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发表于 2006-4-22 21:47:59 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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A contemporary trend surging nowadays that the income of some famous athletes and entertainers is booming up .For example, Philip Cheng, a famous Hong Kong actor, whose name frequently appears on starring lists of a great variety of movies, is estimated to possess a wealth over one billion dollars as well as several splendid villas throughout the world. The mass shows controversy to such phenomena. Some people consider these celebrities salaries too high to correspond to their achievements while I think these famous people deserve what they earn for their revenue is based on the role they play in the society. The crucial contribution they do to the world goes with the followings.



The first is their magnificent influence to our mass. These well-known people not only offer us entertainment but also affect the way in which we look on our circumstance, behave in the public, and decide on certain issues. Yao Ming, for instance, being the first Chinese to be so successful in the National Basketball Association (NBA), attracts more and more publicity on basketball among the Chinese people as well as demonstrates the talent and ability of Chinese people to the Americans. How can we say that such an athlete with so great compact does not deserve the 50 –million-dollar revenue he earns now? According to the immense effect of such athletes and entertainers, their high salaries do not seem to be over –paid.



Another important function of these notable people lies on their contribution to commerce. Participating in intense competitions, more and more incorporations and firms are seeking pop singers , soccer stars and so forth to promote their products, say, Pepsi Cola invites dozens of soccer stars and including the world-famous David Beckham to draw public attention among consumers and in return, they made a fortune from Pepsi Cola. Do not their positive effects on commerce agree the income they get? It seems obvious.



Last but not the least, stars do significant promotion to certain public affairs. One of the most celebrated Hollywood actress, Audrey Heburn, starring Roman Holiday and other several movies, was also a key figure in an organization of the United Nations, concerning the famine in Africa. It was her reputation and endeavor that helped to gain huge amounts of devotion from all around the world. Also thanks to the contribution of the outstanding rock singer Michael Jackson does the worldwide starve draw so much interest. Considering their great achievements, how can their payment thought to be surplus and out-of-nothing?



The great roles these athletes and entertainers play determine that they are qualified to be well-paid. We mass are not necessarily to blame o demure their high salaries, for they really deserve them and we need them to make our world a better place to live in.
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发表于 2006-4-22 21:55:49 |只看该作者
应该是篇很好的作业,虽然有些超时

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发表于 2006-4-22 22:06:49 |只看该作者
我觉得还可以~~论点还可以再丰富一点
可以说为国争光~~提高国家地位者中的
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发表于 2006-4-22 22:21:04 |只看该作者
谢谢指教,虽然在短时间内想出非常全面的论点的确勉为其难,但我会试着改的。
并请广大T 友踊跃评分评论帮助修改。

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发表于 2006-4-22 22:25:15 |只看该作者
不是说你的不好~~因为我觉得你论点的方向性要多~~不能围绕一个一直说~~
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发表于 2006-4-22 22:44:20 |只看该作者
uh-hah
有道理

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发表于 2006-4-22 22:46:06 |只看该作者
考好雅思的后遗症~~~不好意思了~~
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发表于 2006-4-22 23:00:35 |只看该作者
……
您觉得这篇文章可以得几分?

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发表于 2006-4-23 00:18:28 |只看该作者
5.5---6

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发表于 2006-4-23 00:25:54 |只看该作者
平均分吧~~~
楼上的你懂托福发~~~我晕倒
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发表于 2006-4-23 00:31:31 |只看该作者
平均分是甚概念?

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发表于 2006-4-23 00:33:18 |只看该作者
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我觉得牛人很多的~~所以你要好好努力改进一些词汇~~还有观点哦
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发表于 2006-4-23 00:35:47 |只看该作者
明白了

可我向来认为字数决定一切……

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发表于 2006-4-23 00:36:49 |只看该作者
不是~~除非你能够写满~~而且前提是你时间够用~~~子的大小不能过于庞大~~
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发表于 2006-4-23 00:43:14 |只看该作者
那么词汇方面可以做呢些改进呢?(我的词汇量太小,仅张红岩3000的水平)

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