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首先,先说明这是我第三次签证,以及2000被拒的原因.
Sir, it’s my third time to come here this year. Last time I think I didn’t explain my situation clearly . I wish we could have a good conversation this time.
关于以前去过美国的问题.
Our university sent me to US to study for 4 months as an exchange student from January to May in 2005. So I am just like a F-1 student, not a research scholar. ---不要试图模糊自己的背景,这样可能会起反面作用。你之前不是F-1,建议不要说模糊的话
What am I going to do in US?
I want to study MBA program in the University of Dallas. I am working in my family’s company, and I want to learn the advanced management knowledge and skills in order to development and take charge of my family business.
Sir this chance to study in the US is very important for me and I treasure this chance very much. Please give me a good consideration.---这个问题回答的不好,下个问题的回答可以部分替代这个问题的问答,然后再表明为什么一定要去美国读书,即赴美读书的必要性,比如这个program为什么适合你等等
Why do I want to study the MBA?
Because during my work experience in my family company, I have found many management problems in the Human Resource management skill, welfare and salary management style, and employee stimulating styles. These problems will greatly prevent the company’s future development. So I want to study the MBA. That will be very helpful for me to develop my family company when I come back. ---你提到的这些HR应用中的问题,到底牵扯到哪些具体问题,建议事先准备好,以免VO挑一个方面让你详细说有哪些problems
What do I do in my Family’s company?
I am working as Assistant Manager in the HR department. My job is including new employee recruiting and training, welfare and salary management and employee achievement assessment. In my work I found many problems so I want to study MBA in US. ---这句话你要么就别说,如果说,建议说具体点,到底有什么problems,举个例子,这样说太空了。还有,作为HR副经理,你一个人分管或者说牵扯这么多方面?我自己就是从事HR的,没见过这样的case。也许是我孤陋寡闻,不过你这么说,VO信不信,还是个问题
What is my family company’s business?
My family company’ businesses are bababababbababab~~ including ~~, ~~~~~,~~~~~,~~~~~ and so on. The registered fund of the company is ****. I will take charge of my family’s business in the near future.
What specific area do I want to study for your MBA?
I will concentrate my study in HR management area because there are many HR problems in my family company. So I want to learn advanced knowledge and skills in HR management.
Furthermore, my family company urgently need the talent people in HR management. For my family company HR is the basic and the most important factor. If I can control the HR, I can control development process of the whole company. So I choose to study HR development. ---说的太绝对了,HR是重要,但是公司的运营是牵扯很多方面的,财务,运作,人力资源,营销,等等,是一个系统工程。如果你说目前你公司的HR水平不高对于你这个公司的发展是有限制的,这样说可信多了
VO看我的offer letter和大学成绩单时
It is a conditional offer, I must finish 6 courses before I study the MBA program.
I’m sure I can finish the courses very well, because I have talent on study, you know most Chinese student must spend 4 years to finish the undergraduate courses, but I just spent 3 years to finish all of the courses and got my bachelor degree, so the scores are not too high. Furthermore, during my undergraduate, I got many certifications as excellent student, excellent class president and got many scholarships. So I am an excellent student and I can finish the courses very well.
Why not study in China?
Chinese MBA education only has a short history and lacks the case study education. There are few teachers who have both practical experience and high theory standard. It is difficult for me to get the advanced knowledge in management. So I want to study MBA in US because the MBA education in US is highly developed. ---除了最后一句话,前面的话都是不可信也不真实的。中国的MBA没差到这个地步,而且你的思路也不对,你的思路不应该是针对MBA,而是针对HR。中国的HR发展的到底怎样,教学怎样,建议你自己先心里有个数。建议重新组织这段话
Why do I study in US? /Why do you choose US universities?
The MBA education is highly developed in US. In US I can learn the advanced management ideas and theories. The MBA in US can provide many case studies so I can learn the advanced management knowledge and experience. That will be very beneficial for me to develop and take charge of my family company in the future. ---还是那个问题,不要只针对MBA,还要针对HR,要让VO清晰的发现你对你要去读的方向是了解的,对这个方向再中国的现状和发展前景是了解的,这样才更能显示出你归国的必然性
What is my plan after graduation?
After graduation I will come back to China, back to my father’s company. I will take the best MBA knowledge and skill into the company, and after working several years, I will take charge the company from my father, and try my best to develop the company and make it become one of the most famous and biggest company in China. That is my dream. ---说的太空,明显不符合MBA candidate的积极中带有严谨的作风。你可以说争取在×××行业做到最好之一,但是你这样说,明显太空泛了,没有任何实际意义,或许只会让VO觉得你还太天真了,不适合去美国接触最top的商业管理人群 |
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