issue83 义无反顾小组第二十三次作业

kittywen_16UID: 2135347

83. "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
政府应该保留国家领土中公共拥有的荒凉地区，即使这些地区往往人迹罕至。

(1)偏远地区往往是生态资源比较丰富的地区，政府应该保护这些地区；
（2）偏远地区往往又是少数民族分布地区，为了维持文化多样性，政府应该保护这些地区的发展；
（3）繁华的城市是一个国家经济发展的动力和基础，政府也不能忽视

There is a public controversy nowadays over the issue of whether the government should preserve wilderness area in their own country. Some people contend that since in this era of rapid technological changes leading to increasing competition in the world, the status of a country is somewhat determined by the level of its economics, the authorities should explore the remote area to find more resources supply. However, others hold the opposite standpoint that it is the obligation of the government to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas for they have more value awaiting us to probe into than destroying them for instant interests. Insofar as I see, I fundamentally agree with the latter that government should do their outmost endeavor to preserve the wider areas which is not only do good for us but also of great importance to the next generation in the long run.

Apparently, there is more than one reason for me to hold up the statement. The first one is that the wilderness areas are frequently containing abundant of natural resources, and there is existing an ecological balance which is require more subtle attention from both the government and the publicity. The idea of preserving the ecological balance is rooted in the traditional Chinese culture.  Confucius once illustrated this view in his analects: there is a kind of harmony with the man and the heaven(nature) in the world. That means human beings are integral parts of nature and should not do anything to jeopardize the integrity of nature. Otherwise nature as a whole will be in trouble and in turn human beings pay for their ruinous activities.

The second reason I support the title is that in many countries, minority ethics are usually inhabit anted in remote areas. These ethics are characteristics by their unique languages, customs and cultures, which are the crystallization of local people's wise and the jewels in the treasure trove of whole country. They can supply great deal of materials for the anthropologists and historian to research the evolution of human beings. The exploitation of these areas will definitely bring up clashes in their cultures, customs or traditions, and even some disasters in the end. We can take Indian as a vivid example. With the west expand of American nation in eighteen century; the “invaders” broke local habitants’ quiet lives. Whenever the white wanted their land, the Indian had to move west further. After a long and tough fighting, they came to a compromise and get on well with each other. However, the exceptional culture was assimilated by the white culture to some extend. We can not deny the significance of the west expand movement, however it is a pity for human being to lose the invisible cultural wealth.

Admittedly, in most cases, these remote areas are in bad economical condition and need to accelerate their development. What we should pay attention is how we make a balance between the exploitation and the preservation. The local government should not merely emphasize on increasing GDP index at the cost of destroying recourse. What's more the government should pay subsidies to the remote areas either help them to get rid of the poverty problems.

In sum, as the administrators of countries, it is responsibilities for the government to preserve the wilderness area in their natural states for the long run.

hzyj0322UID: 2155800

这个小组好好啊，组长负责,写作强度也大，以后我就跟着写了,也会每天来改大家的
Issue83提纲
完全同意
一局部的环境将会影响到整个生态平衡
V1部分与整体的关系
V2局部环境将会破坏整个生态。保护局部环境有利与整个生态环境

二 环境问题刻不容缓，不能向环境做丝毫让步，要不惜一切代价保护环境
V1 随着工业的发展和经济的进步，环境破坏越来越严重
V2 保护环境是原则问题，绝不妥协，防微杜渐，不然人类将会灭亡。

三 科研价值和经济价值。
V1正是因为人烟稀少，所以偏远地区的环境越原始，有很多珍贵的物种，极具科研价值。所以更应当保护。
V2经济价值，矿物和风景

四怎样保护野生环境
V1府方面，建立完善的法律法规，并且不断的教育人民，强化环保意识，
V2为个人，应该遵守法律，并且意识到环境的重要性来保持环境。

TOPIC: ISSUE83 - "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."

During recent several centuries, with the dramatic development in technology economy, the problem of environment is becoming more and more serious. There exists a debate between whether the environment of some remote areas should be protected where only a few people live there. I strongly support to remain the natural state of these wild areas for the following reasons.

