argument2 (高频)

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ARGUMENT 2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

The author recommends that to raise the property values, they should carry out the same restrictions as that of the nearby Brookville community on how to landscape their community yards and the painting color of the exteriors of homes. To support it, the author provides the success of Brookville community in their property value rising by this set of restrictions seven years ago. However, I find this argument rather unconvincing in several respects.

To begin with, the author unfairly bases his conclusion on the assumption that the restrictions in Brookville community are responsible for raise of their property values. First of all, the argument provides no evidence that the restrictions are well implemented. Lack that evidence, it is possible that very few homeowners in Brookville community conform to those restrictions. Also, there might be other factors that affect the property values like the price index in that period. Without take into account other factors and the percentage of homeowners conforming to these restrictions, it is unjustifiable to attribute the property value growth to the restrictions. The same case is with Deerhaven Acres community. The author cannot convince me that the majority of people here would conform to those restrictions well.

Second, the author commits a fallacy in his analogical analysis that he fail to consider the potential differences of the two communities, especially when the comparison is based on different period. Perhaps, people in Deerhaven Acres prefer to arrange their yards and paint the exterior of the house to their own tastes. Seven years is such a long time that people might change their lifestyles and attitudes to a large extent. As we know, modern individuals are more inclined to pursue distinct styles and like to keep up with the up-to-date fashion. Lack information about the preference of people in Deerhaven Acres now, it is too hasty to suggest the same set of restrictions.

Furthermore, the author, lack of consideration of other factors of Deerhaven Acres, cannot convince me that these restrictions will lead to growth of property values. As we know, the price of home depends on many factors such as the environmental conditions of the community, transport convenience, and even entertainment facilities. Absent evidence that people are satisfied with other conditions of the homes, I can hardly believe that the restrictions will surely result in rising property values.

Overall, as discussed above, the recommendation, based on false analogical analysis, appears not a sound one. To well bolster it, the author should offer additional information to prove that it is indeed the restrictions that contribute to the tripling of Brookville community's property values, and further a held survey about the present tastes and preference of the people in Deerhaven Acres community.

[ 本帖最后由 daidai_4 于 2006-3-10 15:00 编辑 ]

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argument2 (高频)　

ARGUMENT 2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

The author recommends that to raise the property values, they should carry out the same restrictions as that of the nearby Brookville community on how to landscape their community yards and the painting color of the exteriors of homes. To support it, the author provides the success of Brookville community in their property value rising by this set of restrictions seven years ago(这句话改一下，不能说是提供胜利). However, I find this argument rather（换个形容词，用在这里不够准确） unconvincing in several respects.

To begin with, the author unfairly bases his conclusion on the assumption that the restrictions in Brookville community are responsible for raise of their property values. First of all, the argument provides no evidence that the restrictions are well implemented. Lack that evidence, it is possible that very few homeowners in Brookville community conform to those restrictions. （还可以发展的句子，这样一句带过感觉很突然）Also, there might be other factors that affect the property values like the price index in that period. Without take（语法） into account other factors and the percentage of homeowners conforming to these restrictions, it is unjustifiable to attribute the property value growth to the restrictions. The same case is with Deerhaven Acres community.（这种用法好像不准确） The author cannot convince me that the majority of people here would conform to those restrictions well.

Second, the author commits a fallacy in his analogical analysis that he fail to consider the potential differences of the two communities, especially when the comparison is based on different period. Perhaps, people in Deerhaven Acres prefer to arrange their yards and paint the exterior of the house to their own tastes. Seven years is such a long time that people might change their lifestyles and attitudes to a large extent. As we know, modern individuals are more inclined to pursue distinct styles and like to keep up with the up-to-date fashion. Lack information about the preference of people in Deerhaven Acres now, it is too hasty to suggest the same set of restrictions.（总体不错，但是论述的不是很深入）

Furthermore, the author, lack of consideration of other factors of Deerhaven Acres, cannot convince me （第一段的结尾已经有过这种用法了，最好能换一种）that these restrictions will lead to growth of property values. As we know, the price of home depends on many factors such as the environmental conditions of the community, transport convenience, and even entertainment facilities. Absent evidence that people are satisfied with other conditions of the homes, I can hardly believe that the restrictions will surely result in rising property values.

Overall, as discussed above, the recommendation, based on false analogical analysis, appears not a sound one.（语法错误） To well bolster it, the author should offer additional information to prove that it is indeed the restrictions that contribute to the tripling of Brookville community's property values, and further a held survey about the present tastes and preference of the people in Deerhaven Acres community.
总体行文很流畅，还是很不错的，只是论述不是很深入，对于一些论据能深入发展的话就更好了

请教：　这里的property value 是指纯粹的价格呢　还是说核算过后能获利的那种价值？
     应该不是不是单指价格！

hepengmcUID: 203123

你把自己的论证跟范文比较一下就知道什么叫做论证深入了。嘿嘿，你叫我说，我也说不上来

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原帖由 hepengmc 于 2006-3-10 21:28 发表
你把自己的论证跟范文比较一下就知道什么叫做论证深入了。嘿嘿，你叫我说，我也说不上来

niu !