issue41 关于非主流领域科学的 [清凉夏日小组一组]

abawtresbonUID: 2164961

TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
WORDS: 501 à535         TIME: 0:45:00 +5:00         DATE: 2006-7-17

The speaker claims that certain nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in society because they could satisfy human needs cannot be met by mainstream science. I concede nonmainstream inquiry, to some degree, offers people, especially ancient people a way to predict the future. Nevertheless, with the enhancement of human knowledge, this sort of inquiry is more treated by a entertainmental or playful attitude, rather than playing a vital role.

To begin with, the chief reason why people resort to nonmainstream areas due to their strong desire to predict the future. This desire stems from human nature; especially in the ancient time, most people had a disturbing sense of uncertainty and unsafety partly due to their living condition was unstable and always faced with danger. They consulted the sky to provide them with an answer, like people in China, India or Europe where later astrology formed and applied prevalently. Human are always trying to find an answer to convince themselves or to render them get prepared in advance. In this sense, nonmainstream areas of inquiry including astrolofy and fortune telling have their own markets among people.

However, with the rapid development of mainstream science, especially social science and history, people have gained paths to know the future on the basis of more dependable data and scientific prediction. That people believe in nonmainstream science is mainly due to their ignorance and blindness. For instance, an ignorant people having acquired little or no education, or even ill education might resort to paranormal way to cure disease rather than go to the hospital; this kind of events occurred quite often in needy and poor-education countries in certain places of Asia and Africa. Is medical field never addressed by mainstream science? Definitely not, it is owe to people's limited knowledge and immature and even detrimental concepts. These concepts may even impede these persons to settle problems in a proper way and delay what should be addressed imediately.

Moreover, nonmainstream begin to be more treated as something entertaining and playful, rather than playing a vital role in human's life. For instance, a certain number of people choose to wear clothes in certain "lucky" color based on the recommendation of astrological websites everyday. Is it really this kind of theory of color satisfy these people's psychological needs and plays a truly important role in their lives? This answer seems to be doubtable. A authoritative survey conducted recently by a scientific magazine reveals that only 1.43 percent people in a pool involving 20,000 people admitted that they think put the activities concerning about nonmainstream areas of inquiry as somewhat top priority of life, such as obeying the comments and advice on the astrological website everyday. While, most other people, if they have ever make contact with it, regard it as something fresh, interesting, and playful, rather than something serious. More than 89.64 percent of people demonstrate that they have never treat it seriously although it satisfies their curiosity.

To sum up, although nonmainstream inquiry could satisfy certain human needs in predicting the future, however, it could never replace mainstream science. After all, it is mainstream science that could either predict things or solve problems standing on a strong and safe ground.


感想:
1,得尽量快些整理个大致的开头结尾魔板,否则在上面浪费很多很多时间
2.容易打错的字要集中训练一次,提高准确率: 错别字太多了
3.要尽量一次想好,不要写到中途怀疑自己
4.第一次限时,觉得有紧迫感就写得快一点了,由于没有句子没有上两篇构思的好了.好在思路顺了一些.

abawtresbonUID: 2164961

自己顶，大家帮我看看吧

CharaznablezUID: 2140987

TOPIC: ISSUE41 - "Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science."
WORDS: 501 à535         TIME: 0:45:00 +5:00         DATE: 2006-7-17

The speaker claims that certain nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in society because they could satisfy human needs cannot be met by mainstream science. I concede nonmainstream inquiry, to some degree, offers people, especially ancient people a way to predict the future. Nevertheless, with the enhancement of human knowledge, this sort of inquiry is more treated by a entertainmental or playful attitude, rather than playing a vital role.

To begin with, the chief reason why people resort to nonmainstream areas due to their strong desire to predict the future. This desire stems from human nature; especially in the ancient time, most people had a disturbing sense of uncertainty and unsafety (that) partly due to their living condition was unstable and always faced with danger. They consulted the sky to provide them with an answer, like people in China, India or Europe where later astrology formed and applied prevalently. Human are always trying to find an answer to convince themselves or to render them get prepared in advance(render with sth不知道可不可你那样用 , let them get prepared in advance). In this sense, nonmainstream areas of inquiry including(such as) astrolofy (astrology)and fortune telling have their own markets among people.