Firstly, the environmental condition will affect the whole ecologic system. The wild areas and the world are something like the part and the whole which has a close relationship with each other and can not be separately considered. They are interrelated and interact with each other. The whole are consisted with different parts, so the whole would not exit while each part is destroyed one by one. It is the same when referring to the environment of these wild areas and the whole ecological system. If the protections of ecology of each area are ignored, the whole nature would face a severe ecological disaster. Take the deforestation of Amazon for instance, many people rushed to the area, where few people reside, in South America to cut these rainforest for economic interest.  The clear cutting strategy without protection of these forests finally results in the aggravation in global environment.

Secondly, the problem of environment become so serious nowadays that even the most remote area should be preserved or we human beings would suffer extinction. The environment has been greatly destroyed during the recent centuries since the industrial involution in Britain. Rapid economic development sacrificed the nature, so there exists the destroyed ozone layer, the green house effect, species extinction water pollution and the energy crisis etc. Modern industry is threatening the environment in every aspect. While facing terrible environmental crisis, every effort should be made to protect the nature and our belief to fight against the deterioration in environment should not be shacked, or we have to suffer the exposure of ultraviolet radiation, the raise of the sea level, famine and thirsty, as well as the species extinction while the final extinction will come to human beings ourselves who are the originators of these terrible disasters.

Furthermore, these remote areas have great scientific research value and economic interest. They are so remote that are accessible to few people, which retain there natural state and has lots of valuable species creatures live in it. Many places in Africa are always considered as a paradise of scientists, where remote and inaccessible, and where habitats various wild lives. Wile areas also mean economic interest as a result of their natural state. They may have abundant deposit of coal and petrol and usually wild areas has beautiful scenery which can contribute to a nation’s tourism.

Finally, how can we preserve these wild areas? Laws should be made by the government to minimize the artificial devastation of the natural state of these areas, just as what have done by the Wildness Act of 1964, which contribute a lot to the environment protection. And also, the importance of preserving these areas should be informed to the populace, thus the whole society will join in the activity in environment protecting.

These wild areas, though remote and even inaccessible, has great environmental, scientific, as well as interest values, and they should be perfectly preserved. In fact, everyone has the responsibility to protect these areas, while the government is undoubtedly the main strength.

[ 本帖最后由 hzyj0322 于 2006-6-13 14:09 编辑 ]

ylwangUID: 2191211

TOPIC: ISSUE83 - "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
WORDS: 508          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2006-6-13

提纲
保护野生环境对人们的生理和心理都有利，但可也能以政府多花钱为代价
1。保护环境要花钱，但肯定比其他使用不当的钱要少得多
2。保护环境对身体有利
3。保护环境对心理有利

Whether remote and wild natural areas should be well preserved by government is a hot debate now. I totally agree that we should pay lots of attentions to preserve those regions since a balanced ecosystem will greatly benefit our offspring both physically and psychologically, although as a trade-off, government may be distracted from their current economical and societal development.
        Admittedly, to preserve wild natural fields will of course cost a lot of money, which may undermine the balanced government budget, especially developing countries' tight budget. For instance, in order to preserve a primitive forest, government should employ some people as forest polices to prevent illegal disafforestation, buy environmental sensors to detect forest fire at early stage, and utilize man-made rain in a dry season, which all need huge financial support. Nevertheless, the financial aids are undoubtedly much less than the money spent for office of the president, appropriated by corrupted officials, and used to care physcial and psychological disease.
         However, we can never neglect the vital importance of wild area preservations by overemphasizing their costs. For the first place, it is the responsibility for our generation to maintain and provide a unpolluted, healthy, and clean environment with a balanced ecosystem, from which our future generations can get huge benefits for their physical health since it is obvious that a destoryed ecosystem under industrial pollutions will ultimately harm human beings physically. Concretely speaking, when most forests are undermined, how will our offspring get enough oxygen to live? When most wild animals and fishes are extinct, how can our future generations maintain our health by eating bred pigs, cattle, and fishes which contains noxious ingredients from the chemical breeding materials? When most rivers are dirty with chemical wastes, how can our successors obtain the water for survival? Even if there are substitution methods of necessary oxygen, foods, and water, everyone can imagine how tired future people will be in endlessly finding replacements from one to another. Otherwise, if wild areas are preserved, future generations will definitely live healthily in an environment with fresh air, unpolluted foods, clear water and so forth.
       For the second place, well preserved wild natural regions and landscapes will give human beings a wonderful psychological appreciation that will further prevent psychological disease. For instance, if we travel to the beautiful Zhangjiajie primitive forests after one month's hard working in our company, we can really relax ourselves from endlessly tied and busy working status, by embracing the clean clouds, clear water, green trees and various wild animals. A recent survey from The University of Hong Kong points out that modern people are prone to get diverse psychological illness within huge pressures from job competitions, human relationships and financial status, however, it is also shown that those people who often go sightseeing in wild forests, seasides, rivers, and mountains will significantly reduce the possibility of severe psychological illness from 10.7% of common people to 3.2%. If we don’t have such enjoyable natural landscapes, how will the society of our next generations become when more and more people suffer psychological diseases ?
                In sum, we could never emphasize the environment preservation in wild natural areas too much since it will significantly benefit our human beings both physically and psychologically, and it’s worthwhile for government to spend budget on.

