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ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

TOPIC: ISSUE87 - "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
WORDS: 558          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-2-16
position: agree
1 advantages of the beginner
2 advantages of experts
3 disadvantage of expert

Beginners often have interests and enthusiasm to study in everything they meet. As a result, they are more likely to have the oppotunities of getting new ideas than experts whose thoughts may be confined by their experience and knowledge. Therefore, to some extent, beginners are more likely to make important discoveries. Still, we should not ignore the fact that there are many discoveries made by experts.

As a beginner, lacking of the knowledge and experience relevant to a field, he or she is often curious about everything that he or she touches often brings up new ideas and further lead to new discovery. To make discovery, one important factor is new idea. Take one period in the history of astronomy for example. About 400 years ago, most of astronomers firmly believed Aristotle's geocentric theory because it could explain many phenomena that they had met and it was suitable to traditional way in thinking. While, as a beginner, Copercicus was very questionable on this theory. With the enthusiam and doubt toward extant theory to resolve his doubt on it, he began to work hard on it. Finally, after a lot of study, he founded new theory--heliocentric theory, which turned over traditional thinking. Additionally, some surveys show that most of the scientists achieved their discoveries when they are beginners in their fields. Therefore, we may go no further to see that beginners are more likely to make discoveries.  

When it comes to experts, their knowledge and experience in a field are very necessary to find significance. With rich knowledge and experience ,expert can often avoid some normal mistakes and have more effecient avenues to solve problems. The experience of a famous scientist, Alan Turing, who is considered as the founder of computer science today, can best illustrate this point. Before inventing Turing, which is very similar to present computer, Alan Turing had the experience ofcryptology and some practical electronic knowledge. They are very helpful on his further study on the subject of symbolic logic, and greatly inspired him to study on Turing. The number of experts achieving sucess in discoveries are numerous. Not only beginners, but also experts are likely make discoveries.

On the other hand, their rich knowledge and experience sometimes have narrowed their dimension in thinking. Rich knowledge and experience often lead experts to do what should do and avoid what should not do. Having got a lot of knowledge from predecessors and got throught many experiences, the experts are often prudent when doing research. As a result, before goning about some study, they often used to eliminate some possibilities that seem impossible to happen within the knowledge and experience. That has also reduced the opportunities to make innovation. As we know, innovations often turn over previous knowledge and broaden the range of knowledge. Therefore, restriction on mind often makes experts lose opportunities to make discovery.

In conclusion, both beginners and experts are making discoveries. Beginners' curiosity often makes them hold doubt to the knowledge before they accept them. That often brings opportunies of finding discoveries to them. Although knowledge and experience of experts are very helpful when search for new discoveries, sometimes on the contrary, they also confined experts' minds. To balance, I think beginners are more likely to make significant discoveries than experts.

[ 本帖最后由 ChunyanLi2005 于 2006-2-17 16:23 编辑 ]

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Beginners are often have interests and enthusiasm to study in everything they meet, as a result, they are more likely to abtain[abstain] the opportunities to get new idea than experts whose thoughts may confined by their experience and knowledge. Therefore to some extent, beginners are more likely to make important discoveries. Still, we should not ignore that there are still many discoveries made by experts.

As a beginner, lacking of the knowledge and experience relevant to a field, he or she often curious about every thing that he or she touches which often brings inspire his or her new idea further lead[leading] to new discovery. To make discovery, one important factor is new idea. Take one period of the history of astronomy for example. About 400 years ago, most of astronomers firmly believed Aristotle's geocentric theory for it could explain many phenomenon that they had met and it suitsed[suited] traditional way in thinking. While, as a beginner, Copercicus was very questionable on this theory. With the enthusiam and doubt toward extant theory to resolve his doubt on it, he began to work hard on it. Finally, after a lot of study, they founded new theory--heliocentric theory, which turned over traditional thinking. Additionally, some survey shows that most of the scientists achieved their discoveries when they are beginners in their fields. Therefore, we may go no far to see that beginners are more likely to make discoveries.  

When mention to experts,[when it comes to experts] much knowledge and experience in a field are very necessary to find significance. Knowledge in most situation[situations] will guide a person to find right way to study, and avoid many failures. When one has a new idea, knowledge and experience often bring convenience for him or her to study on it. The experience of a famous scientist, Alan Turing, who is considered the foundator of computer science today, can best illustrate this point. Before inventing Turing, which is very similar to present computer, Alan Turing had the experience of crptology and some practical electrical knowledge. They are very helpful on his further study on the subject of symbolic logic, and greatly inspired him to study on Turing. The instance of experts achieving sucess in discoveries are numerous. Not only beginners, but also experts are likely[to] make discoveries.

On the other hand, their rich knowledge and experience sometimes narrow their dimension in thinking. Rich knowledge and experience often lead experts to do what should do and what should not do. Having got a lot of knowledge from predecessors and got throught many experiences, the experts are often prudent when to do research. As a result, before do some study, they often used to exlimilate some possibilities that seem impossible to happen from the knowledge and experience. That has also reduced the opportunities to find[make好点吧] innovation. As we know, innovations are often beyond previous knowledge and broad knowledge. Therefore, restriction in mind often make experts lose opportunities to make discovery.

