issue7 fly aw第二次作业

风中尘埃UID: 164965

What is the best way of recording contemporary life? In this era of fast developing technique, many people turn to the latest devices for answer. To them, the video camera which could be so easy for everyday use surely provides a accurate, convincing, while convenient way of recording compared to the written records. But this may be a illusion caused by the prosperous of technology.

In the first place, to consider this problem more profoundly, we must find out what we exactly want to record and for what purpose we do this for. To me, the answer is that we record our lives to form the sensibility of history which assures us that we had been in this world once and by sharing our experience with others we could possible inspire the later generation to fined a better way to live. To meet this requirement, the behaviors, the emotions and the reasons which may deeply beneath the reality must all be recorded. But the video camera alone can hardly provide the clear causal relationship between the behaviors not to mention the deeply hide emotions.

Let's take the record of a war for example. Use video camera alone, we could show the later generations how miserable, how harmful a war could be by showing them the scenery of the dead soldiers, the heart breaking mothers, or the poor children who stand innocently on the remains. However, these videos which could give the spectators an emotional shock are not enough to explain to them why we start this catastrophe, for what reason a man in a battle field would lose his sympathy. Did the soldier hate the enemies or simply did his duty for patriotism? Did the nation start a war to defend her people or just want to gain particular interest? Written records are a possible better way for us to record this kind of inner truth.

Moreover, even if we only want to record the truth in a behavioral level, we may also find that sometimes, words perform a more important role with comparison to videos. Let's also take the war for instance. The video camera is especially good at recording exact details, like the weapons they hold, the fierce battle field, but if you want to record how many people died in this battle, you may hardly want to use your video camera to record every one of them. When meet some complicated situation, as the number, the duration time, the economy loses, written record, which could offer more condensed information in less signals, is far more accurate than videos. Besides, the words can provide whole scenery of the war which may concur in most countries of the world and clearly describe the sequential relations which seemed impossible to videos. For video could only record in a linear time way, it couldn’t manage to tell the timely complicated thing in a convenient, perspective way.

As to record, what we must always remember is that it's us humans who find and record the truth, not the truth finds itself. In the sea of information, it's us who pick up some of them and give them significances. To record the truth accurately and convincingly, we could always rely on our speculations which make us insightful, other than the new devices. Video camera and written documents should both apply to the demand of our thoughts.

1. 摄像机能记录精确的事实，但却不能记录感情或者思考，利用文字    ，能深入人物的内心，记录下更高层次的真实。比如我们可以用摄像机记录战争的残酷场面，或者作战会议指挥现场，但是站争对人的毁坏，特别是心灵的毁坏程度，多是不能记录的。摄像机可以记录战争时士兵的疯狂，却无法记录他扭曲的内心及其深层起因
2. 在面对复杂性问题时，摄像机很难记录整个局势，他关注的是细节的真实，但是，比如面对一场大战役时，光靠摄像机，后人只会看到一对片断，而很难拼凑出整体，这时就必须靠文字的记录来注解
2. 在文献记录上，所有的文献，不论是摄像机还是文字，都来源于人的理解和剪辑，否则将太过琐碎。所以，要达到所谓的真实可信不仅仅取决于对手段的选择，而在于对事物本质的思考。所以甚至有的时候，小说反而比纪实性的东西具有更大的真实性。因此，我们不能说摄像机比文字具有更高的重要性。

夜一UID: 2130338

What is the best way of recording contemporary life? In this era of fast developing technique, many people turn to the latest devices for answer. To them, the video camera which could be so easy for everyday use surely provides a accurate, convincing, while convenient way of recording compared to the written records. But this may be a illusion caused by the prosperous of technology.

In the first place, to consider this problem more profoundly, we must find out what we exactly want to record and for what purpose we do this for. To me, the answer is that we record our lives to form the sensibility of history which assures us that we had been in this world once and by sharing our experience with others we could possible inspire the later generation to fined a better way to live. To meet this requirement, the behaviors, the emotions and the reasons which may deeply beneath the reality must all be recorded. But the video camera alone can hardly provide the clear causal relationship between the behaviors not to mention the deeply hide emotions.建议不要用太多的we和me，要尽量的客观，后面也是

Let's take the record of a war for example. Use video camera alone, we could show the later generations how miserable, how harmful a war could be by showing them the scenery of the dead soldiers, the heart breaking mothers, or the poor children who stand innocently on the remains. However, these videos which could give the spectators an emotional shock are not enough to explain to them why we start this catastrophe, for what reason a man in a battle field would lose his sympathy. Did the soldier hate the enemies or simply did his duty for patriotism? Did the nation start a war to defend her people or just want to gain particular interest? Written records are a possible better way for us to record this kind of inner truth.

Moreover, even if we only want to record the truth in a behavioral level, we may also find that sometimes, words perform a more important role with comparison to videos. Let's also take the war for instance. The video camera is especially good at recording exact details, like the weapons they hold, the fierce battle field, but if you want to record how many people died in this battle, you may hardly want to use your video camera to record every one of them. When meet some complicated situation, as the number, the duration time, the economy loses, written record, which could offer more condensed information in less signals, is far more accurate than videos. Besides, the words can provide whole scenery of the war which may concur in most countries of the world and clearly describe the sequential relations which seemed impossible to videos. For video could only record in a linear time way, it couldn’t manage to tell the timely complicated thing in a convenient, perspective way.也尽量不要用you

As to record, what we must always remember is that it's us humans who find and record the truth, not the truth finds itself. In the sea of information, it's us who pick up some of them and give them significances. To record the truth accurately and convincingly, we could always rely on our speculations which make us insightful, other than the new devices. Video camera and written documents should both apply to the demand of our thoughts.