[ 本帖最后由 ylwang 于 2006-6-13 01:26 编辑 ]

lazyfishUID: 2220033

提纲：完全同意
1。wilderness不等于useless，具有生态科研等多重意义
2。wilderness一旦破坏会带来很严重的后果
3。人迹罕至和保不保护无关，正是因为缺的人少才能保持自然面貌的，而且有时往往少数人就会造成很大破坏

I strongly agree with the speaker that government should protect publicly owned wilderness areas and leave them in their original circumstances.

The first reason for which I claim my point of view is that wilderness areas such as deserts, oceans and forests possess significant environmental, ecological and scientific meanings. People are prone to mix wilderness with useless in their mind and overlook the endless value besides inhabitation and agriculture. In fact, those unsettled, uncultivated regions left in its natural condition are always extremely precious for their unique natural landscape and terrain, ecological system and distinctive animal species. Brazil is regarded as “the lung of the globe” for its large wild tract of dense tropical rain forests to produce one fourth of the total amount of oxygen for the whole world. Changbai Mountain in the Northeast of China provide various rare plants and minerals which are desperately needed but cannot be found in anywhere else to make traditional Chinese medicine. The great plain in Africa seems to arid and tough for human beings to survive while its multiplicity of animals and plants contributes a lot to the gene pool of nature’s creation. No one can deny the value of such areas to the entire nature and we humankind though they are unmanned.

What’s more, it will lead to serious consequences if the wilderness areas get destroyed and even too grave for us to undergo. We have already paid heavy price for our ignoring the nature in the past, which may pull us back to earth to face the reality caused by ourselves. The rate of deterioration of the Greenhouse effect and desertification resulted in indulgent cutting keeps increasing nowadays. The animal extinctions due to endless hunting has broken the food chain which therefore threatens the delicate balance of the ecology system. The depletion of ozone layer over the continent of Antarctica thanks to the gas waste and deforestation allows the ultraviolet radiation to travel through the hole of the atmosphere down to the ground, which is just like a sharp sword dropped upon people. We have damaged too much, and suffered enough. It is time that we realized that the destruction of even a remote wildness area could result in unforeseeable effects on the larger environment and do harm to ourselves at last.

Last but not the least I would like to point out is that whether only a few people enter the areas is not the key. It is highly because few people can access that everything remains in its natural condition and value. Once human invade in, it will be altered or destroyed more or less. The history of the past tells us that even a few people could cause serious damage to a remote wilderness area. On the Tibetan Plateau whose frigidity and barren decide that no human being could survive, the number of Tibetan Oryx has reduced sharply according to the excessive killing by a few groups of illegal hunters. Accordingly, the protection of the wilderness areas becomes more than meaningful but necessary.

To sum up, since our environment has been greatly destroyed and is under growing threaten from human civilization, it is obligatory for us to realize the severe situation and the duty on our shoulders. With a better understanding of the value of the various extensive wilderness lands, which are important parts of the overall nature world, we may reasonably draw the conclusion that the government should take action to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state. That is an indispensable and long-term task, and finally will be a treasure for our descendant

even1985310UID: 2105390

ISSUE 83
1．长远经济利益要远远大于当前开发的收益
2．可以保护宝贵自然资源
3．只有政府有力度采取实质措施
POSITION：ABSOLUTLY  AGRRE
A latest research conduct by U.N. reported that the condition of the ecological environment has gone from ban to worse. Even though there are some people assert that it will be not worth to put a huge money to protect all the wideness place including some far remote place. However I have very reason to support the writer’s assertion even though we still have a long way to go.

