Issue132 第一次发，恳求狠拍 邀互改！

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Issue132  The university community consists of three different worlds—the sciences, the humanities, and the social sciences. Because each world operates on its own assumptions and has its own special habits of thinking, rarely is there meaningful interaction among the sciences, the humanities, and the social sciences.

有拍即回！　谢了

提纲：

1. 从物理中看哲学；
2. Humanities 里的东西影响别的学科
3. the sciences and the social sciences
4. 交叉学科


   Disciplines in the university are actually categorized into three separate parts, say, the sciences, the humanities, and the social sciences. People majored in each fields may distinguish themselves with the other two since it is generally considered that the three have distinct style of thinking and are grounded on their own basic assumptions. However, with significant social advances and the emergence of interdisciplines, ever-increasing meaningful interaction are becoming a tendency in our intellectual studies and the society as a whole.
   To begin with, see how physics, which studies the physical matters and their laws of motion, shares some inherent disciplines that philosophy relies on, which I found so interesting when I begin with physics in high school. One of Newton's law, that an item pressing or drawing another is at the same time pressed or drawn by the same amount of force applies to our life or emotions. When you are kind to some one , you will be treated back the same way, and vice versa. A typical law in physics shows that things are inclined to be at a state of the lowest energy. In my view, every thing is. Not strangely, We are inclined to sit on sofa rather than stand. And with further scientific advances, the investigation in the microscopic world generates such new meaningful discoveries, say, quantum theory, that we should lend necessary consideration to the philosophy and the quo status of the society.  "God does not play dice with the world", said Einstein. But the motion of atoms or electrons indicates that God does, which is rather different from the traditional theory that we can strictly determine things by measuring or deduction. This breakthrough, from my point of view, have brought some philosophical issues into consideration--Does God play dice with us? Famous physicist Heisenburg ever wrote a book "philosophy and physics" outlining his philosophical conclusions during his pursuit of quantum theory.  
   For the second place, something involved in humanities, like the so-called spirit, could play its role in other fields. It is widely acknowledged that China boasts its long history of Wushu art. But good learning of Wushu, according to notable predecessors, should cultivate proper attitudes and the spirit of perseverance at first, or you can never gain the essence or gist of it. So does the study of general subjects like the sciences and the social sciences.
   The meaningful interaction between the sciences and the social sciences are even more apparent and significant. With ever-increasing advances, math or statistics are applying to almost every branch of intellectual studies, even in some arts subjects like economics. On the other hand, the methodology and research approaches of sociology contribute increasingly to scientific research.
   Moreover, interdisciplines like environmental science and material science can not specifically categorized into any single part of the three. Take environmental science for example. In the research of this domain, factors from almost all the fields should be involved such as ecology, biochemistry, economics and ethics. They are combined into an effective integration. In this matter, only dealing with the interaction of all the fields can we gain a balance in tackling the problem.
   In fact, intellectual studies as a whole are universally existing while the classification is just made by humans. In ancient times when knowledge originates from, there are no categories or divided fields. In the present and the future, there is a growing tendency that all the disciplines would merge into one stream by interplaying with each other to gain splendid improvement.

觉得思路即文章的构架有点乱， 而且后面几个观点没法展开  诚请指点和交流
谢了～～～

[ 本帖最后由 daidai_4 于 2006-3-7 15:04 编辑 ]