整篇文章的论述是相当不错的，有深度，也有力度
不足之处就是we，me，you这些主观词用得太多了

honeyviolaUID: 2199703

What is the best way of recording contemporary life? In this era of fast developing technique, many people turn to the latest devices for answer. To them, the video camera which could be so easy for everyday use  surely provides a accurate, convincing, while convenient way of recording compared to the written records. But this may be a illusion caused by the prosperous of technology.

In the first place, to consider this problem more profoundly, we must find out what we exactly want to record and for what purpose we do this for. To me, the answer is that we record our lives to form the sensibility of history which assures us that we had been in this world once and by sharing our experience with others we could possible inspire the later generation to fined a better way to live. To meet this requirement, the behaviors, the emotions and the reasons which may deeply beneath the reality must all be recorded. But the video camera alone can hardly provide the clear causal relationship between the behaviors not to mention the deeply hide emotions.

Let's take the record of a war for example. Use video camera alone, we could show the later generations how miserable, how harmful a war could be by showing them the scenery of the dead soldiers, the heart breaking mothers, or the poor children who stand innocently on the remains. However, these videos which could give the spectators an emotional shock are not enough to explain to them why we start this catastrophe, for what reason a man in a battle field would lose his sympathy. Did the soldier hate  the enemies or simply did his duty for patriotism? Did the nation start a war to defend her people or just want to gain particular interest? Written records are a possible better way for us to record this kind of inner truth. ( 论述挺深刻的）

Moreover, even if we only want to record the truth in a behavioral level, we may also find that sometimes, words perform a more important role with comparison to videos. Let's also take the war for instance. The video camera is especially good at recording exact details, like the weapons they hold, the fierce battle field, but if you want to record how many people died in this battle, you may hardly want to use your video camera to record every one of them. When meet some complicated situation, as the number, the duration time, the economy loses, written record, which could offer more condensed information in less signals, is far more accurate than videos. Besides, the words can provide whole scenery of the war which may concur in most countries of the world and clearly describe the sequential relations which seemed impossible to videos. For video could only record in a linear time way, it couldn’t manage to tell the timely complicated thing in a convenient, perspective way. （用同一个实例还能讲出不同的含义，不错0)

As to record, what we must always remember is that it's us humans who find and record the truth, not the truth finds itself. In the sea of information, it's us who pick up some of them and give them significances. To record the truth accurately and convincingly, we could always rely on our speculations which make us insightful, other than the new devices. Video camera and written documents should both apply to the demand of our thoughts.
几乎没有语法错误，而且结构严谨，内容深刻，赞一个！

风中尘埃UID: 164965

恩，把部分we，us， you之类改成了one，he这种第三人称，可能会客观一点

What is the best way of recording contemporary life? In this era of fast developing technique, many people turn to the latest devices for answer. To them, the video camera which could be so easy for everyday use surely provides a accurate, convincing, while convenient way of recording compared to the written records. But this may be a illusion caused by the prosperous of technology.

In the first place, to consider this problem more profoundly, one must find out what he exactly want to record and for what purpose he do this for. As far as I concerned, one may record his life to form the sensibility of history which assures him that he had been in this world once and by sharing his experience with others one could possible inspire the later generation to fined a better way to live. To meet this requirement, the behaviors, the emotions and the reasons which may deeply beneath the reality must all be recorded. But the video camera alone can hardly provide the clear causal relationship between the behaviors not to mention the deeply hide emotions.

Let's take the record of a war for example. Use video camera alone, one could show the later generations how miserable, how harmful a war could be by showing them the scenery of the dead soldiers, the heart breaking mothers, or the poor children who stand innocently on the remains. However, these videos which could give the spectators an emotional shock are not enough to explain to them why we start this catastrophe, for what reason a man in a battle field would lose his sympathy. Did the soldier hate the enemies or simply did his duty for patriotism? Did the nation start a war to defend her people or just want to gain particular interest? Written records are a possible better way for us to record this kind of inner truth.

Moreover, even if one only want to record the truth in a behavioral level, he may also find that sometimes, words perform a more important role with comparison to videos. Let's also take the war for instance. The video camera is especially good at recording exact details, like the weapons they hold, the fierce battle field, but if one want to record how many people died in this battle, he may hardly want to use his video camera to record every one of them. When meet some complicated situation, as the number, the duration time, the economy loses, written record, which could offer more condensed information in less signals, is far more accurate than videos. Besides, the words can provide whole scenery of the war which may concur in most countries of the world and clearly describe the sequential relations which seemed impossible to videos. For video could only record in a linear time way, it couldn’t manage to tell the timely complicated thing in a convenient, perspective way.

As to record, what we must always remember is that it's us humans who find and record the truth, not the truth finds itself. In the sea of information, it's humans who pick up some of them and give them significances. To record the truth accurately and convincingly, one could always rely on his speculations which make him insightful, other than the new devices. Video camera and written documents should both apply to the demand of our thoughts.