For one reason, greater benefits can be achieved by preserving the Green Party. The truth is quite other than some discommender think that protect nature is at a loss. Scientist at England and American reported in the journal Science assume that it will bring twice as much economic value as people to protect the wildness than to exploring these areas for other purpose. From a global view, if people can preserve all the Green Park on the earth, it will produce 4 megabytes hundred million dollar which only accounts 1 percent of money on spending on the protection. Lee De Forest, one of the report writers, used marsh as an example. As it can control flood in varied ways, to perform as a entertainment, to purifying water, to reclaim nutrition. And it can also influence the local climate, providing food. Except can not bringing a rapid result, it can absolutely be a good bargain.

What is more important, reserving the wildness can conserve some endangered species and nature resources. Great Bear Rainforest, the biggest temperate rainforest in the world, is the home of many rarity species: wild 三文鱼，Spirit Bear, grizzly bear, old trees of hundred meter can see everywhere. Some of the species can only be seen in virgin forest. To avoiding exploration of these wildness can contribute a lot to the ecological balance.

It is a pity that without opportune management of government, our virgin ecosystem has been destroyed worse and worse. Even thought appealing had came from kinds social organization, three-quarter of Great Bear Rainforest has been destroyed, until the government taken action and signed the Great Bear Rainforest Agreement. Without the policies of government. We can really do nothing to put any real measures.

As all has been discussed above, no matter from the economical sake, or the environmental sake, we need government to try it best to conserve the wildness, no matter how far it is, how much it cost.

yuviUID: 2169411

態度：有條件同意
提綱：
1．        保護野生地區有利於保護生態。
2．        亦有利於科學研究。
3．        合理的適度利用也可以接受。

Should government preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state? I do agree with this statement, not only because to preserve the wilderness areas might be necessary for the ecological balance, but also those areas are usually valued for the scientific research.

To begin with, there is an obligation for government to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas from the ecological consideration. As we all know, there are many biological species are confronting with extinct situation. And those species are normally living in the wilderness areas. Take panda in China for example. The mountain-forests in Southwestern China, as many studies shown, are the most suitable place for panda's growth. And therefore Chinese government has divided a specific Panda Preserved Area in the mountain-forests of Southwestern China, in order to help the preservation to avoid panda's extinction. This work now successfully preserves thousands pandas and gives them a blighting future. In short, to preserve those wilderness areas, always benefit for the ecological environment.      

What is more, in a scientific consider, preserve the wilderness areas might be helpful for some researches. For instance, in Western Australia, there is an isolated island without any living things located next to Bundaberg. People in Australia did not pay any attention with this small island, however, after years the scientist found that there are many coral reefs and other precious ocean species around the sea-areas of the island. This find which is important for both oceanography and biology researches, and of course the island has been preserved nowadays by Australian government. And there are many cases in the world that might be similar with this one, hence, to preserve the wilderness areas without human beings, should be significant for the scientific research.

In the final analysis, admittedly that government has the duty to preserve the publicly owned wilderness areas for both ecological and scientific considerations, however, moderately to explore those areas for some reasonable uses are also accepted. Consider, to establish a windmill power station for an economic reason, or to set up a nuclear station for military needs, or to develop a satellite launching station for the scientific researches and so on. Then government obviously has the rights to exploit those extremely remote areas and for the reasonable uses. And as long as the moderate uses for the wilderness areas benefit the society and without, or to say, with limit loss for whole environment, such areas could be served as advantages for human beings in a long-term look.

To sum up, even the publicly owned wilderness areas are often extremely remote and with only a few people to access, government still has duty for their preservations in both ecological and scientific reasons. Moreover, if there are any reasonable needs for those areas, government also could use them in a moderate consideration.

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马上要出门所以来不及写太多字了.:(

yuviUID: 2169411

第23次作业互改顺序:

Yuvi ---> lazyfish --->ylwang --->hzyj0322 --->kittywen_16 --->even1985310 --->yuvi

lazyfishUID: 2220033

lazyfish --->ylwang

提纲
保护野生环境对人们的生理和心理都有利，但可也能以政府多花钱为代价
1。保护环境要花钱，但肯定比其他使用不当的钱要少得多
2。保护环境对身体有利
3。保护环境对心理有利

