Issue228 [黄金十二宫]第二次作业(5.26)

永远的圣者UID: 2182901

228.
The best way to teach-whether as an educator, employer, or parent-is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
1.        表扬正面的行为往往是正确的
2.        但是过度的表扬也会带来负面影响
3.        我们对于忽略负面行为应该更为谨慎，因为它往往会带来负面影响
4.        这样的忽略甚至会妨碍适度表扬的带来的好的效果
5.        但是适当忽略有时又是可取的

The philosophy of education is always the problem. The skyrocketing society calls for the best way to teach, whether as a pedagogue, entrepreneur, or patriarch, so as to burgeon youths, accomplish individuals and facilitate the society. One theoretical issue alleges optimum choice will be to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones, however, to find out the appropriate proportion between compliment and criticism will be more important.

Praise is like sunlight to the human spirit; we cannot flower and grow without it. In reviewing the experience before, we may trace some causes which support the view: we felt honorable and pleased when we were recommended for positive action and were more likely to continue such behaviors and chased for more plaudits; while we felt depressed and dissatisfactory when we did not gain praise and were more likely, on the other hand, to move forward in a direction of progress.

Thus, praises have really charm to stimulate all people; however, from example of the past, over-praising invariably causes drawbacks. The situation happened on my classmate illuminate my theory. A genius in my class always got the top rank, and always praised by teachers and accompanier. As time went by, though studied in the same way, dropped behind gradually. I may conclude that self-complacence of honor counteract further consideration of advancement, and fall behind in this changing world, which he himself does not change enough.

We might be more prudent to choose whether ignore negative actions. Admittedly, criticisms are always bitter and hard to swallow. It is because criticism is not born to inspire but to adjust. This is like we are walking on the path leading to success, mistaking actions make us on the opposite direction, more conduction means more deviation from the arrival and can never drive us to have the goal. Shimin Li, one of the emperors of Qin Dynasty in ancient China, who was canonized all correct, however, specially esteemed advisers. Thus he could regulate political statute and cultivate his own morality, and constituted most prosperous era and earned himself highly regarded.

Not only ignoring can scathe us itself, but it can also turn benefit of praising positive actions to the inverse side. Arrogance will possibly develop in this situation. Those people will immerse in the flowers and bows and refuse every negative advice. This tendency will eventually ruin them by convergence with over-praising that had discussed above.

Of course, we can never negate that neglect of negative actions may sometimes be advisable, in some specific instance. Suppose that one is short of confidence and self-trust, the best way to drag him from the abyss of hurt and affliction is to lose sight of his deficiency and even ‘over-praise’ him.

With fully concerns of the complexity and complication of this issue, even involve with the position we stand, e.g. educator, employer, or parent, how to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones need further discussion. The only conclusions can be drawn is that praise encourage our inherence and criticism confine our weakness.

微末三月UID: 205072

说明一下,红色是你的原文,绿色是我改的

The philosophy of education is always the problem.  The skyrocketing 查了W-M:to shoot up abruptly.似乎不太贴切society calls for the best way to teach, whether as a pedagogue, entrepreneur, or patriarch, so as to burgeon ①to send forth new growth②to grow and expand rapidly感觉不太对 youths, accomplish individuals and facilitate the society.  One theoretical issue alleges optimum choice will be 直接is好了to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones, however, to find out the appropriate proportion between compliment and criticism will be more important.

Praise is like sunlight to the human spirit; we cannot flower and grow grow和flower交换一下顺序,当然这样也可以的without it.  In reviewing the experience before, we may trace some causes which support the view: we felt honorable and pleased when we were recommended for positive action and were more likely to continue such behaviors and chased for more plaudits; while we felt depressed and dissatisfactory when we did not gain praise and were more likely, on the other hand, to move forward in a direction of progress.可以删掉

Thus, praises have really charm to stimulate all people; however, from example of the past, over-praising invariably causes drawbacks.  The situation happened on my classmate illuminate my theory.  A genius in my class always got the top rank, and always praised by teachers and accompanier.  As time went by, though studied in the same way, dropped behind gradually.  I may conclude that self-complacence of honor counteract further consideration of advancement, and fall behind in this changing world, which he himself does not change enough.这个句子感觉有点怪..

We might be more prudent to choose whether ignore negative actions.改成should好些吗?  Admittedly, criticisms are always bitter and hard to swallow.  It is because criticism is not born to inspire but to adjust. 这里应该是使得别人改变吧,被动的  This is like we are walking on the path leading to success 前句有语法错误,like不能带从句的,andmistaking actions make us on the opposite direction, more conduction means more deviation from the arrival是不是改成which更好呢:which means... and can never drive us to have the goalthat desired,the似乎有点指代不明.  Shimin Li, one of the emperors of Qin ;P李世民不是秦朝的吧..?Dynasty in ancient China, who was canonized all correctcorrections ,however, specially esteemed advisers.  Thus he could regulate political statutes and cultivate his own morality, and constituted most prosperous era and earned himself highly regarded.改成to constitute and earn ...是不是更好?

Not only ignoring can scathe us itself, but it can also turn benefit of praising positive actions to the inverse side. itself用在这里什么意思?Arrogance will possibly develop in this situation. Those people will immerse in the flowers and bows and refuse every negative advice. This tendency will eventually ruin them by convergence with over-praising that had discussed above.

Of course, we can never negate that neglect of negative actions may sometimes be advisable, in some specific instance. Suppose that one is short of confidence and self-trust, the best way to drag him from the abyss of hurt and affliction is to lose sight of his deficiency and even ‘over-praise’ him.

With fully concerns of the complexity and complication of this issue, even involve with the position we stand, e.g. educator, employer, or parent, how to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones need further discussion. The only conclusions can be drawn is that praise encourage our inherence and criticism confine our weakness. 这两个词用得似乎不通啊..


