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1，数据不明
2，打鼾不见得会导致肥胖：
A 没有证据显示短暂的呼吸停顿一定会导致白天的疲劳，从而他们就不锻炼了，变的肥胖
B就算疲劳，他们也不见得会不锻炼而变的肥胖
3，吃的少锻炼多也不一定就会减肥减少打鼾，也有其他方法可以达到这个效果。另外这样也许对他们的身体更不好更无力锻炼。

In this arguement, the arguer recomments  that people who snores should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more. To support the claim, the arguer provides the evidence that people are too tired during the day to exercise because they unnoticedly wakes at night by snoring, therefore they will easily gain weight. However, a careful examination of this arguement would reveal how groundless the conclusion is.

In the first palce, the conclusion unreasonably relies on a too vague study to be informative. There aren't clear details about the study data showing the relationship between the snoring and weight. The subject, the time, the place, the process of this study and how the data was collected are not presented in this arguement, thus the study can hardly be reliable.

Secondly, it is hard believe that snoring results the overweight as the arguer presents. As we know that people who snore stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, but there is no evidence shows that people will get too tired for just a briefly waking. Since the waking is brief and short, people who snore may still sleep well and not to get tired during the daytime. They may still have a sound sleep while snoring and keep hale and fresh during the day, so that they can exercise with full energy and won't get weight. Moreover, even if snoring people will be tired during the day, it is unsound to assume that these people are not likely to exercise. Since some people are very strong-minded, they will keep exercising though they didn't sleep well and are tired. As they persist on practicing, there may hardly get too much weight. Even that the bad sleep may cause them losing weight.

Thirdly, the arguer's advice that people who snore should eat less and exercise is unwarranted. The arguement commits a fallacy, which assumes that only eat less and exercise more will decrease the weight and the snore. However, there are still many other possible factors helping this, such as taking some medicines. Besides, eating less while exercising more may not be healthy for those people who snore at night. People who exercises more with bad sleep quality may need more food supply to keep fit. If they eat less they will be exhausted and hardly can they exercise more.

In conclusion, the author fails to provide adequate justification for his advice that people who snore should exercise more and eat less. Therefore the arguement deosn't sound persuasive as it stands.

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In this arguement, the arguer recomments  that people who snores should try to eat less than the average person(复数,或者people) and to exercise more. To support the claim, the arguer provides the evidence that people are too tired during the day to exercise because they unnoticedly wakes (wake) at night by snoring, therefore they will easily gain weight. However, a careful examination of this arguement would reveal how groundless the conclusion is.

In the first palce, the conclusion unreasonably relies on a too vague study to be informative. There aren't (any好象顺一点)clear details about the study data showing the relationship between the snoring and (gaining)weight. The subject(复数), the time, the place, the process of this study and how the data was collected are not presented in this arguement, thus the study can hardly be reliable.(这段再扩充一点)

Secondly, it is hard(to) believe that snoring results the overweight as the arguer presents. As we know that people who snore stop breathing frequently during the night for a few seconds, but there is no evidence shows that people will get too tired for just a briefly(brief) waking. Since the waking is brief (有点重复哦)and short, people who snore may still sleep well and not to get tired during the daytime. They may still have a sound sleep while snoring and keep hale and fresh during the day, so that they can exercise with full energy and won't get weight. Moreover, even if snoring people will be tired during the day, it is unsound to assume that these people are not likely to exercise. Since some people are very strong-minded, they will keep exercising though they didn't sleep well and are tired. As they persist on practicing, there (they笔误)may hardly get too much weight. Even that the bad sleep may cause them losing weight. (最后一句再斟酌一下)

Thirdly, the arguer's advice that people who snore should eat less and exercise is unwarranted. (这一句后面进跟理由会比较通顺否则会有重复之感)The arguement commits a fallacy, which assumes that only eat less and exercise more will decrease the weight and the snore. However, there are still many other possible factors helping this, such as taking some medicines. Besides, eating less while exercising more may not be healthy for those people who snore at night. People who exercises more with bad sleep quality may need more food supply to keep fit. If they eat less they will be exhausted and hardly can they exercise more.

In conclusion, the author fails to provide adequate justification(复数) for his advice that people who snore should exercise more and eat less. Therefore the arguement deosn't sound persuasive as it stands.(结尾段再充实一点)

字数再多一点点就更完美了

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