Whether remote and wild natural areas should be well preserved by government is a hot debate now. I totally agree that we should pay lots of attentions(attention是不可数名词) to preserve those regions since a balanced ecosystem will greatly benefit our offspring both physically and psychologically, although as a trade-off, government may be distracted from their（its） current economical and societal development.（开头观点明确，下面要提的理由也都简要概括说到了，语言也好~）
        Admittedly, to preserve wild natural fields will of course cost a lot of money, which may undermine the balanced(the balance of) government budget, especially developing countries' tight budget(financial plan/financial statement). For instance, in order to preserve a primitive forest, government should employ some people as forest polices to prevent illegal disafforestation, buy environmental sensors to detect forest fire at early stage, and utilize man-made rain in a dry season, which all need(require) huge financial support. Nevertheless, the financial aids are undoubtedly much less than the money spent for office of the president, appropriated by corrupted officials, and used to care physcial and psychological disease.
         However, we can never neglect the vital importance of wild area preservations by overemphasizing their costs. For the first place, it is the responsibility for our generation to maintain and provide a unpolluted, healthy, and clean environment with a balanced ecosystem, from which our future generations can get huge benefits for their physical health since it is obvious that a destoryed ecosystem under industrial pollutions will ultimately harm human beings physically.（好长的一句话阿^ ^;感觉有点绕……作为ts不够清晰） Concretely speaking, when most forests are undermined, how will our offspring get enough oxygen to live? When most wild animals and fishes（fish） are extinct, how can our future generations maintain our(their) health by eating bred pigs, cattle, and fishes which contains noxious ingredients from the chemical breeding materials? When most rivers are dirty with chemical wastes, how can our successors obtain the water for survival? Even if there are substitution methods of necessary oxygen, foods, and water, everyone can imagine how tired future people will be in endlessly finding replacements from one to another. Otherwise, if wild areas are preserved, future generations will definitely live healthily in an environment with fresh air, unpolluted foods, clear water and so forth.(排比挺有气势的~但wilderness也不完全等于environment啊，可以加以两句话说一下，比如前者是后者很重要的一部分)
       For the second place, well preserved wild natural regions and landscapes will give human beings a wonderful psychological appreciation that will further prevent psychological disease. For instance, if we travel to the beautiful Zhangjiajie primitive forests after one month's hard working in our company, we can really relax ourselves from endlessly tied（tired） and busy working status, by embracing the clean clouds, clear water, green trees and various wild animals.(张家界的例子老外估计不知道，文中也没有介绍它的所在国家和风光特色，不如说个著名的景点，尼亚加拉大瀑布阿、黄石公园阿、西藏阿都行，另外这个例子中语言略显口语化) A recent survey from The University of Hong Kong points out that modern people are prone to get diverse psychological illness within huge pressures from job competitions, human relationships and financial status, however, it is also shown that those people who often go sightseeing in wild forests, seasides, rivers, and mountains will significantly reduce the possibility of severe psychological illness from 10.7% of common people to 3.2%. If we don’t have such enjoyable natural landscapes, how will the society of our next generations become when more and more people suffer psychological diseases ?（数据统计的例子好~不过最后的总结好像有点把wilderness的作用夸大了，它是可以对心理有利，但不是唯一的方法，不是没有它咱们的子孙后代就都要的心理疾病治不好了……）               
In sum, we could never emphasize the environment preservation in wild natural areas too much since it will significantly benefit our human beings both physically and psychologically, and it’s worthwhile for government to spend budget on.(结尾和开头语言类似，不够有力，能不能换个句式或说法)

[ 本帖最后由 lazyfish 于 2006-6-13 09:42 编辑 ]

lionprinceUID: 2217595

Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people.

（首先说重要）As the common wealth our human being shared, wilderness areas play a paramount role in regulating the balance between nature and people. But, in the same time, as a government whether to explore or preserve the precious and limit land is a controversial hot issue. Before government decides, we should weigh the benefit and costs about preserve wilderness areas. (好像论点不明确) （自我觉得，一句阐述略带点开门见山好）

(这个ts写的不是太好啊，肯能写得太细了)
The wilderness areas are closely relation to the living of our human being. (加一个ts)
First，it is true that wilderness areas help us survive in the earth, providing untold resources, including raw materials, natural gas, ore, woods, fresh water and so forth. （我用的是反正法， 其实可以把ts在缩减一下，ts 对ts的illuminate， 例子）We would difficultly imagine the disaster result, if the wilderness areas are exhausted under failing to preserve. In retrospect, in the history of human being tells the mountainous lessons destroying the natural resource. Because that is a gift god give us. If we do not cherish and even squander it, as a result, the punishment will reach inevitably. In the several past years, especially in the end of 20th, in order to meet the need of economic expanding, people driven by private interests enter to the region no human touch in the past several thousand years. Therefore, as the ecological balance in the earth by intervening human action, nature realm repays disaster for us. For example, with the over deforestation of tropic rain forest, the temperature of the whole earth suffers a abnormal fluctuating, and the area of desert more dramatically expand than any time dose. The basic living environment of people is threatened by the behavior of their own committing suicide.

