5T互助小组 第一组 专用贴

LizKwanUID: 2150199

When faced with the issue that wether to suppor or oppose the fact(proposal) that a factory will(should) be bulit in one's community,(I consider the decision should be made)depending on personal experience,personality type and emotional concern.(we find that去掉)(Since) some people hold the opinion that it will be (always去掉) advisable to (not to去掉)(discard such a suggestion to) set a factory in our community(Meanwhile去掉)(while)others take an opposite stand,which is also my choise,(which refers to the construction of a factory, and my viewpoint could be verified from the following aspects:)(to built a factory will prove to be a farseeing choise by the following reasons.去掉)

The main reason why I support the statement (去掉is)(lies in the fact) that a new factory will enroll a
number of new (去掉members)(employees) who (could)work for the factory,which can solve the job problem in our community.(去掉And also)(Additionally),as the number of the new members work in this new factory increased,the demand for houses will (augment这个词什么意思?) too. Only (can去掉)(if) we see this prospect can we seize the opportunity to make the best use of the new factory (with去掉) to improve our life.Furthermore,what is worth (noticing fact去掉)(attention) is that the new factory will bring along a sequence of other industries such as the entertainment (which is what去掉)(where) the workers need to relax after a day's work. These sorts of trades will play the (same important) role as the factory do and therefore (they去掉)(ultimately) interweave into a large scale to bring our community into (a) thriving and prosperous (statement).
Of course,arguments will (be rised去掉)(rise) against my standpoint.Some people might argue that the pullution which the factory bring along will harm our environment.For this point,(I will demonstrate去掉)(what people should realize is) that with the development of morden society,the factory will use the advanced technology to ensure that the pollution will be controlled in the minimal extent.Taking into account of all these factors(Taking all these factors into account),we may reach the conclusion that bulid a new factory in our community will bring our lives (and the natural enviroment around our neighborhood) in harmony.In fact,not only do I prefer to bulid a new factory in our community,but (also do去掉) I (will even further)suggest that the community should (give publicity中文想表达什么?) to the new factory (so that去掉)(in order to) benefit the most from it.
红色是错字或者是我的疑问,蓝色是修改的地方.
继续努力啊:)

chongshaomeiUID: 2171541

这两天我看阅读,都是第一遍就细读,再作题的,可是造成的问题就很严重,首先就是时间不够用,二是我的错题没有减少,反而加了几个.
头头们认为还要坚持这样做吗?
现在作完一套阅读,要精读吗?好费时间,感觉一天都在看阅读了,没有效率
是不是我的方法不对头?请指教小女子一二

LizKwanUID: 2150199

我做T阅读时不精读,只是看过一遍后保证对每段都一个大概印象,就是每段的main topic我都知道了,然后看题,回原文找答案.
速度很重要,T阅读的题目就那么几个类型,做多了就熟悉了.

clampmeUID: 2141018

听力精听 2遍 目标达成~~！！

还剩8遍~~大家也努力啊~~

mxggUID: 2111875

1.在开始的时候写明作文的题目,不要只写题号.
2.整体都写完之后在后面附加上你对哪个句子有什么疑问?对哪个表达不是很清楚?对这个题目有何看法?写的时候遇到什么困难了?这样比较有针对性的问题,更有利于你们的提高.
3.请不要把初搞发上来,自己至少要改一遍,自己改文章的过程也是提高的过程.
4.在最下方标明这篇文章的字数,所用的时间及你改文章的遍数.
5.开始用纸笔练习写TWE,然后再输入电脑(除机考者),这个时候你可以自己感受一下用2B铅笔好还是用自动笔好,以后就坚持下去就好.

BTW:我们这个组的其他两个组长都是很牛的人,希望大家多提一些问题,少灌水哈.谢谢!

[ 本帖最后由 mxgg 于 2006-4-12 19:04 编辑 ]

