ISSUE 50 smile第一次作业

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50. "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

为了提高大学的教学质量，（学校）应该要求所有的教员花一定时间到（学校）这个学术世界之外，在与他们教授的课程相关的职位工作。


Although requiring all faculties to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach may be unpractical and not as efficient as supposed to some extend, we have to admit that this approach is useful to improve the quality of instruction at college and university level.
First of all, new theory, new message and new method are improving just as the bamboo growing after the rain. What students learn from the books in school always lags behind, therefore the purpose of education-preparing the students for the future participating in society requires the faculty to practice and revise the knowledge in society and keep the instruction fresh. For instance, one of the teachers teaching me practices a corporate on material, then on his class he always provide us with update information and knowledge which make him one of our favorite teachers. More important, students also benefit a lot by keeping pace with the fresh and up to date knowledge. Such activity acts as a catalyst to master the knowledge by touching the lively example. We can syncretize with society easier and more quickly, and then more opportunities can be snatched than others.  
What's more, only be practiced can the knowledge show its value. College and university are the places where innovation and creative idea produce, to make sure the creative idea has its practical value and meet the need of people, working outside the academic world appears so important. By providing people useful products, faculty can make financial incomes for the college and university, then they can spend more on the implements in education which can improve the quality of instruction a lot.
However, it is not necessary for faculty in some subject such as art to spend time working outside the academic word. For one thing, finding a appropriate working place is a little hard for them; for the other, the field they engaged in contains more theoretical components so doing research in the academic world seems fit for them. On the other hand, spending too much time may abstract faculty’s energy in their primary course which probably results in decedent in the quality of instruction. Without the support of the academic knowledge, we could not understand the world precisely and thoroughly. The fundamental of the academic knowledge is the basis of the further professions.
In sum, except for some subject not fit for outside working, either faculty or students will benefit from working outside the academic world in professors relevant to the course faculty teach. The only noting is that paying proper energy and time to make the scale of working and teaching process balance.

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Issue50

Although requiring all faculties to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach may be unpractical and not as efficient as supposed to some extend, we have to admit that this approach is useful to improve the quality of instruction at college and university level.[长句挺好，但第三段转折意思没有体现出来]
First of all, new theory, new message and new method are improving [emerged 好点吧？] just as the bamboo growing after the rain. What students learn from the books in school [改成University or college一致性好点？] always lags behind, therefore the purpose of education-preparing the students for the future participating [participartion] in society requires the faculty to practice and revise the knowledge in society and keep the instruction fresh. For instance, one of the teachers teaching me practices a corporate on material, then on his class he always provide us with update information and knowledge which make him one of our favorite teachers.[举例时应该说这个老师参与了相关工作，更明白和切题] More important, students also benefit a lot by keeping pace with the fresh and up to date knowledge[这句逻辑有点乱，你前面也在讲对学生的好处，为什么用递进连词]. Such activity acts as a catalyst to master the knowledge by touching the lively example. We can syncretize with society easier and more quickly, and then more opportunities can be snatched than others.  

What's more, only be [being？ 感觉而已，我语法不好] practiced can the knowledge show its value. College and university are the places where innovation and creative idea produce [被动语态], to make sure the creative idea has its practical value and meet the need of people, working outside the academic world appears so important. By providing people useful products, faculty can make financial incomes [financial 可以不用，或者financial support] for the college and university, then they can spend more on the [improvment of ] implements in education which can improve the quality of instruction a lot.

However, it is not necessary for faculty in some subject such as art to spend time working outside the academic word [world]. For one thing, finding a appropriate working place is a little hard for them; for the other, the field they [are] engaged in contains more theoretical components, so doing research in the academic world seems fit for them. On the other hand, spending too much time may abstract faculty’s energy in their primary course which probably results in decedent in the quality of instruction. Without the support of the academic knowledge, we could not understand the world precisely and thoroughly. The fundamental of the academic knowledge is the basis of the further professions. [总体上这段有点乱，因为你TS是说有些专业不适合教员兼职，但后面几句话是对所有专业说的，意群不集中，而且观点有待商榷]
In sum, except for some subject not fit for outside working, either faculty or students will benefit from working outside the academic world in professors relevant to the course faculty [they] teach. The only noting [?the only thing should be noted ] is that paying proper energy and time to make the scale of working and teaching process balance.
总体评价（个人意见哈）
1 下次注意 格式规范点 方便大家修改
2  整体写的挺好，我无论如何写不出这么多字目前，你观点展开的挺好的
3 句式稍显单调，省略不要太多，ETS范文好像几乎连that这样的连词都不省的

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