Nevertheless, there is a contradiction that with the increasing of population in the world as a whole, people require more resources than before dose. Do we completely preserve and isolate the wilderness areas from human?
But under some special circumstances, flexibly dealing with and solving some problems is necessary instead of obstinate to do. After all, the energy and money government possessing is very limit. And, the great deal of immediate problems needs to  be managed and held responsible to. Therefore, as government spend the majority of money and energy preserving the wilderness, other some immediate problems will be suspended as a result. For example, it is indispensable that government encounter how to decrease the number of people unemployed; to avoid the economical crisis; to solve the education about children; to shorten the gap between the rich and the poor. If we fails to consider these problems, after added a extra giant burden, deficit will be certainty. (是不是可以举例子 some Africa country,   当生活水平提高是人们才会考虑如何去 protect the wilderness areas/)


Finally, combining with the problems, government should seek a balance point to best coordinate these contradictions. With the expanding of population today, we need to explore more resource for meeting human basic living. Therefore, reasonable and proper exploiting is a real development way, refusing blindly doing. While every government makes use of natural resources, they should hold the way of sustainable development. After all, what the wilderness areas contains not only belong to us but also to our offspring. Sustainable development.


As a perspicacious government, both flexible managing and adhering to natural law is necessary according to the factual condition.

shan_yfUID: 2182345

贴一篇自己的作业   啪啪

提纲：++-
从环境的角度，荒地的功效重要（森林）
从科学研究上，荒地范围的物种保存重要（保留动植物资源）
适度的开发，并维护平衡也有助于社会发展。（解决土地资源紧张）

With the progress of human society, a global problem that the public usually debate is the increasing land occupation. After all, the earth merely provides limited spaces including wilderness areas geographers regard as remote places with minority dwellers. A controversy whether government should explore these lands appeals great worldwide attentions from the whole world. In my opinion, to preserve wilderness areas is advisable from the following angles.

The first factor to assert is that a wild district is not equal to a useless one that people can freely deal with. On no count can the government neglect the vital function of wilderness areas in adjusting both the environment and the climate. Take the forest as an example. Biologists declare that trees are one paramount kind origin of Oxygen since the condition of air basically relies on the area of forests. The conversion of fresh air from the poison gas strikingly improves the whole surrounding. If the great amounts of trees in wilderness places are destroyed, breathing diseases seriously impose the human beings' health. Meanwhile, preserving water is also significant for the prevention from desertification. As the most indispensable resource, water plays an important role in many aspects of our manufacture and life. Because forests can decrease the water vaporization, plenty of water is available for daily use. Therefore, wild districts, such as the forest, should unquestionably keep their natural state.

Moreover, another reason to cater to my agreement is that wilderness areas are the inhibiting places where diversity types of plants and animals exist. It is necessary that governments execute some policies to protect the livings. Many species indirectly reflect the characteristic of a certain era by which scientists can acquire evidences to analyze the past. To illustrate, in biological study, the evolution is mysterious if no remains are left. Furthermore, our offspring still have the opportunity to know about them face to face rather than only through pictures and video programs. However, human behaviors may render a catastrophe for these livings. Namely, effective strategies about protecting wilderness places promote the advance of science.

Admitted, propriety exploring also has many advantages for the country construction. In modern society, lacking of sufficient lands sometimes restricts the economic development. In China, there are numerous citizens who are embraced by the house problem. Nevertheless, the available places are far from the great demand. So some apartment buildings can be designed in such wild places to satisfy the expectation of residents. While some industrial plants offer a number of employments, the living condition can improve dramatically too. Although our society benefits from the exploration, hardly is a principle ignored. It is a planned regulation that guarantees the balance of nature for the perpetual use.