mxggUID: 2111875

When faced(facing) with the issue that wether (whether)to suppor(support) or oppose the fact that a
factory will be bulit in one's community,depending on personal experience,
personality type and emotional concern,we find that some people hold the opinion that it will be (it)always advisable to not to set a factory in our community.Meanwhile,
others (including me) take an opposite stand,which is also my choise,to built (that building) a factory will prove
to be a farseeing choise by the following reasons.
The main reason why I support the statement is that a new factory will enroll a
number of new members who work for the factory(people),which can solve the job problem in our community.And also,as the number of the new members work (working)in this new factory increased(increase),the demand for houses will augment(?)too. Only can we see this
prospect can we (can)seize the opportunity to make the best use of the new factory  to improve our life.
Furthermore,what is worth noticing( the noticeable) fact is that the new factory will bring along(?)a sequence of other industries such as the entertainment which is what the workers need to relax (where workers relax)after a day's work. These sorts of trades will play the role as the factory do and therefore they interweave into a large scale to bring our community into thriving and prosperous.
Of course,arguments will be rised against my standpoint.Some people might argue
that the pullution which the factory bring along (discharges)will harm (do harm to)[harm一般不单独使用]our environment.For this point,I will demonstrate that with the development of morden society,the factory will use the advanced technology to ensure that the pollution will be controlled in the minimal extent.
Taking into account of all these factors,we may reach the conclusion that bulid a
new factory in our community will bring our lives in harmony.In fact,not only do I
prefer to bulid a new factory in our community,but also do I suggest that the community should give publicity to (?)the new factory so that (it) benefits the most from it.

[注]红色表示:有错误或是不清楚意思
     绿色表示:删除

评论:1) 结构方面:比较清晰,最好在第一句就写明确主题句.
       2) 语言方面:不够简练,TWE和AW的评分标准不一样,所以AW一些长句子不要过多的使
           用在TWE里，简洁一些,直接的表达自己的意思,不要用过多的从句,适当用一些小词  比较好.还有就是你的单词拼写有错误.
     3) 语法方面:倒装句的用法不对,要弄清到底是哪个部分倒装.单复数要注意,还有就是时态,
         你比较喜欢用将来时,这样要注意.

回答你的问题:
1) CONLUSION方面不用继续深化,就是单纯的对前面的一个总结而已.
2) 我已经给你改完了
3) give publicity to 是表示宣传的意思,不过你不应该把它用在这里,因为你最后要说的是应该要BUILD这个COMMUNITY,而不能单单说宣传,有点跑题

[ 本帖最后由 mxgg 于 2006-4-12 19:54 编辑 ]

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 clampme 于 2006-4-11 22:00 发表



小伙子，不是我灌水。你年轻是最大的资本。不像叔叔我已经快20岁了，重新又得考一次大学。

你就别抱怨了，OK?勾起我伤心的往事。

可别这么说,不然偶都当你们爷爷了,
不许在这里谈论年龄,哼唧:@

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 chongshaomei 于 2006-4-12 14:54 发表
这两天我看阅读,都是第一遍就细读,再作题的,可是造成的问题就很严重,首先就是时间不够用,二是我的错题没有减少,反而加了几个.
头头们认为还要坚持这样做吗?
现在作完一套阅读,要精读吗?好费时间,感觉一天都在看 ...

T的阅读不能细读的,
先看题目,然后回来定位找答案,
对于,主旨题看每段的第一句话和第一段的最后一句,
还有主旨题目一般最后来做比较好.
从现在开始要记时来答题目,
控制在45-50分钟之内完成.
多练习几次就好了.

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 chongshaomei 于 2006-4-12 14:54 发表
这两天我看阅读,都是第一遍就细读,再作题的,可是造成的问题就很严重,首先就是时间不够用,二是我的错题没有减少,反而加了几个.
头头们认为还要坚持这样做吗?
现在作完一套阅读,要精读吗?好费时间,感觉一天都在看 ...

T的阅读不能细读的,
先看题目,然后回来定位找答案,
对于,主旨题看每段的第一句话和第一段的最后一句,
还有主旨题目一般最后来做比较好.
从现在开始要记时来答题目,
控制在45-50分钟之内完成.
多练习几次就好了.

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 clampme 于 2006-4-12 17:53 发表
听力精听 2遍 目标达成~~！！

还剩8遍~~大家也努力啊~~

加油!:)

微末三月UID: 205072

中文作文里总是说反弹琵琶(也就是挑那个冷门选择写)容易得高分.TWE里面是不是也有这样一说呢??

谢谢NO.1组的牛牛们~

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 微末三月 于 2006-4-12 20:32 发表
中文作文里总是说反弹琵琶(也就是挑那个冷门选择写)容易得高分.TWE里面是不是也有这样一说呢??

谢谢NO.1组的牛牛们~

你说的意思是挑冷门的话题来写还是说挑没有经常考过的题目来写啊?

微末三月UID: 205072

那岂不是跑题了...

不是题目很多都是这样出:which do you prefer,A or B?A比较好写,大家都写A好,反弹琵琶就是说B好,虽然B不好写,有些强词夺理.  

也就是说TWE看重写作者的思维吗?还是就看语言及结构就好

mxggUID: 2111875

我觉得是这样的,
不管你写哪个只要理由充分,
内容充实就可以,
我没有听说过有这个规律