Argument38

Tomas007UID: 2107663

TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
WORDS: 318          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2006-7-20

The argument has made a fasty conclusion on the method to prevent colds and lower absenteeism-- daily use of lchthaid, just based on a study result and overemphasis on the colds' role for absences. Those critical faults needed further consideration are list as following.

First of all, due to the lack of the study details, there is few evidences supporting the fish's role on cold treatment. The high fish consumption in East Meria do not mean everyone there eat large amount of fish everyday. It is possible that people joining in this study do not eat any fish at all but recover soon from colds. Also there is no evidence showing that the essential factor that make them more healthy is their sufficient fish consumption. Instead, there is alternative possibility that those people take adequate exercises and have much more great health condition. Also the study failed to identify what is the criterion for sufficient fish consumption, and overemphasis on it might result in unbalance and more serious diseases.

Second, despite the colds, the author also failed to consider other factors that may cause the absences from school and work. With the increasing paces in current society, all people are suffering much more high pressure which may cause spirit diseases and then the absences. It is probable that people absent from school and work are also suffering other health problems, from the leg broken in football games, diseases with SARS and the like.

Third, there is also a essential fault in the argument that it did not show any direct evidence that lchthaid is the real element that treat colds. The supplement derived from fish oil does not necessarily mean its role on the cold treatment. There may be others elements or antibody in fish could prevent or treat colds, but not lchthaid.

In sum, the faults lists above needs more careful consideration before any treasure was taken.

renliyunUID: 2209571

The argument has made a fasty(这个词好不存在啊??换一个吧) conclusion on the method to prevent colds and lower absenteeism-- daily use of lchthaid, just based on a study result and overemphasis(这个词好) on the colds' role for absences. Those critical faults needed(语法错误,改为定丛吧) further consideration (复数) are list as following.

First of all, due to the lack (lackness) of the study details, there is(复数) few evidences supporting the fish's role(改为of结构如何?) on cold treatment. The high fish consumption in East Meria do not mean everyone there eat large amount of fish everyday. It is possible that people joining in this study do not eat any fish at all but recover soon from colds. Also there is no evidence showing that the essential factor(和定丛的数不同了) that make them more healthy is their sufficient fish consumption. Instead, there is alternative possibility that those people take adequate exercises and have much more great health condition. Also the study failed to identify what is the criterion for sufficient fish consumption, and overemphasis on it might result in unbalance and more serious diseases.

Second, despite the colds, the author also failed to consider other factors that may cause the absences from school and work. With the increasing paces in current society, all people are suffering (from) much more high pressure which may cause spirit diseases and then the absences. It is probable that people absent from school and work are also suffering other health problems, from the leg broken in football games, diseases with SARS and the like.

Third, there is also a essential fault in the argument that it did not show any direct evidence that lchthaid is the real element that treat colds. The supplement derived from fish oil does not necessarily mean its role on the cold treatment. There may be others elements or antibody in fish could prevent or treat colds, but not lchthaid.(这一段字数少了)

In sum, the faults lists above needs more careful consideration before any treasure was taken.结尾匆促了
字数很不够啊………..又计时间了啊,我得向你学习啊