In conclusion, both beginners and experts are making discoveries[ 这句话似乎没有什么信息量阿]. Beginners' curiosity about everything they met and often holding doubt to the knowledge that they learned before accepting them[it吧] often brings opportunies of finding discoveries to them. Although knowledge and experience of experts are very helpful when search for new discoveries, they also confined experts' minds. To balance, I think beginners are more likely to make significant discoveries than experts.

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TOPIC: ISSUE87 - "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."
WORDS: 558          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-2-16
position: agree
1 advantages of the beginner
2 advantages of experts
3 disadvantage of expert

Beginners are often haveare have可以一起用 interests and enthusiasm to study in everything 可以这么绝对吗？ they meet, as a result, they are more likely to abtain the oppotunities to get new idea than experts whose thoughts maybe confined by their experience and knowledge. Therefore to some extent, beginners are more likely to make important discoveries. Still, we should not ignore that there are many discoveries made by experts. 最后的thesis两句话合成一句话

As a beginner, lacking of the knowledge and experience relavant to a field, he or she often curious about前面捎个be 动词 every thing that he or she touches这里用个逗号 which often brings up new ideas further leading to new discovery. To make discovery for making discovery,不然和后面和不上, one important factor is new idea. Take one period of the history of astronomy for example. About 400 years ago, most of astronomers firmly believed Aristotle's geocentric theory for it could explain many phenomenon that they had met and it suited traditional way in thinking. While, as a beginner, Copercicus was very questionable on this theory. With the enthusiam and doubt toward extant theory to resolve his doubt on it, he began to work hard on it. Finally, after a lot of study, he founded new theory--heliocentric theory, which turned over traditional thinking. Additionally, some survey shows that most of the scientists achieved their discoveries when they are beginners in their fields.这个附加的survey很没说服力 Therefore, we may go no further to see that beginners are more likely to make discoveries.这里下结论了，后面还讨论什么？另外，怎么看出来更的？你似乎只说了B的优点，这不足以构成比较，而要得到比较，我在下午在QQ里和你说了，我现在还是那么认为的。
  

When it comes to experts, their knowledge and experience in a field are very necessary to find significance这句话感觉有些chinglish . With rich knowledge and experience ,experts can often avoid some normal mistakes and have more effecient avenues to solve problems. The experience of a famous scientist, Alan Turing, who is considered as the founder of computer science today, can best illustrate this point. Before inventing Turing, which is very similar to present computer, Alan Turing had the experience of crptology and some practical electrical knowledge. They指什么？ are very helpful on his further study on the subject of symbolic logic, and greatly inspired him to study on Turing. The instance of experts achieving sucess in discoveries are numerous. Not only beginners, but also experts are likely make discoveries.你看看你的B1和B2的结论句，按道理说是这样一个顺序，先肯定二者都能发现新的东西，然后再说谁更能，但给出谁更能就是这篇文章的终点了，你现在是倒序？

On the other hand, their rich knowledge and experience sometimes have narrowed为什么要用完成时? their dimension in thinking. Rich knowledge and experience often lead experts to do what should do and avoid what should not do. Having got a lot of knowledge from predecessors and got throught many experiences, the experts are often prudent when doing research. As a result, before goning about some study, they often used to be used to 和used to能一样吗？ eliminate some possibilities that seem impossible to happen within the knowledge and experience. That has also reduced the opportunities to make innovation. As we know, innovations often turn over previous knowledge and broaden the range of knowledge. Therefore, restriction on mind often makes experts lose opportunities to make discovery.


In conclusion, both beginners and experts are making discoveries. Beginners' curiosity often makes them hold doubt to the knowledge before they accept them. That often brings opportunies of finding discoveries to them. Although knowledge and experience of experts are very helpful when search for new discoveries, sometimes on the contrary, they also confined experts' minds. To balance, I think beginners are more likely to make significant discoveries than experts.
我觉得作为比较型的文章，特别是这篇，结尾的升华作用显得特别重要，因为你前面不可避免的就是分别列了谁谁的优点，但要得到谁更如何如何，但凭篇幅和论点似乎显得稍显单薄和没有力度。
我觉得这道题现在来看比较好的思路是discovery的必须要素上分析，没有定论，这个是我们自己写作时自己觉得怎么就怎么的。然后就这个重要的要素，讨论在每个要素上，是新手占优势还是老手，然后根据这个比较来讨论谁更能创造出新的发现。当然，我想这么论述应该布局谋篇的难度一下子就大了。
自己这么给自己一绕感觉比较型得也蛮难写的啊，唉，是哦想偏了还是想深了？:(

这篇我觉得B1和B2的结论句很不成功。

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

恩，有道理！好好改！
:(好难改！