To sum up, before an exploration in wilderness areas it is sensible for governments to consider all positive and negative results and carry out a comprehensive discussion. To recover natural state is more difficult than to demolish. The desirable destination is that the wilderness ecosystem promotes while the development of human beings also accelerates.

hzyj0322UID: 2155800

There is a public controversy nowadays over the issue of whether the government should preserve wilderness area in their own country. Some people contend that since in this era of rapid technological changes leading to increasing competition in the world, the status of a country is somewhat determined by the level of its economics, the authorities should explore the remote area to find more resources supply. However, others hold the opposite standpoint that it is the obligation of the government to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas换一个吧，前面用过了 for they have more value awaiting us to probe into than destroying them for instant interests. Insofar as I see, I fundamentally agree with the latter that government should do their outmost endeavor to preserve the wider areas which isare not only do good for us but also of great importance to the next generations in the long run. 开头的句子数量很标准，三句式，可是开头太长啦, 而且我觉得如果开头说了相反的观点了下面论述时就麻烦了，因为要立驳结合了

Apparently, there is more than one reason for me to hold up the statement. The first one is that the wilderness areas are frequently containing abundant of natural resources, and there is existing别扭，用exits舒服些 an ecological balance which is去掉 require more subtle attention from both the government and the publicity. TS是说自然资源丰富，下面举些自然资源丰富的例子就更好了，更贴切举孔子的例子是说明人和自然有着密切的关系，对TS不太相配The idea of preserving the ecological balance is rooted in the traditional Chinese culture.  Confucius once illustrated this view in his analects: there is a kind of harmony with the man and the heaven(nature) in the world. That means human beings are integral parts of nature and should not do anything to jeopardize the integrity of nature. Otherwise nature as a whole willwould be in trouble and in turn human beings lwould pay for their ruinous activities. PS：自然资源丰富可不一定是这些偏远地区的专利哦，应该突出偏远这个特色，说明为什么偏远还要保护，会更切中主题，比如因为偏远，所以人迹罕至，所以环境物种都特别完好，所以更有科研价值

The second reason I support the title is that in many countries, minority ethics are usually inhabit anted in remote areas. These ethics are characteristics by their unique languages, customs and cultures, which are the crystallization of local people's wise and the jewels in the treasure trove of whole country. They can supply great deal of materials for the anthropologists and historian to research the evolution of human beings. The exploitation of these areas will definitely bring up clashes in their cultures, customs or traditions, and even some disasters in the end. 这句话~~：，支持的观点是应该保护，这里说的是开发，如果想紧密衔接的话应该说如果不保护，这些地区就会象很多地区一样被胡乱的开发，这种开发会~~~~~，这样就联系起来了，美国人很苯的哦，从保护一下跳到开发他们可能会不懂的，其实我觉得如果想说得更紧密，更支持本段TS的话应该说说minority culture有多么重大意义，以致于政府应该保护 We can take Indian as a vivid example. With the west expand of American nation in eighteen century; the “invaders” broke local habitants’ quiet lives. Whenever the white wanted their land, the Indian had to move west further. After a long and tough fighting, they came to a compromise and get on well with each other. However, the exceptional culture was assimilated by the white culture to some extend. We can not deny the significance of the west expand movement, however it is a pity for human being to lose the invisible cultural wealth. 个人感觉少数民族是比较偏的一点，也比较难写

Admittedly, 这个代表让步~~，提纲上是让步，不过这段内容好象没让步哦in most cases, these remote areas are in bad economical condition and need to accelerate their development. What we should pay attention is how we make a balance between the exploitation and the preservation. The local government should not merely emphasize on increasing GDP index at the cost of destroying recourse. What's more the government should pay subsidies to the remote areas either help them to get rid of the poverty problems. 这段中心不太明确，各句间关系也不够紧凑

In sum, as the administrators of countries, it is responsibilities for the government to preserve the wilderness area in their natural states for the long run. 头重脚轻了,right?>


观点比较偏，这样会比较难写，例子也不好找，一定是复习考试写得太匆忙了吧~~

[ 本帖最后由 hzyj0322 于 2006-6-13 15:19 编辑 ]

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提纲：完全同意
1。wilderness不等于useless，具有生态科研等多重意义
2。wilderness一旦破坏会带来很严重的后果
3。人迹罕至和保不保护无关，正是因为缺的人少才能保持自然面貌的，而且有时往往少数人就会造成很大破坏
( is this paragraph a "rang bu duan"? so i think ur attitude of this topic is "agree with some conditions")

