Issue212 Ares第三次作业

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ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."

People have various goals through every phases of their life time, and they have many means to choose to attain their goals. It's not so easy to deal with the relationship between the goals and means. There has been a controversy about this problem for a long time. I believe that even when our goals are worthy, not any means taken to attain it is justifiable.

First, it's difficult and complex to define a worthy goal. The reason is that people's backgrounds such as education, ideas of values, experience and public relationship and so on are different, so they have different opinions about a worthy goal. The old saying: "A man's candy is the other's poison" just illuminates this point. In addition, some goals which regarded as worthy by certain individuals may be harmful even damageable to our society. For instance, Hitler thought that the Jews is inferior race and he had an insane goal to slaughter them. He regards the goal as a worthy goal. The goal was extremely inhuman and evil to the whole human being let alone being worthy. Therefore, when we have a goal, we should consider the goal itself is truly worthy first, make sure that it is not detrimental to society and others.

Second, even when our goals are worthy, not any means taken to attain them are justifiable. Different means maybe lead to the same goal finally, but the time and energy they spent is not the same, in the other word, the efficiency and effect the means bring is different. The most important thing is that we should attain our goals under the laws and moralities. We should not violate our conscience to take illegal or immoral means to attain our individual's intention. History provides plenty of examples about taking base means to attain worthy goals. In the Watergate scandal, Nixon took the illegal and immoral means--- to eavesdrop his opponent, in order to get some important information to attaint his goal to success in the running for president. The goal is worthy, however, such means to attain it is indubitably justifiable.

Moreover, we should not only consider the morality respect but also the costs when we choose from various means. If we neglect the cost before we take action to attain our goal, we may finally find that what we gain cannot offset the loss though the course to the goal. This result is lamentable because all the efforts we have taken go to waste. Nowadays, many countries pursue economic profit in the cost of environment. In order to develop industry--- which is a worthy goal, we take the means such as deforestation, air and water pollution, decimation of animals and so on. Admittedly, after the continuous "effort", our economy and industry has been developed and our worthy goal seems to have been attaint, but more serious problems have appeared. Ozone hole, global warming, desertification and so on. The costs are so enormous that we have to use the money we gain from developing the economy. The result is apparently ludicrous.

In sum, we should first make a clear principle of a worthy goal to make sure the goal we plan to attain will not harm others' interest. Even if a goal is worthy, only the means which are under the laws and modalities are justifiable. In addition, optimizing our methods and paths to gain at lese cost is also very important.  
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People have various goals through every phases of their life time, and they have many means to choose to attain their goals. It's not so easy to deal with the relationship between the goals and means. There has been a controversy about this problem for a long time. I believe that even when our goals are worthy, not any means taken to attain it (改为them，与前面的goals一致) is justifiable.

First, it's difficult and complex to define a worthy goal. The reason is that people's backgrounds such as education, ideas of values, experience and public relationship and so on are different, so they have different opinions about a worthy goal. The old saying: "A man's candy is the other's poison" (虽然这样作主语看起来是可以，但这样用标点可以吗) just illuminates this point. In addition, some goals which (将which去掉) regarded as worthy by certain individuals may be harmful even damageable (改为damaging或destructive, damageable应指自身易受破坏) to our society. For instance, Hitler thought that the Jews is (改为were) inferior race and he had an insane goal to slaughter them. He regards (regarded) the goal as a worthy goal. The goal was extremely inhuman and evil to the whole human being let alone being worthy. Therefore, when we have a goal, we should consider the goal itself is truly worthy first, make sure that it is not detrimental to society and others.

Second, even when our goals are worthy, not any means taken to attain them are justifiable. Different means maybe (改为may) lead to the same goal finally, but the time and energy they spent is not the same. In the (the去掉) other word, the efficiency and effect the means bring (about) is different. The most important thing is that we should attain our goals under the laws and moralities. We should not violate our conscience to take illegal or immoral means to attain our individual's intention. History provides plenty of (可以用a great number of 或其他，plenty of 修饰不可数名词) examples about taking base means to attain worthy goals. In the Watergate scandal, Nixon took the illegal and immoral means--- to eavesdrop his opponent, in order to get some important information to attaint his goal to success in the running for president. The goal is worthy (改为seemed to be worthy to him，就如第二段所论述的一样，worthy是相对的，所以是不是有必要强调一下只是对他是worthy的，还有后面应是新的一句). However, such means to attain it is indubitably justifiable.

Moreover, we should not only consider the morality respect but also the costs when we choose from various means. If we neglect the cost before we take action to attain our goal, we may finally find that what we gain cannot offset the loss though the course to the goal (好像有点重复，建议去掉). This result is lamentable because all the efforts we have taken go to waste. Nowadays, many countries pursue economic profit in the cost of environment. In order to develop industry--- which is a worthy goal, we take the means such as deforestation, air and water pollution, decimation of animals and so on. Admittedly, after the continuous "effort", our economy and industry has been developed and our worthy goal seems to have been attaint, but more serious problems have appeared. Ozone hole, global warming, desertification and so on (这应该不能自成一句吧). The costs are so enormous that we have to use (use是肯定的，可以强调用了很多之类的，呵呵，有点挑刺，别介意) the money we gain from developing the economy. The result is apparently ludicrous.

In sum, we should first make a clear principle of a worthy goal to make sure the goal we plan to attain will not harm others' interest. Even if a goal is worthy, only the means which are under the laws and modalities are justifiable. In addition, optimizing our methods and paths to gain at lese (less) cost is also very important.  

总的感觉还是比较舒服的，一层一层论述下来，思路比较清晰，且每一段都有例证，只不过Watergate好像很多人都在用，不过对这篇文章本身倒没什么影响，语言表达比较清楚，只是有些语法上的小错误稍微注意一下就行了，大的倒没有。还有有些词用的频率有点高，可以试着将goal换成purpose, objective之类的，attain也可以换成achieve什么的，这样可能会让阅卷人印象更好一些。

[ 本帖最后由 victordugu 于 2006-7-8 01:04 编辑 ]