圣者,用了很多很复杂的词汇,不知道是否是我看得少了,总觉得不是太妥当.像第一段那几个老师,企业家的词汇只需要copy原文就好了,用不着找那么挠头的词吧...

把这句话送给你:
proper words at the proper place,proper words to the proper audience
我们都存在这个问题,it is really a long way to study English.

[ 本帖最后由 微末三月 于 2006-5-27 21:17 编辑 ]

永远的圣者UID: 2182901

The philosophy of education is always the problem.&nbsp;&nbsp;The skyrocketing<font color="Green">查了W-M:to shoot up abruptly.似乎不太贴切</font>【记得这个词是一美国外教教的，反正他说了skyrocking society之类的话，不过以后我还是看情况用了，一着急写的】society calls for the best way to teach, whether as a pedagogue, entrepreneur, or patriarch, so as to <font color="Red">burgeon</font><font color="Green"> ①to send forth new growth②to grow and expand rapidly感觉不太对</font> 【是不对，乱用的】youths, accomplish individuals and facilitate the society.&nbsp;&nbsp;One theoretical issue alleges optimum choice <font color="Red">will be </font><font color="Green">直接is好了</font>【有道理】to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones, however, to find out the appropriate proportion between compliment and criticism will be more important.<br />
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Praise is like sunlight to the human spirit; we cannot <font color="Red">flower and grow </font><font color="Green">grow和flower交换一下顺序,当然这样也可以的</font>【XDF小书上找的，不知道啊】without it.&nbsp;&nbsp;In reviewing the experience before, we may trace some causes which support the view: we felt honorable and pleased when we were recommended for positive action and were more likely to continue such behaviors and chased for more plaudits; while we felt depressed and dissatisfactory when we did not gain praise and were more likely, on the other hand, to move forward <font color="Red">in </font>a direction of progress.<font color="Green">可以删掉</font> <br />
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Thus, praises have really charm to stimulate all people; however, from example of the past, over-praising invariably causes drawbacks.&nbsp;&nbsp;The situation happened on my classmate illuminate my theory.&nbsp;&nbsp;A genius in my class always got the top rank, and always praised by teachers and accompanier.&nbsp;&nbsp;As time went by, though studied in the same way, dropped behind gradually.&nbsp;&nbsp;I may conclude that self-complacence of honor counteract further consideration of advancement, and fall behind in this changing world, <font color="Red">which he himself does not change enough.</font><font color="Green">这个句子感觉有点怪..</font><br />
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We <font color="Red">might</font> be more prudent to choose whether ignore negative actions.<font color="Green">改成should好些吗?</font>&nbsp;&nbsp;Admittedly, criticisms are always bitter and hard to swallow.&nbsp;&nbsp;It is because criticism is not born to inspire but to <font color="Red">adjust</font>. <font color="Green">这里应该是使得别人改变吧,被动的</font>&nbsp;&nbsp;This is like we are walking on the path leading to success <font color="Green">前句有语法错误,like不能带从句的</font>,<font color="Green">and</font>【知道了，回去一定好好总结】mistaking actions make us on the opposite direction<font color="Red">, more conduction</font> means more deviation from the arrival<font color="Green">是不是改成which更好呢:which means...</font> and can never drive us to have <font color="Red">the</font> goal<font color="Green">that desired,the似乎有点指代不明</font>.&nbsp;&nbsp;Shimin Li, one of the emperors of <font color="Red">Qin </font><font color="Green"><img src="images/smilies/titter.gif" align="absmiddle" border="0">李世民不是秦朝的吧..?</font>【天啊，我都昏成这样了】Dynasty in ancient China, who was canonized all <font color="Red">correct</font><font color="Green">corrections</font> ,<font color="Red">however</font>, specially esteemed advisers.&nbsp;&nbsp;Thus he could regulate political statute<font color="Green">s</font> and cultivate his own morality<font color="Red">, and</font> constituted most prosperous era and<font color="Red"> earned</font> himself highly regarded.<font color="Green">改成to constitute and earn ...是不是更好?</font><br />
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Not only ignoring can scathe us<font color="Red"> itself</font>, but it can also turn benefit of praising positive actions to the inverse side. <font color="Green">itself用在这里什么意思?</font>Arrogance will possibly develop in this situation. Those people will immerse in the flowers and bows and refuse every negative advice. This tendency will eventually ruin them by convergence with over-praising that had discussed above.<br />
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Of course, we can never negate that neglect of negative actions may sometimes be advisable, in some specific instance. Suppose that one is short of confidence and self-trust, the best way to drag him from the abyss of hurt and affliction is to lose sight of his deficiency and even ‘over-praise’ him.<br />
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With fully concerns of the complexity and complication of this issue, even involve with the position we stand, e.g. educator, employer, or parent, how to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones need further discussion. The only conclusions can be drawn is that praise encourage our<font color="Red"> inherence </font>and criticism <font color="Red">confine</font> our weakness. <font color="Green">这两个词用得似乎不通啊..</font><br />【激发天赋，限制弱点，不知道可不可以这样用】

圣者,用了很多很复杂的词汇,不知道是否是我看得少了,总觉得不是太妥当.像第一段那几个老师,企业家的词汇只需要copy原文就好了,用不着找那么挠头的词吧...

把这句话送给你:
proper words at the proper place,proper words to the proper audience
我们都存在这个问题,it is really a long way to study English.

对于遣词造句，我的确很没有概念，真的希望通过多读你们的文章建立起正确的对于这方面的评价。这次写是查了字典的，虽然词都是认识，但是真要默写出来还是做不到的；毕竟是第一次写，还是要原谅的嘛^_^
非常谢谢三月的批改，不足我会进一步尝试改正的

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