I strongly agree with the speaker that government should protect publicly owned wilderness areas and leave them in their original circumstances.(嗯，开头简单明了 )
The first reason for which I claim my point of view is that（ts可以适当缩短一下，看着 有点罗嗦 ） wilderness areas such as deserts, oceans and forests possess significant environmental, ecological and scientific meanings. People are prone to mix wilderness with useless in their mind and overlook the endless value besides inhabitation and agriculture(这里的观点主观了些？？？). In fact, those unsettled, uncultivated regions left in its natural condition are always extremely precious for their unique natural landscape and terrain, ecological system and distinctive animal species. Brazil is regarded as “the lung of the globe” for its large wild tract of dense tropical rain forests to produce one fourth of the total amount of oxygen for the whole world. Changbai Mountain in the Northeast of China provide various rare plants and minerals which are desperately needed but cannot be found in anywhere else to make traditional Chinese medicine. The great plain in Africa seems to arid and tough for human beings to survive while its multiplicity of animals and plants contributes a lot to the gene pool of nature’s creation.（三个例子都还不错 ） No one can deny the value of such areas to the entire nature and we humankind though they are unmanned.（结尾感觉 也有些主观了 。。）

What’s more, it will lead to serious consequences if the wilderness areas get destroyed and even too grave for us to undergo. We have already paid heavy price for our ignoring the nature in the past, which may pull us back to earth to face the reality caused by ourselves（这里很绕口，建议改写简单点的 比喻 ）. The rate of deterioration of the Greenhouse effect and desertification resulted in indulgent cutting keeps increasing nowadays（这里说的 是污染而引起 的 副作用把 ，和 主题好像没有什么 关系 ). The animal extinctions due to endless hunting has broken the food chain which therefore threatens the delicate balance of the ecology system(过渡 狩猎而 引起食物链的破坏和 保护人迹罕至的区域有什么关系呢 ？而且没有提供证据关于“过渡狩猎”和 “食物链”被 破坏，好像结论 仓促). The depletion of ozone layer over the continent of Antarctica thanks to the gas waste and deforestation allows the ultraviolet radiation to travel through the hole of the atmosphere down to the ground, which is just like a sharp sword dropped upon people. （这里也有些偏题 ）We have damaged too much, and suffered enough. It is time that we realized that the destruction of even a remote wildness area could result in unforeseeable effects on the larger environment and do harm to ourselves at last.（我觉得这一段的论点提的有些偏离中心，所以仅靠最后一句很难力有说服力 ）

Last but not the least I would like to point out is that whether only a few people enter the areas is not the key（不懂这个ts是啥意思？）. It is highly because few people can access that everything remains in its natural condition and value. Once human invade in, it will be altered or destroyed more or less（是根据什么下的结论？） . The history of the past tells us that even a few people could cause serious damage to a remote wilderness area. On the Tibetan Plateau whose frigidity and barren decide that no human being could survive, the number of Tibetan Oryx has reduced sharply according to the excessive killing by a few groups of illegal hunters. Accordingly, the protection of the wilderness areas becomes more than meaningful but necessary.（这一段的内容让我甚为疑惑，为什么前面让步了 ，后面又说 少数也会破坏环境？？）
To sum up, since our environment has been greatly destroyed and is under growing threaten from human civilization（真的是很主观的话，文章里有提到环境破坏和人类文明的关系马 ？这里怎么可以突然的出现这么主观的 论点 呢 ？）, it is obligatory for us to realize the severe situation and the duty on our shoulders. With a better understanding of the value of the various extensive wilderness lands, which are important parts of the overall nature world, we may reasonably draw the conclusion that the government should take action to preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state. That is an indispensable and long-term task, and finally will be a treasure for our descendant（结尾有些绕 ，感觉可以 均 一些时间给 开头段的 ，两边均衡一下。。赫赫 ）
总结 ：
LAZYFISH的文章我觉得有很多非常主观，而且没有论据支持的 话。 有的时候他们出现的也很突兀；
我记得你说过自己是学中文的 ？可能应该把中式思维和 西方思维稍微互换一下。还有就是写学术文章应该每个句子的   结论都应该在文中有根据可循 。

sorry, i am in the computer lab of my uni, and i cant use chinese inputs right now..
lazyfish: if i give u some hard times with ur essay, plz let me know..:)

btw, lionprince,jiqixueyuan and shan_yf, u guys can "hu pai" later.:)

[ 本帖最后由 yuvi 于 2006-6-13 15:12 编辑 ]

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yuvi mm ：
我们3个人互改吧  
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