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原帖由 approach 于 2006-4-11 18:25 发表
When faced with the issue that wether to suppor or oppose the fact that a
factory will be bulit in one's community,depending on personal experience,
personality type and emotional concern,we fin ...
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factory will be bulit(built) in one's community,depending on personal experience, J6Y'C M"Yr,g
personality type and emotional concern,we find that some people hold the opinion that it will be always advisable to(没有to) not to set a factory in our community.Meanwhile,
others take an opposite stand,which is also my choise,to built a factory will prove
to be a farseeing choise(choice) by the following reasons.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA J4|&n Q7Q F
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The main reason why I support the statement is that a new factory will enroll a bbs.gter.net%P3c/` Q*B z t k s
number of new members who work for the factory,which can solve the job problem in our community.And also,as the number of the new members work in this new factory increased,the demand for houses will augment too. Only can (这里该用do吧?)we see this prospect can we seize the opportunity to make the best use of the new factory with to improve our life.(with这一部分不加得好)
Furthermore,what is worth noticing fact is that the new factory will bring along a 寄托家园 h!p K4_ C"Q
sequence of other industries such as the entertainment which is what the workers need to relax after a day's work. These sorts of trades will play the role as the
factory do and therefore they interweave into a large scale to bring our community into thriving and prosperous.
Of course,arguments will be rised against my standpoint.Some people might argue
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that the pullution which the factory bring along will harm our environment.For this
point,I will demonstrate that with the development of morden society,the factory will use the advanced technology to ensure that the pollution will be controlled in
the minimal extent.
Taking into account of all these factors,we may reach the conclusion that bulid a bbs.gter.net q.C J%H O.Q
new factory in our community will bring our lives in harmony.In fact,not only do I
prefer to bulid a new factory in our community,but also do I suggest that the community should give publicity to the new factory so that benefit the most from it.
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第一段,表示赞同.
第二段.原因一:建立工厂可以增加就业,解决就业问题.
第三段,原因二:工厂可以也可以带动其他产业发展,比如娱乐业,这些可以和工厂一样起到同样的效益.
第四段.举个反对的意见,然后驳倒它
最后一段,总结.
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问题:
1.总想在最后一段用"In fact,not only do I... but also..."弄个深化主题的东西,但是貌似最后总是写不出更深化的思想.头头帮看看.
2.还有其中有好多小词不晓得用得对不对.比如上面兰色字体标的那个介词,问了同学,说是大约那个用法的.不知道怎么样...
3.最后一段那个绿色的词组,"give publicity to " 查是宣传的意思,但是不知道这样用对不对
没什么好说的,我觉得写得很好,我什么时候到这个水平就好了 |
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