However, with the rapid development of mainstream science, especially social science and history, people have gained paths to know the future on the basis of more dependable data and scientific prediction. That people believe in nonmainstream science is mainly due to their ignorance and blindness. For instance, an ignorant people having acquired little or no education, or even ill education might resort to paranormal way to cure disease rather than go to the hospital; this kind of events occurred quite often in needy and poor-education countries in certain places of Asia and Africa. Is medical field never addressed by mainstream science? Definitely not, it is owe to people's limited knowledge and immature and even detrimental concepts. These concepts may even impede these persons to settle problems in a proper way and delay what should be addressed imediately.(这段写的跟你这段的主题句没什么关系吧,把主题句改一下,这段主要写人们因为愚昧无知才寻求科学吧)

Moreover, nonmainstream begin to be more treated as something entertaining and playful, rather than playing a vital role in human's life. For instance, a certain number of people choose to wear clothes in (a) certain "lucky" color based on the recommendation of astrological websites everyday. Is it really this kind of theory of color satisfy these people's psychological needs and plays a truly important role in their lives? This answer seems to be doubtable. A authoritative survey conducted recently by a scientific magazine reveals that only 1.43 percent people in a pool involving 20,000 people admitted that they think put the activities concerning about nonmainstream areas of inquiry as somewhat top priority of life, such as obeying the comments and advice on the astrological website everyday. While, most other people, if they have ever make contact with it, regard it as something fresh, interesting, and playful, rather than something serious. More than 89.64 percent of people demonstrate that they have never treat it seriously although it satisfies their curiosity.

To sum up, although nonmainstream inquiry could satisfy certain human needs in predicting the future, however, it could never replace mainstream science. After all, it is mainstream science that could either predict things or solve problems standing on a strong and safe ground.(文章最大的问题还是那个:我觉得你没有写什么来论证那句话)
我也写了一篇新的还有这个我也写过改改也发上来,回头帮我看看
晕,word 中红色的这里都没有.应该怎么调啊

helenlhhUID: 2127690

The speaker claims that certain nonmainstream areas of inquiry play a vital role in society because they could satisfy human needs that cannot be met by mainstream science. I concede nonmainstream inquiry, to some degree, offers people, especially ancient people a way to predict the future. Nevertheless, with the enhancement of human knowledge, this sort of inquiry is more treated by a entertainmental(形容词用entertaining) or playful attitude, rather than playing a vital role.

To begin with, the chief reason why people resort to nonmainstream areas due to their strong desire to predict the future. This desire stems from 好词 human nature; especially in the ancient time, most people had a disturbing sense of uncertainty and unsafety（名词unsafe or insecure） partly due to their living condition was unstable and always faced with danger. They consulted the sky to provide them with an answer, like people in China, India or Europe where later astrology formed and applied prevalently. Human are always trying to find an answer to convince themselves or to render them get prepared in advance. In this sense, nonmainstream areas of inquiry including astrolofy and fortune telling have their own markets among people.

However, with the rapid development of mainstream science, especially social science and history, people have gained paths to know the future on the basis of more dependable data and scientific prediction. That people believe in nonmainstream science is mainly due to their ignorance and blindness.(这句话有点绝对了，只是你的个人观点，最好把语气改一下，加个probably之类的) For instance, an ignorant people having acquired little or no education, or even ill education might resort to paranormal way to cure disease rather than go to the hospital; this kind of events occurred quite often in needy and poor-education countries in certain places of Asia and Africa. Is medical field never addressed by mainstream science? Definitely not, it is owe to people's limited knowledge and immature and even detrimental concepts. These concepts may even impede these persons to settle problems in a proper way and delay what should be addressed imediately.

Moreover, nonmainstream begin to be more treated as something entertaining and playful, rather than playing a vital role in human's life. For instance, a certain number of people choose to wear clothes in certain "lucky" color based on the recommendation of astrological websites everyday. Is it really this kind of theory of color satisfy these people's psychological needs and plays a truly important role in their lives? This answer seems to be doubtable. A authoritative survey conducted recently by a scientific magazine reveals that only 1.43 percent people in a pool involving 20,000 people admitted that they think put the activities concerning about nonmainstream areas of inquiry as somewhat top priority of life, such as obeying the comments and advice on the astrological website everyday. While, most other people, if they have ever make contact with it, regard it as something fresh, interesting, and playful, rather than something serious. More than 89.64 percent of people demonstrate that they have never treat it seriously although it satisfies their curiosity.

To sum up, although nonmainstream inquiry could satisfy certain human needs in predicting the future, however, it could never replace mainstream science. After all, it is mainstream science that could either predict things or solve problems standing on a strong and safe ground.

      结构还是比较清晰的，不过三个大段都是在讲非主流，是不是应该适当增加一些主流科学的文字与之对比一下，这样会让你的论证更有力。