issue36 smile-B组第二次作业， 欢迎拍砖，谢谢！

smiles11UID: 2232631

TOPIC: ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
WORDS:          TIME: 12:40:00 AM          DATE: 7/5/2006

Who can decide the greatness of individuals, those who live after them or those their contemporaries?  Maybe the contemporaries can evaluate the great individuals since they could know more about of them and they could stand in the same site at the same time with the great person. However, in my opinion, those who live after them take more precedence in evaluating the great person from the aspects of science, politics, and philosophical aspects.

In the field of scientific, the later people possess more scientific knowledge and technique to assess the great person. To decide one person whether he or she is great, it is not only relied on our perceptions but in terms of reasoning and analysis, while the technique and knowledge is needed. Take the great scientist, Einstein, as an example, when his Relative Theory was preferred, there were so many people who live in the contemporary of Einstein, did not know exactly what the theory is. How can they evaluate the theory and Einstein? Meanwhile, so many great artists and scientists such as Van gout, Bruno were neglected or disregarded by their contemporaries due to limited knowledge and techniques. While at present, we know the greatness of these people more and more because we have enough knowledge to tell and to substantiate their greatness.

From the area of politics, the later person could know more about one person or the theory effects to the development of society and profoundly meaning to the people. The people in the same era, stemming from whether he or she gets benefits from the person who will evaluate, tend to evaluate that person with color eyes or foolhardy. In the 1960 of China, almost every Chinese person thought Chairman Mao was the greatest person and no one would suspect this because he emaciated the Chinese and founded the new nation. Therefore, they thought what Chairman said and did were absolutely true. But later person know that Chairman Mao did many wrong things at that time such as commit culture revolution. Hence, the contemporaris sometimes were masked by something such as benefits, ardor; while the later will evaluate that person more sagacious and more uninterested.

As for philosophy or art aspects, we think the great thinker or artist could bear evaluation by the time. The thoughts of great thinker or the art from great artist always could not be understood by the contemporaries. As profound thinkers, who always pursuit for challenging and transcending existing principles of that time, they were usually unacceptable. Like Nisei, the great thinker, when he provided his theory, many people thought he was crazy. Meanwhile some artists, whose creative and talent ideas were unacceptable by the people of same era, were dead of poverty. However, after death, their artistry could be sold millions of dolor due to its great value. These greater can not be recognized by their contemporaries.

In sum, the contemporaries can evaluate the great person if they could understand the person and their product. However, more great persons are known by the later person because as the development of science, technology, avoidance of the benefits interfering, and the accumulating of knowledge.

zhy5186612UID: 2167373

还没有人动,我该一下吧,不对 地方还请谅解
Who can decide the greatness of individuals, those who live after them or those their contemporaries?  Maybe the contemporaries can evaluate the great individuals since they could know more about of them [换名词吧,指代不明?] and they could stand in the same site at the same time with the great person. However, in my opinion, those who live after them take more precedence in evaluating the great person from the aspects of science, politics, and philosophical aspects [philosophical aspects -->philosophy].

In the field of scientific, the later people possess more scientific knowledge and technique to assess the great person. To decide one person whether he or she is great, it is not only relied on our perceptions but [also] in terms of [in terms of 可以删除,因为后面的都是relied on 的表语吧] reasoning and analysis while the technique and knowledge is needed [while后面的句子和前面什么关系?]. Take the great scientist, Einstein, as an example, when his Relative Theory was preferred, there were so many people who live in the contemporary of Einstein, did not know exactly what the theory is. How can they evaluate the theory and Einstein? Meanwhile, so many [换词 吧 ,前面有了] great artists and scientists such as Van gout, Bruno were neglected or disregarded by their contemporaries due to limited knowledge and techniques. While at present, we know the greatness of these people more and more because we have enough knowledge to tell and to substantiate their greatness.[直接把knowledge and technique换成more information 好了,因为本段举例 时 ,你业没有到底用什么具体knowledge and technique判断伟人 ]
From the area of politics, the later person could know more about one person [person-->giant] or the theory effects to the development of society and profoundly meaning to the people. The people in the same era, stemming from whether he or she gets benefits from the person who will evaluate, tend to evaluate that person with color eyes or foolhardy. In the 1960 of China, almost every Chinese person [person删除] thought Chairman Mao was the greatest person and no one would suspect this because he emaciated the Chinese and founded the new nation. Therefore, they thought what Chairman said and did were absolutely true. But later person know that Chairman Mao did many wrong things at that time such as commit [-ting] culture revolution. Hence, the contemporaris sometimes were masked by something such as benefits, ardor; while the later will evaluate that person more sagacious and more uninterested.

As for philosophy or art aspects, we think the great thinker or artist could bear evaluation by the time. The thoughts of great thinker or the art from great artist always could not be understood by the contemporaries. As profound thinkers, who always pursuit for challenging and transcending existing principles of that time, they were usually unacceptable. Like Nisei, the great thinker, when he provided his theory, many people thought he was crazy. Meanwhile some artists, whose creative and talent ideas were unacceptable by the people of same era, were dead of poverty. However, after death, their artistry could be sold millions of dolor due to its great value. These greater can not be recognized by their contemporaries. [举例1个只要充分,与前面分析及后面小结衔接紧密,就足够了;多而不精 反而不好]
In sum, the contemporaries can evaluate the great person if they could understand the person and their product. However, more great persons are known by the later person because as  [because as  -->as result of ] the development of science, technology, avoidance of the benefits interfering, and the accumulating of knowledge.

总体评价(个人意见哈)
1 内容丰富,论据叫多,整体结构挺好.
2 句式和词汇需 改进(大家一样这点,我也菜鸟 )

smiles11UID: 2232631

非常谢谢小太阳！

写得时候就觉得有些问题的，特别是B3！只是当时实在不想改了！自我感觉issue还是有些问题的！