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With the proceeding of the technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.
                                                                               此处是否加 in the most aspects比较严谨呢
自己的语言概括issue的含义,比我强的多啊,
There is few doubt that TV plays an chief role in people's daily life in that not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books.
                                                 好像逻辑不对啊,不还有照着武功秘笈练功的吗
Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu, written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.
                                                                         论语这个例子真好

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures.

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.
                        最后加 to use both books side by side television to。。。你觉得怎么样

句式变换挺丰富的
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发表于 2006-2-16 13:27:47 |只看该作者
欢迎互拍https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1
--写的极郁闷,多给意见。

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发表于 2006-2-16 21:24:23 |只看该作者
TOPIC: ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
TIME: 1:00:00          DATE: 2006-2-15
1.电视给人不同的视觉效果,能提供最新的消息,有些健身节目还能帮助人们锻炼身体。
2.读书能使人明理,塑造性格
3,读书能使人更好的了解历史。

With the proceeding of 可以去掉technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.(表明了观点)

There is  a few doubt that TV plays an a chief role in people's daily life in that 删掉,加逗号, not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books.(我有点迷惑了,就是题目中的learn到底是什么含义???)

Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities 这句不太理解呀. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu(是论语吗?), written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures.

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.

小璇,你什么时候考作文??  不要太急练上机哦!!

不过比上次那篇有很大进步了!


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TOPIC: ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
TIME: 1:00:00          DATE: 2006-2-15
1.电视给人不同的视觉效果,能提供最新的消息,有些健身节目还能帮助人们锻炼身体。
2.读书能使人明理,塑造性格
3,读书能使人更好的了解历史。

With the proceeding of the technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.

There is few doubt that TV plays an chief role in people's daily life in that not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books.[在电视上学习锻炼和cooking的例子不错]

Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu[Analects], written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.[Analects of Confucius的例子不错]

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures.

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.[结尾不是很好,感觉很单调

全文总体看还是不错的,用例比以前有进步]

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发表于 2006-2-16 22:58:19 |只看该作者
TOPIC: ISSUE38 - "In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching

television as they can by reading books."
TIME: 1:00:00          DATE: 2006-2-15
1.电视给人不同的视觉效果,能提供最新的消息,有些健身节目还能帮助人们锻炼身体。
2.读书能使人明理,塑造性格
3,读书能使人更好的了解历史。

With the proceeding of the technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.

There is few doubt that TV plays an chief role in people's daily life in that not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books.

Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu, written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures. 这个点稍欠缺,因为TV也可以拍历史片。:)

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.

基本没问题,不错啦。。

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发表于 2006-2-16 23:22:18 |只看该作者
With the proceeding of the technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.

There is few doubt that TV plays an chief role in people's daily life in that not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books从书上还是可以学到,比如美容健康杂志什么的。可以把这里说成没有在电视上学效果好.

Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu, written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. 这个例子很好哦 On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. 我感觉这段和上一段有点重复,都是在说古代书的好处。这段可以从另外方面说书的好处啊,哈哈Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures.

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.

恩,写的不错,很清楚!用的例子也很适合

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发表于 2006-2-17 14:06:11 |只看该作者
小璇,大概得看了一下,细节地方需要修改的比较多,等等我改好了再发上来给你。
你几号考试的?建议不要这么早限时了,尤其是这些高频的题目,还是好好的写上一篇,因为这些高频题对很多其它的题目都有借鉴意义的,+u哦~
3.13--原来一回头就是奇迹

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With the proceeding of the technology, people tend to give preference to TV rather than books, and a controversial idea comes out that people can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books. I strongly disapprove of this thought, for I hold that books are still of significant importance, and can provide us more knowledge.

There is few doubt that TV plays an chief role in people's daily life in that(in which) not only can it bring us the live series of pictures different from the inanimate words in books, but also it makes our spare time much more colorful. From TV, we can both get the fastest news and catch the truest pictures. What is more, the actions which cannot be exactly expressed in books can be seen quite clearly in TV such as some programs like cooking and exercising. So far as I know it becomes fashionable for housewives to learn how to keep fit according to what the compere do in TV, and such kind of sports can not be learned from the books<段中强调了exactly和clearly很好,comparatively correct and direct也是其优势,现在很多健身的书都有姿势的图片,但无论如何没有看电视节目来的直观吧>.

Reading books, however, can help us form our attitudes and personalities. A few books with anecdotes can help motivate our sense of humor, and some books conveying the stories of the great men may enlighten us. Take the book called Lun Yu, written by Confucius in China for instance. This book contains a tremendous number of meaningful sayings which have a profound influence on Chinese people, and a lot of good virtues can be learned from it such as modesty, politeness, loyalty and so on. Students who have read it may have deep thoughts on their deeds in daily life. On the other hand, TV may not affect people's ideas in such a direct way.

Furthermore, books can help people have a good command of histories. There are a great deal of books which are left by the ancient people and these books have been recorded the history in great detail. Compared with the TV series which depict the story happening in the past, the contents in books are superior<superior在哪里要写出来,particular/complete>, and even you can get what you want as much as you can from the numerous historical books. It can be said that books are the origins of the cultures.

To sum up, TVs, as a tool of recreation, can give us the fastest news and pleasant series of pictures as well as widen our eyes to some degree, however, books, as a kind of culture, can provide us a great amount of specific knowledge to learn and left much more room to think.

1小时能写出这样的issue已经很不错了,发觉大家写得都越来越好了。。。

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