hepengmcUID: 203123

我很想跟你拍，但是这个文章我还没有看过所以无法给出好的建议。最好能按组里的任务写比较好，大家的意见也更有建设性。

你下一篇文章我一定会帮你拍的，不好意思！！

whitemummyUID: 2166380

Disciplines in the university are actually categorized into three separate parts, say, the sciences, the humanities, and the social sciences.(这个开头没有必要重复原话) People majored in each （fields->filed） may distinguish themselves with (the other two前后不对应) since it is generally considered that the three have distinct style of thinking and are grounded on their own basic assumptions. However, with significant social advances and the emergence of interdisciplines, ever-increasing meaningful interaction （are->is） becoming a tendency in our intellectual studies and the society as a whole.(第一段应该写得更直接一些，观点更显明一点。还有，感觉你用词上好像在刻意避免常用词，但是你绞尽脑汁写出来的词却读起来很不自然。)
   To begin with, see how physics, which studies the physical matters and their laws of motion, shares some inherent disciplines that philosophy （relies on->rests on or relies）, which I found so interesting when I (begin with??及物动词) physics in high school. One of Newton's (law->laws), that an item pressing or drawing another is at the same time pressed or drawn by the same amount of force applies to our life or emotions(结构有问题). When you are kind to some one , you will be treated back the same way, and vice versa. A typical law in physics shows that things are inclined to be at a state of the lowest energy. In my view, every thing is. Not strangely, We are inclined to sit on sofa rather than stand.（？？汗阿，最低能量原理还有这么用的？） And with further scientific advances, the investigation in the microscopic world generates such new meaningful discoveries, say, quantum theory, that we should lend necessary consideration to the philosophy and the quo status of the society.  "God does not play dice with the world", said Einstein. But the motion of atoms or electrons indicates that God does, which is rather different from the traditional theory that we can strictly determine things by measuring or deduction. This breakthrough, from my point of view, have brought some philosophical issues into consideration--Does God play dice with us? Famous physicist Heisenburg ever wrote a book "philosophy and physics" outlining his philosophical conclusions during his pursuit of quantum theory.（这段写得很乱，建议你不要涉及太多例子，就用一个例子，但是把问题说清楚。你犯了我以前同样的毛病了！！）  
   For the second place, something involved in humanities, like the so-called spirit, could play its role in other fields. It is widely acknowledged that China boasts its long history of Wushu art. But good learning of Wushu, according to notable predecessors, should cultivate proper attitudes and the spirit of perseverance at first, or you can never gain the essence or gist of it. So does the study of general subjects like the sciences and the social sciences.（这段什么意思？）
   The meaningful interaction between the sciences and the social sciences are even more apparent and significant. With ever-increasing advances, math or statistics are applying to almost every branch of intellectual studies, even in some arts subjects like economics. On the other hand, the methodology and research approaches of sociology contribute increasingly to scientific research.
   Moreover, interdisciplines like environmental science and material science can not specifically categorized into any single part of the three. Take environmental science for example. In the research of this domain, factors from almost all the fields should be involved such as ecology, biochemistry, economics and ethics. They are combined into an effective integration. In this matter, only dealing with the interaction of all the fields can we gain a balance in tackling the problem.
   In fact, intellectual studies as a whole are universally existing while the classification is just made by humans. In ancient times when knowledge originates from, there are no categories or divided fields. In the present and the future, there is a growing tendency that all the disciplines would merge into one stream by interplaying with each other to gain splendid improvement.

没有时间帮你改了，但是大概了解了一下，提点整体上的意见：
1、        思想很重要，观点鲜明，然后用一至两个例子把这个观点讲清楚就可以了。例子不要堆砌，最好能深入分析，不要摆在那里。我以前有这个毛病，后来被人批的一塌糊涂；
2、        不要刻意追求复杂句子和貌似新颖的单词，首先考场上你来不及思考，其次看你这篇文章就发现你写复杂句式的功底并不是很深厚，这样很容易弄巧成拙。还有你的用词，感觉很新鲜，但是你读一下就发现很难受，也不地道，还有一些误用。老外不会卖账的！
3、        建议你写的时候写高频吧，这道题很难，好像也从来没有考过，不值得你写打击自信心。

没有帮你改完，不好意思！不过读起来真的很累，我想你还是要转变一下观点的：记住思想大于句子，表达优于用词！有思想，句子通顺，句式适当多变一些就够了，不要本末倒置哦！
这是别人帮我提的意见，我原封不动送给你，呵呵！不领情也不要怪我哦~~