achievement, emotion quotient plays a much more important role than intelligence quotient. And nowadays most of the parents send their children to schools and even university for formal education and special training because today it is the common sense that compared with poorly educated persons, well skilled ones are more likely to succeed. Moreover, after hundreds of years' practice, at the cost of numerous people's lives, now people realize that only harmony and peace can maintain the survival of human being and the prosperity of society, which is considered to be the greatest success of human being.(最好有个实在点的例子,有点空,我觉得)

However, making good use of success is also an important part, the skill of which has already been well mastered by most people. As is known to us all, between successes, causal relationship does exist, that is, the utilization of one success can result in another. Also, a big success consists of a serial of smaller ones, among which there are both coordinate and causal relationship. Therefore, to achieve great accomplishment, making the best use of success is an indispensable skill. After scanning the marvelous ones people has already made, it is not difficult for one to see that human beings really learn such a skill well. With intelligence, creation and insight, the eminent figures reveal the latent relationship between achieved success and future goal, use previous accomplishment as a tool to reach the next one and turn small successes into much bigger ones. For instance, the invention of electric light of Edison is only a personal achievement if the benefit of it cannot be shared by the whole society. It is his foundation of electric light company that makes good use of his talent invention, brings brightness to all people at night and significantly contributes to the development of society. From this respective, it can be concluded that the generalization of electric light considered as a big success originates from the use of Edison's small success, the previous invention. In fact, when enjoying the progress of modern civilization regarded as success of society, every day people are using such progress to create more wealth by studying and working. Therefore, everyone is the user of attained success.

To sum up, aware of how to reach success, people are also well skilled at how to make good use of it. It is true that contemporary civilization is a reflection of accomplishment attained by human being, but it also witnesses the process of people's use of previous achievement. Without either of them, the construction of modern society was doomed to be a failure. (EDISON的例子很不错,可是吧这个CAUSAL RELATIONSHIP我觉得说的没有特别清楚,可能需要一两个句子点明)

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发表于 2006-2-10 23:07:42 |显示全部楼层
1 现今社会的繁荣和诸多名人说明了人们懂得如何达到成功
2 现今社会的巨大成就说明很多人懂得如何利用成功
In the statement, the speaker advocates that though many people know how to attain success few of them can make the best use of it. Though the assertion seems appealing, further reflection shows that I cannot completely agree to what he claims. There is no doubt that nowadays, many people have find the way leading to personal success and achievement, but这里没有转折关系。and好了 in the same time, regarding the highly developed society and the great progress made by human beings, we can also reach the conclusion that people really know how to make the best use of their success.

Admittedly, today's security and prosperity of our society as well as many other aspects shows that people have found the way leading to both individual's and all human beings' success. Since the definition of success appeared ?自从成功的定义出现后?呵呵,很奇怪的,什么定义呀, people have been consistently seeking for the rules by obeying which individuals can become successful. In the process of seeking, (only some of them)不对吧,你应该是想说很多人都懂得如何成功呀 finally reach their goal and then have a profound understanding of how to become a successful person. Through their personal experience and comprehension of the way to attain success, people find some basic rules by following which individuals can get success more easily and directly. For example, by researchobserving many individuals with great success, people find that in determining personal achievement, emotion quotient plays a much more important role than intelligence quotient. And nowadays most of the parents send their children to schools and even university for formal education and special training because today it is the common sense that compared with poorly educated persons, well skilled ones are more likely to succeed. Moreover, after hundreds of years' practice, at the cost of numerous people's lives, now people realize that only harmony and peace can maintain the survival of human being and the prosperity of society, which is considered to be the greatest success of human being.

However, making good use of success is also an important part, the skill of which has already been well mastered by most people. As is known to us all, between successes, causal relationship does exist, that is, the utilization of one success can result in another. Also, a big success consists of a serial of smaller ones, among which there are both coordinate and causal relationship. Therefore, to achieve great accomplishment, taking advantage of success is an indispensable skill. After scanning the marvelous achievements people hashave already reached, it is not difficult for one to see that human beings really learn such a skill well. With intelligence, creation and insight, the eminent figures reveal the latent relationship between achieved success and future goal, use previous accomplishment as a tool to reach the next one and turn small successes into much bigger ones. For instance, the invention of electric light of Edison is only a personal achievement if the benefit of it cannot be shared by the whole society. It is his foundation of electric light company that makes good use of his talent invention, brings brightness to all people at night and significantly contributes to the development of society. From this respective, it can be concluded that the generalization of electric light considered as a big success originates from the use of Edison's small success, the previous invention. (What’s more, in fact, when enjoying the progress of modern civilization regarded as success of society, every day people are using such progress to create more wealth by studying and working. Therefore, everyone is the user of attained success. )这个what is more引导的观点我有点不赞同呐。题目中指的是人们利用自己取得的成功呀,而是引申到了人们利用整个社会的成功了。有点偏颇的。

To sum up, aware of how to reach success, people are also well skilled at how to make good use of it. It is true that contemporary civilization is a reflection of accomplishment attained by human being, but it also witnesses the process of people's use of previous achievement. Without either of them, the construction of modern society was doomed to be a failure.
文章还是思路很清晰的。是今天看到现在和我的构思最象的一篇,呵呵。知音呀。
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发表于 2006-2-10 23:43:19 |显示全部楼层
题目中的意思似乎没有说一定是利用自己的成功吧,起码没说明白。。。呵呵

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发表于 2006-2-11 00:42:05 |显示全部楼层
but in the same time, regarding the highly developed society and the great progress made by human beings, we can also reach the conclusion that people really know how to make the best use of their success.
at the same time ; regarding to
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发表于 2006-2-11 00:47:01 |显示全部楼层
Since the definition of success appeared, people have been consistently seeking for the rules by obeying which individuals can become successful
这一句没懂,尤其是后面一个分句
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发表于 2006-2-11 01:05:12 |显示全部楼层
第二段我同意兔兔姐姐的说法,还是不要去冒这个险的好,其实只要把例子稍稍改一下,说是建立在自己以前的成功上就可以啦
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